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Subject: ODST: Shadow Squadron

God is our refuge and strength, a very present help in trouble. Therefore will not we fear, though the earth be removed, and though the mountains be carried into the midst of the sea; Though the waters thereof roar and be troubled, though the mountains shake with the swelling thereof.” – Psalms 46:1-3

Please do not make fun or flame, as this is my first attempt at a fan Fic. I haveadded my own originality to it so the writing style is not of the norm so please no comments about grammar, spelling, or punctuation either unless it is constructive criticism.

Thanks, Now enjoy!





ODST: Shadow Squadron


Location: Unknown System, Covenant controlled space.
Year Unknown: Time 0500 October 5th
UNSC Priority Transmission
Encryption Code:OMEGA RED
From: Unknown
Authorization: Alpha Priority
To: Shadow.
Subject: Orders and attached Documentation.
CLASSIFICATION: BLACK
/Open
Sargeant,
Your orders are as follows, Proceed to Objective At Grid A3 49B. Once at

Objective you are to hold Position until new orders are received.

Enemy Statistics and layout:
100 Grunts
Weapons-Plasma Grenades, needlers, plasma Pistols, and two grunts each

with a Fuel Rod Cannon
Armor- Methane Tank and suit
20 Brutes
Equipment:
Weapons- Spikers, Brute shots, and Carbines
Armor- Normal Ceromonial armor Mark II classShielding
10 Jackals
Equipment:
Weapons- New style Covenant Sniper Clasification unknown
Armor- Each carry a Personal Shield Gauntlet.

The enemie is quite dug in but it shouldn't be to much of a problem with

your new augments. Multiple Shield doors, a few plasma mines, and some

motion tracking, but all in all not much to fear.

Good Luck,
Col, A.

[Edited on 05.01.2009 2:34 PM PDT]

  • 05.01.2009 2:22 PM PDT
Subject: I was Bored so I wrote this.

God is our refuge and strength, a very present help in trouble. Therefore will not we fear, though the earth be removed, and though the mountains be carried into the midst of the sea; Though the waters thereof roar and be troubled, though the mountains shake with the swelling thereof.” – Psalms 46:1-3

-Private Jacobs- Sir! What are our orders?
-Sarge- We are to Proceed to the compound and hold Position until new

orders arrive.
-Jacobs- Thats it?
-Sarge- Well there are about 130 Brutes,Grunts and jackals in our path

*smiles*
-Jacobs- hah Piece of cake *pulls hammer back on SMG* *click*
-Sarge- Check your gear!
- Sarge- Be sure your gears working don't want to lose anyone on the first

strike.
-Jacobs- Sure love this new gear the Egg heads at ONI sent from earth.
-Sarge- Oh baby don't you know it *whistles*
-Sarge- Sound off! Anders!
-Anders- Cocked, Locked, and ready to rock!
- sarge- Sound off! O'brien!
-O'Brien- Here sarge
-Sarge- O'Brian I said Sound off Marine!
-O'Brien- Sir! Locked , cocked, ready for a headshot!
-Sarge- Oooh your getting me hard marine! Jacobs! Sound Off!
-Jacobs- Hoo rah Sir Ready for some grunt stew Sir!
-Sarge- That is Disgusting Private save me some!
-Sarge- Lets Moooove Out.


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0630 2 Miles off Last Location
-Sarge-Internal helmet magnification x8
*Click*(-Internal helmet magnification Zooms in on a compound in the

distance-)
-Vehicles can be seen Driving the perimeters-
-Jacobs- Whats the Jist sarge was the intel correct.
-Sarge- *grunt* They seem to have missed the 2 shade turrets and 3 brute

choppers
-Jacobs- Ha thats all? O'Brien could take all 5 of em out by himself!
-O'Brien- Yea, and you...hahaha
-Jacobs- hahahah...wait what the hell!
-Rest of Squad- hahahahaha
-Sarge- Thats enough with jokes time to get serious marines!
-Sarge- We attack at 0700 marines keep alert
-Sarge- O'Brien Your taking the first Shot. Stay here and cover our asses as we

advance.
-O'Brien- My hands will be steady, my mind will be clear, I will not miss a

shot, Because I see oh so clear!
-Sarge- -blam!- Beautiful marine!
-Jacobs- Kind of -blam!- if you ask me
- Sarge- Can it marine!
-Jacobs- Sir! Sorry Sir!
-Sarge- Ok Shadow lets do our thing!

  • 05.01.2009 2:26 PM PDT
Subject: ODST: Shadow Squadron

God is our refuge and strength, a very present help in trouble. Therefore will not we fear, though the earth be removed, and though the mountains be carried into the midst of the sea; Though the waters thereof roar and be troubled, though the mountains shake with the swelling thereof.” – Psalms 46:1-3

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Helmet Cam : Sarge
Rank: Sergeant
Name: Unknown

/Start Playback

*recording starts*

Ok Shadow Lets do our thing!*Responses heard nearby* -Hoo! rah!-

*weapon comes into view*
"Seems to be a Battle Rifle but of new make...possible covenant tech added"

Weapon begins to fire, the first Brute is put down with a single shot.
"The weapon Seems to fire a Magnetically Accelerated Round similiar to a

UNSC MAC Cannon but Micro sized"

*Loud Crack in The Distance*

-Camera Moves at Inhuman speed to see where the sound came from-

"A strange silhouette can be seen holding a large rifle, barrel red and smoke

coming out"

-Camera turns at that inhuman speed once more looks in the direction of the

shot-

"A Brute chopper, along with a shade is taken out in a single shot , impossible

for any normal human to accomplish"-Note: Augmentation is present

unknown experimentation Col. A. expected culprit-


Haha O'Brien you damn show off!

