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“You okay?” Kim questioned. Melanie was holding her side and blood flowed freely from the wound.

“Nothing a little biofoam won’t cure.” Melanie replied. Kim jabbed the nozzle into the wound and the foamy mass quickly fizzed into Melanie’s wound. Melanie squirmed from the pain and fought against blacking out. “Oh that was heavenly. How about I not go through that again?” Melanie laughed to herself. Kim removed the bottle and tossed it to the side. She pulled a red flare from her hip pack and tossed several of them toward the buildings. The flares puffed bright red smoke into the air as plasma streamed through.

Eric slid in beside the group and stopped beside Kim.

“The civilians are mostly safe behind some barricades, but I’m not sure for how long.” Eric stated. “It’s tight in here. We have no room to maneuver or get clear of any mortar blasts. And I don’t want to mention grenades.”

“Noted, 19.” Kim stated. “I got through to the Rogue Fantasy and heavy artillery is on the way.”

“Great, I hoped that was what those flares were for.” Melanie replied. “Look, I see the pelicans!” Forty pelicans dotted the sky and were streaking in toward the encamped group of Covenant forces. “That is one hell of a beautiful sight.”

Without warning, Kim pushed Eric to the ground as a plasma grenade dropped at his feet. Kim looked around, torn about her actions. If the lone grenade exploded, they would all be killed including twenty or more of the civilians. It was too crowded in the small area and there was no way to get everyone clear. In an instant she lunged at the plasma grenade and felt the warm heat radiating from it quickly fuse to her hand. The pain began to intensify as she began to sprint away from the group.

“Kim!” Eric shouted. He leapt from the ground and chased her. Kim raised her arm away from her body as far as she could as the grenade began to release its final surge of energy.

Eric could only watch as the grenade exploded, sending Kim’s body sliding across the ground. Kim struggled to get to her feat as shock swelled around her body. Eric grabbed her by the shoulder as a hail of plasma blasts roared toward him. He tossed Kim onto his shoulder and ran back to cover. He tumbled to the ground and quickly began to seal the wound were Kim’s arm and hip once were. The damage was severe and Eric knew that he couldn’t save her.

Melanie crawled beside them as the final volley of plasma tore into their encampment. The pelicans began to release wave after wave of hellfire into the Covenant lines. The majority of pelicans began to land and what was left of the civilians eagerly crawled onboard.

“I can’t… I can’t… Eric.” Kim tearfully shouted. Eric fought to keep her calm and tend to her wounds. “Pull the squad out, get them out… out.”

“Shut up, Kim!” Melanie shouted. “You’re coming with us.”

“Eric, Eric…” Kim stuttered as she gazed into the sky. She slowly exhaled, her mouth opened and her eyes wide. Eric closed her eyes and softly mourned her death.

“Sir we have to go!” 08 stated. “Rogue Fantasy says they can’t wait any longer. Those Covenant bastards are preparing to glass the planet. We have to go.” Melanie was in shock and sat quietly on the ground, gazing into the lifeless face of her sister. Eric grabbed Kim’s body and slung it over his shoulder. With his free hand he grabbed Melanie and pulled her toward the Pelicans; 08 followed closely.

They climbed onto the back of the pelican just as Plasma barrages began to fall in the distance. The covenant had begun to glass Troy.

“How many did we leave behind?” Eric asked 08.

“We lost contact with the front marines.” He replied. “We were only able to fill twenty pelicans with civilians. We had to leave the others behind.” Of the eighteen Black Ops that begin the battle on Troy, only six survived. The flight back to the Rogue Fantasy was quiet until the pelican docked. The rear hatch opened and the last survivors of Troy exited from its belly. Standing before the Black Ops was Doctor Carolyn Smith; whom had become the ship nurse and chief medic in order to stay with her Black Ops, fearing for her life and career if she went anywhere without them.

“Take 04 to the morgue and put her in hibernation.” Carolyn stated to the nurses at her side. “And make sure to take a look at all of them, they all seem to be wounded. It seems this was by far the hardest mission yet.” Carolyn focused on Melanie and spotted a tear in her eye. “Are you okay, 05?”

