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Ok, I've realized that in my series of books I've planned, I can't Explain the Icrethian war fully, since only two of them have it in them and it's very small. So, right now, I'm officially announcing another book in the series. Making it six, and it will be a prequal to my first book, The warrior within. And taking place near the end of my three books that are based on the main character's pasts.

So, to explain it simpiler than that, here's a list of them in chronological order. labeled 1st to last from which I make first.

2nd - Liton's past\
3rd-Sivart's past-----} All happen close to the same time
4rth- Soreph's past/

5th-crethian war} sequal to pasts books, prequal to warrior within

1st- The warrior within} First book I will make, this is were all characters cross paths and become allies

6th-(Unknown name)} This book is the sequal to warrior within, and gives it a big twist with it's opening, making the warior within less sadening.

Ok I know all you who haven't heard of thes books are all like "WTF!?", and all my fans are excited (maybe).

So for the first people, a short explanation, and I'll add a link later.

This is kind of like lord of the rings but without elves and dwarves and stuff, I've added different types of creatrures.

This link leads to my group, where I explained to them my books, it's missing my fith book though.

I'm going ot write a few pages of my book here to give youa taste of briliance :)

please post your criticism or comments. (I don't mind criticism really, I can help correct either your view or my book. Besides I can't really get any awards with these if they are screwed up.)


[Edited on 2/2/2005 1:59:25 PM]

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Sounds pretty good, but where can we read these? I'd love to read the stories. I glanced around your group for a minute, but didn't see the stories themselves.

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Well, I havent exactly written the whole things, my group had just a description. Oh, they're novles, not storries. II'm going to write a part of this new book soon, I'm just getting the view of this book in my mind first.

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The only reason I say story instead of novel, is because a novel is very difficult to write. More than likely they end up being considered stories or novellas.

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Here we go, a part in the book, this will be changed in the book though, so don't be dissapointed, this is just hands-on wrting.

Sivart sat back in the boat heading to the Greakard's nation, they were closing on what looked as a beach, but they all knew it was just a start to the huge dessert of Ennu, named after the god they worshiped, which signaled they landed west on their continent. Sivart looked around and saw the aqua green colored mist that floated midair, they new it wasn't poison, just magic remnaints of an ancient war before their time, at the dawn of Icreith.

He looked to his side and saw the captain standing strait, folding the Icrethian flag, which was red cloth with golden ivy shaped lines across it, which was also the color of each captain's cape, until he or she ranked higher like Sivart, who weared a plain red cape. The boat neared land, and stopped. Sivart got up and summoned his men, as did the captain, and they parted their paths for a while.

The captain headed east toward the Docks located on a river that goes out to the ocean. They needed to stop the attacks being done in the Icrethian woods of judeac, located in southeast Icreith. Doing so would put them on the offensive, and cripple the other army.

Sivart chose his men wisely, only high ranks, but this time he made an exception. One man, who refused to wear the armor and weaponry given to him by the sargent, he instead wore a black cape, black shirt, black pants, black shoes, and had a black sword made from material used by an exctinct enemy, black steel, only requirable from pirates. But it wasn't his distinct assasin look, it was that he wore no helmet, which Sivart did the same, only a fool would do that, or a powerful man. Sivart looked towards him and said "You, Liton! You're with me." Liton said nothing, he just walked away from the captain and toward sivart.

Sivart's group traveled southeast, toward what was expected to be the enemie's castle. Once they reached it the group stared at it, It was made of black rock, and red windows, a cloud covered the castle giving it a evil gloomy look. Liton walked forward and glimsed at the castle, but kept walking as if he wasn't intimidated. He turned around and looked at the men "Don't slow me down, either follow or fall back." Liton said catching Sivart's attention. Sivart walked toward Liton and grabbed his neck and lifted him from the ground "Know you're place Liton, we need more men, and you will follow us, I doubt even we can handle this place." Sivart said angrily. Liton breathed normaly, not feeling pain from being held by the neck, since his hand didn't even squeeze his skin. Liton grabbed his wrist and tightened it, Sivart felt an abnormal pain and let go, actually scared, Liton threw him to the ground and glared in his eyes, then said "You can leave if you want, but don't bother getting more men, this place will be empty by the time you get back. Like I said, follow or fall back, either way I'm going in."

Liton walked towards the castle, then jumped up and flew to the entrance. Sivart stared in amazement, looked down at his wrist and whispered to himself "What the hell?". His men looked at him, waiting for orders. "Fall back to the captain, and tell him I'm coming back." Sivart said as he stood up. They ran back the way they came and Sivart ran to the castle.

