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I'm so happy now.

  • 06.30.2006 6:49 PM PDT
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I would vent a few frustrations, however they have nothing 2 do with the chapter and i won't go into them (England got knocked out of the soccer World Cup in 1/4 finals) (at least it wasn't the rugby 1). Clark just keep goin with the fic. well done dude. (just post it sometime soon............................................please).

  • 07.01.2006 3:34 PM PDT

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Posted by: Mr_Clark
Sorry guys, an absolutely disgusting heatwave has struck my city. It probably wouldn't be so bad, but my room has enough electronics that generate heat so potent, that it practically doubles the temperature. I grew up on the coast, where heatwaves didn't really bother anyone. If the temperature dipped above 20 degrees we just walked for three minutes and then jumped into the Atlantic Ocean. Here in the prairies the only relief you can get is going as far below ground as possible. That's what I'm doing, but it really doesn't do anything. It just means you have to crawl up flights of stairs.

Its gotten bad enough that I've moved into a friend's basement for the time being. I brought my iMac with me, but haven't bothered hooking it up yet. The heat is that bad. Its exasperated my laziness to levels I haven't ever seen.

The chapter is essentially finished. I just need to format it, edit it, then post it at the myriad of places the story frequents. I'm sure I'll get around to posting it on the weekend. If not, I give you guys permission to flail me.

So yes, excuse number 43542254. Feel free to complain and yell at me, I probably won't read it, but at least you'll have vented those frustrations.


If I drove the 5 hours to edmonton, I wouldn't even et charged long distance :)

i got that heat wave also. and I had to stand by a hot grill all day :(.

So this weekend. We'll see it tuesday. again, deadlines still aren't your thing.

  • 07.02.2006 2:11 AM PDT
Subject: Halo Fanfic: The End of a War

Phoenix is dead, long live Phoenix!
Is it?

Posted by: Atlantan Wraith
I would vent a few frustrations, however they have nothing 2 do with the chapter and i won't go into them (England got knocked out of the soccer World Cup in 1/4 finals) (at least it wasn't the rugby 1). Clark just keep goin with the fic. well done dude. (just post it sometime soon............................................please).

  • 07.02.2006 4:52 PM PDT
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Posted by: LIME31
I got his sarcasm...one person has to implement sarcasm and then you get a pile of terrorist chipmunks crashing your party, not fun at all..

Hows the chapter going

  • 07.04.2006 8:01 AM PDT
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Posted by: Atlantan Wraith
I would vent a few frustrations, however they have nothing 2 do with the chapter and i won't go into them (England got knocked out of the soccer World Cup in 1/4 finals) (at least it wasn't the rugby 1). Clark just keep goin with the fic. well done dude. (just post it sometime soon............................................ple ase).


Yeah........What u gettin at Dude?

  • 07.04.2006 8:57 AM PDT
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I liked it. :)

  • 07.04.2006 9:03 AM PDT

Phoenix is dead, long live Phoenix!
Is it?

Posted by: Atlantan Wraith
Yeah........What u gettin at Dude?


Im really fustrated about that aswell

  • 07.04.2006 2:54 PM PDT
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Posted by: Faith and Hope
*looks for news*

*doesn't find any*

*walks away sadly*
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news to me
well, cant wait for teh chap,

  • 07.04.2006 8:16 PM PDT
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This is a fantastic fanficion, in my opinion. While I am a noob on these forums, and my word probably does not carry much weight, I read enough to recognize superb writing when I see it. I really will be surprised if you don't become a writer, assumig you aren't one alreaady.

Although the only thing I can say is that I noticed the Gravemind speaks in Iambic Septameter, a pattern of seven iambs. (An iamb is a pattern of stressed, then unstressed syllables.) I'll demonstrate with his comment comparing the MC and the Arbiter. Caps is a stressed syllable, lowercase is an unstressed.

THIS one IS maCHINE and NERVE, and HAS his MIND conCLUDed.
THIS one IS but FLESH and FAITH and IS the MORE deLUDed.