“No.” Melanie stated as she slumped onto the side of the pelican. She suddenly balled over and began to sob peacefully to herself as Eric attempted to comfort her.

Eric looked at Carolyn and waved her off. Carolyn shook her head, understanding that she needed her space. He then sat beside her and held her close. No matter how hard they had fought in the past few years, this was the worst battle yet. They had usually worked alone and in secret, doing side missions for Section III, but when word of Troy being attacked crossed their speakers they had to go help.

There was no stopping the Covenant. Humanity had to become stronger, and not even his adjusted strength was good enough. The Covenant was to powerful, too numerous, and too advanced to be stopped. Soon they would sack Earth and nothing would remain of humanity.

“Rose.” Eric stated. Melanie had heard him, but ignored it. At that moment Eric decided that this war would only be won if their technology improved, and he didn’t want to see any one else he loves die. He was standing only ten feet away when Kim died and the more he thought of Rose, the more he wanted to redeem himself for failing Kim. Melanie would stay with him, he would convince them all to go back to Earth. If they followed him to war then they would surely follow him home.

To be continued…

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*PHEW* Longest chapter yet. 28 pages of text. Sorry for the length people, in all honesty I hated it being so long. But there was a lot to cover... and even a whole lot more that wound up on the cutting room floor.

Seriously, this is as short as I could do it. I actually cut 4 pages out during editing. Some of it will be put back in during the next stage. Stage 12 will finish up the events leading up to when Eric meets Rose again, and then we will be back on schedule with the current story line. As always, thanks for stopping by. Fell free to leave comments.

-soulguard

*edit PS: PM's sent. If you did not recieve a PM then please be sure to post within at least 4 pages of post. I will only go back and PM those who have at least posted within the past 4 pages.

[Edited on 6/30/2005]

  • 06.30.2005 12:02 PM PDT
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Brilliant! Soulguard, just fantastic! I felt like I was reading the beginning of The Fall of Reach, only way better. I like it... Black Ops, and you really described Dr. Carolyn's feelings. She remembered me of Halsey... and Ackerson, the son of a -blam!-.

The fight between Eric and Gridolee was also masterpiece. The descriptions were so accurate, as if I stood next to them while they slapped each other in the faces.

Some serious emotions, too. With the blue and red bands, that was so terribly sad.

My only comment of the day: the battle on Troy was somewhat short. Of course this is only a compliment. It's just that I loved it, with the crashing dropships and all. But it was just too short... just kidding. Nice length, there was nothing wrong with it.

I'm already looking forward to the next chapter, because I'd love to see how the history continues. Once again, you keep the storyline together really well. The 'history' of Eric and Rose on that prom/party... and the history of the Black Ops. Poor Rose... she'll have to choose between Wesley or Eric....

Keep it coming, Soulguard! Another fantastic stage.

  • 06.30.2005 12:47 PM PDT
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Eric, Kim and Mel. a Spartan!?!

Whoaa... that was one hellofachapter. Black Ops geez.
Ackersons guinea pigs, damn you were mean to them.

That was long and sweet stage, so much action, talking and character history. Damn I like it. That Gridolee and Eric duel was so cool, so intense. And battle of Troy, well what can i say than Wow!!!

Gridolee will bow before mighty Eric, and all universe shall shatter before his mighty boots.


--HaloXenon--


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  • 06.30.2005 12:51 PM PDT
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Hell of a chapter. Don't complain about the length, I liked it. - LE


Posted by: HaloXenon
Gridolee will bow before mighty Eric, and all universe shall shatter before his mighty boots.


Heh, that's funny.

  • 06.30.2005 12:59 PM PDT
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Ralph wiggum-simpsons
Soulguard did you just copy the name?
Other than that it was briliant.

  • 06.30.2005 2:19 PM PDT
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no...too long(in a good way)... can't read all at once.................
amazing, just amazing. I'll post again once i've finished it.

