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Subject: Halo Fanfic: If I were your hero (Stage 7 Info)
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Great story, soulguard. Its one of the best.

  • 06.05.2005 5:54 PM PDT
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I agree however the spelling errors were more than I'm used to. They kinda chipped away at the plot. Don't be such a slacker : )

  • 06.05.2005 6:13 PM PDT
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he is most certainly not lazy since he's writing the fanfic so let the man do his work and disregaurd those errors they are fine...I don't give a $HIT about my spelling.

nothings perfect

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  • 06.05.2005 9:25 PM PDT

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scorptank; UNSC ScoutSniper; midship; XworstpirateevaX
Thanks everyone for the support.
Oddly enough, this stage came off as really hard to write. I don't deny the errors in grammar, it has always been my achilles heal, but oddly it was even more so with this past stage.

I offer my deepest apologies to anyone that may have been distracted by the previous stage, and I will do my darndest to get back on track with the next stage.

It's hard to describe, really, what made this past post so tricky. I believe I was too much into the details (I tend to overlook the small things for the bigger). And the characters' speeches proved to be rather "sudden"... I don't know if anyone noticed that Melanie is the same girl that was with Eric during the flash back, at the Lacrosse after party... sudden moves like this on my part, to introduce new characters and a deeper plot, seem to capture my attention more then focusing on "Through/threw, their/there/they're".

This is not an excuse, I've gotten lazier with my writting and that will not do. The option for getting an editor... not really that big of a concern. I may be bad at grammer, but to ask someone to edit my "fan fic??" I don't think so. Currently my "Editor", if you want to call her that, is hard at work on my Novel, which has a deadline of June 30... so she's busy enough, I dare not bother her with this request else she may dissown me, and I'd lose a friend. But I'm not saying that my fanfic isn't a priority, if anything it (and you all) have been a major push into the right direction of my writing. I could find another editor, but at this point I think I should learn some form of "REAL" editing on my own. I have to do it, i can't just assume that someone else will do my work for me. At least not this one. Yes it is hard to catch all the errors in a work, but sometimes you have to try for yourself.

Justly, all I can say is forgive this mess. For those who read my story, I know my grammer isn't a HUGE deal, but in the long run it does stand out. Writers like, Scorptank, Mr_Clark, the Silky Carp, and all the other aspiring professional authors on B.net can understand what I mean. A writer must write... it is practice for the big leagues, and here is where we correct the "errors" of our ameature ways. While B.net and Fanfiction.net are not the gratest ways to announce our Bid to professionalism, it is a start, at least I think so.

I promise to update the story before I post it to Fanfiction.net, that way you'll be able to read it with as little errors as I can possibly catch with my own eyes.

Thanks again everyone for reading. I'll have a stage 9 update soon.
-soulguard

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  • 06.06.2005 7:49 AM PDT
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Here's the LOL.

I apologise for the tasteless joke.



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  • 06.06.2005 8:01 AM PDT

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Scorptank
Can't catch a break with you around. Not even with a random post of leisure.

And as for being a US citizen? I assume you mean speaking, reading, and writing English as a primary language. It is here that I do not have an excuse. With the failing of "MOST" educational institutions in America (I still love it here), I wasn't much of a student. The fault is with me... ie. lazy... so yes, it was hard. LOL

And to take it a step further, I.. yes ME.. at the age of 28 am now starting to teach myself all those things I wasn't "forced" to learn back in school.

-soulguard

PS. I didn't capitalize your name. HEHE :)
but now I feel bad :(
so I will. :P

  • 06.06.2005 8:19 AM PDT
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soul continues to amaze us but I also agree with Scorptank how hard can it be for a U.S citizen to make so many mistakes. Hell Im polish and still manage to type something in a foren language.

  • 06.06.2005 8:20 AM PDT
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LOL

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  • 06.06.2005 8:36 AM PDT
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What I wasn't insulting soulguard in any way .all i said i agree with scorptank and i even said i like his work read the whole post before jumping to conclusions.

  • 06.06.2005 8:43 AM PDT
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yeah give him a break just cause he's american
i mean i know thats like a handicap already but it's no reason to taunt him and annoy him so what his spelling and grammar suck im from britan we invented that language and i suck at spelling and grammar

  • 06.06.2005 8:45 AM PDT
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For the last time I was not insulting him.

