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Subject: Fanfic: A Soldier's Requiem (Huzzah!! A New Chapter!!)
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Okay folks, this is the first time that I have ever put anything out for public viewing. So I apologize for incongruities.

I ask that you don't flame me quite yet, as this is only part of the first chapter, I haven't yet posted the tie in to the Halo 2 game, but it is coming very soon.

I am in college, and work as well, so posts may come weekly or bi-weekly. Just a heads-up.
But Chapter one should be completely up within the next few days.

Anyway, thanks for reading, and I hope you enjoy.


A Soldier's Requiem

Chapter 1 part1: Trials of the Past

The sun had long since set, passing it's dominance of the sky to the twin moons and multitude of stars of New Colombia. A gentle breeze moved the tops of the trees, and carried on it the crisp air of the winter's first snow storm. Whose heavy gray clouds could be seen drifting down out of the distant mountain range.

Normally a night like this would be a peaceful and relaxing one on the Border Colony World. But the same breeze that brought on it the first hint of snow also brought a sense of dire foreboding.

Eric looked up into the sky as the beginnings of a meteor shower lit the outer atmosphere with streaks of white. He wondered why everyone in the house was tense and frantic, and why his father had thought fit to clean his old handgun and rifle. He also wondered why all the merchant and supply freighters in the nearby starport were warming up their engines when they never took off at night.

"Eric!...Eric! Where are you!?" cried his mother, Darla, "Eric we need to leave now!"

"Coming mom!" yelled Eric as he ran back to tthe farmhouse. He snatched his small bag of possessions off the porch and jumped into the back of his father's farm truck with his older sister, Corinne. Eric's father immediately hit the accelerator, speeding his family to the spaceport, and the waiting freighters.

"Once we are there..." his father yelled, "Stay together!, we cannot afford to be separated! We may not make it as it is!"

"Dad!" yelled Eric, "What is going on?"

"Just keep calm and stay with us." replied his father. Pushing the old truck into the redzone, he made a b-line towards the spaceport.

Overhead, the last remnants of New Colombia's token Naval Militia continued to burn through the atmosphere. Even more ominous for the citizens, though, were the hundreds of alien dropships entering the planet's atmosphere amongst the debris.



[Edited on 04.13.2007 6:09 PM PDT]

  • 02.18.2007 6:25 PM PDT
Subject: Fanfic: A Soldier's Requiem
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You have good use of adjectives, but your sentences degraded as your story progressed.

  • 02.18.2007 6:35 PM PDT
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Hmmm, I'll try and correct that , but I'm too tired right now to try and re-word and rearrange things.

Some of the dialogue at the end I just recently put in, so that may be what you are talking about

[Edited on 2/18/2007]

  • 02.18.2007 6:38 PM PDT
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And here is part two of three. The next should be up tomorrow (it is the tie in).


Chapter 1 part 2: Trials of the Past

The Starport was jam-packed with desperate families of settlers trying, hoping, praying, to get onboard one of the precious few freighters before they launched. The Militia were trying to keep some semblance of order in the crowded and chaotic streets of the small city. But they weren't a trained Military, and for every small victory they had, countless setbacks, and further countless frantic people overwhelmed them.

With a fervor and skill unseen in his farming profession, Eric's father maneuvered the battered old truck to a militia held road.

"Sir, I'm sorry, but we can't let anyone use this road, it is for militia traffic only." Yelled a militia man who ran up to the truck.

"How about if I donate this vehicle and my weapons to your cause?" replied Eric's father, holding up his pistol for the man to see.

"Richard!?! NO! You Can't" Yelled Darla, "We need to stay together! You can't do this!Yo..."

"QUIET!" Yelled Eric's father, cutting Darla off, "This is the only way!"

Eric's mother looked into her husband's face and immediately burst into silent tears. The look of grim resolve she had seen in his eyes told her what words could not. She looked out the window understanding, if not accepting his unspoken sacrifice to gain a chance for his family to live.

The militia man waved them through the barricade, and was promptly engulfed by desperate families trying to follow.

Richard drove his family straight down the road to a waiting ship. The loadmaster gave them a resigned look, but nodded his consent, gesturing for them to be quick.

Eric's father hugged and kissed his crying family goodbye. When he got to Eric he took a silver ring off his finger. The ring was small, but had a crest of four stars surrounding two crossed sworrds on a blue background.
He pressed the ring into Eric's palm and told him, "So long as you have this, I will always be with you."

He then kissed Eric once on the forehead and, before he could fight himself, jumped into the truck and drove it back to the roadblock.

