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Subject: Halo Fanfic: The End of a War
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Ok finally being awake at 2 a.m. has paid off. Good chapter Clark, and while it was incredibly boring, like you said the characters have been developed and opened up tons of options for the next chapter. I hope a monkey doesn't come in a destroy your computer and the next chapter will be posted relatively soon. Can't wait mate

  • 07.21.2006 10:54 PM PDT
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Ok finally being awake at 2 in the morning has paid off for me... (I'm in the East). Great chapter, thought it was boring the character development has opened up tons of options for the next chapter. I just hope some freak accident doesn't destroy your computer and the next chapter is posted relatively soon. Good job mate.

  • 07.21.2006 10:56 PM PDT
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Posted by: Evil Fluffy
Can you sum it real quick? I haven't read this in months so I have no idea what the first chapters were about.

No way, leave me alone, I'm tired.

Wait, what do you want a synopsis of? The Forerunner Chronicles? The whole story? The story of my modem?

[Edited on 7/21/2006]

  • 07.21.2006 11:11 PM PDT
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Wow dude that was really good, although i am rather anoyed by the fact that the 'next chapter' is no longer just around the corner; and i am facing the reality of maybe another 2 month wait.

[Edited on 7/21/2006]

  • 07.21.2006 11:26 PM PDT
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I will always place the mission first.
I will never accept defeat.
I will never quit.
I will never leave a fallen comrade.

great chapter Mr. Clark as always, can't wait for the next one

  • 07.21.2006 11:49 PM PDT

Gamertag and AIM : The An7i Flag

Proud Former Member of The Custom Gamers Clan.

Rember the days when people thought Halo 2 would come out on August 24th and DLC would come on Feb 9. Yeah those were the days.

NRS High School

Clark; there will always be somebody reading as long as your writing...... so just keep writting....

[Edited on 7/22/2006]

  • 07.22.2006 12:37 AM PDT
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Posted by: soulguard
Posted by: Mr_Clark
The Master Chief is a loser.


Either it be from frustration, or a joke, I would seem to agree with you Mr_Clark. The Master Chief, while the hero of the Haloverse, is a very one dimensional character and incredibly hard to write about. Nylund and Ditz found this equally torturous, and had to give deeper emotions to the side characters. Cortana, though an AI, is by far the more interesting of the two. Her emotions (if you can call it that) give her a sense of depth that the Master Chief lacks. He is a soldier, in the truest form.

Yet everyone still hopes that he will save the day. So don't let anything anyone says change the path you have taken. The Chief you've created, is changing into something that would create a very good lead character. His "split" personality makes him interesting and ... well... nuts. And that, my friends, makes for entertainment.

Can't wait to get more of your amazing storytelling talents.

~soulguard

PS: Please, refrain from double-triple-posting, and try to stay on topic. The forum mods are watching and we'd hate for Clarks thread to be locked.
And also, Mr_C, the links were greatly appreciated. Imagine my shock when I went to read your latest chap and saw them on FF.net. Thank you. I don't know what more to say.


Weird, somehow I missed your post soulguard. Usually I hone in on them like a tracking beam.

I did indeed not post that statement in jest, though I phrased it as such. I much prefer someone like Cyriacus, who will pop up in the next Forerunner Chronicle chapter, over someone like the Master Chief. Its like writing about a block of unfinished wood, you can only describe it in so many ways before you have to make the frank admission that it is, undoubtedly, just a block of wood.

That said, the fervid desire most Halo fanfic dwellers have for the Master Chief is so powerful, that not having him in every chapter is seen as blasphemy. One of the areas I draw pleasure from when reading your stories, is from the near complete removal of the Master Chief, and from the very strong cast you've sculpted for yourself. As for myself, I think I'm basically walking a very thin line in regards to my continued omission, and frank evasion of the Master Chief. It has been about four chapters now without any sign of the Spartan, soon to be five chapters. Any longer and I suspect I shall find the typical amount of death threats increasing exponentially.

