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Posted by: Mr_Clark
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Also, I'm interested in your guy's take on how this story is going. Was my placing of the other Spartans in the Malta and the Athens cheezy and an easy cop-out? What about Ackerson. is he a believable character or does he just have the shapings of the traditional evil military guy?
Your input will be appreciated.
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It's getting late on the good old East Coast, and I do have to work tomorrow, So I'll keep my normal "long windedness" to a minimum.
The "introductions" of Linda, Will and Fred ( IMO ) was handled fairly well. You managed to tie in there 'no show' status of Halo 2 without baztardizing the story of Halo 2. You mentioned earlier that you had planned to include them and the other book characters and they had a large roll. I think this path was handled perfectly. You introduced some speculation or theory and ran with, and "your" take on why they weren't in Halo 2 is very believeable. Bravo. It was not a cop-out on your part but a very interesting twist that fits in the Halo Universe.
Ackerson... While he doesn't have a "HUGE" role in the books, he is a central figure, and his apperances are very one dimensional. He wants what he wants, and doesn't like the spartans. He is the character you want to hate, and he was. He seemed to have been written that way in the novels. You captured that fell very well, but also you have an oppurtunity to expand on that. This is, after all, your fan fic... if you feel you need to give ackerson more meat.... go for it. You have trully displayed the talent to handle the task of giving a character more substance, and to continue the feel of the Halo Universe. If you want to tackle Ackerson, by all means, give it a go.
Yes, Ackerson does have the shapings of a typical military bad guy, but with so many rich villians left (gravemind, Truth, and not to mention any of the Rebel Covenant that have a grudge against chief) you have plenty of well balanced characters. But still, in your mind, we have no clue as to what Ackerson's role will be in the coming chapters.
I can honestly say, your story has me on the edge of my seat with every chapter. Your development of characters, and the continuation of already loveable characters, is great.
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Dang'it I still got long winded. haha
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