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“Indeed. We have uncovered the source of this transmission. Once your fleet returns to Earth, we will travel to the source of it. This ship’s ability to travel in the other dimension is much greater then any of our ships. We will arrive at the location of the transmission in a short time. ”

Timnaldee began to protest. “You will make this journey without the fleet? Elder I can not permit…”

Vornaldea raised his hand and silenced him once again. “We have nothing to fear of them. We know them well. Or I should say, we ‘knew’ them well.”

“No matter elder. Without adequate protection it is unadvisable for you to take such a journey.”

“Your concerns are noted, but you must consider the future.” Vornaldea replied. “At first, I believed it best to run and hope that the Arbiter and the Commander could deal with Truth, and stop the destruction of the galaxy. But now, I see that there is no escaping our fate. None of us can escape this ordeal, young and old must join in the fight. I am sending you to aid the Arbiter and to command our forces, while the Elders and I journey to the distant star and retrieve what we once lost. We will throw everything we have at the Prophets and regain our Honor!”

Timnaldee could see the passion in Vornaldea’s eyes. “Who are they?” Timnaldee eagerly questioned.

“They are the purist of our Bloodline. They are those we once thought were dead, murdered by the Prophets, but we had no proof of the Prophets involvement. We have found them.”

“Are they aware of the Covenant’s betrayal? Will they side with us?” Timnaldee questioned further.

“We re not sure, it will take much time for them to receive our transmission, however, If we can use the full resources of this Seed ship, we hope to return with their army before the Prophets unleash their plans. And there will be nothing that can stop us from finally being free of the Prophets and those wretched Jiralhanae.”

Timnaldee lowered his head in thought. This was a complete mystery to him, and the Elder was not revealing much information. “This army you speak of, is of Sangheili blood?”

“As I said, Supreme Commander, it is of the purist Sangheili blood!” Vornaldea raised his lower mandibles and formed a smile. “We thought it was gone, but now it has been found. Our Queen, Supreme Commander. Our Queen lives!”


To be continued…
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What have I done? Finally the Seed ship shows up and with it come more questions, what is this Queen that they are talking about?

Let the comments and debate begin.

~Soulguard

  • 05.29.2007 7:20 AM PDT

The Mirratord The Right Hand Of The High Council

Never judge a man till you've marched a mile in his boots! After that who cares? He's a mile away AND YOU'VE GOT HIS BOOTS!!!!

i think its fairly obvious who the queen is if you read the mirratord
but great chapter soul as you said a few errors mostly using the word died instead of dead but amazing

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Posted by: WildFire
i think its fairly obvious who the queen is if you read the mirratord
but great chapter soul as you said a few errors mostly using the word died instead of dead but amazing


Agreed amazing. It left me wanting more. I want to know about Gridolyee. (Damnit I can never remember how to spell his name.)

I got chills when Simyaldee said Vasmoela name. Oh goodness. What do we have in store for the heroes and the fate of everyone.

Who are the new creatures your talking about that the Brutes have?

  • 05.29.2007 9:01 AM PDT

“But I will for their sakes remember the covenant of their ancestors, whom I brought forth out of the land of Egypt in the sight of the heathen, that I might be their God..."

Egad's, you have my attention! Incredible chapter, really, incredible!

No time for speculation right now.

  • 05.29.2007 12:24 PM PDT
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Too short!...but damn good. Keep 'em comin'!

(no idea about the Queen, but I'll find out soon enough, I'm sure.

  • 05.29.2007 2:36 PM PDT

The Mirratord The Right Hand Of The High Council

Never judge a man till you've marched a mile in his boots! After that who cares? He's a mile away AND YOU'VE GOT HIS BOOTS!!!!

the queen im sure is simyldees girlfriend/mate she is part of the original forerunner/elite bloodline her dad was a prominent councillor and a few arbiters have been in their family
she was called princess and queen etc in the mirratord side story
and i agree about the to short comment
only three and a half posts come on soul your slipping up * joke *

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Wildfire Yup, you hit it right on the head. But for all of you not up to date on the history of Simyaldee (the Mirratord) don't worry, I won't be forcing anyone to go back and read any of the pre-history stuff. I made those for fun, and to give more info about some of the history, but you won't need to read those in order to understand what is coming. I will have plenty of info revealed in the story so that I won't discourage anyone. The name Vasmeola, Queen, Seed Ship and all will be explained soon enough.