The loadmaster yelled at them to get in, so Darla grabbed her two children and ushered them into the airlock of the ship. The loadmaster sealed shut the door behind them, cutting off the screams of desperate citizens. Once the hatch was locked he hit the com button and yelled, "We can't hold any more! Punch it!"

The freighters engines screamed as the pilot pushed them to the max in a last ditch attempt to escape the inevitable.

As the freighters lifted off to run the gauntlet of Covenant warships in orbit, multiple artificial blue suns appeared over the horizon, lighting up the night sky, and decended upon the lone Starport of New Colombia.

  • 02.18.2007 7:53 PM PDT
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Nice =] it's a build up to the action Azo, just coz it doesn't have guns blazing doesn't make it any less good. i can read this and see it in my mind's eye like the start of a film. nice dude i love it x]

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  • 02.19.2007 1:14 AM PDT
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This is gonna be one of those stories that make me cry! Not really. It's a good concept.

  • 02.19.2007 2:48 AM PDT
Subject: Fanfic: A Soldier's Requiem (chap1 part three up, yay!)
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Here is the tie in, and this should please Azo for things to come. This is kinda long, but couldn't bear to break it up.


Chapter 1 part 3: Trial of the Past

Eric opened his eyes and was greeted by gray bulkheads and flourescant lighting. He sighed to himself and let his head fall back on the pillow. This sight had become all too familiar to him over the past twelve years.

He groaned as the last bits of the dream faded back into the dark corners of his mind. The dreams and flashbacks had finally stopped after he joined the UNSC Marine Corps. But they had recently started up again. He assumed that it was because of his anticipation of fighting the Covenant, and from having not yet met them in battle.

He remembered clearly the events of that night, the nerve-wracking escape from his homeworld, as though it was yesterday. He remembered the feects that the G-forces had on his nine year old body, especially when the pilot had used the combined gravitational pull of both moons to slingshot the freighter to relative safety.

Eric looked out of his bunk cubby and swore in surprise. The barracks was completely empty save him. He quickly got dressed in his P.T. uniform, hoping that he had enough time to get in a half-way decent workout.

One minute of running brought Eric to the door of the fitness gym. The door opened soundlessly as he approached, and heavy death-metal drifted out to greet him. Eric grinned to himself when he noticed his friend Roger bench-pressing midway across the room. Eric smiled even wider as he dropped into a crouch and snuck up behind Roger, right as he docked the weighted bar.

"It's about time you woke up, " said Roger without looking at Eric, "I was just about to go and get you."

"Damnit!" Eric said deflatedly, "How do you always know?"

Still not looking at Eric, Roger stood up, "I told you man, you good. Your father taught you well." Roger turned around, giving Eric a smug smile and opening his arms, "But I'm the best."

"Yeah, well lets jump in the ring for a bit and see what sneaking wil do for you." Eirc countered, grinning once again.

Roger winced in painful memory, "Ah, no. I think I'll pass. Those records you set during combat week still haven't been broken. As far as I know you're the only person in UNSC history to have beaten all of the instructors."

Besides, there isn't any time. We need to go and get all spiffy-fied for an audience with the Commander. That's why I was going to get you."

"What? Wait, Rog. What is going on?" asked Eric.

"Transfer." Roger said simply, starting to leave.

"-blam!-!" Eric swore, following Roger out the door.
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"I'm going to make this as informal and quick as possible, so stand at ease." Said Commander Beckenstein.

Eric, Roger, their CO, and the Commander were all standing in the station's bridge.

"You two have an impressive track record," Beckenstein continued, "and that has caught the attention of some very important people. You two are being transferred to the Cairo for deployment on the In Amber Clad, currently docked at the station."

CPO Gretsky, Eric and Roger's CO, stepped up to them.

"I apologize for this, I don't like this any more then you do. But I am, unfortunatley, hopelessly outgunned here. So the only thing I can truly say here is good luck, and Godspeed."

"Your shuttle leaves at 0730, it is 0700 now." Said Beckenstein, "I suggest you two get a move on and pack your gear. Dismissed."
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Eric and Roger looked out the window of the shuttle as it drifted farther away from the Athens, their home for almost a year. They had barely made it in time, and had only managed to pack their drop armor, clothes, and survival tools. They hadn't had time to disassemble their weapons and have them checked by the loadmasters.

Both of them waited impatiently as the shuttle finished the journey between the stations and docked at the Cairo. Still in dress whites, they exited the shuttle to meet their new Commander. But instead found armed marines running every which way.

