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There was no doubt this was going to ba another great read. You have a very keen way of capturing your characters and bringing them to life. The Brain scan of Mendez... Brillant.
Jan and Cortana's talk on Forgotten Hope... Brilliant. Hell even the Arbiter's fate is nice.

I am wondering how it will end though. There is a lot going on in your story, and it makes it all very exciting, and the possibility of a dark ending is giving me the chills. I think I said this a long time ago, but there is no way the Halo story will have a happy ending, and you're fanfic is really proving that so. But you still have a lot to go, as you've said in previous posts, so I'm not pressed about the end.

Wonderfully written Mr_Clark. Simply wonderful. Keep it up.

  • 04.15.2005 7:55 PM PDT
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im, sorry, but as a fellow writer, i feel obligated to say it... i dont like where you're going with this... i may be a little prejiduced towards my own story, but i feel you're letting things slip a little... don't get me wrong, the story thus far is great, but i think i know where you're going with this, and i dont like it... that being said....


I loved this chapter >_< lol... just... watch your step, dont fall into a trap... a literary trap that is....

  • 04.15.2005 9:40 PM PDT
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Thanks everyone, I thought I gave away a certain plot device with my bit about Ackerson, and where the Spartan 3.0's are heading, but I guess not....

Don't be too worried about where this story is heading, I've never been accused of having the last half of my books end poorly. In fact, check some of my reviews on ff.net, and you'll see that the later bits of the book are where I really shine. They're finally the points where I get to let loose, and have real havok reign free across the board. Plus its where I get to be really angsty and cruel to the characters.

I'm sure you guys will like it.

  • 04.15.2005 9:44 PM PDT
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Another great chapter Mr. C.

Each scene had something endearing to it, and like you said, there was plenty of plot development.

I think I've guessed what the thing is that you are surprised we haven't gotten, but in the interest of keeping such an interesting tidbit a secret, I shall quickly steal away into the night before I blab it out.

  • 04.15.2005 9:57 PM PDT
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clark that was good, very, very , very good .... i liked it so much ive been ignoring my friend for 20 min while i read it, ya it was pretty slammin, i like that the prophets are going to their homeworld, i hope they all die a fiery death, mmmm roast prophet, its now 11 30 and im finally done readin it, btw doom 3 is wierd ... the one thing i hate about fanfics though is you have to wait, if you buy a good novel, that thing is done as soon as you want it to be, but the wait is definatly worth it, i would definatly be trying to get some forum mods reading this stuff to try and get bungies attention, i will e devistated if this isnt the intro to halo 3!! have fun with it, and btw im starting on chapter 6

  • 04.15.2005 10:32 PM PDT
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Awsome chapter once again. I hope that bungie puts some stuff in the books into Halo 3. So far the only thing you needed to read about in the books for Halo 2 is why was Johnson alive when you saw him die on the video. I got Halo 2 before I read the books so I practicly cried when i saw he was still alive.

  • 04.15.2005 10:36 PM PDT
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Another great chapter, its good to see the MC back in it again. The Ackerson part was a great idea, kudos to you for imagination. This really will be a great book.

Side note: Did you receive the PM i sent you about my new chapter?

  • 04.16.2005 12:13 AM PDT
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Posted by: flashbang6
Yay I'm Back!!!! someone blacklisted me for some reason. his name is silas or whatever but i cant wait till tommorrow! um did i spell that wrong? well anyways, scorptank, remeber that guy named deanlearner? u know hes the on who claims to have found the 'Grease Skull' ? well did anyone else ever find it? i have no idea how that thread turned out tho


What am I supposed to be doing with that information?


well i can recall u supporting him and that he personally thanked u for doing so. i just thought u might have continued with the thread and had some proof that it actually existed.

  • 04.16.2005 1:14 AM PDT
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Great chapter Mr._Clark! The one thing that scares me the most is that AckerSON OF A B.I.T.C.H. might suddenly kill Earth without the Covenant, by testing(oh so foolishly)on the Flood!!!!!!!!!! *Wets pants and quickly runs away to change them* And how did AckerSON OF A B.I.T.C.H. create Spartan 3.0's without anyone except his A.1 knowing?

[Edited on 4/16/2005]

  • 04.16.2005 1:54 AM PDT
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I love the chapter... and I hate it at the same time.
This is somewhat where I was planning to go.
Pure s**t to me.... oh well.

I like the way you implemented the Spartan III's or 3.0's or whatever they are called.
And the creating of an A.I Mendez perfectly connects to the map CPOMZ, I would like to see what you think that Kelly and Dr. Halsey are doing.

Perfect chapter, perfect length, perfect characters, just the thing about the storyline that bothers me. Other than that; you're a pro writer.

  • 04.16.2005 2:56 AM PDT
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word

  • 04.16.2005 4:07 AM PDT
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I'm going to tell you all a big secret now, so big, that even I didn't know about it till now.

Dr. Halsey and Kelly will be showing up.......eventually.....

Just when that will be, I cannot say, both because I haven't gotten things 100% worked out yet, so there's bound to be some give or take.

