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Subject: Halo: Heretic or Hero?----------------- An elite story

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I like it, but the suspense is killing me *calls an ambulance*.

  • 07.29.2008 12:21 PM PDT
Subject: Halo: Heretic or Hero?-----------------

Halo: Heretic or Hero---An Elite's Story
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Chapter 2


Frontline


The constant bickering going on in the Phantom was distracting, Elites expressing their personal feelings about Truth's broadcast. Of course, none of them had anything kind to say.

"Full responsibility? Isn't it the Honor Guards' duty to protect the Prophets? Why should we be the ones taking the blame? Our infantry was doing all we could to stop the Demon!" shouted the Ultra that had given me that strange look.

"Calm, Kovalee. All we can do now is show the Hierarchs that we are their greatest warriors," replied a SpecOps Elite. I noticed he said this very carefully, as if he was afraid to upset him.

Then, the one called Kovalee, shook his heads, and continued talking.

"Cowards, the Honor Guards were. If they're job was to protect the Hierarchs at all costs, why is Regret dead? Obviously they are not so honorable."

The instant I heard cowards and Honor Guards linked together, I was steaming, annoyed that this soldier would dare insult the Honor Guard of the Covenant in such a manner. What did he know?

Calm down, I thought to myself, taking a deep breath. Fighting would only get me into more trouble. I sat against the wall, drowning out all other voices, and waited.
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Hours later we landed in the snowy peeks of Delta Halo. It was an amazing sight, being so high up in the mountains, looking back at the lake.

Looking back at where the temple once stood. Four day old memories were brought back.

"My brothers, recently we have been unfairly blamed for Regret's death. But now, we shall regain our honor, and continue our quest to salvation!" shouted the SpecOps officer that had brought me to the armory. He looked around at all of us.

A battle cry came from every soldier there, except me. I remained silent, just as I always had. I looked ove

"We shall split up to find these outposts. They are the key to taking back our sacred ring," the officer stated, gathering us all together to split us up.

Every squad was made up of two elites, eight grunts, and two jackals. My partner just happened to be the one I hated most. The only one I hated for that matter. Kovalee, the Ultra Elite.

Immediately, he stepped up in front of us, giving us all a quick scan. I heard him grunt when he saw me. Apparently, he was the leader of our squad, and no one argued.

"We shall make a path southeast. I suspect the Humans are camping somewhere by the lake. There are plenty of forgotten ruins for the cowards to hide behind."

I saw him look over the mountain and sigh, as if he didn't want to leave. As if he wanted the Humans to come to him.

We parted ways with the rest of the crew, and began our march. Kovalee walked beside me, making me feel very short. He was at least a foot taller than me and was very broad shouldered. His legs were tremendously strong, as if they could jump across planets.

For a good amount of time we walked, all of us rather silent. Every once and a while Kovalee would shake off the pure white snow that stuck to his armor. My red armor was almost completely drenched in a blanket of white.

As if out of no where, the sound of unfamiliar voices echoed throughout the mountain, coming from the river right below us.

"Humans! We shall burn them all!" shouted Kovalee, drawing a handle off of his belt. He ignited his energy sword, sending out a burst of blue light. It seemed to fit his personality perfectly.


A grunt crept over to a rock and spied down towards the lake.

"Enemies! Enemies here!" he screeched, running back toward us. No sooner had he said that did I hear Humans yelling and guns being loaded.

I drew my Plasma Rifle, although I had no intent to shoot with it. I simply peeked just above the rock to catch a glimspe of hundreds of shots coming in my direction. I ducked behind the rock, breathing hard, sweat pouring down my face.

Kovalee leaped over both me and the rock. His giant figure soared over me with ease. "Engage!"

I lifted my head again to see all eleven of them running down the hillside. Grunts and Jackals shot furiously out of their Plasma Pistols, letting go of the green bursts rapidly. The Humans, however, used more advanced tactics, drawing away lesser fire so they could take down the important ones: Kovalee.

"God Dammit, that ones got a sword!" shouted one of them, cowering behind a ruin. I could just see the tip of his face, bright red.

I had never seen anybody fight as hard as Kovalee. In my eyes, it looked like everyone was shooting at him, but nothing worked. His energy shields glowed, but did not disapear. He slashed the sword witht the precision of a master, not swinging wildily, but calm and controlled.

"I got 'em!" yelled a dark skinned Human, aiming his semiautomatic weapon at Kovalee. He was too slow to get the shot off, though. Kovalee soared in, and felled the Human with one fatal uppercut, slicing into his flesh.

All the Unggoy had been killed, piled up by a pillar. There was one Human, a man that was short, but broad, wearing no head protection, revealing his brown hair, had killed them all with ease, using a human close-range weapon that I had become familiar with. The 'Shotgun'.

