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Subject: Halo Fanfic: The End of a War
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Posted by: Durgon
What ever happened to that Ship and what was the "thing" that attacked it, this happened in Chapter 11 and im still very curious about it :D


The ship that was attacked was one of the few that appeared out of Slip Space in the Orbital Defense Grid around Earth at the end of the chapter.

As for the 'thing' that attacked Karktanus? That will be unveiled next chapter.

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Sorry, some crazy stuff happening, I won't be able to post any questions or anything just yet.

[Edited on 5/13/2005]

  • 05.13.2005 6:50 AM PDT
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A very nice chapter.
A good amount of tension too.... uh oh.... the Flood on Earth can only mean.... trouble.

I wonder how you are going to talk/write yourself out of this problem.

That ship that crash landed.... did it carry an extremely large parasite plus two little annoying light bukbs who were trying to get to.... the Ark?

We'll see... I guess.....

Man, this was one cool chapter.

And I have one (extremely stupid) question about you B.net name..... does it come from John Terrence Clark from Tom Clancy's Rainbow Six?

Stupid question I know, just thought of it......

  • 05.13.2005 9:04 AM PDT

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While I'm not saying General Strauss's physical response to Ackerson's cowardice and idiotic actions was more a enacting of a personal vendetta, Strauss obviously felt he was justified in striking him. Whereas the General's anger may not have been present previously, obviously the situation before him must have caused him some duress.
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Yes, Ackerson deserved it. My concern was the suddenness of the hit, sort of out-of-the-blue. But with the book tie in (which I keep forgetting about when I read your story) you close the door on my concern. The 'duress' was there cause he doesn't like the man. Nobody does, and he has basically doomed Earth and tried to justify his actions cause of his own selfishness. That was the icing that pushed Strauss over the edge.


... Bravo!

  • 05.13.2005 10:03 AM PDT
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this was a great chapter i liked the space battle and the flood on earth thats just bad i cannot wai for johnson to kick some you now what

  • 05.13.2005 12:05 PM PDT
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Posted by: Scorptank
And I have one (extremely stupid) question about you B.net name..... does it come from John Terrence Clark from Tom Clancy's Rainbow Six?

Stupid question I know, just thought of it......


Its not a stupid question, and yes, the name is derived from the John Terrence Clark/Kelly character from the Tom Clancy 'Jack Ryan' series of books.

  • 05.13.2005 1:16 PM PDT

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Posted by: Mr_Clark

General Strauss issued a direct order to Admiral Hood, and because of the direness of the situation, he responded with the Pavlovian response all soldiers/sailors/marines pertain to. Admiral Hood was given an order from the officer in charge, and as such he replied with an "Aye aye sir."


Ahhhh, Right. I see what you mean now. You are saying that even though they are probably same rank, General Strauss had tactical command of the situation.
Thanks for that post.

  • 05.13.2005 2:01 PM PDT
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I just got done reading chapter nine and i have to say that if anything comes of the other three spartans, you'll probably funk up the story. no matter what people say you are not great because you just are you are great because your smart and creative. The reason we love this is because it is a believable outcome of the halo triligy. you aren't really a better writer than nylund its just that you more realistic. what he put was more of an alter ending of halo, like what COULD have happened. until chapter nine, this story was halo but just the mentioning of the other spartans is not a turn you want to take.

you are a great writer, but dont let it get to your head, cuz if you do, youll feel like you cant write because youll feel an unrealistic obligation to just blow peaoples minds.

keep it real. PEACE!

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  • 05.13.2005 4:42 PM PDT
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What's going to happen to Earth?? The thought of Flood on Earth, freaks me out.

Good chapter, you write better that the author that wrougt,Halo First Stirke.

  • 05.13.2005 5:33 PM PDT
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I want the flood from coming within an inch of wipeing out both the human and covenant races, when The Master Cheif and the Arbiter do somthing to save them all.... That would kick Ass.

  • 05.13.2005 7:27 PM PDT
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Well, at least Ackerson got what he wanted - his S-IIIs merged with Flood DNA. Imagine the irony....

