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He watches every Hodgetwin video they put up...on ALL their channels. He calls them the Hodge Triplets, and considers himself the 3rd triplet. He's started talking and acting like them now. Every other line out of his mouth "Thaaas some BULLLLLL**** maaayne" or "Gotta make dem gainzzzz". He calls his biceps "gains". When he eats post-workout, he talks to his biceps, "Don't worry gains, I'm feeding you. Daddys gonna feed you, gainz *kisses biceps*".

This was a terrific chapter. Very good job, Soulguard! You know, your fanfiction is the first fanfiction I've seen where a Grunt is a major character (but not the central character), and especially the first one I've seen where the Grunt REALLY kicks butt. Keep it up lol.

  • 11.05.2005 9:45 PM PDT
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brilliant soul brilliant the way you played it so that you are supporting neither ark theory in your story brilliant

a few spelling errors one where you missd out gravemind completely and such and such

  • 11.06.2005 2:17 PM PDT
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Sorry I couldn't reply sooner. I had work in my way.

Bloody well done, soulguard. This more than made up (I have no right to say this and it doesn't sound nice, but it has to be said, sorry) for the sort of 'dip' (I think I'm going to smash myself) that Stage 22 seemed to be....

Fantastic, Raynord is back and - as Scorp stated with a smile - kicking some verbal ass. Nicely done, in fact, very well done. Keep me posted.

  • 11.07.2005 11:58 AM PDT
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very nice indeed!!! I got a little confused with the part where the Doc was working on Kelly...was that a flashback to when they were operating on her...oh wait i just remembered it was..i think. I wasn't dissapointed in 22 or whatever is the one before this one. The only thing that is bothering me is this new plague of rage that eric has towards the elites. All through the story he was honorable and kept his word and seemed to want to protect the innocent (rose)...and now after things are coming to a close or closer close he is gonna through away all that he has accomplished and done for the human race to fulfill a vendetta that he has somehow stowed away up until recently...I sure hope he doesn't let his rage and revenge get the best of him.

The gravemind thing i think went well...i mean matter cannot be created from nothing and so there could only be so much that the hell-beast could manufacture in the way of additional appendages before it would reach a max, so it was good that they eventually got close enough to destroy it.
As far as rose goes...well everybody basically hated her at some point early on...but there has been a strong sense of character development and in rose's case it is humility, compassion, and a smack in the face of sacrafice. I feel like she has come a long way and is actually more appealing to me now than Melanie as far as a character (MEl is always spiteful and angry towards her when she only wants to do better and be helpful). So, basically I hope she doesn't end up dead and zombified due to her new outlook and perception of things.
i am excited and have no clue how this will turn out. great work and hope to see some awesomeness this friday.

  • 11.07.2005 5:07 PM PDT

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Thanks everyone. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

NbRsKnGnGlR: Species 001, yeah I can honestly say that will not get answered in this story arc. Perhaps, it will be better clerified in the next (and last) book; Title pending. But as to what youll be reading next?? Some very big confrontations, some more resolutions, and even more Black Ops goodness.

col pain:Another great stage but it seemed that gravemind was killed too easily... It did seem easy didn't it. Simple answers to that, one that I'm sure you all thought but didn't formulate. This gravemind was small, not nearly as large (or old) as its "brethren". The Domadree Gravemind had a nearly inexhaustable amount of flood bodies to feed on while on Dorenth. The Sammy/Justin Gravemind didn't have such a resource.

Commander Watson: Thanks, I wanted to show guilty in a different light then from what we know of him. Considereing that he had over a thousand years of solitude and the lack of physical or mental contact could have drove the little AI... batty. lol. But simply he had a "true" reclaimer at his disposal and was told what to do, according to Protocol. Think back to how he seemed to always be curious whenever the Chief did something different, unlike what a reclaimer would normally do. In Halo 1, If you shoot at him he says the wildest things, or if you go backwards in the library. I wanted to show 343 GS in his natural element.

Scorptank: whoops... this time I think I did miss you. I saw your name but swore I had already sent you a PM. Sorry. pleasedonthateme.

As for the squad. You are correct, but since they all boarded the Rogue Fantasy, they hadn't really found the time to actually "regroup" all the divided sqauds, and platoons. A lot was happening in the space of only a few hours. In my mind I didn't see them as having the time to organize a platoon (which is what actually deploys at the lake side) and since Wesley was heading the charge, he simply labeled the Platoon Red Squad for ease. Wesley brought in roughly 3-4 squads, and some heavy artillary, and since his CO (Eric) wasn't around he didn't bother giving the platoon call sign. Truthfully, this was all in my head as I was writing in Wesley's segment, and I'm glad you spotted this, cause now I see that I didn't add it. Good eye.