Before they could figure this out, though, the voice of Admiral Hood came over the com, "This is a priority one alert! All units report to battle stations. Covenant ships have discovered Earth. Dropships are inbound, prepare to repel Boarders!"

Eric and Roger looked at each other, they were finally going to fight the Covenant.

  • 02.19.2007 6:39 AM PDT




im sad now


nice

  • 02.19.2007 9:38 AM PDT
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man thats some good stuff

its like your making a freacking film in my head

keep it up

  • 02.19.2007 12:22 PM PDT
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I liked the Intro a lot, and its developing into a very good story, keep up the good work.

  • 02.21.2007 1:08 PM PDT

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Truth and Reconciliation , Halo Infinities , Council of the Rising

sniff.

Very emotional at the beginning. I almost cried, and I almost never do that.
P.S. I' m bookmarking this fanfic.

  • 02.21.2007 9:47 PM PDT
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Glad you guys approve. Apparently I did better than I thought I would.

With luck, the next part will be up later this week.

[Edited on 2/27/2007]

  • 02.24.2007 4:42 AM PDT
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nice

  • 02.24.2007 1:03 PM PDT

___.............._______/```````````````:::--...
|.==,-.~;. ____:._______ __’__’__’_ _ _\=
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Truth and Reconciliation , Halo Infinities , Council of the Rising

Posted by: Tempest029
Glad you guys approve. Apparently I did better then I thought I would.

With luck, the next part will be up later this week.

Are you posting chapters on a regular basis, like on Saturdays or Sundays?

  • 02.24.2007 10:06 PM PDT
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I'm going to try to, but no guarantees.

The next chapter should be up either later today or tomorrow.

  • 02.25.2007 10:01 AM PDT
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hmmmm as a fellow fan fic writer (now able to boast huuuuuuuge fan bases) i have generaly good feelings about this fan fic... you are very much an emtional writer.

i have found there are 3 types of readers in this forum... action loving.... emotional.... and long term build up lovers....

i have written Mankind War and Fate for the first and 62 for the latter... you have chosen the emotional story... and your natural style is helping for you to pay off your chioce...

dont listen, unless you want to, to those who want more action because this is your fan fic and not theirs. you have a fan base and therefore stick to your guns.

glad to help and keep it up

  • 02.25.2007 11:29 AM PDT
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ok sweet man. i love this a lot. but i had forgot to bookmark it and i forgot who did it. then i remembered. haha

[Edited on 2/25/2007]

  • 02.25.2007 11:32 AM PDT
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Posted by: Deezy25
ok sweet man. i love this a lot. but i had forgot to bookmark it and i forgot who did it. then i remembered. haha


How could you!!! lol jk

Good news to all, the next part will definitely be up tomorrow evening (U.S. eastern time) I spent today meditating, er snowboarding and working. And I have had a few revelations as to what I want to do with the Cairo episode.

Some decent action in the next chapter, as well as a surprise.

Thanks for the advice King Patch, I greatly appreciate it.

[Edited on 2/25/2007]

  • 02.25.2007 6:20 PM PDT
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Pretty good, this may end up as good as TGS360's, and that was my all-time favorite.

  • 02.25.2007 6:48 PM PDT

Halo3Planet, the place for all things Halo 3..

Need help finding skulls, make sure to go here.

Very good. But, just be careful of the criticism you take from the forums. It hasn't happened yet, but there will be those who will come to this thread, and maybe give you bad advice. I think it would be best to just keep writing it how you want.

  • 02.25.2007 6:52 PM PDT
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look, just cos i haven't been here the last few days does not mean you need stop posting parts!!

  • 02.26.2007 10:54 PM PDT

lol
he missed u
but now that u back he got his Mo-Jo back!
lol

  • 02.27.2007 6:03 AM PDT
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Sorry folks, I intended to do this yesterday, but my sister commandeered the computer for her own use. This chapter has given me some trouble, describing a place in which the vast majority of people are already familiar with in a new way is difficult, to say the least. The chapter also turned out to be much larger than I anticipated, so I broke it up = two very close posts.

Chapter 2 part 1: "This is MY house!"

Eric and Roger looked at each other in disbelief. The Covenant? Here? Impossible. But then they felt the station shudder as it fired off a M.A.C. round, and they realized the truth. They both reached for their sidearms, and swore in unison. Their weapons were still on the Athens.

Roger stopped a passing marine, "Wait! Can you help us out? Where is the In Amber Clad docked?"