-Camera Looks in direction of main compound-
"Subject begins firing 8 brutes are put down in a blink of an eye, turned to a

pile of gore and metal"-Note: Weapon is very Effective Suggested mass

production for UNSC Forces-

Ok Marines lets show em why you don't -blam!- with Humanity!

-Subject Pulls strange device from armor-
Note: First look at armor ,Reminiscent of Mark II armor from the Mjolnir

project, only differentials are, smaller Size( easily half the norm),smaller

power supply( yet seemingly effective), and a added component on the right

gauntlet, likely the cause for subject O'Briens Chameleon silhouette.


*large explosion seen on screen Cameras go Black*



-Halsey- Terminate Neural Connection
-Equinox- Dr. who were those men?
-Dr. Halsey- I am unsure
-Equinox- I spotted you making a note that Col. A. was likely responsible.
-Dr. Halsey- Yes...Col. Ackerson the creator of the failed Spartan III
program, great soldiers but a terrible waste.

-Equinox- Why have I not heard of these spartan III's
-Dr. Halsey- They never existed
-Equinox- I see so....Doctor what are you doing.
-Dr. Halsey- I am deleting your memory matrix of this event.
-Equinox- I understand Dr. Proceed.

If liked I will right more.....

[Edited on 05.02.2009 6:09 PM PDT]

  • 05.01.2009 2:27 PM PDT
Subject: I was Bored so I wrote this.

This would be better suited as machinima I think, it's basically a script.

Good job.

  • 05.01.2009 3:01 PM PDT
Subject: ODST: Shadow Squadron

God is our refuge and strength, a very present help in trouble. Therefore will not we fear, though the earth be removed, and though the mountains be carried into the midst of the sea; Though the waters thereof roar and be troubled, though the mountains shake with the swelling thereof.” – Psalms 46:1-3

Posted by: Wolverfrog
This would be better suited as machinima I think, it's basically a script.

Good job.


My concept was ment for the reader to visualize what is going to happen next...The next part to the story ( if people like it ) will be in paragraphed form.

Also Thank you wolf.

[Edited on 05.01.2009 5:54 PM PDT]

  • 05.01.2009 5:53 PM PDT

Shadow
man

Really good!! Im just gonna go ahead and guess that that ODST squad is actually a new squad of spartans but with updraded everything. Anyway that really felt like reading a halo book good job!

  • 05.01.2009 6:25 PM PDT

Halo 3

Its really good.

  • 05.02.2009 7:38 AM PDT

God is our refuge and strength, a very present help in trouble. Therefore will not we fear, though the earth be removed, and though the mountains be carried into the midst of the sea; Though the waters thereof roar and be troubled, though the mountains shake with the swelling thereof.” – Psalms 46:1-3

Thanks for the Compliments, I have a question for any experienced fan Fic writer.


What Style do you Suggest I write the fan fic in( as this is an intro ) I am unsure what style I should use 1st person or 3rd. Also any other suggestions are welcomed!

Thanks!


[Edited on 05.02.2009 6:12 PM PDT]

  • 05.02.2009 6:02 PM PDT

http://2214.spruz.com/
(Site for a novel in progress)

I liked it. I used to write/type that way before.

Thanks for the Compliments, I have a question for any experienced fan Fic writer.


What Style do you Suggest I write the fan fic in( as this is an intro ) I am unsure what style I should use 1st person or 3rd. Also any other suggestions are welcomed!

Thanks!


Idk if you should really listen to me, cause I've only had really one good story(b/c I tried harder on it than the others), but I did write in 1st person, it was easy, yet the chapters were shorter, so I changed to 3rd person, and it was still pretty easy, and the chapters got longer.

here's my 3rd person(IMO, the better version):

http://www.bungie.net/Forums/posts.aspx?postID=32457369

here's my 1st person(IMO, fun/cool, but nothing fancy/realistic)

http://www.halowars.com/forums/thread/408004.aspx

(don't forget to read it(the first one). :P jk)

(the second one is dead. X|

  • 05.02.2009 9:25 PM PDT

Halo 3

I think you should use 1st person and describe how he was feeling at the memoent.

  • 05.02.2009 9:32 PM PDT

Well, I'm unsure if I qualify as experienced, but I think it all depends on the story. Memoirs of an ODST, for example, is written entirely in the first person, and it works. I wanted to show the UNSC's desperation in the war against the Covenant from the perspective of a soldier who was there at the beginning of it all.

Halo 3: Insurrection, on the other hand, is a Halo 3 Epilogue, and it wouldn't have worked in anything but the 3rd person. I couldn't just show what was happening with Master Chief, I needed to show what was going on with The Arbiter, Sergeant Johnson, back on Earth, R'tas Vadum', all these things made it so the story had to be in the 3rd person.

Also, you could do what my dear Sergeant Murph does, he writes some aspects in 1st person, whilst writing others in the 3rd person. And it works very well. Much like how one of my favourite authors, Jonathan Stroud, writes his books.

It's all up to you mate.

Edit - Fyrhawk! I know you from Halowars.com! Do you know me? My account over there is Wolverfrog49.

[Edited on 05.03.2009 1:45 AM PDT]

  • 05.03.2009 1:43 AM PDT