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The only reason I say story instead of novel, is because a novel is very difficult to write. More than likely they end up being considered stories or novellas.


trust me, it will be a novel, I have more than enough for 300 pages in each boook, maybe 400-500. That's novel material right? Sorry if I'm wrong, I'm not sure about the page count.

[Edited on 2/1/2005 1:14:48 PM]

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||UPDATE||

Ok, update time.Here I'll give you more info on the books, and I will continue with the coninuation of the story I left behind.

The book "Icrethian war" will not be focused mainly on Sivart and Liton, it will be more focused toward The emperor, and great battles such as the destruction of the great docks of Greakor, and the fall of the greakan border line, which was at their vast desert. Their will also be parts with Soreph's parents and their death at the evil Emperor's hands.

||Continuation||

Sivart ran toward the dark castle, a chill ran up his spine every step, and as he ran faster the castle seemed to go farther away from him. Grass seemed to form in front of him, and turn from green to dark green, lightning started to strike left and right, making him have to close his eyes in order to not get blinded from the constant flashing. Before he knew it, he heard a thump, and fell over. It was the door, he was lucky to have hit it, instead of falling into the water surounding the castle, which has who knows what lurking inside to feast on any fool to come this close.

Sivart stood up and looked at the door, the lock was cut by a sword, Liton's. He opened up the door that leaded to a dark gothic designed extremely large room. A large statue of Ennu with his Gargoyals on his shoulders, symbolizing death and destruction, was in the center of the room reaching close to the roof of the room. On the sides were statues of each ruller of the Greakards, each cold and black, symbolizing they were past away. The current leader's statue was colored perfectly, obviously symbolizing life. He looked away from it and looked for a door, and heard a noise from the statue's direction, he turned towards it and saw that it was gone without a trace.

"Looking for something?" Said a voice coming from the statue of Ennu. Sivart lloked towards he statue and saw him stitting on the left gargoyal, took out his sword and ran towards him, it was the leader, Emperor Diaz. The Emperor lifted his hand and stopped Sivart, lifting him in midair. Sivart struggled to get out of the spell, but to no avail.

"Tell me, Sivart, you'd do anything for your country, yes? I thought so, but you're not much help dead are you? No. I'd feel bad killing you in cold blood though, so I'll let you out. If you proove worthy enough. Get to the top of the castle, and I'll let you out. Good luck." The emperoro said as he dissapeared. "This should be easy" Sivart said, looking for a door. Suddenly he heard a noise from the statue again. The gargoyals glowed red, and came to life, fire in their eyes and breath.

To be continued.

[Edited on 2/1/2005 1:58:02 PM]

  • 02.01.2005 1:24 PM PDT
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Posted by: Liton
Ok, I've realized that in my series of books I've planned, I can't Explain the Icrethian war fully, since only two of them have it in them and it's very small. So, right now, I'm officially announcing another book in the series. Making it six, and it will be a prequal to my first book, The warrior within. And taking place near the end of my three books that are based on the main character's pasts.

So, to explain it simpiler than that, here's a list of them in chronological order. labeled 1st to last from which I make first.

2nd - Liton's past\
3rd-Sivart's past-----} All happen close to the same time
4rth- Soreph's past/

5th-crethian war} sequal to pasts books, prequal to warrior within

1st- The warrior within} First book I will make, this is were all characters cross paths and become allies

6th-(Unknown name)} This book is the sequal to warrior within, and gives it a big twist with it's opening, making the warior within less sadening.

Ok I know all you who haven't heard of thes books are all like "WTF!?", and all my fans are excited (maybe).

So for the first people, a short explanation, and I'll add a link later.

This is kind of like lord of the rings but without elves and dwarves and stuff, I've added different types of creatrures.

This link leads to my group, where I explained to them my books, it's missing my fith book though.

I'm going ot write a few pages of my book here to give youa taste of briliance :)

please post your criticism or comments. (I don't mind criticism really, I can help correct either your view or my book. Besides I can't really get any awards with these if they are screwed up.)


not bad, can't wait to read 'em. I myself am writing a novel:"The Protector".

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Posted by: Liton
Ok, I've realized that in my series of books I've planned, I can't Explain the Icrethian war fully, since only two of them have it in them and it's very small. So, right now, I'm officially announcing another book in the series. Making it six, and it will be a prequal to my first book, The warrior within. And taking place near the end of my three books that are based on the main character's pasts.