But if you do want to get a full understanding in much more detail, go read "The Mirratord" over on my ff.net page. Check my sig.
SPARTAN 1O4FREDI knew you like this one Fred. lol Sorry it took so long to bring it, but I think you will be very happy with the end result by the time we actually get to this particular arc in the story. After all, in order to achieve Reclamation, the Reclaimers will need the Elites... and the Grunts. Maybe even a Hunter or two. :D
RampantHe's in, he's out. badda boom, badda bing. Hope you didn't get caught reading fanfictions while at work, Rampant. lol My boss just smiles, so long as I don't miss anything crucial. Ahhhh... I love I.T.
Boss Hogg 80 As I said early, you surely will. As for the length, the next chapter perhaps will be longer, a more Mirratord goodness!

Well, with that out of the way, I'm still editing it for FF.net. Hopefully I'll upload it tomorrow for our none B.net readers. Now for the critical info... This level is pretty much foreshadowing something crucial that is needed later in the story (not too much later), and you'll understand why at the conclusion of the Next 2 or 3 levels. Things will shift slightly in order for me to do a series of "filler" levels from the true storyline and allow Halo 3 to launch. After Halo 3 lands the story will pick back up towards the main plot.

THE POINT OF ADDING FILLER......
Basically, I have a tendency to get board with something if I'm not constantly updating it. So, if I were to stop after level 11, and wait until October, to start level 12, I won't have the motivation to continue the story, and most of you may be too far gone to even bother coming back. So, with that noted, I have decided to continue writing throughout the summer and up to the release of Halo 3 (i need the game to progress key segments of the story), and upon getting Halo 3, I will take a 3 week break in order to study the Halo Trilogy and then begin the concluding Arc to the Halo side Trilogy.

The Filler: When I created the short story, "the Mirratord", I eventually knew that certain characters would return and play a huge role in PoR. Around the middle "the Mirratord" I began to see the Halo trilogy in a different light. I took notice, based on the announcement trailer, webdocs, and "starry night", that the Elite's seemed... outnumbered and overwhelmed. Connecting these "facts" with my own trilogy I instantly saw what needed to be done. Now I can't reveal what that is, but it does play crucially to the Prophet of Regret's decision to kidnap Elites in order to preserve them. In "The Mirratord" Regret is secretly an Elite sympathizer, and decides to pretend to agree with Truth and Mercy in their plan to replace the Elites with the brutes. (Read "Conversations from the Universe" and you will see that Truth and Mercy do have their doubts about Regrets abilities and judgments.) I used key facts from the Haloverse to find a nice connection that would play out very well in the future of my trilogy. So, the Filler will begin at one point, detailing some events in a larger scale then I had planned, as I will have 3 months to work on it, and then lead into the finale.

Well, if you have any questions, feel free to ask. It's off to bed with me.

~soulguard

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I am a Sangheili Bard.
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(Huffing and puffing...) Okay, that's that. Wow, a twist. You're pretty good at making those. Wish I knew if I was half that good, but no one seems to know that I have a fanfic at all- I keep thinking B.net is going to ban me for "bumping" because I'm the only one posting on that thread. But this is good material, I enjoied it. Thankyou for posting it, for sharing it, I hope you can come up with some interesting stuff for the filler. I have a feeling your fans won't really notice the difference between story/actual and story/filler. Well, we shall see, shan't we?
~Aardvark

  • 05.29.2007 10:17 PM PDT

Phoenix is dead, long live Phoenix!
Is it?

Just one thing, it seemed to jump in the middle to miss a bit. Thought I hadn't printed a page.

Could just be me.

Oh and you need to improve Simyaldee's death scene, tad too obvious he would survive.

So there are going to a planet a long way away. Seems I am getting two questions answered soon. What do you think are the Sharquoi, and what are those creatures on the planet, (can't remember there names). Nice to see your going off on a tangent, means more stuff to read.

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Posted by: x Lai Tasha x
Just one thing, it seemed to jump in the middle to miss a bit. Thought I hadn't printed a page.

Could just be me.

Oh and you need to improve Simyaldee's death scene, tad too obvious he would survive.

So there are going to a planet a long way away. Seems I am getting two questions answered soon. What do you think are the Sharquoi, and what are those creatures on the planet, (can't remember there names). Nice to see your going off on a tangent, means more stuff to read.


