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Subject: Halo Fanfic: If I were your hero (stage 10 update)
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Posted by: Scorptank
What? What? Is it over? WTF? A cliffhanger? No... damn....
A marvelous stage, Soulguard, really, fantastic.

I loved the (excuse me for the way I am going to say this) soap-like developments between Eric, Wesley, Melanie and Rose... damn, I never watchs soaps but this is really cool... *fears to see a ballistic stone coming through the window because of comparing a piece of literature with a brainless form of entertainment*

I also love Gridolee, damn that's one bad-ass Elite... Mirratord. I'm sure Eric and him will turn into friends somehow, or Wesley and Gridolee. But for now I'm just eager to see what the hell is going to happen in that room.

Another thing that was amazing was the fact that you kept the story together. It is really following a tight line. Not that I can predict the end, but the storyline is nicely tucked together.

I have one question however, when Siren said something about Ackerson and what he did to Eric... were those augmentations of some sort?

You said you were going to drop a major, obvious hint in this stage, but whatever it was, I found nothing that looked like a hint to me. Just explain that to me.

All in all this was one kick-ass chapter, I'd expect nothing less from you, Soulguard.
A job truly well done.


Maybe on Troy Eric got baddly injured and is somewhat like a cyborg. Maybe something like in I,Robot what happened to Will Smith.

  • 06.20.2005 1:18 PM PDT
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Another great chapter (thanks for the p.m) but how the hell is eric going to be able to beat up Gridolee? the elite will land one punch and then down goes eric.

  • 06.20.2005 2:38 PM PDT
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nice but it was soo short

  • 06.20.2005 2:52 PM PDT
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hey, just one question, where's Palab and his Mirratord Grunts :), he's so cool and you said that he'd be making an appearance, so i just wanna see lil Palab beat up some Brutes or something

  • 06.20.2005 3:00 PM PDT

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Believe it or not highland, this was my third longest chapter. I told you it was a fast read. lol. I think the flow of this stage somehow made it feel short. it was 15 pages long.

col pain; midship; scorptank; halo xenon
Thanks for the great words guys.
Siren's statement to Eric about haveing "upgrades", is only one of the secrets that I've been hinting at. A few of you questioned Eric's "skill" before, especially when he was teamed up with the Spartan Will. The nature of these upgrades will become clearer. Halo xenon, and midship are close, but not quite right. What I can say, is that Ackerson is very determined man, this we all know. But if he has been working on a competeing project against Halsey's spartans, I wonder what happened to his research. And no, I'm not talking about Spartan III's. This is something much darker.


Oddly, Eric upgrades wasn't the "huge" hint I was referring to. It is funny that no one has noticed the big hint, but halo xenon said a few things that are close (he PM'd me). I thought it was obvious but I supposed I didn't make it as obvious as I thought. This is good, that way the future stages will be really shocking. The huge hint actually deals with Siren. I'll leave it at that. But by telling you all that, I'm sure someone will figure it out.

And midship, I'm glad it didn't make you feel good in the same special way it did me.LOL.

Don't worry, it will all be explained. Any other questions? Feel free.
-soulguard

  • 06.20.2005 3:15 PM PDT
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loved it. it was brilliant :)

  • 06.20.2005 4:13 PM PDT
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re read it still can't see the big hint can you post that section in ur next post?

  • 06.21.2005 12:01 AM PDT
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Posted by: soulguard
Oddly, Eric upgrades wasn't the "huge" hint I was referring to. It is funny that no one has noticed the big hint, but halo xenon said a few things that are close (he PM'd me). I thought it was obvious but I supposed I didn't make it as obvious as I thought. This is good, that way the future stages will be really shocking. The huge hint actually deals with Siren. I'll leave it at that. But by telling you all that, I'm sure someone will figure it out.


Other than the obviouse fact that Siren was Kim on Troy, I'm not sure where this is heading. I do wonder about Kim and Eric's relationship before her death, though. - LE

  • 06.21.2005 4:25 AM PDT
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WOWOWOWOW! That was a fantastic stage, Soulguard! Truly fantastic!
I´m already looking forward to the next one.