And finally the good point.. what did that flashback have to do with IIWYH? There's a pattern starting for these last three stages, one that will lead directly into the last book... not a cliffhanger, but more of a lead in. I think you will all like it. The flashback segment is a retelling of what the Halo's do when they fire. The next flashback will also be at the beginning of stage 25, and it will follow the destructive path of the Halo Wave... essentially, you'll "SEE" why humans and the prophets have this massive hatred for each other. And you'll see why the prophet used the Elites as their "instruments" of destruction. A whole swell of answers are ahead... at leats I hope so. lol

Uberdawg: Palab has a bit of a histoy in the first part of the Trilogy; "Stand Five feet High". And being that he is the descendant of the grunt king (known as the grunt that killed the last Arbiter during the Grunt Rebellion), it is understandable that he is... da man.

highland brute: You bring up a very good point. I've struggled really hard with this story to not include the large Ark theories that are floating around; Killamanjaro, Africa, New Mombasa, Atlantis. I have my beliefs as to where the Ark is, but I don't want to reveal that until I am 100% sure that it is correct... and that won't happen until Halo 3. But don't let that shock you, I fully intend to write the remainder of this story in such a way that the Ark is included, yet the location will still be a mystery, AND you will all be happy with the way it is presented. Granted, I know you will want me to come out and say exactly where it is, but I'm sticking to my moral of not interferring with the Chief and Aribiter's story line. One thing I will admit though, I am sure that the Ark is ON Earth.... but I won't say where.

gruntsRgreat: The only thing that is bothering me is this new plague of rage that eric has towards the elites. All through the story he was honorable and kept his word and seemed to want to protect the innocent (rose)...and now after things are coming to a close or closer close he is gonna through away all that he has accomplished and done for the human race to fulfill a vendetta that he has somehow stowed away up until recently...I sure hope he doesn't let his rage and revenge get the best of him.This change seems sudden, I must agree, but that will be briefly explained in the next stage. It is true that Eric has been harboring some ... deep feelings, but now that things are finally getting back on track, he isn't about to let it slip away. I won't say much about it, but yes, it does have a lot to do with the death of his fellow Black Ops, especially Kim 04 (Siren), but the elites aren't the only ones he has bad blod against.

As far as rose goes...well everybody basically hated her at some point early on...but there has been a strong sense of character development and in rose's case it is humility, compassion, and a smack in the face of sacrafice. I feel like she has come a long way and is actually more appealing to me now than Melanie as far as a character (MEl is always spiteful and angry towards her when she only wants to do better and be helpful).By the end of this tale, Rose will either be the most Hated character I've ever written or the most loved. I'll give you all a brief hint, since we are soooo close to the end... Think about Rose, now think about the title...

Are you surprised?

-soulguard

[Edited on 11/8/2005]

  • 11.08.2005 7:35 AM PDT
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Cool stage, soulguard. Sorry it took me a while to respond... yeah... nothing original for me to say.... Fantastic job.

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By the end of this tale, Rose will either be the most Hated character I've ever written or the most loved. I'll give you all a brief hint, since we are soooo close to the end... Think about Rose, now think about the title...

Are you surprised?

-soulguard

Uuh.... Rose? A rose? Pretty but thorny?

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By the end of this tale, Rose will either be the most Hated character I've ever written or the most loved. I'll give you all a brief hint, since we are soooo close to the end... Think about Rose, now think about the title...

Are you surprised?

-soulguard


I am always a sucker for a happy ending.

  • 11.08.2005 11:53 AM PDT

He watches every Hodgetwin video they put up...on ALL their channels. He calls them the Hodge Triplets, and considers himself the 3rd triplet. He's started talking and acting like them now. Every other line out of his mouth "Thaaas some BULLLLLL**** maaayne" or "Gotta make dem gainzzzz". He calls his biceps "gains". When he eats post-workout, he talks to his biceps, "Don't worry gains, I'm feeding you. Daddys gonna feed you, gainz *kisses biceps*".

By the end of this tale, Rose will either be the most Hated character I've ever written or the most loved. I'll give you all a brief hint, since we are soooo close to the end... Think about Rose, now think about the title...

Are you surprised?

-soulguard


So is Rose going to be the hero or something? Please nobody flame me, but I've actually grown to hate (you do a terrific job of portraying them, Soulguard, I simply don't like what is portrayed very much) Eric and most of the Black Ops in this story. Gridolee and Wesley are the only characters I really like (along with Palab and this new guy, Migpap or whatever his name is). Don't take offense, though: I hate and root against the heroes in 70% of all movies, books or stories.

