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Subject: First poem but re-made
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Death or Victory

I look around and see my fallen comrades
Lying there lifeless and gone forever
They will never see the end of this threat from the covenant
But I will avenge all of the soliders who died

Many have gave there lives to protect Earth
Where I have survived many have died
In death or victory my glory shall live on forever
This is a battle I cannot win

I was the one who unleashed the flood
This new species survived the destruction of Halo
They infect all they attack soon they take control of the body
Not even the covenant withstood there might

I start to remember all the times I won
Then I feel a sharp pain in shoulder then it explodes
Plasmas and needlers fly by me
I realize this is where my journey ends

If I fail, Earth will fail and I cannot let that happen
Only fate will tell if Earth is going to fall to the covenant
Earth MUST not fall to the covenant nor the Flood
I must do what I can to destroy this Covenant Ship

I grab two SMG's and face certain Death or Victory
Before I go, I give a salute to the Soliders who gave there lives to protect Earth.



  • 01.14.2005 9:46 PM PDT
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Sounds good, you just need to revise it. Lots of spelling and grammar errors.

  • 01.14.2005 9:48 PM PDT

._____Metal
/..}-/-{..\
I.X....X.I..... Jets: Check
.T_V_T......Chargers: Check
...****........Colts: -blam!- them....

I still say you ryme it...but it sounds like a good story.

  • 01.14.2005 9:49 PM PDT
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I got most of the stuff from the Books.

  • 01.14.2005 9:50 PM PDT
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Posted by Stalking Puma
Sounds good, you just need to revise it. Lots of spelling and grammar errors.

Where??

  • 01.14.2005 9:59 PM PDT
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Posted by: wrecklessgamer
Death or Victory

I look around and see my fallen comrades
Lying there lifeless and gone forever
They will never see the end of this threat from the covenant
But I will avenge all of the soliders who died

Many have gave there* lives to protect Earth
Where I have survived many have died
In death or victory my glory shall live on forever
This is a battle I cannot win

I was the one who unleashed the flood
This new species survived the destruction of Halo
They infect all they attack soon they take control of the body
Not even the covenant withstood there** might

I start to remember all the times I won
Then I feel a sharp pain in shoulder then it*** explodes
Plasmas and needlers**** fly by me
I realize this is where my journey ends

If I fail, Earth will fail and I cannot let that happen
Only fate will tell if Earth is going to fall to the covenant
Earth MUST not fall to the covenant nor the Flood
I must do what I can to destroy this Covenant Ship

I grab two SMG's and face certain Death or Victory
Before I go, I give a salute to the Soliders who gave there lives to protect Earth.





* Should be: gave their -or- have given their
** Should be: their
*** Should be: in my shoulder and it
**** Should be: Plasma and needles

Thats it.

  • 01.14.2005 10:22 PM PDT
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why plasma and needles that sounds kinda cheesey

  • 01.14.2005 10:31 PM PDT
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No one's Perfect, you do know that don't you?

  • 01.14.2005 10:33 PM PDT
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Because the plural of plasma is... plasma, and if you say needlers then it sounds like they're throwing their needler weapons at you. Needler is the weapon, it shoots needles.

  • 01.14.2005 10:33 PM PDT
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okay mister know-it-all

  • 01.14.2005 10:35 PM PDT
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Posted by: wrecklessgamer
okay mister know-it-all


I was just trying to help you know, but I guess it's not welcome.

  • 01.14.2005 10:37 PM PDT
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Nah thats okay every one always needs one persons advice in there life
thanx-

  • 01.15.2005 7:58 PM PDT