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Subject: halo 3:recon- the prologue....written in first person!!

I.SEE.YOU.RECLAIMER.

You should give the nickname, the Rook, since in Halo 3: Recon, thats the ODST's nickname. That is, of course, if your still writing about that ODST, or a new one.

  • 11.25.2008 9:41 AM PDT

oh ye.......mabye i should start contemplating writing about a different ODST....

  • 11.25.2008 10:01 AM PDT

I.SEE.YOU.RECLAIMER.

you could always rewrite part of the story later, like make him a marine, who gets found by some ODST's, and goes around with them, is seen as a godd soldier, and is accepted to be an ODSt. Either way, its a really good story.

I forget to hit the quote button, but I was quoting what you said about the update, and how me an some other guy corrected you.

[Edited on 11.25.2008 10:28 AM PST]

  • 11.25.2008 10:26 AM PDT

Sigh, now i have to change the name, oh well.

  • 11.25.2008 2:05 PM PDT

Posted by: Tri Force95
you could always rewrite part of the story later, like make him a marine, who gets found by some ODST's, and goes around with them, is seen as a godd soldier, and is accepted to be an ODSt. Either way, its a really good story.

I forget to hit the quote button, but I was quoting what you said about the update, and how me an some other guy corrected you.


ok, well, i'm just going to write, then edit it to make it fit in with the books/updates

  • 11.26.2008 8:00 AM PDT

it keeps getting better and better man... really liked this newest installment...will look forward to tomorrows...keep up the good work

  • 11.26.2008 12:08 PM PDT

Here is part 7 of the story, as always, if you read it, please please please remember to give feedback, positve, advice, or any questions are always welcome. if you have a negattive comment, try to convert it into advice. eg- your paragraph structure sucks, turns into- Try to improve the structure of your paragraphs. see what i mean?
PART 7- Tick tock

The small aliens charged round the corner, pistols raised, making incomprehensible squeaks and grunts as they saw us.

And that wasn't all, as we cowered in fear, two immense, 12 feet tall creatures charged through the group of smaller beings, trampling a few on their way. They looked like they had been cut in a mincer, then someone had reassembled the mince and stuck armour on them.
In their left hands, or whatever they had, they were carrying huge shields made of a strange metallic element, an element I doubted we could shoot through with even a rocket.

Attached to the other limb was a gun as big as us, glowing dangerously.

Even as we dived for cover, a huge streak of green flew past us, burning a hole in the ship as easily as a hot knife through butter.

“Olivia, ready the ship for evacuee now!” screamed Blade into his communicator.

“Affirmative”, came back the as always cool voice of Olivia's.

We were running as fast as we can, the huge, lumbering pair of monsters in pursuit, occasionally firing out the green bolt. One came metres within my face, and even through the helmet, I could feel the searing pain of burning flesh.

We took a right turn down a corridor, and spotted a service shaft, about a metre tall. We crawled in relieved, no way could the creatures fit in there! We were wrong. To our horror, the aliens contorted themselves, so much so, that it would kill a normal human, and edged their way into the maintenance shaft.

Luckily, they couldn't use their guns in such a tight space, but still, one whack from one of those shields, and we were done for.

Det's voice sounded unexpectedly over the communication link

“Only 5 minutes left, quick, we have to get back to the ship, if we're even 100m within this craft when it goes boom, we won't need to worry about being squashed.”

“Olivia, how far away are we from the docking bay?” queried Blade

“About 120m, take the next left and go forward, hurry, I can't keep the cloaking systems up for much longer.....”

We ran a lot faster then.

The creatures were gaining on us, and soon, I knew it was inevitable that they would be level with us.

Suddenly, Det stopped and faced the creatures, drawing a hand size object out from his explosives satchel.

“Det, what are you doing, keep moving!” Blade shouted in disbelief.

“No, they'll catch up with all of us in a minute, better one of us than all of us, I'll set up this small bomb, and take these alien bastards to hell with me....now go, run!”

I felt tears glisten my eyes, he was willing to give his life to save us, when he could have easily scurried away like the rest of us.

“Det...I-”Blade began

“Just go! Now!”

Slowly, we turned our backs on the bravest man I had ever known, as we exited the shaft into the docking bay, their was a muffled explosion behind us, and the man known as Det ceased to be no more.

Switch must have seen I was upset, because he put his hand on my shoulder.

“He's gone on to a better place lad, and it's what he would have wanted, to go out with a bang....”

I nodded, and we walked towards the invisible ship, the area was clear, it seemed all the aliens were elsewhere. It felt strange to be walking on stairs you couldn't see, as I climbed up the stairs, and I felt for a moment like I was going to fall, then regained my balance, and entered the ships hatch.

“Olivia, get us out of here” Blade said, at the same time glancing at the countdown timer, which now read at 45 seconds.