P.S. Limited Edition, I don´t see you around Scorp´s thread anymore... do you send him replies in PMs?



[Edited on 6/21/2005]

  • 06.21.2005 5:41 AM PDT

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Since LE guessed it, here are just a few of the hints from stage 10. There are others, but these are the big ones.


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“Who were you?” Rose pushed for more answers.

“A soldier that died on Troy.” Siren sighed. “But let’s not discuss that anymore.”
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“Kiss me Mel, you hot redheaded vixen?” Siren giggled as she stared into Melanie’s eyes. Melanie stepped back, her eyes widened and she lifted her hand to cover her mouth.

“Kim?” Melanie questioned. Siren’s expression changed from happy to horrified, as she heard the name escape Melanie’s voice.


Normally I wouldn't spill the beans like this, but after going over my notes for the story I realized that this is only a small factor. Things will get even more interesting then this.
10points to LE for guessing, and LE now has... 10points total!! *the audience cheers*.
LOL jk

*sigh* I knew somebody would get it, and he made it seem like it was easy.

All these small little factors will piece together... you'll love it as more mysteries become clearer.

-soulguard

  • 06.21.2005 5:55 AM PDT
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Was that meant as a hint?
Oh... I thought that was an obvious fact... oh... so we are going in on that one then?
Cool.

  • 06.21.2005 7:39 AM PDT
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yeah same you practically said it was kim sooo i just took it forgranted it wasn't the hint cause it was too easy

  • 06.22.2005 12:39 PM PDT
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where is everyone today?? : (

  • 06.22.2005 3:13 PM PDT

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Yup, the thing about Siren and kim was the hint, and as you guys have noted (LE as well) it was very obvious. I tried to slim down the hint, but it would have drasticaly altered a few scenes. Melanie's role is growing and she plays a very large part of stage 11, but she's not a show stopper. Her primary role is to speed things along with Siren.


[Edited on 6/23/2005]

  • 06.23.2005 9:49 AM PDT

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Imortant dates within the "Halo: If I were your hero" timeline.
From the very begining this story was to have 4 main characters; Wesley, Rose, Eric and Siren. But the beginning started off on a bad note, the oni facility was very low key, and not very large, so giving them a smart AI seemed impossible. When I re-read first strike, it dawned on me that the UNSC had yet to discover the importance of the crystals, so I had to dum-down the security and significance of the facility in New Mombasa.

Here's a little background info that will not be covered in a the story:

Upon reading the reports from John, Fred, Will and Linda, the UNSC and ONI discovered that the crystals were much more important then theorized. In 2552 the Apocolypso arrived to warn Earth off the fall of Troy, and to deliver the object they found in space, ONI began to wonder if there theories about the crystals connection to the covenant was incorrect. When the device the Apocolypso found sent out a wide band frequency, a sub-slipspace rift, that shut down a large segment of the ChatterNet. The crystal reacted to this distoration and ONI began to take more notice of the crystal. Without Dr. Halsey, the only person to really give the crystals much attention, ONI was left largely in the dark. The Crystal was to be moved to a larger facility and studied deeply.

Upon surviving the massacre at Troy, Eric Raynord quickly used his influence within the UNSC to be assigned at the Facility with Rose, ONI decided that such an experienced officer was perfect for protecting the Crystal before it was to be moved for further testing. However, the Fall of Reach quickly became the largest contreversy across the Earth. The details of the crystal became unimportant to the overall threat that the Covenant was coming closer to Earth.

Timeline of 2552 in order of relevance:
- Apocolypso Discovers covenant transmission to attack Troy.
- Eric Raynord and his Black Ops squad encounter Heavy covenant forces on Troy during the evacuations.
- Apocolypso flees Troy with covenant data and finds covenant artifact in space: They believed that Troy had been completely evacuated.
- Raynord and his Black Ops squad finally begin evacuation of the final city as Covie forces attack. Losses are great, millions of civilian and military casualties, because the Covenant attacked early.
- Raynord's squad escapes Troy. Troy Glassed.
- Covenant locates Reach. Aug 29
- Apocolypso arrives on Earth.
- Raynord Arrives on Earth.
- Reach is overrun Aug 30
- Eric stationed with Rose at Oni Facility in New Mombasa.
- 3 days Pass and the Covenant artifact is acitvated due to a break in at another ONI Section 3 facility.
-Time line anomoly because of Crystal: Halo discovered by Pillar of Autumn Crew under command of Captain Keyes. Sept 19
- Halo 4 is destroyed. Sept 22 End of time anomoly.

