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I've been writing a book. But I'm lookin for some comments or just what people think of what I've writtin so far.I have an Introduction, Chapter 1, Chapter 2, Chapter 3.Please Check it out:Heaven's War
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The intro contains a lot of grammatical and sentence structure issues - your best bet is to ask someone to proof read this thing for you and iron some things out. Best of luck.
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This seems like a good story after skimming it, but you need to fix some typos and switch some words around a bit. Aside from the grammatical errors, you got a good story on your hands.
Yeah I haven't finalized anything yet so I already knew that.I'm just putting the story together at the moment.