Can't wait for the next stage...

[Edited on 11/8/2005]

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OMG... soulguard, with Stage 22 you've fallen into a pit you seem to be unable to come out of. This totally sucked ass, man. Sorry dude, but you've lost it.

Now, what's the opposite of what you just read there? That's what I really think of Stage 23, it's just that I'm so late responding, that everyone cut away all the original tidbits. All that was left for me was acting like a total flaming jerk... sorry.

Great stuff, soulguard. Really, some minor flaws here and there, but it's all been mentioned and overall it was great. Keep it coming.

  • 11.09.2005 7:02 AM PDT
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Aww man, i feel bad that i haven't posted in such a long time but i finally caught up and i must say.... good job man. You had me drolling over it and wanting more.

I'm a little stuck on my story right now (writers block) and it's starting to annoy the -blam!- out of me. But its been going away little by little so i hope to get it done soon.

  • 11.09.2005 9:11 AM PDT

He watches every Hodgetwin video they put up...on ALL their channels. He calls them the Hodge Triplets, and considers himself the 3rd triplet. He's started talking and acting like them now. Every other line out of his mouth "Thaaas some BULLLLLL**** maaayne" or "Gotta make dem gainzzzz". He calls his biceps "gains". When he eats post-workout, he talks to his biceps, "Don't worry gains, I'm feeding you. Daddys gonna feed you, gainz *kisses biceps*".

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Aww man, i feel bad that i haven't posted in such a long time but i finally caught up and i must say.... good job man. You had me drolling over it and wanting more.

I'm a little stuck on my story right now (writers block) and it's starting to annoy the -blam!- out of me. But its been going away little by little so i hope to get it done soon.


Yeah, writer's block is really annoying. I got it for a while too, where I was barely able to churn out chapters, but then at the very end it all came flying back to me, and I worked my butt off and got it done.

Maybe I'm an idiot and haven't noticed it, but Soulguard, have you told us the ETA for the next chapter?

  • 11.09.2005 2:56 PM PDT
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OMG... soulguard, with Stage 22 you've fallen into a pit you seem to be unable to come out of. This totally sucked ass, man. Sorry dude, but you've lost it.

Now, what's the opposite of what you just read there? That's what I really think of Stage 23, it's just that I'm so late responding, that everyone cut away all the original tidbits. All that was left for me was acting like a total flaming jerk... sorry.

Great stuff, soulguard. Really, some minor flaws here and there, but it's all been mentioned and overall it was great. Keep it coming.


HEY! I'm the flaming Jerk!

...bastard

(JK)

...and that was a good chapter, sorry I haven't posted in forever, but I still love the story. It's numero uno and I will stay posted. I myself have no time for my fanfic, it hasn't been worked on since ch. 2, My current social life sucks ass as well. I hate homework.

Bye Bye Kids!!
(haha, bye bye bye, it's N'sync! :D)

  • 11.09.2005 8:39 PM PDT

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Sorry for the delay in the update. There really isn't anything new or exciting to add at this point. In al honesty I've only written the first 7 pages of the stage, and trust me, there is a lot more to go. I've been busy with work and playing Battlefront 2 as well as Halo 2... so you can imagine that I don't have a lot ready for tomorrow.

I also want to take my time with these last two stages, seeing that this will basically end the story, I want to do it well. No Stage this week, but I will post an edited section for your enjoyment. I'll drop that on you tomorrow.

-soulguard

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An edited section tomorrow? Neat.

  • 11.10.2005 11:23 AM PDT
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woah! soul guard, your story is just fully sick!
just started reading a couple of daya ago.
i wish to see that rose gets killed by the flood she is a $lut

  • 11.12.2005 3:20 AM PDT
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Edited sections? As in edited Stages? In their final state? Pretty cool. When?

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Hey soul, could you give us an update about when you think this is gonna be done?

"...and where is Gridolee?" me thinks.

  • 11.12.2005 8:28 AM PDT

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Sorry for the confusion. I meant an edited "out" section. Much like Siren/Kim's past, and Simyaldee's report.

Girdolee... he was in the last stage, but a smaller part. You'll understand why the Elites, and Grunts seem to be playing a smaller role soon.

I'm extremelly busy with other projects at the moment, so I don't have the time to clean up the "cut" scene I wanted to post. I will try to post it another time. Look for stage 25 this friday.

-soulguard

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[sarcasm yet true in reality] I can understand that, I have a ton of work too right now...being a freshman and all.[/sarcasm yet true in reality]

Oh, and on a side note, I was just wondering two questions:

1) What is your first name?
2) What is your xbox live gamertag?

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Posted by: soulguard
Sorry for the confusion. I meant an edited "out" section. Much like Siren/Kim's past, and Simyaldee's report.