“Affirmative” she said, even as we felt the temporary docking clamps disengage from the hangar, and we sped out into space, back towards the UNSC ship.

And not a moment too soon, because as we just reached our docking bay, their was a huge green explosion behind us, and the whole alien ship exploded into a million fragments, as if it were never their.

Suddenly, the dog-fighting around us ceased, as the smaller alien ships, no longer receiving power from the main cruiser, dropped down into space without a whisper.

We'd saved everyone, but at the cost of a friend......



[Edited on 01.26.2009 12:28 AM PST]

  • 11.26.2008 2:59 PM PDT

DIUTYAUSDPOI

340083 Coagulated Derelict

"Zombies.Gentlemen at times like these our capacity to retaliate must be and has to be massive,to deter all forms of aggression."-JFK

Poor det.He got shot down by plasma.

  • 11.27.2008 10:09 AM PDT

Posted by: Mikey Starr 340
Poor det.He got shot down by plasma.


actually, he got killed in his own explosion

  • 11.27.2008 10:38 AM PDT

DIUTYAUSDPOI

340083 Coagulated Derelict

"Zombies.Gentlemen at times like these our capacity to retaliate must be and has to be massive,to deter all forms of aggression."-JFK

Posted by: Wolverfrog
Posted by: Mikey Starr 340
Poor det.He got shot down by plasma.


actually, he got killed in his own explosion


Saw what?And he took em all with him!!!!!

Hopefully...

Rename the title to halo 3 odst now that what its called.

  • 11.27.2008 11:56 AM PDT

Posted by: Mikey Starr 340
Posted by: Wolverfrog
Posted by: Mikey Starr 340
Poor det.He got shot down by plasma.


actually, he got killed in his own explosion


Saw what?And he took em all with him!!!!!

Hopefully...

Rename the title to halo 3 odst now that what its called.


em... i renamed it like, 2 hours after the name change.....

  • 11.27.2008 3:42 PM PDT
Subject: Halo 3:Recon- the prologue....written in first person!! - part 5 ou...

-eddy!
huh! What? It was the other guy, honest! ;)
'it was a sniper!' looks down at my sniper
uhh yeah? hes got one too. XD

if i was you in part 5 id change the pelicans to longswqords and the ship that the ODSTs are taking to a Black Cat it fits better with the halo univers seeing as pelicans are more of trooptransports and lonswords are the starfighters
if you need any halo history PM me id be glad to help
good job so far keep it up

[Edited on 11.30.2008 3:13 AM PST]

  • 11.29.2008 11:40 AM PDT

as always, good job wolverfrog. looking forward to the next part. keep us updated on when its coming ;). how many parts do you plan on writing?

  • 11.29.2008 3:57 PM PDT

Posted by: VADER117
as always, good job wolverfrog. looking forward to the next part. keep us updated on when its coming ;). how many parts do you plan on writing?


to be honest i have no idea, it's only just started really. hopefully, it's going to be as long as your standard halo book.most probably, however, it'll be a bit less

  • 11.29.2008 5:39 PM PDT
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Hi. My name is Andrew. I'm Asian. Still trying to figure out who I am. Yup. That's it.

That new gameinformer with halo3 recon gave a s hitload of information regarding the start of recon. halopedia could help also.

The story... 5/5, not for originality, well kinda since you're making this up not from the bungie version of the game BUT: a great story nonetheless.

I'd say that it could use spaces between dialogue and paragraphs, but that's just me style of writing.

But great job anyways. *saves thread*

  • 11.29.2008 7:08 PM PDT

right, tommorow, i've resolved i'm gonna do a major edit, MAJOR, to make the story correlate with the recent updates. also, sorry about the lack of game informer updates, i'm british and it aint for sale here. britains unbiased games reviewer is called edge or something, and it is rubbish

  • 11.29.2008 7:28 PM PDT

DIUTYAUSDPOI

340083 Coagulated Derelict

"Zombies.Gentlemen at times like these our capacity to retaliate must be and has to be massive,to deter all forms of aggression."-JFK

Ok...EDIT!!

  • 11.30.2008 7:51 AM PDT
Subject: halo 3:recon- the prologue....written in first person!!

Member since January 26, 2008 and still kicking more ass in Crysis than yesterday.

Wait... what?

Posted by: Ciaran
Cheating is ok.

Posted by: Omelet Pants
Can you add a love scene with Miranda Keyes? Make sure to talk about her boobies and such.


I thought you were "Racialist".

  • 12.01.2008 2:34 PM PDT

It's not bad Wolverfrog, just needs a bit of a tidy up with the sentences.
Some people struggle with the first person perspective, but you seem to be good at it. So just keep writing, the more you write the better you become.

Just try to describe the situation a little more, and start a new line for a new unrelated sentence. Beside that all is well.

