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Subject: halo 3:recon- the prologue....written in first person!!

right, heres part 3, its going to have to be on a seperate post, as i can't exceed the 10000 character limit. anyway, here it is, i shall post a link to this on the first post aswell.

PART 3-suit up

The ODST’s didn’t react as I walked towards them. Reacting in a way I could tell that is. Behind their mirrored visors, they could be smiling at me, or snarling intensely. I warily edged my way closer.
“Mmm...e-e-xcuse me?” I paused, chastising myself soundly for stuttering once again, if I wanted to be an ODST, then I had to show courage, not sound like a dunce. I started again, adopting a deeper, more assertive voice.

“Ahem, excuse me, but is this where you sign up for the ODST marines?” I paused, unsure whether they would blank me or welcome me with open arms. In actual fact, they did a double take, as if they couldn’t believe their ears.

“Wait, did I hear you right, you actually want to join our corps?” the voice was that of a male’s, sort of rough, as if he had been in so many fire fights, his voice had lost finesse due to shouting orders to his squad.

“I think you must be mistaken kid”, he growled through his visor,

I bristled then

“I’m not a kid, and no, I didn’t make a mistake, I want to join.”

I stood there for what seemed like hours, whilst the ODST mulled my request over. I tried to fathom what he was thinking, but it was impossible to do so when his expressions were concealed behind that impassive head gear.

“You know kid, this ain't no walk in the park, if you wanna join us, then you’ve gotta have guts, and this ain’t for the weak hearted. However, if you’re sure about this, then, you can join, we’re getting a little short of recruits anyway”

Like the ODST, I also tried to conceal my feelings then, if he knew how scared I was, I might be turned down. Instead of attempting speech, which I knew would be futile, I gave a stiff, short, nod.
“alright then”

He now spoke with a bit less hostility

“Just sign these papers and we’re away” he passed me a pen, nothing fancy, just an old style ink pen. I grabbed it, then, with a shaking hand, slowly brought it down on the paper, and signed away my life to these strangers, these ODST's.

As I finished; the ODST I assumed to be the leader scooped up to documents, and placed them inside a folder. He then growled some orders to another marine, who quickly motioned for me to follow him. As we were walking, I grabbed the opportunity to learn more about the unit I had just joined.

“So”, I began, “what was the name of that guy back there?” the ODST thought for a second, then answered.

“He’s the leader of our lovely little family here, we call him Blade.”

“Blade?” I asked, confused.

“Yes Blade,” the marine continued,

“We don’t use our real names here, we have a codename s, mines Switch, pleased to meet you.” He spoke in the manner of a well educated person, and to me, seemed as if he didn’t really fit into this group of rough nuts.

“Why do they call you Switch?” I queried.

“Why that’s because I’m the computer specialist of the team, you want to get into somewhere, but don’t know the code, then I’m your man.” So, there was more to this troop than just fire first, ask questions later, I wondered what my name would be.

“Where are we going?” I asked Switch.

We’re going to get you some weapons kid, but I’m afraid you’re going to have to wait until we dock at Reach before you can get some armour. We don’t carry spares see.” As he said this, it finally sunk in. I was an ODST marine, I was going to get a set of armour, and I was going to get revenge.

As we reached the armoury, switch rummaged through some racks of weapons, before handing me a gun with a long barrel on the end.

“This is an ODST battle rifle kid, it’s been modified to accommodate for our....talents, it’s got a silencer, laser scope, and other such attachments that should help you when trying to be stealthy, as is often our wont.”

He passed it to me, and over the next few hours, instructed me on the various ways to fire it, reload it, and other such techniques that would be valuable in a fire fight. Also, you'll be needing this”

He passed over a small silver object, with a liquid crystal screen on the front.

“This is an ODST standard PDA, if you ever get lost, and need to find any of us again, this PDA will tell you the location of the nearest other transmitting unit”.

As he was about to turn it on however, suddenly, the comm. Box broke over switch’s calm voice.
“Attention! All able combat personnel report to the bridge immediately! They’ve found us, god damn it they’ve found us...”

The comm. Box went dead. Switch drew out his own battle rifle.

“Well kid, looks like its test time! Now let’s go kick some alien ass......”

[Edited on 01.26.2009 12:21 AM PST]

  • 11.03.2008 6:01 AM PDT

Bungie Pentathlon - who actually cares ?

Posted by: MikeC64535
Oh my, oh my. Is it a bird? Is it a plane? NO it's a GARGANTUAN WALL OF TEXT. Which possible birds and planes crashed into.