"Anderson, the one with the sword!" coughed the dark skinned soldier, laying flat on his back, completely drenched in blood. Sure enough, behind him Kovalee came sprinting from behind a pillar, teeth clenched. Only two more strides and the soldier would be in half.

"BEHIND YOU!" I shouted, not thinking at all. Anderson turned around, Shotgun ready, and caught Kovalee off guard. I ducked down so I wouldn't see. All I heard was the bullet leaving the weapon, and Kovalee screaming in pain.

"Alien scum!" Anderson shouted. I heard the sound of Kovalee's armor being kicked.

My heart started to beat incredibly fast, my eyes blurring. I breathed as if I was being choked, with each breath there was a pain in my head. I had aided in the death of my only partner.

I stood up and started walking backwards, hoping to be unnoticed, then broke into a full sprint the other way. I soon realized I hadn't even helped! All I had done was watch, just as I had last time. My Plasma Rifle's battery still read 100%.

What was I to do? That was a question I asked myself so many times. Now, I was stuck in the mountains, probably being hunted like an animal, and there was no where to go. My COM system was functioning, but who wouldmI contact? The officer, so I could tell him I was a traitor?

I stopped. Behind me, there was some sort of buzzing noise. It came closer and closer, getting louder as it did. I ran faster and faster everytime it sounded close, until finally, three Human vehicles skidded in front of me, turrets pointed at my face.


"Don't shoot!" I screamed, realizing it was the first thing I had said in a long time. Casting away my Rifle and Needler, I dropped to the snow.

I got down on my knees and waited. I didn't care anymore. I didn't care if I died At least I would finally be free from this war. In my mind, I knew this was the end.

A soldier got out of the drivers seat and stood in front of me. I didn't dare perk up to look him in the eyes.

"Thank you," he said. For moments I was stunned, confused. A Human was thanking me?

I slowly raised my head, deciding I would take the chance to look at him. Standing before me was the Human's leader, Anderson. He must have seen the hopeless look in my eyes.

"We're not going to kill you, but you're going to answer some questions," he said, stretching out his hand. I grabbed on to it and pulled myself up. It felt strange to be near your enemy, and not think of him as an enemy. The only enemy I had in this war were the remaining Hierarchs, Truth and Mercy, filling Regret's emplty void.

"Get in the Warthog. We've got some work to do before we get back to base," he told me, commanding the other 2 'Warthogs' to be on their way. Still unsure about the man, I was still frightened. I got in the vehicle anyway, my fingers trembling.

End Transmission






[Edited on 10.13.2008 12:45 PM PDT]

  • 07.29.2008 12:23 PM PDT
Subject: Halo: Heretic or Hero?----------------- (Prolouge and chapter 1 &2

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  • 07.29.2008 12:34 PM PDT

Halo: Heretic or Hero---An Elite's Story
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Posted by: KillerCRS
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I'm assuming you're saying you don't think I should post FanFic here. I understand your means, but a lot of other people are doing it, so why not.


Am I right or wrong?

  • 07.29.2008 12:36 PM PDT

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Posted by: Sergeant Murph
Posted by: KillerCRS
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I'm assuming you're saying you don't think I should post FanFic here. I understand your means, but a lot of other people are doing it, so why not.


Am I right or wrong?


Because yours is full of canon errors.

Elites don't call themselves Elites, they call themselves "Sangheili", Prophets don't call themselves Prophets, they call themselves "San'Shyuum".

Grunts = Unggoy
Brutes = Jiralhanae
Jackals = Kig-Yar
Drones = Yanme'e
Hunters = Mgalekgolo

  • 07.29.2008 12:40 PM PDT

Halo: Heretic or Hero---An Elite's Story
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Forged in the Flames of Passion, go forth and represent!



Because yours is full of canon errors.

Elites don't call themselves Elites, they call themselves "Sangheili", Prophets don't call themselves Prophets, they call themselves "San'Shyuum".

Grunts = Unggoy
Brutes = Jiralhanae
Jackals = Kig-Yar
Drones = Yanme'e
Hunters = Mgalekgolo



Yes I know that but at times during Halo 2, you will hear the Prophets call Sangheili Elites, prophets call Jiralhanae Brutes,you will hear elites say 'by the prophets' and you hear an elite say 'the hunters will aid us' so I think that they are well aware of the english pronounciation of their names.

Conversation OVER

[Edited on 07.29.2008 12:46 PM PDT]

  • 07.29.2008 12:45 PM PDT

Posted by: evilcam
That...probably means that Laserking has either an insanely accurate logical method of deriving people's reactions to things, or he possesses pre-cognition. Either way:LASERKING for Mods!