I've received all the updates on everybodies stories, and now that I have the proverbial monkey called Chapter 15 off my back, I shall finally have some free time to catch up on your guy's stuff.

Chapter 15 was a fun chapter to write, but it was obsessively long. About 8500 words, close to 20 pages. That's a tad much.

  • 04.16.2005 4:15 AM PDT
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Posted by: Mr_Clark

Chapter 15 was a fun chapter to write, but it was obsessively long. About 8500 words, close to 20 pages. That's a tad much.


20 pages..............8500 words...........?!?!?!?

  • 04.16.2005 4:18 AM PDT
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just read it and it was pretty good i have to say that i was concerned at some points where you were going with it some bits just didn't sit right if you know what i mean but apart from those bits it ws amazing

WTF!!!!!!! 8500 words 20 pages!!!! bloody hell

  • 04.16.2005 4:41 AM PDT
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That was one of the greatest chapters in my opinion Mr_Clark. Truly superb. With so much going on i felt like a kid in a sweet shop. The homeworld of the prophets, another oracle, elites and humans, jan, sarge, chief, arb, cortana and the other spartan 2s. man i am so giddy right now. Colonel Ackerson = SOB. I mean spartan 3's that was not expected. do they wear a special armour, any augs? so many questions. i would put money on there being a spartan battle royale at some point. And now to top it all off Dr halsey and kelly are coming back. Ladies and gentlemen the unstoppapble force that is Mr Clark.

ps. Mendez RULES

  • 04.16.2005 6:41 AM PDT
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so true *audience applauses*
what does CPOMZ stand for?

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  • 04.16.2005 7:07 AM PDT
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Posted by: flashbang6
so true *audience applauses*
what does CPOMZ stand for?
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It stands for chief petty officer mendez. That was a great chapter Mr.C. Is Ackerson going to be a traitor and let the flood loose on Earth or something?

  • 04.16.2005 8:23 AM PDT

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fo sho, this has been an awsome story man thnx for posting it here. Spartans 3's are only 7, hmm i wonder if they can take care of them self with the flood let alone capture them. I have an idea, Jan is partialy a spartan because of her father and mother bieng in the Spartan I program you could maybe give her a suit as well. Maybe a Mach 5 or 6 just to spice up things.

  • 04.16.2005 9:09 AM PDT
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I will always place the mission first.
I will never accept defeat.
I will never quit.
I will never leave a fallen comrade.

Thanks for the PM Mr. Clarck and the best chapter yet, it was awesome.

  • 04.16.2005 10:26 AM PDT
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I've been following a long but not posting.

GREAT STORY! I love it.

just a note: Spartan's don't have kids because the yare taken away while they are six, Or was it just Jan's excuse to follow MC.

  • 04.16.2005 10:32 AM PDT
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Posted by: lexy_1849
i thought you would pm me man....didnt get one
grrr
ANY -blam!-S WHO DISS THIS MAN SOULD DIE A WOMENS DEATH! This man can't be perfect, but he is striving for it. Shut your mouths, and stop moaning and stuff. HEy you suck! I didnt get PM'ed Is all i hear from you imbusules.
God! Grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr rrrrrrrrrr rrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr rrrrrrrrrr rrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr rrrrrrrrrr rrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr rrrrrrrrrr rrrrreeeat job clark

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  • 04.16.2005 12:24 PM PDT
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Chill, go see a movie ;-)

  • 04.16.2005 12:38 PM PDT
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Posted by: Caboose BlueTeam
Posted by: lexy_1849
i thought you would pm me man....didnt get one
grrr
ANY -blam!-S WHO DISS THIS MAN SOULD DIE A WOMENS DEATH! This man can't be perfect, but he is striving for it. Shut your mouths, and stop moaning and stuff. HEy you suck! I didnt get PM'ed Is all i hear from you imbusules.
God! Grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr rrrrrrrrrr rrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr rrrrrrrrrr rrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr rrrrrrrrrr rrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr rrrrrrrrrr rrrrreeeat job clark

*walking around in a zoo, showing some children the animals.* “And here we have another person with issues, this species is multiplied tenfold, every minute!”
*One of the Children asks its rich father: "Can I have one of those?"
and then the father aswerd "No my son, I won't buy one for you. We already have one of those: your mother."


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  • 04.16.2005 12:58 PM PDT
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Lexy keeps copying peopls avatars....

  • 04.16.2005 2:23 PM PDT
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Hmm, this antagonism seems to have popped out of nowhere. Lets keep things friendly here.

Jan is a product of her parents who were in the Spartan 1.0 program, something detailed in the ilovebees saga. While not necessarily canon, I would have to say it does make perfect sense that there would be a 1.0 program, considering Chief and the others are 2.0's.

The rest of today and most of tomorrow will be dedicated to catching up on some reading...and hopefully finishing Doom 3. Its quite fun playing it on co-op, but it takes quite long to get through it all.

Chapter 16 writing shall begin shortly. Can't say much about it, aside from the fact that we'll be seeing more of Ackerson's true colors.

  • 04.16.2005 2:42 PM PDT