If you count the repetioion of the stressed-unstressed pattern, you will notice there are seven in each line.

And it occasionally breaks down in certain lines, but still retains it's general rhythm. So while I realize it may be too late to edit all of that, and is probably too much trouble, I just wanted to point that out.

Other than that, haven't seen anything worth noting as far as mistakes go. Then again, I'm still on the first few chapters, but judging by the quality of the writing, I should not see too many mistakes.

Anyway, I hope this is seen as constructive criticism, as opposed to nitpicking over minor details.

-Mnementh

  • 07.05.2006 10:00 AM PDT

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Posted by: Mnementh
This is a fantastic fanficion, in my opinion. While I am a noob on these forums, and my word probably does not carry much weight, I read enough to recognize superb writing when I see it. I really will be surprised if you don't become a writer, assumig you aren't one alreaady.

Although the only thing I can say is that I noticed the Gravemind speaks in Iambic Septameter, a pattern of seven iambs. (An iamb is a pattern of stressed, then unstressed syllables.) I'll demonstrate with his comment comparing the MC and the Arbiter. Caps is a stressed syllable, lowercase is an unstressed.

THIS one IS maCHINE and NERVE, and HAS his MIND conCLUDed.
THIS one IS but FLESH and FAITH and IS the MORE deLUDed.

If you count the repetioion of the stressed-unstressed pattern, you will notice there are seven in each line.

And it occasionally breaks down in certain lines, but still retains it's general rhythm. So while I realize it may be too late to edit all of that, and is probably too much trouble, I just wanted to point that out.

Other than that, haven't seen anything worth noting as far as mistakes go. Then again, I'm still on the first few chapters, but judging by the quality of the writing, I should not see too many mistakes.

Anyway, I hope this is seen as constructive criticism, as opposed to nitpicking over minor details.

-Mnementh


COuld this mean that gravemind is Shakespeare?

Find out in the next chapter of... that guy who lives in that northern country in some city that has an NHL team the sucked in Game 7 of the stanley cup finals.

  • 07.05.2006 10:03 AM PDT
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Actually, Shakespeare uses Iambic PENTameter. Five Iambs instead of seven. And the Gravemind is way cooler. Shakespeare can't even keep his iambic pentameter close to accurate...

  • 07.05.2006 10:13 AM PDT
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Posted by: Mnementh
This is a fantastic fanficion, in my opinion. While I am a noob on these forums, and my word probably does not carry much weight, I read enough to recognize superb writing when I see it. I really will be surprised if you don't become a writer, assumig you aren't one alreaady.

Although the only thing I can say is that I noticed the Gravemind speaks in Iambic Septameter, a pattern of seven iambs. (An iamb is a pattern of stressed, then unstressed syllables.) I'll demonstrate with his comment comparing the MC and the Arbiter. Caps is a stressed syllable, lowercase is an unstressed.

THIS one IS maCHINE and NERVE, and HAS his MIND conCLUDed.
THIS one IS but FLESH and FAITH and IS the MORE deLUDed.

If you count the repetioion of the stressed-unstressed pattern, you will notice there are seven in each line.

And it occasionally breaks down in certain lines, but still retains it's general rhythm. So while I realize it may be too late to edit all of that, and is probably too much trouble, I just wanted to point that out.

Other than that, haven't seen anything worth noting as far as mistakes go. Then again, I'm still on the first few chapters, but judging by the quality of the writing, I should not see too many mistakes.

Anyway, I hope this is seen as constructive criticism, as opposed to nitpicking over minor details.

-Mnementh

Yup Gravemind is a very cultured zombie isnt he. Great story Clark I love it, keep it going.

  • 07.05.2006 10:14 AM PDT
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dude this is crazy -blam!-!!! man keep up the good work man! i will injoy reading this over and over again man. you have an exalint talint man. DON' T LET IT GO TO WAIST AND KEEP WRITING AWAY.