Keep it up.

  • 12.02.2008 7:29 AM PDT
Subject: Halo 3:ODST- the prologue....written in first person!! - part 7 out...

thanks for the feedback max!

[Edited on 12.03.2008 5:10 PM PST]

  • 12.03.2008 4:57 PM PDT

Ok, i have decided, after much arduous deliberation and thought, to write the story from the perspective of another ODST, one in the same squad as the rookie. this will make it so that i wont have to update it everytime bungie does something, and will make it a lot easier. however, it will still lead up to the events of new Mombassa, so don't worry. This just makes it easier.

  • 12.03.2008 5:09 PM PDT

cool dude, looking forward to it....keep us posted!

  • 12.03.2008 5:27 PM PDT

well, i'm writing part 8 now, but, i'll finish tommorow because it's getting late

  • 12.03.2008 5:37 PM PDT

Ok, Part 8 is now out, enjoy, and, as always, please leave feedback.

PART 8- Refuge

“Captain! We are now approaching Reach sir!”

“Thank the Lord....., bring us in Lieutenant!”

After destroying the Alien ship, we'd been greeted as heroes, and had been given medals for our valour.

A few days later, after repairs had been made to the ship, we jumped back into Slip-space and we were now approaching the planet Reach.

I let out a sigh, we truly were safe here, how could anything get through that?

On the planet, MAC guns as big as 3 frigates resided, guarding Reach like watchmen, ever vigilant, ever ready. A whole fleet of ships patrolled the space above the city, ready to gun down anything without an authorisation code.

Luckily we had one.

Our crudely repaired ship slowly descended from orbit down to the surface, and we set down in the biggest docking bay I had ever seen.
Ships of varying sizes covered the immense building, from frigates to destroyers. Engineers scurried about in hundreds, pausing at different ships and working on them.

Switch came up unheard behind me.

“You see lad, I told you we'd make it!”

“No you never, you kept going on about how we were going to be lost in the 'deep, dark crevasse of space' forever!”

Switch grinned behind his helmet. You could tell by the way the kevlar folds around the neck tightened and slanted upwards as he did it.

“Ah well, the important thing is, we're here”

Well, he wasn't wrong about that, as we descended the iron steps of our ship, and placed our feet on the firm ground, I took in a deep breath.

It felt good to be back on a solid surface, even if I was still a bit unsteady, as I had yet to get my 'Land legs' back.

Another ODST in our squad descended from the ship, while travelling to Reach, I managed to find out his name, Rookie. He was an all-rounder, and only a little bit older than me, at 18, although, officially, according to the UNSC records, we were the same age. Everyone in my squad knew I wasn't 18, but they didn't give a damn.

Rookie wasn't a specialist in any skill, capable at everything. It made me feel slightly better to find out someone had as worse a name as mine.

Blade then walked down the steps.

“Alright men......and Farm-Boy, we managed to make it here, but don't get to comfortable, we could be called out again at any moment.”

I was hoping that moment wouldn't come any time soon, I still had burns from the Alien ship.

Just then, a group of what seemed like government officials walked towards the Captain; I tried to hear what was said, but they were too far away.

Slow minutes crawled by, when the Captain's voice suddenly broke out across the Docking station, his voice amplified tenfold by a small megaphone clipped to his collar.

“OK, all civilians, follow the men in the red jackets, they'll show you to your temporary quarters.”

He motioned to a group on his right.

“All officials and combat personnel, follow me for briefing.”

Suddenly, there was a huge noise as hundreds of people walked simultaneously across the Station, following their assigned leaders. I just stuck with my squad, anxious for Intel.

We followed the Captain into a immense building, easily 30 stories high, and as wide as the length of 5 football fields.

A hundred or so people from the ship, me included, poured into a room with a massive holographic screen at the far end of it. We all took our seats.

The Captain walked to the front with a Reach official.

The official spoke to the crowd.

“Hello, and may I welcome you to Reach, I hope you'll find your stay as pleasant as possible.”
his voice then turned sombre

“However, we are all aware of the horrors you have all endured, and this, I'm afraid, is what we are going to talk about.”

He then went on about the things we already knew, the attack on Harvest, evacuation, the blowing up of the alien ship, I struggled not to fall asleep.

“-Yet thanks to the ODST squad that managed to infiltrate the alien ship, we have managed to discover information about the aliens.”

I perked up, and leaned forward on the edge of my seat/

“Not only have we found out how to decipher some of their basic coding, and battle plans, but we have also found out the name of these attackers.”

I held my breath.

“The Covenant”

[Edited on 01.26.2009 12:30 AM PST]

  • 12.08.2008 2:37 PM PDT

very nice...better than the last...leaves us in suspense. you're really getting the hang of this writing stuff ;P

  • 12.08.2008 6:50 PM PDT