I've heard it said that stories based in the science-fiction genre are typically geared towards the overarching story, and things like character development are often pushed aside to simply further the plot. I'm sure I've been guilty of that at specific portions of this story, but for the most part I'd like to think that the characters I've fleshed out appear to at least have grown somewhat, instead of being seen as just, Character A, Character B, etc....

That is where writers like yourself come in who, while creating elaborate backstories to nearly every element of the story, also focus on the characters, and the growth that they show to actually gather some fair amount of emotion from the reader. Obviously it alienates many readers, especially in this kind of environment, but overall, readers that simply scroll through a chapter and merely skim any paragraph longer than four sentences, are not the type of readers whose feedback you'd necessarily want to hear.

While the Chief may inevitably save the day, I should hope that more readers walk away with thoughts regarding the secondary characters inside the Halo universe. They will likely prove the more complex, and undoubtedly, the most entertaining.

Posted by: The An7i Flag
Clark; there will always be somebody reading as longt as your writing...... so just keep writting....

I shall do just that good sir.

[Edited on 7/22/2006]

  • 07.22.2006 1:38 AM PDT
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i like all the chapters,, even the chronicles of the forerunners,, keep it up clark, im here till the very last chapter

  • 07.22.2006 4:44 PM PDT

Phoenix is dead, long live Phoenix!
Is it?

First of I would like to say that when I returned after 2 weeks I didn't expect another chapter. You have proven my opinion false and I will not hamper you to when the next chapter will be again.

Secondly I will give a bit of advice. When reading the LOTR I skipped all the poems and songs. Why is this relevant? It is because though interesting though the poems and songs were, they were not essential to the story. I found for the first time I was skimming parts of the story and they were in the case of the italics, I saw them read the first line and skipped it only to find I needed to read them. My advice is to lower the amount of italics in large portions, a few lines are good but in large multiple paragraphs it forms a sub-story.

Thirdly Congratulations for when you turn twenty. Just think to next year.

Cannot wait for the next chapter. Well duh who can?

PS, Only Mr Clark can double post, if anyone else does it it becomes spamming. And we have had enough warnings from the mods about this.

  • 07.22.2006 8:24 PM PDT
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Fasul's a total emo though, all the guy does is think sad thoughts.

  • 07.23.2006 12:20 AM PDT
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i really... really... really hate akerson... if i could i would slowly VERY slowly dip him into a pook filled with accide. (chapter 15)

  • 07.23.2006 3:10 AM PDT
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Posted by: Mr_Clark
Posted by: newdeamonomic
ok i have just finished chapter 7. and while i agree you are a better writer then i, i still would like to read the next halo book before making my desicsion on which is better. good job though


I never said I was better than the Halo novels.


i think you are a great writer. i know u didnt say that but i was refering to what everyone else has been saying. all i was saying is that i can not agree to with them until i read the next halo book. i dont like to make judgements until i know all the facts.

  • 07.23.2006 3:13 AM PDT

"I hope nothing, I fear nothing, I am free"
"A person needs a little madness, or else they never dare cut the rope and be free." - Nikos Kazantzakis
"The ink of the scholar is more holy than the blood of martyrs" - Hasan al-Basri
Black Chapter, for all religious and political debate that doesn't fit in the Flood.

Fasul's emo, master chief is devoid of a personality and cyriacus is in a furious rage at the world for the death of his family...

it's all gravy =P

awesome chapter, i may have to re read the entire thing once you've finished the forerunner chronicles just to make sure i remember everything..

keep up the good work =]

- Primum

  • 07.23.2006 7:43 AM PDT

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I got his sarcasm...one person has to implement sarcasm and then you get a pile of terrorist chipmunks crashing your party, not fun at all..

Again a beautiful piece of literature. Good job clark and I hope the next chapter is easier on you.

  • 07.23.2006 9:32 AM PDT
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Wow sorry for the double post up at the top, when i tried to submit those the post didnt pop up so I just basically rewrote it. After the second one didnt show I said screw it and went to bed. My bad.

  • 07.23.2006 10:36 AM PDT
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I have been reading your story for awhile now and I love it
I realy the fanfiction's that don't force on the Master Chief it gets old
he always wins it good to see the Master Chief lose for once

  • 07.23.2006 11:58 AM PDT
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Posted by: Reaver112
Wow sorry for the double post up at the top, when i tried to submit those the post didnt pop up so I just basically rewrote it. After the second one didnt show I said screw it and went to bed. My bad.