(blacks out)

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Posted by: col pain
Ralph wiggum-simpsons
Soulguard did you just copy the name?
Other than that it was briliant.

I know! Poor little Ralph. :(

  • 06.30.2005 3:54 PM PDT

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Thanks Everyone for the support. I'm really glad you liked it.
And yes, col pain, that is Ralph Wiggum of Simpson fame. Well, his name at least. I'm a huge fan of the simpsons and there was a rerun on of Lisa dating Ralph (or so he thought) while I was taking a break from writing, so when I went back to work I threw his name in for fun.
HaloXenon
Eric, Kim and Mel. a Spartan!?!

Not quite. They were involved in the S-III project Research back in 2539. They didn't quite make it to the end of the program because they were merely test subject/application tests. The S-III project continued because of what Carolyn Smith discovered. Notice that Ackerson now has all the data she learned, and Carolyn left the project to stay with the Black Ops as their medical chief aboard the Rogue Fantasy. She stayed with them from 2539-till present day 2552, 13 years. So a lot has happened to them before the Invasion of Troy. A lot of fights and secret Section III missions in the outer and inner colonies.


This was a fun chapter to write, even though there was a lot of stress going on around me as I wrote it. But just to keep you all up to date, Eric and company have one small adventure before they make it back to Earth.
Stay tuned.

-soulguard

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Gridolee will bow before mighty Eric, and all universe shall shatter before his mighty boots.

HAHA I just got the significance of that. LMAO!


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  • 06.30.2005 5:14 PM PDT
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Hehe, I kow I laughed at that name - and now I shall again! Teehee, teeheehee (etc etc)

Well, there's not much more I can say that hasn't already been said by everyone else (damn you peopl! pre-emptively stealing my ideas! you fiends) but I will add my praise; Damn bro! That was kick-ass in a major way! With the Eric/Gridolee and the operations and the Troy bits and the Kim dying and everything! SO much character depth and story, mixed in with goodly amounts of carnage and fury and stuff! Awesome, simply awesome. Keep it it bug, I'll be waiting.

  • 06.30.2005 5:16 PM PDT
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An Amazingly descriptive chapter. You made it seem like we were there watching it all happen, well at least thats what i thought.

  • 06.30.2005 7:11 PM PDT
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loved it SG :)

i dont have a prob with the length at all, coz the quality of writing makes it flow so nicely it doesnt seem as long as it is :)

p.s:

"Eric, I’d ask you to massage my breasts"....... this is getting kinkier and kinkier :p

  • 07.01.2005 3:22 AM PDT
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Posted by: soulguard

HaloXenon
Eric, Kim and Mel. a Spartan!?!

Not quite. They were involved in the S-III project Research back in 2539. They didn't quite make it to the end of the program because they were merely test subject/application tests. The S-III project continued because of what Carolyn Smith discovered. Notice that Ackerson now has all the data she learned, and Carolyn left the project to stay with the Black Ops as their medical chief aboard the Rogue Fantasy. She stayed with them from 2539-till present day 2552, 13 years. So a lot has happened to them before the Invasion of Troy. A lot of fights and secret Section III missions in the outer and inner colonies.



Well everyone who have been part of Spartan projects, even as test subjects only. I count 'em as half-spartans with all augments and stuff. when will we hear something interresting about S-III's of present? Have Ackerson already created promising S-III's and what is their part in the story, because you give these backround info all the time where S-III's are in big part, then how'bout future?

--HaloXenon--

  • 07.01.2005 3:57 AM PDT

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The Silky Carp, demotivated
Glad you liked it demotivated. And silky
With the Eric/Gridolee and the operations and the Troy bits and the Kim dying and everything! SO much character depth and story, mixed in with goodly amounts of carnage and furry and stuff!... awesome statement!! Thanks. 8^D

MCbhav
... kinkier ...