- Crystal is given to Raynord while ONI works on details of approaching Covie advance. Sept 2
- Covenant Discover Earth's location. Sept 8
- Covenant forces located at the Edge of the Sol System Preparing for attack. Dr. Halsey and Kelly (spartan 087) go AWOL. Sept 12
- Admiral Whitcomb, Sparton 117 and his squad delay the Covie advance. Sept 13
- ONI is debriefed of the approaching threat, and ignore moving the crystal in order to "Prepare" for the coming Covenant threat. Sept 14
- ONI Section 3 forms the "Artifacts and Forerunner Technology Research Committee" to study the crystals but a suitable location is not foutnd. The Crystal is left at the facility in New Mombasa for occasional study.
- High Prophet of Regret Discovers Earth after fallowing signal from Covenant Artifiact. Oct 20.
- Artifact is taken and New Mombasa is destroyed.
- Second wave of attacks begin on Earth. Oct 20-21.

There you have it. Some background info. This will surely help to understand my take on the events of Halo and "If I were your hero".

-soulguard

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Timeline mostly derived from HBOrg and the Halo Library.

[Edited on 6/23/2005]

  • 06.23.2005 9:51 AM PDT
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this is veryu well written...be sure to check out Fleet Enhancements as well....i hope u enjoy it...its on the first page of forums

  • 06.23.2005 10:00 AM PDT

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Thanks CJK.

BTW: Love the Sig. I had that same sig a few months ago.

-soulguard

  • 06.23.2005 11:59 AM PDT
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oops

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  • 06.23.2005 12:12 PM PDT

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oops??

Not your normal words, LE, but I won't complain. LOL

-soulguard

  • 06.23.2005 12:17 PM PDT
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Sorry. I was actually trying to send a pm but apparently hit the reply instead of message user button, oh well. The story is excellent and thanks for the 10 points. I'm sure I can redeem those for cash.

As for guessing correctly, I too thought that the hint must have been something else. But with nothing else standing out I though I would venture an answer and bingo the rest is history. Seriously though, you must be taking 'hint courses' from Scorptank. Ha-ha.

  • 06.23.2005 12:26 PM PDT
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Posted by: Limited Edition
Sorry. I was actually trying to send a pm but apparently hit the reply instead of message user button, oh well. The story is excellent and thanks for the 10 points. I'm sure I can redeem those for cash.

As for guessing correctly, I too thought that the hint must have been something else. But with nothing else standing out I though I would venture an answer and bingo the rest is history. Seriously though, you must be taking 'hint courses' from Scorptank. Ha-ha.


*sits in front of his computer with a grumpy face... grmbl...* LOL.

  • 06.23.2005 12:33 PM PDT

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Posted by: Scorptank
Posted by: Limited Edition
Sorry. I was actually trying to send a pm but apparently hit the reply instead of message user button, oh well. The story is excellent and thanks for the 10 points. I'm sure I can redeem those for cash.

As for guessing correctly, I too thought that the hint must have been something else. But with nothing else standing out I though I would venture an answer and bingo the rest is history. Seriously though, you must be taking 'hint courses' from Scorptank. Ha-ha.


*sits in front of his computer with a grumpy face... grmbl...* LOL.


LOL. When we say "hint", what we really mean is: Here is a key story point that I want you to guess, but I'm not going to let you guess, so I'll just tell you. haha.

Very true, that sometimes my hints are easy, but I've got some things cooking in the story that no one will see coming. But I have left many hints to its fact.

-soulguard

  • 06.23.2005 1:06 PM PDT
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right then...................ok lets start a diffirent topic of conversation hows the weather over there? j/k

na whens the next stage?

  • 06.25.2005 7:17 AM PDT
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