There is one problem I can see, though.... how did they find the location of Earth????!!!!!!

Great Chapter Mr_Clark, keep it up!

  • 05.13.2005 9:56 PM PDT
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They took over a UNSC ship, hacked its nav systems and found earth.

  • 05.13.2005 10:59 PM PDT
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Posted by: soulguard
Mr_Clark
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While I'm not saying General Strauss's physical response to Ackerson's cowardice and idiotic actions was more a enacting of a personal vendetta, Strauss obviously felt he was justified in striking him. Whereas the General's anger may not have been present previously, obviously the situation before him must have caused him some duress.
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Yes, Ackerson deserved it. My concern was the suddenness of the hit, sort of out-of-the-blue. But with the book tie in (which I keep forgetting about when I read your story) you close the door on my concern. The 'duress' was there cause he doesn't like the man. Nobody does, and he has basically doomed Earth and tried to justify his actions cause of his own selfishness. That was the icing that pushed Strauss over the edge.


... Bravo!


Yeah, but still you wouldn't have suspected such a thing from a respected Fleet General.
I thought that letting those Marines take Ackerson in custody would have been just as appropriate. But to let him get punched and imprisoned would have been the best ;-)

  • 05.14.2005 5:37 AM PDT
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gr8 chapter
but i didn't get pm i had to wait for tyler (kokiri) to tell me over live

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  • 05.14.2005 3:26 PM PDT
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Sorry highland brute. I was getting error messages after every second PM I sent and I had originally thought they were still sending, but I guess not....which means I missed quite a few PM's....heh...uh oh.

Well its a little delayed but I've got a few things I'd like you guys to consider about the plot.

There is something that I was always a little surprised about, a question nobody ever posed. Way back in Chapter 3, when the Master Chief fires twice at the Forerunner Crystal aboard the ship he hitched a ride on from Delta Halo, and is summarily ejected from, I was wondering why nobody was curious as to why just the Master Chief was removed from the ship. There were quite a few Covenant aboard the bridge when the crystal shattered, but they've persisted onboard the ship. Also, there doesn't appear to be any kind of damage to the ship from the later scenes involving the wayward Forerunner ship.

So, why would the Master Chief be the only one that was ejected?

Now that it appears 'Eranumee is going to have a safe return to Silone (Sangheili/Elite home world), because of the Arbiter destroying the Brute ships waiting for him, what will the reactions be of the Elites that live on Silone? Word hasn't reached them of the Prophet's betrayal, due to the Covenant fleet around Danrun intercepting all outgoing transmissions.

Something tells me the Arbiter is going to play a very pivotal role, and perhaps the Master Chief as well.

Probably one of the biggest events to happen so far occurred last chapter, with the Flood not only discovering Earth, but actually landing on it. Judging from the initial arrival of the frigate Colonel Ackerson sent to the ruins of Delta Halo, its fair to assume that the Covenant ships that arrived are from the Brute fleet that showed up at Delta Halo shortly after the exit of Honor Without Mercy, and were slowly taken over by the Flood. We've all come to think that it was Gravemind who orchestrated this attack, so if he did indeed do so, does that mean he's arrived on Earth as well?

Could a rematch between Johnson and Gravemind be in the works? If so, may the Gods watch over Earth, cause I imagine the destruction caused between the two of them without the confines of a ship would be quite massive.

And on a final note here, I want to reiterate that what occurred in the Covenant history chapters is still indeed very important to the plot, and we shall see the first hints of this in the coming chapter, with the Arbiter's return to Silone.

  • 05.14.2005 6:22 PM PDT
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Posted by: death incarneate
They took over a UNSC ship, hacked its nav systems and found earth.


I doubt even Ackerson would be as stupid not to follow protocol...

Or maybe I'm just reading too deeply into this. Oh well...


  • 05.14.2005 6:27 PM PDT
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In regards to how the Flood learned of Earth's coordinates, here's a quote from Chapter 10. Jan is eavesdropping on a conversation between the Master Chief and the Arbiter.



