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Subject: Halo Fanfic: The End of a War
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Lets try and limit it to friendly criticism/observations guys. It all boils down to whether I'm twisted enough to do certain things.

Killing off the three Spartan 2.0's was a big move, one that has sent pretty much everyone reeling, and I love it. Stories should have that kind of impact on people, even if they absolutely hate what happened and want to hunt me down and muder me (which is remarkably easy since pretty much everything but my appearence has been described in this thread, and there's photo's of myself secretly implanted into my blog so I wonder how long that will remain..).

Chapter 19 info below....

I'm thinking the best thing for me to do is to finish off this story with large chapters. Obviously last chapter was giant, weighing in at 18,000 words and over 30 pages, and I kind of want to continue that trend with the final four to six chapters of the story. I'm thinking I can aim for perhaps 15,000 word chapters for the final few chapters, then have the final chapter be an explosion, easily topping every other chapter out there. Then finally have a demure exit with a small but unique epilogue, which will more than likely be a change of perspective with this story.

Still no date on Chapter 19, and obviously since I've decided to pack as much as possible into chapters now, it will be a little while longer. But don't fret, there shouldn't be anymore month-long waits for chapters....that is, probably not until the conclusion of this story.

  • 06.26.2005 3:48 AM PDT
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But she had all of that passed on to her when her parents had her.

  • 06.26.2005 10:38 AM PDT
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Yes, but her parents had augmentations and she got them passed down in her genetics. You know, chromosomes? Wait, no, you probably don't. You don't learn all that until middle school.

  • 06.26.2005 2:11 PM PDT
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Posted by: Halo3plzzz xP
Yes, but her parents had augmentations and she got them passed down in her genetics. You know, chromosomes? Wait, no, you probably don't. You don't learn all that until middle school.



Ouch . . . hey, hey, Prowlaz . . . [whispers] guess what?
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BURN!

Back on subject, That is highly ambitious of you, and if you can complete them in less then a month each, while maintaining/improving upon the quality of the story, then you very well do deserve all the hype that has been brought to your name throughout these forums and Fanfiction.net. Have fun with the chapter and I look forward to returning to Honor without Mercy and the Attrition soon.

  • 06.26.2005 5:04 PM PDT
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Posted by: Serpensium_4
I'm not Clark, but here are my thoughts
the ark will not kill Flood in all fairness, though it will have effectively done so with the death of all life. as for the slipspace, i dont think there is enough upfront techno know-how to figure this out, since in reality faster-than-light travel doesn't exist, and probably never will, by todays standards of physics. the foremost physicists and Einsteins general relativity show that nothing can go faster than the speed of light, making all the concepts of the FTL drives merely clever innovation and speculation on the part of intuitive beings, with the Hyperspace of Star Wars, Slipspace of Halo, and molecular idontknowwhat of Ender Saga,since what Jane does to teleport them is almost impossible to describe.
so in closing from my odd and offtopic, not to mention broad suppostion, there is no way to know if Slipspace would really prevent there deaths, though it very well could in theory.


ya lost me at "the"...



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anyways, errr.... thats pretty scientific...and im not the most smart guy... so ya...

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  • 06.26.2005 6:39 PM PDT

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Well Teahinicly Slip space is anothe dimension, where the theory of relativity doesn't exsist. Yet still hold the basis of all other aspects of our dimensions physics.

  • 06.26.2005 9:05 PM PDT

actually, slipspace works only because of relativity. slipspace, hyperspace, wormholes, all the same thing, just different names. i can explain it, although i don't know how much sense it will make...

hyperspace, which is my favorite name for it, is a part of space where time is accelerated(not necessarily faster, can be accelerated slower as well) while space stays at it's normal constant. how this works, i can only describe as the idea of us living in an 11 dimensional universe, with the 4 basic dimensions and 7 that are small and curled up on each other. space and time can run at different rates within them, while for us, they run pretty constant. The idea is that because it is impossible to go faster than light, it may be possible to travel a longer route, but because space and time is warped, that path will actually take less time than a straight path. whether this is true or works, we have no idea, but the math works. slipspace works the same way.