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MORE!!! plz? lol

  • 07.29.2008 12:47 PM PDT

Halo: Heretic or Hero---An Elite's Story
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thanks for your support chapter 3 will be out either tonight or tommorow so please stay tuned!

  • 07.29.2008 12:48 PM PDT

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This is no arguement thread. You should PM your opinions and suggestions at yourselves (nobody else but anywho...), but no here.

I like it, but it is true, you need to put their right names, you can do that later, and practice the next chapters. [/rant]

  • 07.29.2008 12:48 PM PDT
Subject: Halo: Heretic or Hero?----------------- (Prolouge and chapter 1 &am...

Halo: Heretic or Hero---An Elite's Story
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Posted by: mu5t ki11 u 411
This is no arguement thread. You should PM your opinions and suggestions at yourselves (nobody else but anywho...), but no here.

I like it, but it is true, you need to put their right names, you can do that later, and practice the next chapters. [/rant]



Ok thank you I'll get right on that soon. Thanks for the advice.

Also what exactly did you mean by the chapters thing? lol sorry im dumb as crap. Do you mean the Title or font or what?

  • 07.29.2008 12:52 PM PDT

Posted by: evilcam
That...probably means that Laserking has either an insanely accurate logical method of deriving people's reactions to things, or he possesses pre-cognition. Either way:LASERKING for Mods!

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I think he means start changing the names in the next chapters

  • 07.29.2008 12:58 PM PDT

c|_|Care mug begs to differ.

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You know, give it the charm Bungie gives to Halo.

*hugs Bungie picture*


Posted by: Sergeant Murph

Ok thank you I'll get right on that soon. Thanks for the advice.

Also what exactly did you mean by the chapters thing? lol sorry im dumb as crap. Do you mean the Title or font or what?

  • 07.29.2008 12:59 PM PDT

Posted by: evilcam
That...probably means that Laserking has either an insanely accurate logical method of deriving people's reactions to things, or he possesses pre-cognition. Either way:LASERKING for Mods!

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Lol if you really want some good inspiration read some of Contact Harvest.... Joseph Staten did an excellent job on that book

  • 07.29.2008 1:06 PM PDT
Subject: Halo: Heretic or Hero?----------------- An elite story

Very good story so far. Please keep me posted about this, very interesting. I really like it because I'm an Elite.

I also like it because it shows some of the Elites that they dislike the war and the Covenant, and also that not all Elites are brave and would prefer to be back home. Will you also include what will happen to this Honor Guard during and after the events of Halo 3?

Mittens

  • 07.29.2008 1:19 PM PDT
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keep it up very nice!!

  • 07.29.2008 1:31 PM PDT

Halo: Heretic or Hero---An Elite's Story
Choose your own destiny

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Forged in the Flames of Passion, go forth and represent!

yes I think my plan at the moment is to write about six more chapters of this story, "Heretic or Hero?" then move on to the next one that is currently untitled (taking place in Halo 3). In fact, it would be great if someone could come up with an interesting title. I will be sure to mention your name as a great help at the beggining of the next book.

Just as a heads up, I've already got the next one planned! So when I'm finished with this the next installment will be previewed.


Be sure to constantly check this thread if you like it!!!!


-------------Sarge Murph-------------

  • 07.29.2008 1:34 PM PDT

For Carnage Apply Within - Fatum Iustum Stultorum

"Do not mistake your rank and number for superiority. The oldest child may learn from the youngest."

Definitely a good first effort. I found it to be rather entertaining, and enjoyed reading the chapters you posted. Hopefully once you have competed the story, you will go back and edit/rewrite certain sections to make the story flow better or add more details. I liked your idea of an Elite having been forced into war when he didn't truly want to fight, something that seems uncommon among their species.

Overall, great work. Keep the chapters coming please.

  • 07.29.2008 2:19 PM PDT

Halo: Heretic or Hero---An Elite's Story
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Chapter 3


I'll Stay in the Car



Miles we traveled in the vehicles, the three of us, Anderson, the man on the turret, and I were silent, all caught up in our own thoughts. Thinking over what had happened in the past few days was hard, as if I didn't want to remember, but it kept popping back into my head. This man, could he really trust me after what my kind did to his?

"Why did you do it?"

I perked up, startled. "What?"

Anderson had one eye on in front of us and one on me. "You know, why did you save me back there? Why didn't you just let him kill me?" He sounded uncomfortable as he said this. I could tell he was a bit nervous to be around me, even if he thought I was harmless.

"I don't know," I simply replied, turning my head away so I didn't have to face him. His eyes were the exact opposite of Kovalee's. They were calm and collected, yet fierce and determined at the same time.

"Well, you must have had a reason? It's just not normal that people of your... race... bust their butts to save Humans," remarked Anderson. By all means, he was correct. Even to myself, why I had warned him was difficult to think about. It was like I knew who he was already.