So, to explain it simpiler than that, here's a list of them in chronological order. labeled 1st to last from which I make first.

2nd - Liton's past\
3rd-Sivart's past-----} All happen close to the same time
4rth- Soreph's past/

5th-crethian war} sequal to pasts books, prequal to warrior within

1st- The warrior within} First book I will make, this is were all characters cross paths and become allies

6th-(Unknown name)} This book is the sequal to warrior within, and gives it a big twist with it's opening, making the warior within less sadening.

Ok I know all you who haven't heard of thes books are all like "WTF!?", and all my fans are excited (maybe).

So for the first people, a short explanation, and I'll add a link later.

This is kind of like lord of the rings but without elves and dwarves and stuff, I've added different types of creatrures.

This link leads to my group, where I explained to them my books, it's missing my fith book though.

I'm going ot write a few pages of my book here to give youa taste of briliance :)

please post your criticism or comments. (I don't mind criticism really, I can help correct either your view or my book. Besides I can't really get any awards with these if they are screwed up.)


not bad, can't wait to read 'em. I myself am writing a novel:"The Protector".


really? What's it about?

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Posted by: Octaian
Posted by: Liton
Ok, I've realized that in my series of books I've planned, I can't Explain the Icrethian war fully, since only two of them have it in them and it's very small. So, right now, I'm officially announcing another book in the series. Making it six, and it will be a prequal to my first book, The warrior within. And taking place near the end of my three books that are based on the main character's pasts.

So, to explain it simpiler than that, here's a list of them in chronological order. labeled 1st to last from which I make first.

2nd - Liton's past\
3rd-Sivart's past-----} All happen close to the same time
4rth- Soreph's past/

5th-crethian war} sequal to pasts books, prequal to warrior within

1st- The warrior within} First book I will make, this is were all characters cross paths and become allies

6th-(Unknown name)} This book is the sequal to warrior within, and gives it a big twist with it's opening, making the warior within less sadening.

Ok I know all you who haven't heard of thes books are all like "WTF!?", and all my fans are excited (maybe).

So for the first people, a short explanation, and I'll add a link later.

This is kind of like lord of the rings but without elves and dwarves and stuff, I've added different types of creatrures.

This link leads to my group, where I explained to them my books, it's missing my fith book though.

I'm going ot write a few pages of my book here to give youa taste of briliance :)

please post your criticism or comments. (I don't mind criticism really, I can help correct either your view or my book. Besides I can't really get any awards with these if they are screwed up.)


not bad, can't wait to read 'em. I myself am writing a novel:"The Protector".


really? What's it about?


Gist: Five billion years ago a planet called Octaia was invaded and destroyed by the Judonian Empire. The protector was the only survivor. Six Spiritual entities now collectively as the Essence gave him the Six Celestial Elements when he reachs Earth in the year 1997 AD. He starts a military organization called the Alliance which is made up of various species: Coronan, Hexapodian, Andoran, Human, etc. The judonians come to each to obtain a entry point into the space-timeline.

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Posted by: Liton
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Posted by: Liton
Ok, I've realized that in my series of books I've planned, I can't Explain the Icrethian war fully, since only two of them have it in them and it's very small. So, right now, I'm officially announcing another book in the series. Making it six, and it will be a prequal to my first book, The warrior within. And taking place near the end of my three books that are based on the main character's pasts.

So, to explain it simpiler than that, here's a list of them in chronological order. labeled 1st to last from which I make first.

2nd - Liton's past\
3rd-Sivart's past-----} All happen close to the same time
4rth- Soreph's past/

5th-crethian war} sequal to pasts books, prequal to warrior within

1st- The warrior within} First book I will make, this is were all characters cross paths and become allies

6th-(Unknown name)} This book is the sequal to warrior within, and gives it a big twist with it's opening, making the warior within less sadening.

Ok I know all you who haven't heard of thes books are all like "WTF!?", and all my fans are excited (maybe).

So for the first people, a short explanation, and I'll add a link later.

This is kind of like lord of the rings but without elves and dwarves and stuff, I've added different types of creatrures.

This link leads to my group, where I explained to them my books, it's missing my fith book though.

I'm going ot write a few pages of my book here to give youa taste of briliance :)

please post your criticism or comments. (I don't mind criticism really, I can help correct either your view or my book. Besides I can't really get any awards with these if they are screwed up.)


not bad, can't wait to read 'em. I myself am writing a novel:"The Protector".


really? What's it about?


