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Subject: Halo 3 Epilogue Story (Part Four) see page 7

wow nice writing. thread saved. looking forward to part 5.

  • 05.11.2008 5:20 AM PDT
Subject: Halo 3 Epilogue Story (Introduction and Part One)

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Posted by: spyderman93
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Very nice and well written

*Saves Thread*

  • 05.11.2008 5:26 AM PDT
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Okay, a few issues you need to look into.

Cortana for one we have the issue of rampancy the three-stage process that is a result of the uncontrolled expansion of an Ai. On top of that Smart AI are only given 7 years to live.

314 is really out of the question.

another issue is with the equipment, wall John would not have aged, everything else would have, things like rust, one thing you have to keep in mind is that, there had to be some sort of power or life support, in all honesty when john stepped in that pod it was to die. The ship was cut in half, so its very unlikely that the ship had much power in it. So john had about 3-4 hours of air left, granted the the pod slows down everything, so 3-4 hours could last months or even a few years, but, 314 is pushing it.

Anyways back to what I was saying, if there was life support on the ship and John was not a victim to this, than everything would have decomposed to a point, meaning it would have rusted due to oxidization, plus the fuel in the pelicans would have long evaporated, that is if there was life support, if not you run to the problem of John dying because he would have only had about 3-4 hours of air, even with his body slowed down to like 4 heart beats a min, the o2 he would have had I dont link would last 314 years, granted I'm not an expert on such things but, common since tells me this.

you have not gotten very far yet and Im sure you will have a chance to tell us this , but I just wanted to let you know.

  • 05.11.2008 5:40 AM PDT

I don't want to sound rude, but try reading the story. The edit covered all of this and despite the ship being in half there was still power. The air is produced through a series of scrubbers both in the ship and within John's suit.
Stasis means stasis, almost no activity.

  • 05.11.2008 12:37 PM PDT

great story mate

  • 05.13.2008 5:22 AM PDT

Thanks EVO

  • 05.13.2008 8:38 AM PDT
Subject: Halo 3 Epilogue Story (Part Four) see page 7

Quick as a razor, sharp as a bullet.

Whether anyone apart from me will take this seriously as a theory, or whether it will be seen as the fantastic piece of fiction it is, I hope it is the latter, because, in spite of not agreeing with the theory, I think you have a sublime talent for writing and would love to see more, especially now that you say there's an "end".

  • 05.13.2008 8:53 AM PDT
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can i has part 5 plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz



but seriously .... great story

  • 05.13.2008 8:59 AM PDT

It's coming...

  • 05.14.2008 8:07 AM PDT

I don't join any group that spams me in PM so don't try it.
SPAM applies to anything that is copy and pasted, it is very obvious when you do so don't say you wrote it. Also if you argue with me on the nature of things contained in this signature, you will be blocked and never removed. If you send to me in XBox live you will be Avoided, Blocked, and a complaint will be filed for harassment.

I might seem like a hypocrite but Cortana can only live 9 years. you said there were 314 Years passed. Thats not possible.

Oh another thing. Master Chief's Air Scrubbers can't recycle air for 314 years. Even in Cryogenic Sleep. His Fusion Power core wouldn't work right either. It is physically Impossible for either of these things to happen. On the molecular level Air can't be recycled without Controlled fission. This Fission would (If it was even possible) Release Nuclear Waste which would have to be ejected. The Fusion core would eventually run out of Fuel. Fusion needs Fuel like everything else.

So in truth this entire story really needs a rewrite. Sorry!

I kind of like the 50 Page Posted on my clan's website 10/30/07 alot more. It is similar but Cortana goes under rampancy in the middle of it and It was the most awesome thing I've ever read. God the Cortana part was beautiful cause chief had to kill her. :'( If it was a Cinematic in a game it Seriously would have made you cry.

[Edited on 05.15.2008 11:41 AM PDT]

  • 05.15.2008 8:18 AM PDT

Without me, it's just "Aweso".

You don't know that Cortana can only live 9 years. although thats how long she was originally supposed to last, she might have gained an even longer lifespan after the events of Halo 1. Just look at the Forerunner AIs like Guilty Spark, he's over 100,000 years old and is still working fine. As for the air issue, I read that scientists predicted that once perfect cryostasis was attained, all bodily funcions would shut down until stasis ended. That would mean that if Cryotechnology had advanced far enough by the time of the events during Halo, then Master Chief would not need any air at all.

PS- Stop bragging about your clan, you could've just said that the two stories are similar, but instead, you talked about how great your clan's story was. This is not the place to advertise my friend.

  • 05.15.2008 8:01 PM PDT

How can you have a fusion core creating fission?

  • 05.16.2008 7:28 AM PDT
Subject: Halo 3 Epilogue Story (Part Four) see page 7

Chicken go cluck cluck cow go moo

this is one of the few things i can stand reading

  • 05.17.2008 12:30 PM PDT
Subject: Halo 3 Epilogue Story (Introduction and Part One)
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brilliant 11/10

  • 05.17.2008 1:06 PM PDT
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PART 5 RIGHT NOW!!!

  • 05.17.2008 6:49 PM PDT

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/MISSION_CONTROL>> BASE ALAMO
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Really annoying because i cant wait for rest of the parts.

Best non bungie writing team halo story. You should work to bungie as writer. Really good keep it up.

  • 05.18.2008 10:46 AM PDT

Guns don't kill people, I do...

awesome!!!

  • 05.19.2008 2:04 PM PDT

NO GROUP INVITES

Jesus took 3 days to respawn, talk about lag.

7 BILLION BY 7

Awesome job man.

Best Halo fanfic ever.

  • 05.19.2008 2:53 PM PDT

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dexomega is right cortana can live only nine years so you might want to change that

  • 05.19.2008 3:02 PM PDT
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Posted by: HighCoin
dexomega is right cortana can live only nine years so you might want to change that



well you know actually, for those who have read the books i says that cortana isn't like any other AI in any comparable way, so there is endless possibilities when it comes to cortana

  • 05.20.2008 10:05 AM PDT

Die covenent DIE!!!

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Posted by: HighCoin
dexomega is right cortana can live only nine years so you might want to change that



well you know actually, for those who have read the books i says that cortana isn't like any other AI in any comparable way, so there is endless possibilities when it comes to cortana


Yeah, when she was on high charity she canged a lot!

  • 05.20.2008 1:03 PM PDT

Part 5 might be a little delayed as I'm moving house at the moment, but it will be posted when i get the chance

  • 05.20.2008 11:54 PM PDT