Seriously what are the point of comments like this? Nobody is going to go "ooh have a pt on the back for saying someone has written more words on one page than you can manage in a month"

If you do not have something positive to say then button it.

OP - great read keep up the good work and don't let the forum snipers bother you

  • 11.03.2008 6:05 AM PDT

thanks

  • 11.03.2008 6:06 AM PDT

so, if you've read it i'd really appreciate it if you give back feedback, you know, so i can improve the story for part 4, or revise any of the other parts

  • 11.03.2008 6:17 AM PDT

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Still using a pump-action shotgun over 500 years in the future I see.

omg not realistic stop game production plz

Posted by: RedHound5
Uh, you don't even know what the story is going to be, how the hell could you even approach writing a prologue?


Hey man, that's an awesome prologu you've written. Don't listen to these wasters who have seldom imagination......I'm good at writing too, and this is damned good! 5/5 definately!

  • 11.03.2008 6:20 AM PDT

xX 1€€7 Xx

i like it so far, your a good writer

  • 11.03.2008 6:25 AM PDT

thanks for the feedback, at the momment, im just signing up to fanfiction.com, so i can post it there so you won't have to trawl through pages of commnets to get to the next part, unless you want to see the comments of course(i ceartainly do)

  • 11.03.2008 6:26 AM PDT

I Am "THE" FatJollyGuy

this is really good stuff, but i tell you this focus or a separate story line, like another ODST that might have been in the same sqaud with " the hero from H3 RECON game". that way if your story sways a little from the game i won't matter. you should really keep writing it really good stuff

i'll definatly sticky this thread and come back later to see if you've wrote any more.

"good luck... your going to need it."

[Edited on 11.03.2008 6:29 AM PST]

  • 11.03.2008 6:27 AM PDT

I read it all and I have to say that I'm really impressed with this work. Althought, paragraphs would be nice, this is really worth the time to read. Good job!

  • 11.03.2008 6:42 AM PDT

thanks, its good to know that people enjoy this

  • 11.03.2008 6:54 AM PDT

does anyone want to make plot suggestions for part 4? i'll take them into consideration if you do.

  • 11.03.2008 8:24 AM PDT

By the power of truth, I, while living, have conquered the universe.

I am writing a Halo story myself, I called it Halo: Helljumpers if any of you wanna hear a bit of it PM me.
Good opening, some small eroors but keep it up.

  • 11.03.2008 8:27 AM PDT

Gears of war 3 looks amazing i can't wait for halo 4 master chief is a pretty cool guy he kills aliens and doesn't afraid of anything

to much writing can't be boferd to read it but if you like writing go for it

  • 11.03.2008 8:36 AM PDT
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I normally don't read these stories, but this one's different... I like it. Keep up the good work.

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  • 11.03.2008 8:38 AM PDT

Posted by: the arbiter 989
to much writing can't be boferd to read it but if you like writing go for it


you can always read it in the different parts

  • 11.03.2008 8:40 AM PDT
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Nice work with the story, excellent imagination and creativity. Keep up the good work and aim for the goal!!

  • 11.03.2008 8:46 AM PDT

and its the 30th century there all smart

um...actually it's the 26th century

[Edited on 11.03.2008 8:51 AM PST]

  • 11.03.2008 8:50 AM PDT
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Good day. I'm an active and fairly enthusiastic member of the Bungie fan-base and pride myself on many qualities. If you want to send me a PM, go right ahead. No I won't spam your inbox with group invites, I will respond in the best way possible. Thank you, and as I had opened, I'll close - good day.


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niceee, i like part 4. just some suggestions though - some of your words are a bit repetitive, like "such" and "kid" towards the end (didnt read it a second time, so correct me if im wrong) and it seems to me that he's getting sent into battle REALLY quickly, but hey, it's only a short, short story, so i guess thats ok. o, and as soon as you said "attention! all able combat personnel..." i immediately thought of the pit, when the voice sometimes breaks out over the speakers: was that your inspiration?

  • 11.03.2008 7:24 PM PDT

Posted by: PainedHope13
niceee, i like part 4. just some suggestions though - some of your words are a bit repetitive, like "such" and "kid" towards the end (didnt read it a second time, so correct me if im wrong) and it seems to me that he's getting sent into battle REALLY quickly, but hey, it's only a short, short story, so i guess thats ok. o, and as soon as you said "attention! all able combat personnel..." i immediately thought of the pit, when the voice sometimes breaks out over the speakers: was that your inspiration?


actually, no, it was from halo 1 when the covenant ship is about to engage the pillar of autaum:p

  • 11.04.2008 1:59 PM PDT

right, here is part 4, i hope you enjoy it, and remember, all feedback is especially welcome.