"Docking Bay 'B'." replied the Marine, "On the other side of the station."

"-blam!-!"Yelled Eric, "Listen, we were just transferred to her, and we didn't have time to get our weapons checked. Can you spare something for us?"

"Sorry, this is all I got," apologized the Marine, hefting his Batle Rifle, "But maybe you can come with us, we are headed in that direction anyway. I'll take it up with the Lieutenant when we link up with my squad. Lets go!"

The Marine turned and ran down the hallway. Eric and Roger had to push themselves to keep up. They couldn't afford to drop their rucksacks. Luckily, the rendezvous point wasn't far off.

"What in blazes kept you Richards!" screamed the Lieutenant, "Can't you see were at war!"

"Yes, Sir! But these two needed assistance." said Richards, gesturing toward Eric and Roger. "They transferred to In Amber Clad in the middle of all this, and they are unarmed, sir. I thought they could follow us as we head toward the Armory."

"Grreeaat, now I'm a baby sitter." said the Lieutenant, rolling his eyes, "Fine, but stay 30 feet behiind us in case there is trouble."

"Understood." Confirmed Eric.

"Alright boys, lets move out!" Yelled the Lieutenant.

The squad made good progress. They had covered much of the distance to the Armory without a single sighting of Covenant. Despite the repeated clanging of the docking Boarding Craft.

But their luck didn't last.

Roger and Eric were entering a cargo bay that the Marines had just cleared and exited, when a rookie Elite and two grunts dropped down off a docked Pelican. Obviously in hopes of catching the Marine force from behind.

Eric didn't stop to think, he just reacted. He dropped his ruck and bolted forward, yelling to the squad. Eric jumped a crate at a full tilt sprint, and leaned back into a double footed kick.

The Elite, hearing the yell, spun around to face the new threat, only to catch Eric's booted feet in the face. The combined force of the Elite's spin, and Eric's 190 lbs and momentum completely collapsed the Elite's shielding. Eric continued his flight, clothes-lining the Elite with his body, and landing on it's head with his shoulders. Eric rolled out of the landing onto his fet, and continued his run to one of the now terrified grunts. He reached out and yanked the methane mask off of it's face, and punched it in the side of the head with his free hand; knocking the grunt out, and leaving it with no way to breathe.

A crash from the left caused Eric to spin towards the commotion. Only to find Roger crouching on top of a crate, a grunt hand proturuding from underneath.

Roger grinned sheepishly and shrugged, "I guess the sky really does fall." he said laughing.

Eric shook his head and went to grab his ruck, but stopped in his tracks. The Elite had gotten up and, while shakily leaning on a crate, had it's plasma rifle solidly tracking Eric. It spread it's mandibles wide in a grin, and tightened it's finger on the trigger.

A shot rang out, and the Elite's eye disappeared in a haze of purple. The Elite collapsed to the floor, a 7.62 mm bullet from the Lieutenant's rifle lodged in it's brain.

Eric and Roger looked at the doorway where the Marine squad had gone, and saw the entire group coming from behind cover.

The Lieutenant walked forward and nodded at the Elite, "I would have helped you sooner, but that was the only clear shot I had......Nice job, and thanks."

"The door to the Armory is sealed," he continued, "And we can't open it because of the lockdown."

"SIR! Look!" yelled a marine, "The Athens has driven off her boarders!"

Eric and Roger ran to the viewport to see the happy news, but instead could only watch in horror as the Athens was blown apart by several gigantic internal explosions.

"NO!" yelled Eric, hitting his knees in despair; seeing everybody he had lived and become friends with over the past year immolated in the explosions.

"Mother -blam!-s!" yelled Roger as he pounded on the viewport with his fists.

The Lieutenant looked at the two ODST's, knowing what they were going through. He closed his eyes and said a silent prayer for the crew of the Athens.

"Thibideau! Richards!" He yelled, looking up, "Help these two grab what they can off the bodies, and take them through engineering, it is the only way they can get to the In Amber Clad with the lockdown procedures in place."

"The rest of us," he continued, "are going to continue sweeping for boarders. There is no way in HELL I am going to let those bastards get away with this!"

The Lieutenant looked at Eric as he stood up, wiping away the tears, "You saved our asses here, and I wish you the best of luck. Now go shove it down their throats."

"MARINES, MOVE OUT!"

[Edited on 2/28/2007]

  • 02.27.2007 10:55 AM PDT
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nice man. they kicked the covenants butt. haha. wheres the next part???

  • 02.27.2007 12:23 PM PDT

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