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Subject: Edited Title: my poetry.
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I'm not used to making the same compliment twice, but the more I read, the better it gets.

  • 05.29.2004 12:29 PM PDT
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Well, I'll give you a heads up when I finish Sand. :)

I've started off the poem with so much momentum that I'm afraid to finish.

  • 05.29.2004 12:38 PM PDT
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I thoroughly enjoy the concept behind this one, Obbi. A wheel that turns around, forming the base of an impenitrable tower. Pain fills the cycle, yet that pain amounts to something magnificent in the end; a monolithic tribute to humankind. Something to be feared, yet revered, for it gives life as well as the suffering therein. Those who do not follow the cause are doomed to despair and darkness, for life flows with a dynamic purpose that will sweep by people if they do not keep up. Good thoughts, good poem, good work.

  • 05.29.2004 1:53 PM PDT
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Posted by: Dolorous
I thoroughly enjoy the concept behind this one, Obbi. A wheel that turns around, forming the base of an impenitrable tower. Pain fills the cycle, yet that pain amounts to something magnificent in the end; a monolithic tribute to humankind. Something to be feared, yet revered, for it gives life as well as the suffering therein. Those who do not follow the cause are doomed to despair and darkness, for life flows with a dynamic purpose that will sweep by people if they do not keep up. Good thoughts, good poem, good work.


Those weren't my thoughts, though. Those were yoursl. :)

  • 05.29.2004 2:07 PM PDT
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Oh I know, but you asked for an interpretation. What were your thoughts behind it?

  • 05.29.2004 2:09 PM PDT
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I'll give you a hint: it's heavily Buddhist influenced.

  • 05.29.2004 2:11 PM PDT
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So I supposed by the circular nature of the poem. I like it's fluidity.

  • 05.29.2004 2:16 PM PDT
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One I just wrote: "Dying Woman"

Winding, feeling, whipping,
Building of fire and stone,
Is the ashes of fallen generations,
Making a pact for tone.

Naked, bleeding, cursing,
Verbal in all command,
Being beaten by all who know her,
Is she who dies by hand.

Cold, fleeting, bursting
Bones of golden old,
Lay broken in her body,
From injuries untold.

Whining, crying, weeping,
She goes along and screams,
Where are those who help her?
Were they only dreams?

Piercing is the silence,
From this old women’s grave,
She didn’t have time enough,
She couldn’t even pray.

  • 05.30.2004 10:55 PM PDT
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ObbiQuiet, I just went threw and read a few of your poems. I'm no expert, but they seem really good ^^

  • 05.30.2004 11:03 PM PDT
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I used to write songs, I have the pdf somewhere here, I'm just too lazy to find it.

  • 05.30.2004 11:04 PM PDT
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On Fire, Life, Death, and Processes:

To make fire you need three things: heat, fuel, and oxygen. When you have these things a process is created – the process of burning. The flame dances about, feeding off the energy of that which it consumes. Take away one of those things and the process ends – the burning stops. Did the flame go somewhere? No. The flame never existed. It didn’t, at least, exist as a single identifiable entity. It was merely a collection of processes.
As are human beings!
When a flame burns out, whom but a child says, “Where does the flame go?”
When a person dies, who but a theologian says, “Where does the soul go?”

  • 05.30.2004 11:10 PM PDT
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They're alright, not copywrite material, but not bad.

  • 05.30.2004 11:11 PM PDT
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Copyright....

  • 05.30.2004 11:11 PM PDT
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Posted by: Bring the Noise
They're alright, not copywrite material, but not bad.


All material is copyright material. :)

  • 05.30.2004 11:13 PM PDT
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Here's some of my really old songs

They kind of suck but it's ok.

  • 05.30.2004 11:17 PM PDT
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I am not a fan of poetry, but i liked the one about the women getting beaten by everyone she knows... reminds me of some people i know.

  • 05.30.2004 11:19 PM PDT
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Your lyrics were awesome.

Though in the angels one you put "breathe" instead of "breath." :P

  • 05.30.2004 11:21 PM PDT
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Posted by: Abolitionofman
Here's some of my really old songs

They kind of suck but it's ok.

I don't know about your songs, but your resume could use a fresh look.

  • 05.30.2004 11:23 PM PDT
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Yeah 90% of the time I was too lazy to actually edit/proofread work I wasn't going to use for a while. I get lazy with these things. Like term papers.

  • 05.30.2004 11:23 PM PDT
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Posted by: Abolitionofman
Copyright....



Heh my bad, I'm high. What can I say?

[Edited on 5/30/2004 11:25:08 PM]

  • 05.30.2004 11:24 PM PDT
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Posted by: klurejr
Posted by: Abolitionofman
Here's some of my really old songs

They kind of suck but it's ok.

I don't know about your songs, but your resume could use a fresh look.


LMFAO... I can't believe you looked at that thing. I really should lock that. The special thing is the 'assets' chart I made. Kind of an innovative way to put out your skills. At the same time, resumes are supposed to be boring :)

  • 05.30.2004 11:24 PM PDT
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Posted by: ObbiQuiet
Posted by: Bring the Noise
They're alright, not copywrite material, but not bad.


All material is copyright material. :)


Heh.

  • 05.30.2004 11:26 PM PDT
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Posted by: Abolitionofman
LMFAO... I can't believe you looked at that thing. I really should lock that. The special thing is the 'assets' chart I made. Kind of an innovative way to put out your skills. At the same time, resumes are supposed to be boring :)

Yeah, well i saw your link and noticed there was more to your site. ucsc.... where is that? thats not the same as usc? is it?

  • 05.30.2004 11:30 PM PDT
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University of California, Santa Cruz.

A lot more north, and a lot more gorgeous :)

  • 05.30.2004 11:36 PM PDT