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Subject: Halo Fanfic: The End of a War
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amazing chapter once again mr. clark. i don't know how you do it but when reading your work there's no doubt in my mind that i'm actually reading what these characters are truly like.

  • 02.16.2005 11:25 AM PDT
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Very, very well done. The whole thing leaves me well.... speachless....

  • 02.16.2005 11:34 AM PDT
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I wanna kill ackerson was it? the guy that wants the spartans dead i mean comon there the best hope for mankind and hes worried about his rank in a fleet that only exists because the chief saved there butts

  • 02.16.2005 11:37 AM PDT
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... wow ur soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo good at writing it's amazing what an 18 year old can do!!!! u truly should become a author...

TRULY AMAZING!
-Kangsta

  • 02.16.2005 11:37 AM PDT
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amazin mr. c, best chappie yet.

  • 02.16.2005 11:58 AM PDT
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.....wow

That's really all I can say

  • 02.16.2005 11:58 AM PDT
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Nice stuff! Can't wait for Chapter 10.

  • 02.16.2005 12:29 PM PDT
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wow nice chapter mr .c great twist with the spartans being on the athens and malta keep it up

got a date for the next one?

and thanks for the pm

  • 02.16.2005 12:47 PM PDT

I share pies.

i thought you would pm me man....didnt get one
grrr

  • 02.16.2005 1:34 PM PDT
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These chapters you're creating are truly amazing. I commend you ingenuity, your creative skill, imagination, and sheer quality of writing. In my opinion, Bungie should adapt this storyline for Halo 3, but you know they won't, because they love their twists, and don't wan't aything predetermined. Still, enthralling read, I only hope you get the next chapter in soon.
You Own man, keep it up and Nylund and Deitz will be names long forgotten.

  • 02.16.2005 1:35 PM PDT
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print this story when your done so i dont have to save this all on my computer just to read it one last time......but ill never stop reading it.....damn reading skillz.......huuked on fonics wurced fur me

  • 02.16.2005 2:03 PM PDT

It is the soldier, not the reporter, who has given us freedom of the press. It is the soldier, not the poet, who has given us freedom of speech. It is the soldier, not the campus organizer, who has given us the freedom to demonstrate. It is the soldier, not the lawyer, who has given us the right to a fair trial. And it is the soldier who salutes the flag, who serves the flag, whose coffin is draped in the flag that allows the protester to burn the flag.Father Dennis Edward O'Brien, USMC

nice

  • 02.16.2005 2:30 PM PDT
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very cool

  • 02.16.2005 2:49 PM PDT
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~I was born for the storm, and a calm does not suit me~

CEC
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Verrrrrrrrrrrrrrrry nice!!!!!!!! Love how you noted the other spartans bing alive!
Can't wait for the next chapter!!!

  • 02.16.2005 2:52 PM PDT
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I will always place the mission first.
I will never accept defeat.
I will never quit.
I will never leave a fallen comrade.

Thanks for the PM again. That was the best chapter i have read. I love how you said that the other spartans were on the Athens and Malta, that makes sense why Master Chief thought they were dead. That was AWESOME.

  • 02.16.2005 3:03 PM PDT
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That.....was.....amazing.....

  • 02.16.2005 3:21 PM PDT
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Mr. Clark, you may have just stolen all Bungie's ideas for Halo 3!

  • 02.16.2005 3:25 PM PDT
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HEY GUYS ME AGAIN I WAS WONDRIN MR.C WHAT ABOUT KELLY AND DR. HAYSLEY WILL THEY BE IN THE STORY

(p.s sorry forgot capslock was on)

  • 02.16.2005 3:27 PM PDT
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*to dumstruck to reply*
Amazing. You seriously need to send a sample of your writing to bungie. Have you ever considered a career in writing.
PM me for next chapters
Good Job Mr.C

  • 02.16.2005 5:18 PM PDT
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Man, If you had a Halo book series, I would have bought them all already!

  • 02.16.2005 5:35 PM PDT
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Posted by: highland brute
HEY GUYS ME AGAIN I WAS WONDRIN MR.C WHAT ABOUT KELLY AND DR. HAYSLEY WILL THEY BE IN THE STORY

(p.s sorry forgot capslock was on)


First off, thanks everybody. I really liked how Chapter 9 turned out, especially the scenes involving Jan and the Master Chief.

As for Kelly and Dr. Halsey my lips are sealed. I popped in the little reference with Fred, Linda, and Will, there involvement isn't over yet in the story, but it's not going to be a big one.

Chapter 10 will be interesting. Its mostly going to be a dialogue based chapter so if your waiting for a big action scene, chapter 10 will be a bit of a dissapointment for you.

Also, I'm interested in your guy's take on how this story is going. Was my placing of the other Spartans in the Malta and the Athens cheezy and an easy cop-out? What about Ackerson. is he a believable character or does he just have the shapings of the traditional evil military guy?

Your input will be appreciated.


Edit: Sorry lexy, my bad, I'll give you a PM personally right away for Chapter 10

[Edited on 2/16/2005 5:43:53 PM]

  • 02.16.2005 5:41 PM PDT
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Everything was fine. No wait, it wasn't fine. It was perfect.

  • 02.16.2005 5:53 PM PDT
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No need to worry Mr. C, you've managed to sculpt an amazing story here. The characters are well-defined, even the re-introduction of Ackerson was handled splendidly. He's still got the nasty behaviour that was evident in The Fall of Reach and First Strike.

Just keep going at the pace your going and don't change anything. Your a true master of the art.

  • 02.16.2005 6:27 PM PDT
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Good freakin God man! I thought you were good before, but you proved me wrong with the last chapter! As for the other characters and the new ones in chapter 9.....Do what you think you should do because you've already shown us that you know what yur doin. I can't wait to see how you depict the interaction between the covanant allies and the Master Chief!

Thank you Mr. Clark.

ps: I just realized that I worded that first part wrong. the emphasis was on the word BEFORE, as if to say that he is even better now. sorry if you thought other wise.

[Edited on 2/16/2005 7:43:35 PM]

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