No problem, most people don't know about the situation in thread's that grow too large. Basically, every page holds 25 posts, only, at some random point in time, the final 2 posts on a specific page got pushed onto the next subsequent page. This meant that those two posts did not show up, they couldn't, and they wouldn't show up until someone made the next post on the next page.

Essentially, since every page holds 25 posts, in this thread, if you go by the assumption that every 4 pages holds 100 posts, if you are making the 23-24, 48-49, 73-74, and 98-99th post, your messages will be hidden on the next page that cannot appear just yet. They're there, its just that they are waiting for the new page to be officially created.

If you actually want to see the post you made to reassure yourself, simply head up to the URL in the address bar, and physically change the page number. Just add one to whatever number it may be.

I have no idea why that happens, or if there's a way to fix it. Its an annoyance, but not too troublesome.

I probably should have addressed that sooner, but I'm a lazy, lazy person.

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  • 07.23.2006 12:47 PM PDT
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You described that terribly.

Couldn't you have just said, "If your post doesn't show up, check the next page by changing the URL."?

  • 07.24.2006 2:09 PM PDT
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HELL YAH!

new material.

i am so proud!!!

  • 07.24.2006 6:17 PM PDT
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Posted by: ODST1125
man i hate the subject English. But yo clark when is the Chapter 20 comming out?? any leeds or hints.


It shows.

  • 07.24.2006 6:29 PM PDT
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hey mr. clark glad to see you are still writing. keep it up.

  • 07.24.2006 7:29 PM PDT
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Awesome story...I've been reading this even before I joined the forums. But Mr_Clark, I'm saying this just for your approval (and just in case you might get a little ticked), I've been wanting to make a fan-fic but I always end up wanting to make one, like this. I've been wanting to make one continuing the story line where halo 2 left off (but in my thoughts). Yet, since you've already made one like this, I just want dto ask you if it was alright to make a fan-fic close to yours except...nothing like yours. If you do let me, I'll try my best to keep it off your plot-line.

  • 07.24.2006 9:12 PM PDT
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good as always clark, guess you decided not to stop at beginning of summer and thank god you didnt

well assuming you could get a liscence and then by some chance even finish this it could be published as an alternate story line, you would make soo much money

  • 07.24.2006 10:20 PM PDT
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i liked this chapter of clarks because it helped showed how the majal were dealing with the flood and how showed why the majal would actually want to integrate the flood into them like they did. This was a devlopement chapter but not so much for fasul but how the majal dealed with the flood. I really look for to this next chapter because of the reclaimer training and the halo installments and activations and how the half breeds broke out. At first i just wanted to skip the forerunner chronicles even though i had read through the rest of the story but now that i did im glad i did. And i completely agree 100% on that Cyriacus is a better character because he lets his emotions control him which makes him a round character which is a lot easier to write about than a dynamic character like the MC. who keeps his emotions closed away and just runs and guns. it's Clark's block of wood theory in the end of trying to describe it it still ends with it's just a block of wood. With the MC it all ends with he is just a cybernetic super soldier. So that is why clark makes all the other character's emotions stronger and shown more to keep the MC close as possible to the character that fans love. So it makes a good emotional action story that a fan can love as well as writers . That is why mr. clark said the Mc sucks. The MC rules as a character in a game to play. But sucks as a character to write about. I think this is why Clark took so long making his chapters with the MC.

  • 07.26.2006 10:50 AM PDT
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Posted by: Mr_Clark
Then we're back into the main story. I'm sure that'll please a whole lot of you, if there's anyone left that is by then.


Hey, I'm still around. Lack of posts does not = lack of readers. Admittedly, my participation in the forums has diminished to virtually nil. I still visit often to see the latest and greatest updates/chapters in your thread as well as Soulgaurds. Thanks again for another great chapter and I very much look forward to the next installment. - LE

  • 07.26.2006 11:04 AM PDT