The corridor soon emptied into a large network of crossways, leading off in several different directions. Jan stopped and glanced around, wondering if perhaps declining the Grunt’s offer had been a wise choice. The ships architecture was confusing to say the least, and her experience navigating ships was somewhere on the low-end of the spectrum.

As she was about to turn back and ask one of the Elites she saw earlier where the bridge was, a resounding crash echoed down from one of the corridors. Curiosity got the better of her and she turned down the corridor, approaching the open doors that led into an enormous chamber. Before she could enter, a pair of voices caught her attention.

“-lieve that the Flood leader was aboard this vessel ever since the parasite arrived on High Charity. It had accessed the ships schematics and your Construct has informed me that it learned of the location of your home world, as well as ours.”

The Master Chief and an Elite were standing near the door of the chamber, facing the other end. Several Hunters were clearing away rubble that looked like it came from the upper deck. The Spartan and the Elite weren’t facing each other, but Jan could see that both soldiers looked tense.

  • 05.14.2005 6:41 PM PDT
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I just got a chance to read chap.17....wow... you seriously get better with each chapter Mr_Clark!!! One thing though, in the beggining of the chapter where the Arbiter is thinking to himself about the brute capitol ships, would he actually call them brutes, or their covenant name? Anyways, I just kinda was confused on that, but honestly, I think this was your best chap. yet. Keep it up!!!

Ps, I loved Ackerson getting punched by Strass, that was AWSOME!!!

  • 05.14.2005 9:10 PM PDT

This is the best fanfic Ive seen.... ever, though Im ashamed of myself, I find myself borrowing ideas from it... for mine........

  • 05.14.2005 9:54 PM PDT
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Awesum story, sooooooo so good. I thought that chapter was a bit short but then i rememered i read the 1st half the other day. oops

Btw, does anyone here (Mr C especially) have msn?
Itd be good to chat to you all about fanfics and stuff.

  • 05.15.2005 12:24 AM PDT
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I do use MSN, and from the many people that have recently wished to talk to me on the service, I believe I shall hand out the account I use for it. Its a dummy account, but please, don't take it and sign me up for male enhancing drugs.

Mr. Clark's MSN Account: taiji_ya@hotmail.com

Also, I thought this rumor died?. I guess if Bill Gates can be believed, then we'll be seeing Halo 3 next year. The only problem I foresee is if this rumor turns out to be true as well. I can't really see Bungie being able to make the game that fast.

Edit: Just for those wondering. Work has begun on Chapter 18. Its going to be a doozy (I love that word). I'm anticipating that it shall be the largest chapter so far.

Also, you guys might decide to crusify me over some of the events that will take place in this new chapter. Understand though, everything happens for a reason, I do nothing to be cruel, but sometimes death is inevitable.


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  • 05.15.2005 5:45 PM PDT
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That last line there is a very ill omen if you ask me....

Please don't kill someone important!

  • 05.15.2005 8:52 PM PDT

Im really hopin you dont kill the Arbiter.... if you do Hunters may appear at your door.... dont care if you kill the Chief though.... if you do.... more power to ya...

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  • 05.15.2005 11:04 PM PDT
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don't you dare kill johnson or mc or the arbiter or cortana apart from that kill anyone else you want

  • 05.15.2005 11:48 PM PDT
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Maybe Johnson could lose both arms this time.
And a leg....

  • 05.16.2005 2:04 AM PDT
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Posted by: Mr_Clark
Also, you guys might decide to crusify me over some of the events that will take place in this new chapter. Understand though, everything happens for a reason, I do nothing to be cruel, but sometimes death is inevitable.


If I were to kill you, I would certainly not crusify you. It gives such a mess.....
And the hammer and nails..... nah.....

The longest chapter so far? How long's that going to be? Thirty pages? (in Word, that is)

So.... some crazy 'insane plot twists' in this chapter, I already began to wonder when they would show up......

I shall be looking forward to it, although I do not like the idea of 'death' even if it is inevitable... I always hated things that are inevitable.... that's why I always disliked Agent Smith......

[Edited on 5/16/2005]

  • 05.16.2005 3:38 AM PDT