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Do a freakin' barrel roll!!!!!!!111one11!!
Posted by: Jsten419
Posted by: I C D3ad Peopl3
Guys I have posted Chapter 1 on the Bungie Community forum.
Linking would be nice, but here is some advice, picking on just the things you've gotten incorrect BUT NOT THE PLOT.
1. All of Halo takes place in the Milky Way galaxy, Nothing has ever been mentioned as coming from any other galaxy except for the Beastearium which theorizes the Flood came from another galaxy. That's right, not even the chuckleblamming forerunners ever got outside the Milky Way, neither should your Halo creations.
2. There were many, many San Shyuum, before the schism (Sangheili replaced by Jirhalhanea) it is estimated there were almost ten million. Now, it is true that there could only be three high prophets at a time, I do not suggest changing that number. You should make your prophets a lesser member of the more numerous bureaucratic branches within the Covenant.
3. After the war ended on March 3, 2552 there were a large number of systems in Loyalist hands. It may be a good idea to relocate your Super Halo Thingies to an Onyx-like installation, a habitable world which is really an enormous installation created by the forerunners.
I'm not telling you to stop writing, however, do not expect that your creations can be made canon. Eric Nylund is a professional who was hired by Bungie and Microsoft to write a book or two, everything in it conforms to the Halo Bible and anything that had to be created to be in his story was most likely in there first. Become a professional writer with an impeccable knowledge of Halo and you have a chance of writing a Bungie commissioned book.
Speaking of which, you definitely should have known each of the very general facts I have stated above if you are writing a book. I suggest re-reading (Reading?) every book back to back in a very short period of time, two or three times. This could really help you, a lot.
One word I think all of us can agree with here, is, unexplicably, pwned