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Subject: Mr._Clark Pwnd You!
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I thought it was a new weapon that Mr. Clark was gonna throw out of the blue, but the flamethrower was an interesting attachment.

I know that sounds like the most lame-arsed critic ever...

But anyways.

  • 06.20.2005 7:02 PM PDT
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Who me?
I bet i could out run you, out swim, bike, jump, race. Anything that even relates to physical i could kick your sorry butt in.

Or do i need to start counting?

[Edited on 6/20/2005]

  • 06.20.2005 7:35 PM PDT
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ok ya thas nice and all but please take your argument elsewhere....insolin fools....how dare you disrespect mr clark by arguing in this forum... this forum is for the review of the chapter...whih ive already explained is awesome....not for two bumbling idiots to argue...and allthough i might of just become part of the problem somebodys gotta tell you two...shut the hell up

  • 06.20.2005 9:11 PM PDT
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~I was born for the storm, and a calm does not suit me~

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מִכְמַן

WOW, I just found out that your new chapter was out Mr.C. *sniff* it was heartbreaking and your best chapter yet... wow it was good!!!

P.S. Any idea why I didn't get a pm?

  • 06.20.2005 9:14 PM PDT
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I believe a I missed several PM's this time around. I blame myself really.....mostly because there's pretty much no one else to blame...

Hopefully I can find out what happened to Konoka_chan sometime soon. She usually handles half the PM load, and when I'm left to my own devices I usually screw things up, like I did this chapter obviously.

  • 06.20.2005 9:45 PM PDT

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Rember the days when people thought Halo 2 would come out on August 24th and DLC would come on Feb 9. Yeah those were the days.

NRS High School

Well Mr. C if you write another chapter like that One i'll wait awhile...

[Edited on 6/20/2005]

  • 06.20.2005 10:18 PM PDT
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Question

I thought you said that Jan's parents were spartans1.0.

  • 06.20.2005 11:25 PM PDT
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Another question:

Dont mean to be picky but considering jan was so accurate when she took down the spartans, when she was ambushed by them, im sure her arms got broken or something along those lines. I doubt even the Chief could shoot that well with broken arms...

  • 06.21.2005 2:33 AM PDT
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Jan's parents are indeed Spartan 1.0's, did I say otherwise?

Her forearms felt as if they were on fire, and she was certain they had been broken trying to block the Flood’s attack.


Not exactly a guarantee for broken arms. Jan said so herself earlier....

“My name is Jan, Sergeant,” Jan bristled. Before she could continue she glanced outside the Warthog and realized where Johnson had taken her.

“The HighCom Hospital? I don’t know what you’re thinking but I’ve got about zero medical experience.”


She's no doctor. It might have felt like she broke them, but in truth she's a little tougher than that. Most certainly there may be a compound fracture. I wouldn't break her arms though, she'd be out of commission for around six weeks then. I can't keep her out of the story for that long.

With that taken care of....

Chapter 19 Information Below...

So, my devious mind has formatted the chapter and decided on the order of things, and now all that's left is actually writing it. Obviously the hardest part, but I think I can move along smoothly.

Took me awhile to think of the perfect cliffhanger to give you guys for this new chapter. In the end I think I'll lessen the blow my original ending would have given, so instead I think I'll cop out and make the chapter larger so that the final scene has more elaboration.

I suppose I should say this though, so that everyone will get one thing clear.

After this chapter, there will be no more important character introductions. What that means is, no more intregal-to-the-plot type of characters will be introduced, so for those wondering what's happening with the Dr. Halsey and Kelly situation, you'll get your answer in Chapter 19.

And by situation, I mean, whether they will play a role in this story or not...

I suppose that also means we'll be getting some more information on a certain Prophet introduced awhile ago, as well as something the Prophet of Truth described as a...Forerunner? Was that what he said?

Sheesh, that guys crazy....


[Edited on 6/21/2005]

  • 06.21.2005 4:09 AM PDT
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Posted by: Mr_Clark
Don't hate me too much. Originally the scene with the Spartan's infection and then attack on Jan, and finally their death was to be written from Fred's (the Spartan) perspective. I decided that was a little too cruel, so I put Jan back into the driver's seat.


Did you happen to write it from Fred's perspective? If yes, then maybe that can be in the deleted scenes section at the end of your story. I, for one, would like to read it. - LE

  • 06.21.2005 5:01 AM PDT

He watches every Hodgetwin video they put up...on ALL their channels. He calls them the Hodge Triplets, and considers himself the 3rd triplet. He's started talking and acting like them now. Every other line out of his mouth "Thaaas some BULLLLLL**** maaayne" or "Gotta make dem gainzzzz". He calls his biceps "gains". When he eats post-workout, he talks to his biceps, "Don't worry gains, I'm feeding you. Daddys gonna feed you, gainz *kisses biceps*".

