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Subject: Heaven's War. Chapter 1 to 3

I've been writing a book. But I'm lookin for some comments or just what people think of what I've writtin so far.

I have an Introduction, Chapter 1, Chapter 2, Chapter 3.

Please Check it out:

Heaven's War

  • 03.12.2009 1:58 AM PDT
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The intro contains a lot of grammatical and sentence structure issues - your best bet is to ask someone to proof read this thing for you and iron some things out.

Best of luck.

  • 03.12.2009 7:36 AM PDT
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This seems like a good story after skimming it, but you need to fix some typos and switch some words around a bit. Aside from the grammatical errors, you got a good story on your hands.

  • 03.12.2009 7:43 AM PDT

Yeah I haven't finalized anything yet so I already knew that.
I'm just putting the story together at the moment.

  • 03.12.2009 1:07 PM PDT