Gist: Five billion years ago a planet called Octaia was invaded and destroyed by the Judonian Empire. The protector was the only survivor. Six Spiritual entities now collectively as the Essence gave him the Six Celestial Elements when he reachs Earth in the year 1997 AD. He starts a military organization called the Alliance which is made up of various species: Coronan, Hexapodian, Andoran, Human, etc. The judonians come to each to obtain a entry point into the space-timeline.


sounds cool, if you write it, I'll buy it.

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Posted by: Octaian
Posted by: Liton
Posted by: Octaian
Posted by: Liton
Ok, I've realized that in my series of books I've planned, I can't Explain the Icrethian war fully, since only two of them have it in them and it's very small. So, right now, I'm officially announcing another book in the series. Making it six, and it will be a prequal to my first book, The warrior within. And taking place near the end of my three books that are based on the main character's pasts.

So, to explain it simpiler than that, here's a list of them in chronological order. labeled 1st to last from which I make first.

2nd - Liton's past\
3rd-Sivart's past-----} All happen close to the same time
4rth- Soreph's past/

5th-crethian war} sequal to pasts books, prequal to warrior within

1st- The warrior within} First book I will make, this is were all characters cross paths and become allies

6th-(Unknown name)} This book is the sequal to warrior within, and gives it a big twist with it's opening, making the warior within less sadening.

Ok I know all you who haven't heard of thes books are all like "WTF!?", and all my fans are excited (maybe).

So for the first people, a short explanation, and I'll add a link later.

This is kind of like lord of the rings but without elves and dwarves and stuff, I've added different types of creatrures.

This link leads to my group, where I explained to them my books, it's missing my fith book though.

I'm going ot write a few pages of my book here to give youa taste of briliance :)

please post your criticism or comments. (I don't mind criticism really, I can help correct either your view or my book. Besides I can't really get any awards with these if they are screwed up.)


not bad, can't wait to read 'em. I myself am writing a novel:"The Protector".


really? What's it about?


Gist: Five billion years ago a planet called Octaia was invaded and destroyed by the Judonian Empire. The protector was the only survivor. Six Spiritual entities now collectively as the Essence gave him the Six Celestial Elements when he reachs Earth in the year 1997 AD. He starts a military organization called the Alliance which is made up of various species: Coronan, Hexapodian, Andoran, Human, etc. The judonians come to each to obtain a entry point into the space-timeline.


sounds cool, if you write it, I'll buy it.


like wise.

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Don't worry, I wouldn't do something like that. I have already planned out my books, and it's this series, and a book of an insane superhuman that escaped a military base, and murders people by sneeking up on them, jumping on them, and stabing them with his dagger. He's kind of like smigle from the lord of the rings, except human, stronger, and uch faster, he can doge bullets, crawl and walls, etc. Oh, and the entire US military is after him.

in other words, I wouldn't do it because all my books are already planned.

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Okay :-)

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||Update||


Ok, update number 2. In this book new parts about Sivart's past will be in, such as the scene I'm writing now. At the begining of the novel it will tell of Icrethian history, their first enemy, how war broke out between them, and how their enemy became extinct. It will eventually come to the point of the Great Icrethian war. The first battle in the Icrethian woodlands of Judeac, the reaction of the emporor of Icreith, and so on and so forth.

||Continuation of story||

[coming soon, give me time]

Edit: I see noone but 2 people care. You could at least post what you think people, I mean, what's wrong with my threads, none of them get that many posts, is it because you guys are to lazy to read my lengthy paragraphs?

Nevermind.

[Edited on 2/2/2005 5:57:48 PM]

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Posted by: Liton
||Update||


Ok, update number 2. In this book new parts about Sivart's past will be in, such as the scene I'm writing now. At the begining of the novel it will tell of Icrethian history, their first enemy, how war broke out between them, and how their enemy became extinct. It will eventually come to the point of the Great Icrethian war. The first battle in the Icrethian woodlands of Judeac, the reaction of the emporor of Icreith, and so on and so forth.

||Continuation of story||

[coming soon, give me time]

Edit: I see noone but 2 people care. You could at least post what you think people, I mean, what's wrong with my threads, none of them get that many posts, is it because you guys are to lazy to read my lengthy paragraphs?

Nevermind.


so you will explain exactly what events lead to the war?

  • 02.03.2005 12:40 PM PDT