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Hang dai.

Hi all.

Been working on a Halo 3 comic that I hope to keep going, maybe releasing a new issue every couple of weeks. Some constructive feedback would be good, since I've never put anything like this together before... Anyways, I thought this would be the place to show it off. Enjoy!

Steel Raiment

* Yes, I posted this thread in the Halo 3 forum too, but after having a look here I realized it's probably a better place for it. Sorry for the double-post!

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  • 12.07.2007 12:00 AM PDT
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Cool.

  • 12.07.2007 12:21 AM PDT
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Not bad. Good shots, layout, placement, etc.

If you don't mind, here's a few things that you might want to consider:
-If you want to set two characters apart (i.e. the main characters), you might want to consider making them different colors. Or at least different armor. Right now your main characters are identical.
-You might want to try going beyond people just shooting at each other. I mean, we can all get on the game and do that. Make some humor if possible, drama that goes beyond shooting and into dialogue, etc.
-This is entirely opinion, but the fact that it was based in the Halo story and right after Halo 3 made me not like the story as much. You can create a whole world there if you want to. It doesn't have to do with UNSC, or Spartans, or Halos. Again, though, that's entirely my opinion.

But yeah, it's way better than I could make, and I can tell you put a lot of time into making it. Good job!

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I like the comic, it looks good, but I was wondering what you used in PS(assuming that's what you used) to get the comic looking effect.

  • 12.08.2007 1:33 PM PDT

Hang dai.

Posted by: CAVX
Not bad. Good shots, layout, placement, etc.

If you don't mind, here's a few things that you might want to consider:
-If you want to set two characters apart (i.e. the main characters), you might want to consider making them different colors. Or at least different armor. Right now your main characters are identical.
-You might want to try going beyond people just shooting at each other. I mean, we can all get on the game and do that. Make some humor if possible, drama that goes beyond shooting and into dialogue, etc.
-This is entirely opinion, but the fact that it was based in the Halo story and right after Halo 3 made me not like the story as much. You can create a whole world there if you want to. It doesn't have to do with UNSC, or Spartans, or Halos. Again, though, that's entirely my opinion.

But yeah, it's way better than I could make, and I can tell you put a lot of time into making it. Good job!


Thanks heaps for the critique! I also had qualms about how similar the characters looked, so I changes the secondary colour of Quinn to silver. Not a huge change, but I didn't want to do anything too drastic so that he suddenly has a different helmet in issue 2.

Also agree with the storyline/humour thing, that's more a matter of writing. Issue 1 was more of an experiment than anything, so hopefully my muse can supply me with enough quips and plotlines.

I also considered making a comic of a world that was completely my own, but I thought it would detract from the atmosphere. I mean, if I put a Warthog into it and rename it since it's not Bungie's world, it'd seem kinda dodgy to me. The weapons and armour are so iconic for of the series I thought I'd leave everything as it is, but make up my own planet/scenario.

Thanks again for the comments.

Oh, and as for the Photoshop effect... trade secret! But suffice to say I didn't go the usual route of the "posterize edges" filter.

  • 12.08.2007 4:59 PM PDT

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I'm liking it.
Nicely done. I like how it has the 'old' comics feel to it.

Such as:
"Little did they know..."

;) Great stuff, well done!

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  • 12.08.2007 5:11 PM PDT

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Cool

  • 12.08.2007 5:21 PM PDT

Dianna Agron is the epitome of perfection.

Quinntology.

Very well made, looks like it took you quite a bit of time to make it.

"Bratta-Bratta" Haha, I like that.

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Meh...

It needs to be in manga format.

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Oh, and as for the Photoshop effect... trade secret! But suffice to say I didn't go the usual route of the "posterize edges" filter.


I figured that. I'm pretty sure I'm like part way there, I just can't get it exactly. It looks nice though.

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Meh...

It needs to be in manga format.
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  • 12.09.2007 1:45 AM PDT

Pretty impressive, that. Well done! ;)

  • 12.09.2007 8:51 AM PDT

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Entertaining to say the least. Didn't enjoy page 7, pretty boring. I like it, you need to make sure you have a strong story to tell otherwise stick with humour. The danger in a serious story is that people might find it boring.

  • 12.09.2007 9:30 AM PDT

Hang dai.

Hey all.

Issue #2 is now online! Just click the Issues link to find it.

Hope y'all enjoy.

Cheers.

  • 12.12.2007 10:51 PM PDT

very well done, though i agree. You will either have to work more on building a stronger story, or add in some humor. If you want to do more comics, you might wanna consider this book. I read it during a comics and graphic novel focused writing class in college, and its a great read, even if you aren't too serious.

  • 12.12.2007 11:12 PM PDT

Nice work mate!
Diggin the comic vibe/look

  • 12.12.2007 11:40 PM PDT

Hang dai.

Thanks for the advice. I tried to inject some humour into this issue, but it's a very subjective thing, and I'd prefer to keep it subtle rather than go Monty Python style! It will be good to see what people think.

  • 12.13.2007 1:04 AM PDT

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Heh. Curious Gorge. Love it!

Good work.

  • 12.13.2007 1:40 AM PDT
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Again, nice job. The second issue was a good improvement.

  • 12.13.2007 2:14 AM PDT

Hang dai.

Hi all.

Issue 3 is online! Enjoy.

  • 01.17.2008 1:54 AM PDT
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really cool

  • 01.17.2008 7:13 AM PDT

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I love the effect you used for your comic, looks like it's a mix between a drawing and a H3 screenshot, not one or the other.

I suggest next time you add text that isn't speech bubbles, like in the beginning of Issue 2, where it has the name of the two characters in squares, it should be a different color than white. At first I thought they were greeting each other when it was just setting the scene for the reader.

Also, try to have some fun with the comic layout, almost all comics (regular comics, not H3 comics) I've seen use more than just rectangles for their frames and such. Some even have the character in the image popping out of the frame, like a characters sniper rifle extending out of the frame. Kinda hard to explain that part, but just check out some other comics and you'll know what I mean. Nothing wrong with inspiration.

In Issue 3, the sound effect text is pretty plain, despite the Stroke, Gradient Overlay, and Outer Glow blending options you used. It's just the font that really needs changing. I suggest looking for free fonts online that are fit with the sound effect, and warp the text with style to add even more, err, style.

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Nice, Issue 3 is probably the best so far because of the fleshing out of the characters and the humor, very good job. I especially like the website's header that plays a small collection of pictures when clicked on, it is snazzy!


As a bit of constructive criticism I think you should try to use some "thinking bubbles" if that is the correct terminology rather than having them say it all out loud because otherwise the enemy would likely hear them especially when they're right behind them (I am thinking of the sewer tunnel with the guy whistling, he would have likely heard the guy). Other than that though it is pretty faultless.

Keep up the good work!
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  • 01.17.2008 12:10 PM PDT

Hang dai.

Thanks for the advice guys, it all helps! And I agree with pretty much all of it!

Cheers.

  • 01.17.2008 9:04 PM PDT

Even though almost everyone in this thread has said this, I'm gonna say it again.

The effects are awesome.

And the last panel on #3 made me chuckle. Nice work, keep it up!

  • 01.17.2008 11:01 PM PDT