"Posted by: Mr_Clark
Don't hate me too much. Originally the scene with the Spartan's infection and then attack on Jan, and finally their death was to be written from Fred's (the Spartan) perspective. I decided that was a little too cruel, so I put Jan back into the driver's seat.

Did you happen to write it from Fred's perspective? If yes, then maybe that can be in the deleted scenes section at the end of your story. I, for one, would like to read it. - LE "

I concur. I too would like to see it. I think it would've been a nice touch... I like it very cruel. I wanna find out what'll happen to the Master Chief and Arbiter!

Mr. Clark, why on Earth would Truth believe they could get onto the planet without being detected? I mean they just flew a gigangtic ship down onto the surface.... Who couldn't notice that? Perhaps he was just being hopeful....?

  • 06.21.2005 7:16 AM PDT
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Deleted scenes would be cool, especially stuff like you said, but what i think he could do as an extra, would be to take a little time and put grave mind as the first person.

Just a thought...

What if the Sarge fully transformed into a flood creature?

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  • 06.21.2005 8:03 AM PDT
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neato, that is cool,
the Pacific campaign is an interesting read in history books, especially when Admiral McArthur destroys the Imperial navy at Guadacanal(sp?)
the fanatical japanese resistance you mention and allude to was a huge deterrant and the reason the US nuked japan, to avoid overwhelming American casualties, which were sure to top the millions. those marines were against troops who died willingly in a suicidal manner, both on the ground and in the air(kamikazes, or divine wind)

wow, i so smart, i pains me. not really, but im sure you know.

  • 06.21.2005 8:53 AM PDT
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I don't think I need to praise you, you know how much I love your work. So I'll just say the same thing I said on ff.net.
"You took me on yet another rollercoaster ride... this was quite a trip. But did you really have to do that to the spartans? It's not a bad thing, but it really was a shock. Poor Jan, my heart goes out to her.

Only time will tell what you have in store for us next, Mr_C. Only time will tell, and I will be patiently waiting."

And I'm getting the sense that some of the readers were really shocked by the events in this chapter??

-soulguard

  • 06.21.2005 9:50 AM PDT
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what i meant when i asked if her parents were 1.0's wouldn't she get some genetic abilities passed on? in my theory she should be half spartan.

  • 06.21.2005 10:06 AM PDT
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this should deffinitaly be a book this is some of the best writing i have ever seen good work

  • 06.21.2005 10:44 AM PDT
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I really liked the chapter Mr. Clark. The ending was a real twist. I was thinking as I was reading it "He wouldn't dare kill of the rest of the spartans" but I was wrong. I liked the ending though I didn't really see it coming. For awhile I thought that Jan was dead. Poor gal fractured arms and a pyschological breakdown. I like the whole father-daughter relationship and how she doesn't want to dissapoint the MC.

Good Job on the Chapter can't wait for the next one. And thanks for the PM

  • 06.21.2005 10:52 AM PDT
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But before the 1.0's augmentation they would just be normal humans so there would be no traits passed on, unless they had her after the augmentation then maybe yes.

  • 06.21.2005 10:54 AM PDT
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  • 06.21.2005 10:59 AM PDT
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Was jan born before or after they were genetically enhanced?

  • 06.21.2005 11:32 AM PDT
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After what you said about Dr. Halsey and Linda I now have a very bad feeling. Me thinks she paid a visit to either the Elite or Prophet homeworld. And was welcome in less than friendly manner. Oh and to add to what else people have been saying, deleted scenes would be very cool. Will there be Directors commentary and a Alternate ending as well? Sorry. I just couldn't resist.

  • 06.21.2005 11:43 AM PDT
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This story gets better each chapter I read. Well done,

  • 06.21.2005 12:20 PM PDT
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Well col i'm not sure if that info exist's.

  • 06.21.2005 12:41 PM PDT
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Great job so far Mr. Clark, I am definately addicted!

One question, why didn't the military try to get the injured Spartans out of the hospital? From previous chapters it sounds like there was significant funding behind the Spartan 2.0 project, I would imagine with the current achievements of Master Chief the military would place a high amount of priority getting those Spartans back into combat. Not moving them to a more secure location seems like a significant lack of judgement, is someone going to get into trouble in future chapters for that oversight? Just leaving them in the hospital with two marines for protection...

Again though, excellent writing, very creative and I love the twists that you have in every chapter!

  • 06.21.2005 12:55 PM PDT