  • 07.05.2006 10:21 AM PDT
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Oh sure thing, although as i've probably said too many times I prefer Rugby it still sucked to c England loose on penalties (although we always do).

On another less somber note; Clark, keep goin dude the stuffs still great.

btw did any1 get Lostprophets new album? and if so what did u think?

[Edited on 7/5/2006]

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I also noticed the Flood forms tend to get mixed up a hair. Just as s reminder, the Carrier forms are the bulging sacs of nastiness that go off like grenades and spew little infection monstrosities about. The infection forms are the little buggers that chase you around my the dozens and pop like little firecrackers when you kill them. The combat forms are the humanoid dudes that pick up guns to kill you with and are fond of punching you against the wall.

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lol who can mix the forms, they are completely different


I'm a new member and have read Mr.Clark's story and have to say its awsome. One of the best stories i've read. Keep up the awsome work.

[Edited on 7/5/2006]

  • 07.05.2006 8:57 PM PDT
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Dude, i havent been trackin this till today so i havent had to wait for chapters like these guys, and i feel incredibly lucky. I dont think i could have stood having to wait and see what happens. I'm lovin your writing by the way, and the storyline kicks ass. My only problem is MC goin nuts and losing control of his body, and how it looks like Sarge is gonna go Half-Breed. I guess we're not in store for a happy ending but oh well. Keep up the good work and post the next chapter soon mate

  • 07.05.2006 9:13 PM PDT
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Well, I've finished the story, and I have to say it's looking awesome. I can't understand why you seem apologetic when going into the histories of the elites and Forerunners. I really enjoy those parts, so it's not like you're wasting anyone's time. In fact, the Forerunner chapters are fantastic, in my opinion. for some reason, it reminds me of Lois Lowry's "The Giver"...

[Edited on 7/6/2006]

  • 07.06.2006 10:46 AM PDT
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READ!

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Sounds good... Have a fun time writing.

  • 07.06.2006 11:02 AM PDT
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I know that I have not posted on this forum before and I must admit that as I started reading this amazing story yesterday at work and then through to late this afternoon, I was under the impression that it was already finished and that I was just catching up to where everyone else was at the end of the story.

Much to my surprise and certainly some joy and disappointment, it isn't finished. I say this mainly because I am disappointed that I can't finsh the story which looks to be a year and a half in the making, but at the same time, I get the pleasure and privelage to complement Mr Clark on his amazing writing talents. Unfortunately, my writing talents are more of a bore as they reside mostly in politics and history rather than fiction. I doubt I possess the talent and gift that Mr Clark has shown these many months in his writings. I could go on forever about what he has done well.... and what he has done greatly.

Mr. Clark, like I said before, it is an honor to just be able to join in on this endeavor of yours as you take us through one hell of a rollercoster ride. You're ability to play with the human mind is both intriguing and inspiring. For this 19 year old college junior....you have definately done a lot with mere words and plotline. Thank You

Looking forward to the next great chapter sir


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  • 07.06.2006 2:14 PM PDT

Posted by: LIME31
I got his sarcasm...one person has to implement sarcasm and then you get a pile of terrorist chipmunks crashing your party, not fun at all..

Definitely can't wait for this next one!!!

  • 07.07.2006 1:56 AM PDT
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ARHHHHHG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This is SO FRUSTRATING.........this bloody internet filter at my college is refusing to let me access the god forsaken post! i've tried by-passing it but it WON'T WORK!!!!!!!!!!
I'm going to go and terrorise some random passer by and take out my frustration on them...........my hands are already itching for a fight.

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  • 07.07.2006 5:24 AM PDT

hey all, this is kokiri here. i had to use another account to get on here since its the one now linked to my email that i use now.

M_C i really like this chapter alot, it was amazing at how well you could paint a picture. The details made the chapter even more realistic that your other stuff. i hope to read the other pieces soon.

keep it up Clark. very good work so far

  • 07.07.2006 7:33 PM PDT