Haha... yeah, Melanie is the stereotype tomboy. She sees herself as a woman but not necessarily a lady. I have a few female friends who act like this, but of course they only tease with their $exuality and never really follow through with what they say. I guess it is their way of being a "tease". And yes, I could get really kinky, but we'll see. This isn't a love story... even though it does seem that way. LOL

HaloXenon
Some good points there. And if you look at it that way then they are, in a sense, Spartans. As for the Spartan III makeing an appereance?? I think that ---- Do to story implications, this statement has been edited by the GUARDIANS, because if you were to read it you would be spoiled of any future suprises in Soulguard's story. He may or may not do something that somebody asked. You may now return to the original post ---. I probably shouldn't have told you that, it may spoil something in the story. But anyway, I hope that helps.

-soulguard

  • 07.01.2005 7:22 AM PDT
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Hmm... yes... and I thought I gave bad hints... LOL.

I think Melanie is a kick-ass character, the kind that says, "yeah I'm girl! You got a problem with that?"

Ah... the many possible romances in this story... I found it pretty sad when Rose ran from Eric to Wesley in that sick bay....

  • 07.01.2005 7:36 AM PDT
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loved it

  • 07.01.2005 7:54 AM PDT

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scorptank; highland brute
Yeah, I love Melanie too. She's a combination of a lot of girls I knew in college and some that I still hang with now. And she's clearly a lot tougher then Rose is, seeing that she's been fighting in a war for the past 15+ years.

And I'm glad you noticed that Rose was going back and forth between Eric and Wesley. I wanted to show the confusion in her mind at that moment. She knew that Eric was hurt, but suddenly she sees Wesley banged up as well. Then she's running back and forth between the two. I thought it was a good scene, but perhaps I didn't explain Rose's state of mind well enough. But you liked it Scorptank, so I must have done an OK job.

There does seem to be a lot of romance possibilities in this story. Dang... Well, you will all understand things more clearly soon.

  • 07.01.2005 8:21 AM PDT
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Yes... a more-than-OK-job, because there really were signs of an internal conflict.


There does seem to be a lot of romance possibilities in this story.


A real pain in the butt for the readers... that was meant in the most positive of ways... I meant that you don't let Rose 'love' Eric more that Wesley or Wesley than Eric or... well... you get the point.

Dang... Well, you will all understand things more clearly soon.

I think we will, sounds like fun to me.

  • 07.01.2005 8:28 AM PDT
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can't wait to enlighten myself with the next chapter

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I thought before this chapter that they might have been the original Spartans, but I see now how Melanie beat the coupple of ODSTs in chapter before this.

  • 07.01.2005 9:43 AM PDT
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an amazing chapter, i am speechless...

  • 07.02.2005 1:02 AM PDT
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yeah now we understand how she beat up odsts

loved it can't wait for the next part

  • 07.02.2005 4:47 AM PDT
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I understand your answer Soul.
Well i just wait next Stage and see what info it will bring.
S-III's and S-II's. Hope you wont end their lives like Mr_C did. Damn he did mean plot twist, -Cencored-Contains Spoiler- them. Well if ya have read it you know what i mean.

--HaloXenon--

  • 07.02.2005 5:08 AM PDT
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Soul, all valid points have been said, and im not too good with words, but...

OMFG I LUV U!!! U R A GOD!!!!
p.s. send pm 4 next chapter plz

  • 07.02.2005 12:39 PM PDT

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everyone
Yup, the muscle enhancements she recieved made them all nearly as strong as a Spartan (without armor), but after the additional treatements (3 weeks in bed) they lost most of their strength. So I guess you could compare them to half the strength of spartans. So Mel could easily whip the crap out of an ODST, sorry ODST fans.

And ajhayter, thanks for the support. But I'm not a god... yet. lol. Kidding. If there was ever a job I wouldn't want to have, being God would be it. I can't even imagine the stuff that a divine enitity would have to do.

Again, thanks everyone for the support. I will be starting chapter 12 on monday so I should be able to give you all an update around tues, wednesday.

-soulguard

  • 07.02.2005 8:22 PM PDT