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you speak truth, and it may very well happen.
also, did you know that it is impossible to perceive or imagine a fourth dimension world, because our minds do not have the capacity of thinking that way. its more like looking at it in a wrapped up way. like in Back to the Future, when doc says hes not thinking fourth dimensionally, which i am still pondering how to form a definition of that theory.

  • 06.27.2005 7:35 AM PDT

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I am EXTREMELY late commenting on this chapter, havent been online for ages, but
W O W ! ! ! ! That monster of a chapter was absolutely phenomenal!
So many twists and turns, and just........wow.

Just one little comment - You said that the floods blood was amber. Isn't it more of a sickly green?

Other than that, simply amazing. I cannot wait for next chapter.

  • 06.27.2005 8:58 AM PDT

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ahh. Thanks for explanation Sir.

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Ugh, my brain hurts from that explanation.

But its interesting.

  • 06.27.2005 12:22 PM PDT
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Posted by: ODST1125
interesting theorys twink. I want to see that bad ass army, sounds cool though.


Thanks, and thanks for that explanation omn how slipspace works sir brilliant.

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what does "wort" mean?
o yeah do forerunners look like camels like the prophets do too?

[Edited on 6/27/2005]

  • 06.27.2005 11:28 PM PDT
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Mr. Clark has yet to reveal the identity if the Forerunner, as for wort, well to many people know.

And you stole our company statement. That'll cost you two hundred dollars.

  • 06.28.2005 7:18 AM PDT
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Your story is awesome and all but theres one flaw that i found. On the last level in Halo 2 the white elitetells the arbiter to go in to get the scarab while i take back that cruiser or something like that, so they wouldnt need to go to high charity for a ship they already have one.

  • 06.28.2005 2:14 PM PDT

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yeah, but this is a fan fic not a real story. It be cool if it actually turned out to be a real novel by who ever is gona write the next story.

  • 06.28.2005 2:31 PM PDT

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Well If you took all of the Fanfic's on this site. each one would contain at least a little bit of info that aappears in the actual thing.

  • 06.29.2005 10:54 PM PDT

I share pies.

It's amazing how fast you're writing this stuff Mr_clark.

  • 06.30.2005 12:05 AM PDT
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He never ceases to amaze us.
With that last chapter he blew us away, who knows what he could write next.

  • 06.30.2005 7:50 AM PDT
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So... Clark when is jan going to wear a mark VI?
Since i finally won the battle about agumentation she should be fast enough to use it (mentally)

  • 06.30.2005 8:17 AM PDT
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But doesn't she only have natural, in the sense of no extreme augmentations, augmentation?
She would have to have an incredebly strong skeletal stucture and supiorior muscle density.

Or did i miss this in the arguement.

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ive only read the first 4 chapters so far, but im loving it! i definatly think that Halo 3 should use this storyline

  • 06.30.2005 2:54 PM PDT

He watches every Hodgetwin video they put up...on ALL their channels. He calls them the Hodge Triplets, and considers himself the 3rd triplet. He's started talking and acting like them now. Every other line out of his mouth "Thaaas some BULLLLLL**** maaayne" or "Gotta make dem gainzzzz". He calls his biceps "gains". When he eats post-workout, he talks to his biceps, "Don't worry gains, I'm feeding you. Daddys gonna feed you, gainz *kisses biceps*".

I don't think Jan has enough capability to use the MJOLNIR armor. The Spartan 1 augs were inferior to Spartan 2 augs, and her parents only passed these things on (therefore probably toning down the effects). [Gangstah]She ain't no regular ice, but she ain't ice like da MC eitha.[/Gangstah]

  • 06.30.2005 4:00 PM PDT