On the contrary Lai Tasha, I feel that Simyaldee would survive no matter what he faces. Just as when someone jumps out of a plane at high speeds, Simyaldee rolled into a ball to cut down on friction and also use his back side to protect vital organs. I knew that Simyaldee would survive even b/4 I read that part.

I agree with you on the last paragraph. I can't wait to see who the Sharquoi are also to see what has be going on with Vasmeola. I am excited to see the Fleet help out the defense of Earth and destroy the Brute's flagship!!!

Posted by: soulguard
Well, with that out of the way, I'm still editing it for FF.net. Hopefully I'll upload it tomorrow for our none B.net readers. Now for the critical info... This level is pretty much foreshadowing something crucial that is needed later in the story (not too much later), and you'll understand why at the conclusion of the Next 2 or 3 levels. Things will shift slightly in order for me to do a series of "filler" levels from the true storyline and allow Halo 3 to launch. After Halo 3 lands the story will pick back up towards the main plot.

THE POINT OF ADDING FILLER......
Basically, I have a tendency to get board with something if I'm not constantly updating it. So, if I were to stop after level 11, and wait until October, to start level 12, I won't have the motivation to continue the story, and most of you may be too far gone to even bother coming back. So, with that noted, I have decided to continue writing throughout the summer and up to the release of Halo 3 (i need the game to progress key segments of the story), and upon getting Halo 3, I will take a 3 week break in order to study the Halo Trilogy and then begin the concluding Arc to the Halo side Trilogy.

The Filler: When I created the short story, "the Mirratord", I eventually knew that certain characters would return and play a huge role in PoR. Around the middle "the Mirratord" I began to see the Halo trilogy in a different light. I took notice, based on the announcement trailer, webdocs, and "starry night", that the Elite's seemed... outnumbered and overwhelmed. Connecting these "facts" with my own trilogy I instantly saw what needed to be done. Now I can't reveal what that is, but it does play crucially to the Prophet of Regret's decision to kidnap Elites in order to preserve them. In "The Mirratord" Regret is secretly an Elite sympathizer, and decides to pretend to agree with Truth and Mercy in their plan to replace the Elites with the brutes. (Read "Conversations from the Universe" and you will see that Truth and Mercy do have their doubts about Regrets abilities and judgments.) I used key facts from the Haloverse to find a nice connection that would play out very well in the future of my trilogy. So, the Filler will begin at one point, detailing some events in a larger scale then I had planned, as I will have 3 months to work on it, and then lead into the finale.

Well, if you have any questions, feel free to ask. It's off to bed with me.

~soulguard


This is why you are the writer and I am the reader. I do not have the imagination to do stuff like this, but I can enjoy it like anyone else. I would say, that the reason the Elites are needed to be preserved comes from the fact they are on the front lines and maybe they do not reach maturity like humans. It could take longer thus there are fewer of them. When it comes to Elites, they would need more food and water to survive due to their size. This could lead itself to fewer Elites than Brutes through Natural Selection. Another part to this scarcity issue is that the Brutes have been waiting in the wings, multiplying and not having to fight wars against other species, and humans.

Another completely different answer could come from Regret knowing about what happens when the Flood spores infect the Original Bloodlines and how they create Graveminds. Knowing this, Regret could have sent her to that planet as a precaution. I am not sure, just ideas in my head.

  • 05.30.2007 9:39 AM PDT

Good Chapter, I can't help but admire how you add in technology only recently released by bungie. The spike grenades, when looking only at the story, shows how the brutes are becoming less relient on Forunner tech. I also love how the brutes have fear when Simyaldee slays them :)

nice chapter!!!

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  • 05.30.2007 10:40 AM PDT

The Mirratord The Right Hand Of The High Council

Never judge a man till you've marched a mile in his boots! After that who cares? He's a mile away AND YOU'VE GOT HIS BOOTS!!!!

spike grenades aint exactly hot news we've known about them for a few months it was one if the first in game features shown,
anyway soul i cant belive it your going to write through the summer?? when you could be out catching some rays? are you mad?, im not complaining though just enquiring about your sanity
the more story the better

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Posted by: WildFire
spike grenades aint exactly hot news we've known about them for a few months it was one if the first in game features shown,
anyway soul i cant belive it your going to write through the summer?? when you could be out catching some rays? are you mad?, im not complaining though just enquiring about your sanity
the more story the better


If Soul is an IT guy like I am a CSR guy, then the rays are only seen through windows. :'-( I cry for myself.