  • 06.06.2005 9:00 AM PDT
Subject: Halo Fanfic: If I were your hero (Stage 8 Info)

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I'm starting to find this funny and sad at the same time. LE and Highland, thanks for the support guys. Those that question my spelling/grammer, I know you mean for it in a positive way... at least I hope you do.

Don't worry col pain, I know what you meant. Getting back to it...

Stage 9 Update
A huge turn of events took place in stage 8. With that I'm building toward the center of the story, and the overall plot.

What's this you ask?? There's more? Yes.. yes there is! :D

Building upon the relationships that have been created thus far, the true story will now open itself before you in stage 9.

Why has Siren attemped to bring the elites and humans together? What does the UNSC know? What's up with Rose, Eric, Wesley, and now Melanie? Why all the troops on the ship? What is Siren's role in all of this?

All of these questions have been asked, and now the answers shall come.... well, most of them anyway. Things will take a nose dive toward the conclusion after stage 9. What this means is that a goal will be created, and now it is up to the 'crew' (if you can call them that) of the Life and Sacrifice to get to that goal.

I can see maybe 20 stages overall in this story, maybe 24, not sure at this point, but we do have a long ways to go before the end. A lot could happen.... and I hope you'll enjoy the ride.
I don't have a date yet for stage 9, but I'm thinking it will be soon. Friday or monday.
-soulguard.




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  • 06.06.2005 9:36 AM PDT
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Thank you soulguard if my writing sounded offensive in any way then im sorry.

  • 06.06.2005 9:41 AM PDT
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....umm... for those of you who felt insulted by my post: It was a joke....
Seriously, it was a joke! I am Dutch, and I am telling someone who's primary language is English, that he makes mistakes....
Maybe I should have put a big LOL behind it....

So, sorry Soulguard, for making fun of your editing-laziness(?)-hatred.
I have the same thing....

Man... I didn't know that people'd find it insulting... I guess I just forgot that this is a forum, not showing someone's facial expression or sounding the tone in one's voice....

Sorry man... I feel bad now....

*cowers in corner. awaiting replies. fearing to be stoned by ballistic rocks.*

  • 06.06.2005 10:00 AM PDT
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hey i was the 1 that they were annoyed at or at least i thought i was.

  • 06.06.2005 10:14 AM PDT
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Posted by: col pain
hey i was the 1 that they were annoyed at or at least i thought i was.


I think they were pissed at both of us... so we're actually both hated.

But, as we say in Holland: Gedeelde smart is halve smart.

  • 06.06.2005 10:16 AM PDT
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in english and yay a chapter announcment

  • 06.06.2005 10:30 AM PDT
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Umm.... I suppose that 'in english' was directed to me.

Umm... something like... Shared sorrow is half the sorrow....

  • 06.06.2005 10:54 AM PDT
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wow only half the blame *yay a mouse (tsah of newgrounds)* Im not mad or anything but what did i do to deserve having only demonspartan117 and DanbertusMaximus writing back to my fanfic? I mean it does not meet anything close to your standards but i dont care what the remarks are if someone writes 'you suck' so be it all i want is some way of knowing that someone has read it.
(Choiboy also posted the whole list of fanfics lazylink )
By the way I have no idea why i posted all that.

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  • 06.06.2005 1:20 PM PDT
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Wow, Scorptank....
What have you done?
All these edited posts... what did I miss?

And Highland Brute.... man.

All I can see is 'LOL'

What happened here?

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  • 06.07.2005 3:37 AM PDT
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I am not a hundred percent sure what has happened and why i posted that long post as for scorptank your guess is as good as any.
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Col.pain

  • 06.07.2005 5:36 AM PDT
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as I was lying on my bed at the night gazing the stars wondering one thing; Where the hell my roof went.

I am a Zombie.
Proud member of B.net since -04

When will next stage most probably come out SG?

and col.pain
I shall cut into Bungie Headquarters, retrieve Halo 3 and burn any Bungie employee that stands in my way.

I started to wonder that what you've written and if you do that we'lL mOst definetLy get the unfinished H3 and no more Bungie games. that would be sad, very sad indeed. so plz dont do that...

  • 06.07.2005 9:51 AM PDT
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i noticed the lol but i *copied* it of masterlucky nl

  • 06.07.2005 10:01 AM PDT
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and what made you think id share it with anyone?

  • 06.07.2005 10:02 AM PDT