I answered without turning back.

"I don't know,"

He thanked me again, "Well, whether or not you have a reason, I owe you big time. If you hadn't warned me, I'd be in two pieces!" he laughed.

I stared into the distance. The mountains seemed to be endless around here. it was all one large cloak of snow, with no escape. I was about to close my eyes, when something got my attention. There, coming over the mountain, was a small black dot, coming closer and closer at a fast rate. FIve more came over the mountain, following up the leader.

I sat up fast. "They're here," I muttered. No sooner had I realized what the dots were, a green blast from a fuel rod cannon came sailing back at us.

It hit the snow directly in front of us, causing Anderson to make a quick jerk of the wheel , then another to get back into place, while not stopping the vehicle.

"What the Hell?" shouted the young man controlling our turret.

"Banshees! Floor it!" came a voice that seemed to be in the distance. The other two Warthogs faded away through the snow.

"Hold on, Four-Lips, I'm takin' you for a joy ride!" yelled Anderson, grinning hard, as if he had been hoping for this.

Another quick jerk of the wheel made me find myself holding onto my seat for dear life. Three more Fuel Rods erupted around us. The Warthog shook furiously, being damaged by the splash of the cannons into the snow. Anderson gained speed, while the Banshee's followed, swarming around us like we were dead food.

"It would be helpful if you could take out one of the goddamn Banshees, Burns!" Anderson shouted at the young man on the turret.

"Yes sir!" said Burns, followed by an uncountable amount of shot rounds coming from the gun. From every direction I could hear the sound of Plasma and Fuel Rod cannons being shot.

At this point, I would have been happy to abandon the Warthog and run for my life, but there was something about Anderson that kept me there, that made me want to stick by his side. Still gripping on to the soft leather cusion of the seat, I took a breath, and could only hope.

There was a long pause, where everything was quiet. There were no more plasma eruptions, no more snow being flung into the air, just the soft humming of the Warthog.

"Thats four. There were six," I told Anderson, knowing that we were not out of the battle yet.

"Well maybe they cut us some slack this time around,"

I shook my head, "No. They are here."

Just as I had predicted, two more Banshees swooped down from the skies, attempting to escape, knowing they couldn't stand up to Burns's turret skills.

"Burns...-"

"On it, sir!"

The Banshee's must of realized they were spotted, and took off at full speed, leaving a blue trail as they went. Burns fired again, just nicking the edges of both Banshee's sending them both whirling toward the ground.

I sat there, taking in what had happened. Had they been coming for me? But how could they know what I had done so quick?

Coming to a sudden revelation, Anderson stopped the Warthog.

"The other six... They're gone."


Anderson tried to contact them, projecting his COM system so we could hear.

"This is Sergeant William Anderson, do you read Delta Squad 13? Repeat, this is Sergeant William Anderson, do you read me Delta Squad 13?"

"Sir... Help...Please...!"


There was a horrible crying noise, then the line went dead.

"Crap! I lost 'em! Alright boys, we're heading back to base. We're not giving up on them until we see them all with sticky grenades on their faces!" he shouted, and the Warthog took off over the mountains again.

The terrain seemed to change dramaticly as we came to the top of the mountain. One side was snow, while the other was desert like, built on dust and sand.

And then, at random, my COM system came on. A familiar voice spoke, sounding furious.

"Major Solonee, you will not escape us after your acts of herecy!"


End Transmission



[Edited on 08.29.2008 12:19 PM PDT]

  • 07.29.2008 3:18 PM PDT

Posted by: evilcam
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When is the next one coming?

  • 07.29.2008 3:21 PM PDT

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Posted by: LaserKing9
When is the next one coming?




Sometime tommorow I'm gonna try to make it the best chapter yet.


o and if you meant the next story, it will come when I finish this book probably in a week and a half the next story will start

  • 07.29.2008 3:33 PM PDT

Halo: Heretic or Hero---An Elite's Story
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Even if you despise this story, I want to know so that I can improve from it.

[Edited on 11.19.2008 7:38 PM PST]

  • 07.29.2008 3:48 PM PDT
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Not bad, It's pretty good, my only complaints (And these are minor, trust me) is that solamee seems a little to wimpy and it hasn't been explained y he hates war... also i find that the relations between ur elite and the humans is to relaxed, these are warring races and even if anderson believes in him, i find it hard to believe other humans will deal with him. Once again i like the story and i'm definitely looking forward to future chapters. KEEP IT CLEAN!!

  • 07.29.2008 5:39 PM PDT

Very good so far, can't wait to see what happens next!

Mittens

  • 07.29.2008 5:43 PM PDT
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Good stuff. Hope to see more in the future, but not too far off haha.

  • 07.29.2008 6:02 PM PDT