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Posted by: Cubs1945
a bit too much description, especially with simile with every second. Not to mention that the several paragraphs had nearly no events. 2 things happened, they woke up in a dark ally, and all but the rokie escaped. Try and actually make an ending when you say you are. Also how does killing off everyone but the rokie make a good ending? It concludes nothing.
Firstly, description is usually a quality that most appreciate, however, I understand that there are more simple people on this planet therefore, It's not my place to criticize you for being so.
Otherwise, I do have authority to criticize for blindly replying to my thread in fact that you kept a closed mind and were content on attempting - likely for the entirety of the duration of the your reading - on criticising the post probably in relation to how many replies it has and how it dosen't arrise any insightful information about the true nature of the game. This is evident by means of how you only acquired that the squad woke up in their predicament.
And lastly, yes this can be an ending (you sound as if you've never beaten any of the Halo games on legendary) by nature of apocalyptal meaning.
For someone like you who dosen't like very descriptive writing, I'll keep it short.
- Apocalypses can be viewed as both an ending and a beginning, thus exampled in my ending.
And might I offer some advice - aside from reading with better intention. It is not wise to flame any as cravty as me on a forum, because we'll make you both look bad, and feel bad, so I don't reccomend repeating this in the future...
[Edited on 06.16.2009 7:52 PM PDT]