Girdolee... he was in the last stage, but a smaller part. You'll understand why the Elites, and Grunts seem to be playing a smaller role soon.

I'm extremelly busy with other projects at the moment, so I don't have the time to clean up the "cut" scene I wanted to post. I will try to post it another time. Look for stage 25 this friday.

-soulguard

Stage 25... the last Stage? Friday? There will be a sequel for this story, right? You'll be making a trilogy, right? I mean, it's become such a normal thing for me to read these fanfics, it's hard to think that most of them are ending as we speak. Uberdawg's is over, Clark's is nearing its end, Scorp's is leaning towards the finishing chapters as well... damn... a whole era is dying...

[Edited on 11/13/2005]

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cool, I'll jump in and continue mine then, so that I'm the unchallenged fanfic ruler!!
HAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!

  • 11.13.2005 8:07 PM PDT

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Stage 25 and 26 Update Things have wrapped up on Stage 25. Yes, it is finished, however, there is still much editing cutting that needs to be done. Basically, I need to cut the page length down from 32, to about 21 or so. YEAH, you heard me... 32 PAGES!

Now here is the tricky part. Stage 25 wound up not being the huge action packed stage I was expecting it to be. It took me 25 pages to wrap up all the loose ends (the ones that I could wrap up) and then 5 pages of more Reclaimer history. So what you get is a great beginning and an emotional middle. This is a really slow chapter, however it is full of character plot points, so in that tone it is still quite enjoyable. If your an action fan, and only read this story hoping for action, then you'll have to wait another week for the BIGHUGEACTIONSCENESOFSUPERCOOLBUTTKICKING!!

BUT because this stage didn't flow as fast as planned, this means that I will be adding another stage to this tale. (Yeah, worstpirateevea, you have to put up with me for one more week, lol)

Stage 25 was going to be a short roll of everyone solving their own unique conflicts, and then leading up to the climax on Earth... but after 31 pages of only character conflict resolutions.... well you get the point. Stage 26 will start the action ball rolling, but don't skip stage 25. It is good, very emotional and very character driven. This is the type of stuff that makes stories good. ....... I hope.



More info soon.

-soulguard

  • 11.14.2005 10:22 AM PDT
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I'm waiting, I'm good at it.


...*sigh* I'm already bored.

Well I will try and get another chapter or two out for my fanfic done on thanksgiving break, and probably look at everything I have so far, think it's trash, and revise the whole thing. Or not...

Soulgaurd
I have a few questions. Can you please answer them?
1) What's your first name?
2) What is your live gamertag?
3) Can I send you a friend request?
4) What kind of music do you like?(ex. LP/SOAD/JZ/ etc.
5) Do you like to make me wait?


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Haha.. you should work more on your story. It's a good read.

5) Yes, I take great joy in making you wait for my story. Kidding, but the fact that you (all) patiently wait is great.
4) I listen to anything really; From Christian to G-Unit, a little J-Z, some Modanna, Breaking Benjamin, Sting (for my old skoolz crew) to Boyz to Men. I appreciate all forms of music and it art form. Everything touches my soul in some way or fashion, so it depends on my mood.
3) Sure, friend Requests are welcome, but be warned; I'm rarely online and when I am I usually float around with 4 of my crew buds (not a clan but we act like it) and we slay it up on team slayer. For the time being I'm pretty obsessed with Battlefront 2, and I'm taking a short break from Halo 2. In the past I usually stop playing for a month and then come back to it.
2) soulguard03
1) My first name... the name given to me at birth. The name that describes me when I am called, my identity and call sign... Duane. But around these parts I prefer the handle soulguard. *tilts ma hat and spits in can* Yup, I recon I do.

-soulguard

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Haha, Sounds good, I got battlefront 2 as well, and I love it. Currently I'm playing fable the lost chapters though, so I won't be on for a while. My name is Kevin, but you can call me K Fizzle(sarcastic). I recently got a new REAL account, since my real one expired. My gt is Grunty Madness, and I am currently a whopping level 2 in slayer if you want to play some time. Oh, and I'm a little wigger/ Punk rocker/ EMO/ Pop(some is good)/ R&B/ Oldies kid. I listen to it all too. I am hearin' some Chronic Future in my ear right hur! Oh, and I like to pretend I am a(n): Emo/Anti-Emo/Wigger/ anything funny for me. and I be a freshman, I'm so clean and fresh!

Wow, that turned into a frikin' auto biography and I am too much of a perfectionist too.(I put an apostraphy at the end of Gangsta' <----Dang, I'm so white)

  • 11.15.2005 8:07 PM PDT