  • 05.31.2007 9:13 AM PDT
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I am a Sangheili Bard.
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For the honor of the Mirratord!

Ahh, sweet rays. If I catch too many (And that's real easy) my natural ivory skin turns a most peculiar shade of magenta! And then I get to watch the layers come up like peeling paint. Not so good for presentation but its neat to watch.
~Aardvark

  • 06.01.2007 7:25 AM PDT

The Mirratord The Right Hand Of The High Council

Never judge a man till you've marched a mile in his boots! After that who cares? He's a mile away AND YOU'VE GOT HIS BOOTS!!!!

lol i tan or burn then tan but no icky skin peely

any update soul

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Posted by: Aardvark
Ahh, sweet rays. If I catch too many (And that's real easy) my natural ivory skin turns a most peculiar shade of magenta! And then I get to watch the layers come up like peeling paint. Not so good for presentation but its neat to watch.
~Aardvark


You sound like my girlfriend who is jealous of my color. I could be beat red one day and the next I will be a golden brown. I love having Native American in me. Soul I could use a dose of POR today. I am well rested and eager to read.

RvB is hilarious.

  • 06.01.2007 8:30 AM PDT
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Posted by: SPARTAN 1O4FRED

You sound like my girlfriend who is jealous of my color.


Well I can assure you I am most certainly not your girlfriend. I'm not jealous of anyone's color, and I have some of that blood in me too but it's awful small. Either Apache or Sioux... I think it's Sioux, but the Chipawa is a given. (I think I may have misspelled that...)

Soulguard--

"Eric and Melanie quickly made there way back to the Pelican and the Sangheili and Grunts raced to Camp Eden, to prepare for what would most likely become humanities last stronghold."

Big ugly typo here, dont mean to be coarse, but there is only one Humanity, not the implied numerous ones in this sentence. You were looking for "humanity's", I think. Possessive, rather than plural...?

~Aardvark

  • 06.01.2007 8:34 PM PDT

The Mirratord The Right Hand Of The High Council

Never judge a man till you've marched a mile in his boots! After that who cares? He's a mile away AND YOU'VE GOT HIS BOOTS!!!!

Sioux isn't the original name of the tribe even though its commonly adopted today it was ment as an insult it means rattle snake its what their enemies called them
Dakota is the proper or rather the original name of the tribe it means friend

got an update soul ?



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  • 06.02.2007 4:43 AM PDT

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AardvarkYou are correct, and we shall see. I do apologize for not posting in your thread, but I am reading it at a leisurely pace. You've done a lot of work... A LOT! Once I hit a good stopping point I'll post a nice critique and work into the rest of the story. Again, thanks for reading. I'm glad you are enjoying it.
And as for the sun and it's dreadful rays upon your skin. lol I'm so glad I don't have that problem.

Lai TashaI've read through it a couple times now, and I think I see what you mean about skipping. The section where Simyaldee is listening to the Brutes, but it's not, everything is in tact. I was worried for a moment that I may have not copy something correctly, but everything is still together. Simyaldee's "death" scene was really not intentionally trying to mislead. A few choice words were used to relay, story wise, that he would appear to be dead or in a really deep unconscious state: "The nothingness at the end of life." I wanted this phrase to really capture that he would seem more then just unconscious, that he did in fact "die", but only for a moment. If I wanted to fool you guys, I would have done something really mean, like not mention him at all for a few levels. Simyaldee's (and Gridolee's) deaths were really there for the other characters in the story, to make them think that he was dead.

The far away world, is not quite as far away as one might think. But I'll leave the details of that for another time. Seems everyone is questioning the Sharquoi and what they will relate to in the Haloverse. It was mentioned that the Sharquoi was going to make an appearance in Halo 2, but got cut at the last minute. Same thing may happen this time, but Frankie and several other B.net staffers seem to suggest that we may actually face off against the creatures this time. What a Sharquoi is, and what it will do in my story will be revealed in the coming levels. And I'm glad you're looking forward to more fun. XD

FredA very good observation, Fred. But it is not so much that they take longer to reach maturity, the average Elite, in this story, is combat ready around the age of 18, and they are able to maintain their flexibility and agility for nearly 90+ more years. The Elders, are the warrior Elites who have reached the age of 150 earth years. Though they are older, they are still quite strong, but they know that they are no longer what they used to be. So on a comparison standpoint, humans and Elites reach combat age at about the same time, however, humans can only fight for an additional 40-50+ years, while elites can fight for twice as long before their body begins to degrade.