PART 4- a plan.....

As me and Switch were heading towards the bridge, tremors of ascending violence cascaded all around us, throwing crates full of unused weapons all over the place. Every so often, we’d see a flash of blue light, and an explosion would tear into the hallway, sometimes just metres before us.

“Holy crap” Switch shouted, as a particularly large explosion almost sent a piece of the wall straight into us.

“The bridge is just around this corner kid, but we’d better run if we don’t want be jettisoned into space with the rest of the corpses”
Jettisoned into space? I quickly doubled the speed at which I was running. As we reached the bridge, the captain was already speaking to the already assembled squad. A glowing blue apparition was residing in the air beside him.

“What’s that?” I asked switch in a quiet undertone.

“An A.I” Switch replied hurriedly, “stands for artificial intelligence, they help keep the ships system in check, some of them are even better at hacking than me”. He spoke this last part bitterly, as if he found the idea of a machine knowing more than him unnatural. The
Captain spotted us, and beckoned us over.

“Ah, finally, the last of the ODST's arrives”. He then spotted me, “Oh, and who’s this?”

“New recruit to the team sir!” Switch replied in turn

“Ah, good good, we’ll need all the help we can get.”

He turned to the rest of the soldiers.

“Now, right at this very moment we have an alien cruiser batting away at our modest ship with god knows what weapon. We don’t know how they tracked us, right up until now it’s been thought impossible to follow another ship through slip space, unless you know the exact co-ordinates, and even that can go wrong.”

He paused, drawing breath.

“What we do know however, is that if we don’t warn the rest of the UNSC about this threat, then their doomed. So, I want every soldier performing at their best today, no hanging back! The fate of humanity rests on our shoulders.....now man the borders, and let’s give these alien scum a fight they’ll never forget...Move out!”

In perfect harmony, the UNSC soldiers moved out as one, reloading their ammo clips as they went. Just as our little squad turned to follow, the Captain stopped us, beckoning us over.

“I won’t lie to you lads, even if our soldiers kill a hundred enemies each today, that’s still not going to stop them from ripping us to shreds with plasma. This is where you come in.”

I didn’t like the way he said that, it made my stomach curl.

“I need you to take a long sword stealth fighter, and land on the alien ship. Once inside, sneak around to a weak spot and activate this small yet powerful mini nuke.”

He passed Blade a lead lined sack, one with a nuclear symbol on the outside.

“Conceal it to stop it from being detected, then get the hell out of there; once away from the cruiser, Olivia here” He motioned to the A.I on his right “Will detonate the nuke, hopefully destroying the ship, or at least damaging it long enough for us to make a tactical retreat. Now are you up for this?”

I certainly wasn’t. I’d only just signed up a few hours ago, but I wasn’t going to complain. Besides, this would kill scores of those alien scum, a prospect I looked forward to.

Blade had no such reservations “Sir yes Sir!” he shouted in his rough voice.

“Good, I knew I could count on you” the captain replied, then his eyes rested on me.

“If you want son, you can stay here, if you feel it’s too much for you”

his voice contained a quizzical tone, and I realized he was testing my courage.

“No sir, if it’s OK with you sir, I’ll go with my unit” I replied in an unwavering voice.

The captain looked at me with a newly found admiration.

“That’s good to know son”.

He turned to address the rest of the group.

“This will be a tough mission, but I’m sure you can pull it off, now, I’m assigning Olivia here to your ships on-board computer, she’ll help you stay undetected by any alien forces, and attempt to gain some information about these creatures from the cruisers terminal. I’m sure she’ll prove to be a valuable asset. Now, hurry to the docking bay, and may god speed you on your way.”

“Sir yes sir!”, the group replied in unison, and we surged down to the docking bay, heading to what was in all reality a suicide mission, yet one I intended to pull through..........


[Edited on 01.26.2009 12:22 AM PST]

  • 11.04.2008 2:01 PM PDT

I died once...I respawned 5 seconds later, seeking revenge!!!

very nice
its well written

  • 11.04.2008 2:09 PM PDT

thanks, does anyone want to suggest a codename for the character. as someone previously mentioned, i seem to be using to words 'son' and 'kid' a little too much

  • 11.04.2008 2:11 PM PDT

My advice is to not make it a prologue, but a whole new story involving your own ODST trooper. Not bad at all.

  • 11.04.2008 2:18 PM PDT