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This is an excerpt from one of my stories.
If you want the rest tell me
MAKE YOUR OWN END

“Mommy, where is everyone?”
“I don’t know, I just don’t know.”
The rickety car slowly rolled down the deserted lane. The grass was a dark contrast with the grey sky. A man walked past the car, turning and staring through the window at the two inhabitants. His shot eyes and staggering walk frightened the little in the back seat. She curled her legs up and hid her face from the staring eyes of the man.
The rioting in America had gotten bad, ever since the people had learned about the government’s withholding of information. It was too late by the time that the lethal strain of the disease has spread over much of the land and wiped out whole towns and cities. Some called the disease the “Population Controller,” because the believed that every few decades something happened to help keep the population down, such as the Holocaust and the Bubonic Plague.
The two survivors drove on and finally reached their own home. The car reluctantly pulled up to the green garage door and stopped. The little waited in the backseat as the mother walked into the house. The little wondered when dinner was going to come. She thought about how silly that mommy was acting and that she wanted to go see the new movie down the block. She pondered how everyone had done such a great magic trick and disappeared from the town so quickly.
The mother was near the door and afraid to turn the handle to look in. What was she going to find? A short trip back from her mother’s house had turned into a bad experience, and she was afraid that her husband had suffered the same fate that others had.
She opened the door.
Back in the car little Amanda was playing with her nice dress that her grandma had given her. The dress was white and pretty, with nice little frims and a cute flowery design along the edges. As she was thinking about how nice her uncles and cousins were, she heard a loud crash in the house. She ignored it and kept fiddling with her dress. She remembered the time that she and her mom and her dad had gone out to the nearest theme park and ridden the merry go round together. Inside to house game a squeaky sound and then a sharp shriek. Amanda looked at the house, then noticed a bug on the side of the car. She smiled and took her finger to pick it up. There was a tumble and then the sound stopped. Everything was silent. Amanda was getting tired of waiting for her mom.
Suddenly, the door smacked open and the mom came running out with a strange look on her face.
“Mommy! Is daddy home! Can we-” The mother opened the door and planted the knife in her hand in the ’s arm. Amanda started to scream and cry. “Stop it mom! Stop!”
Amanda tried to shut the door but her mom puller her out of the car and threw her to the ground. The knife plunged into the body again, into the middle of Amanda’s hand. The screaming got louder.
Amanda screamed and plead for her mom to stop.


[Edited on 6/22/2004 4:15:46 PM]

  • 06.22.2004 4:03 PM PDT
Subject: this is pretty crappy and violent, check it out anyways

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Nevermind.

[Edited on 6/22/2004 4:11:28 PM]

  • 06.22.2004 4:04 PM PDT
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HAHAHAHAHA I LOVE IT... excuse me but i have to cut myself now.

  • 06.22.2004 4:07 PM PDT
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read the whole thing
the girl lives in the whole thiing

  • 06.22.2004 4:08 PM PDT

Five Tenets of Bungie.net Forum Life:
1. Trolls will always be well fed.
2. Blame-ability thy name is stosh.
3. Bungie has no control over retail prices.
4. Watch out for low-flying defense drones.
5. Seven is not optional, but rather, an inevitability.

Yeah I read it. It's not graphic. Very interesting story. Might make a good horror movie plot.

  • 06.22.2004 4:11 PM PDT
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HAHAHAHAHAHAHHAAHAHHA *cut* *cut* *cut*

  • 06.22.2004 4:14 PM PDT
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and then they lived happily ever after and died

  • 06.22.2004 4:32 PM PDT
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wtf?

  • 06.22.2004 5:49 PM PDT