Regret knowing about the Bloodline and the Gravemind, is still up for debate. In IIWYH, "Mercy" tells everyone about the creation of the first Gravemind form, but let us not forget that Regret is the younger of the Hierarchy and Truth and Mercy never really trusted him much.

Last StandingWell, slowly but surely all the tools in Halo 3 will be added, but only when it makes since. I won't have the Elites randomly pulling out trip mines or bubbles shields, because they would first need to acquire said tools. The instance where Simyaldee uses a spiker grenade is because he found it on the body of a Brute. And earlier, when the NEW assault rifle was added, it was because of a UNSC weapons drop in the area. Randomly giving your characters new weapons without explaining how they got them.. well... it would suck. lol. Glad you enjoyed.

wildfireYeah, the summer writing plan is in full swing. I mean, I work a full time job, so the summer isn't quite what it used to be back in my younger days. Teh summer is just another rotation of the Earth around the sun. It's just hot outside, for us northern hemisphere folks. You southern hemisphere kids are probably starting to freeze your butts off soon. But yeah, more story, more insanity.



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UPDATE
Nothing new on the next level front. I mostly took the last few days to do some reading, and update my notes. I think it will be two more chapters before I reveal the true purpose of the Elites in this tale and get back to the human saga. I don't know if any of you noticed, but I have switched a little bit away from the humans. Eric and the crew dominated the Earlier levels, and now it is the Elites and grunts time to shine.

But side from that, progress was made, but nothing for the Level just yet. I would say, it may be next friday before I post a new level. Stay tuned.

Oh, and Aardvark, thanks for pointing out that little error. lol I'm sure I've done worse. XD

~soulguard

  • 06.03.2007 9:53 AM PDT

Phoenix is dead, long live Phoenix!
Is it?

Nice, cannot wait, I have a fealing that this chapter will be SFFHish, dunno why but I do.

Love Grunty Goodness and Mirratord Madness. Hmm, what goes with Human?

I'll leave that to the bard to figure out.

I'll be here Saturday, my time.

  • 06.05.2007 2:23 AM PDT
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Leave it to the Bard to figure out??? Well!! I never!
Okay, I'll tell you what goes with Humans...
Grunty Goodness, Mirratord Madness and Human Havoc.

Cry havoc! And let loose the dogs of war!

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Leave it to the Bard to figure out??? Well!! I never!
Okay, I'll tell you what goes with Humans...
Grunty Goodness, Mirratord Madness and Human Havoc.

Cry havoc! And let loose the dogs of war!

~Aardvark


Good quote.

My bad Aardvark from a couple days ago.

  • 06.05.2007 1:15 PM PDT

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A very good quote, Aardvark. And I guess that means Lai called it perfectly. lol
Small update, so that you all don't think I've fallen from the Earth.

This level will be a nice and long one. It will cover two different events, yet still be based on Earth. Nothing from The Queen or the Seed Ship yet. Give it time for that. This is a largely Elite level, with some human twists to keep the story interesting. I swear, by the end of this story, you will almost want to hate the majority of humanity.

But anyway, here's something to hold you over for the next two days. The Title:

Level 10: The Prophet of Signs

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Posted by: soulguard
This level will be a nice and long one. It will cover two different events, yet still be based on Earth. Nothing from The Queen or the Seed Ship yet. Give it time for that. This is a largely Elite level, with some human twists to keep the story interesting. I swear, by the end of this story, you will almost want to hate the majority of humanity.


If the Military brass who is far away from the action and the trenches is making the decisions, then what is there to like about them? Heroes are what we like. Heroes like Sgt. Eric Raynold, Lt. Simyaldee, PFC Rosalyn Santos, and Sgt Palab. Those are heroes, not Admiral Butter Crust, I mean Stanforth. I think I left out Gridolyee, and Melanie and Matthew, but we all can't be heroes.

Posted by: soulguard
But anyway, here's something to hold you over for the next two days. The Title:

Level 10: The Prophet of Signs

~soulguard


Awesome. I can't wait.

First edit --> I don't think I have the name correctly. Is it Stanforth or Whitcomb. Shoot, I can't remember and I am in the middle of making up a survey for my Master's thesis.

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