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  • 06.15.2009 4:36 PM PDT
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Thanks guys :D. I have no idea how this thing works so you could tell me how to use it correctly.

  • 06.15.2009 4:38 PM PDT
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Posted by: Sr sneaky
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*looks up at wall* theres no way we can get around this one guys. looks like were gonna have to turn back.

Yeah. We clicked all this way for nothing.


let's just hope they aren't making 3 more. they might try to box us in.


O il box you in until you tell me how this thing works! Then il consider letting you out. Or, i may damn you do this thread for all eternity.

  • 06.15.2009 4:40 PM PDT

You're like, the bee's knees: you have helped me out a LOT in the past and you're a genuinely nice guy, and you deserve all the best for the good you've done me and surely done others
Count Peter, you're one of the only people I respect on here. Not that that means much on a forum, but still.

You need to paragraph your work so as to make it easier to read.

Otherwise it looks daunting to your potential readers and they wont read it, as well as it being used to create effects of tension etc

  • 06.15.2009 4:40 PM PDT
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Posted by: count peter
You need to paragraph your work so as to make it easier to read.

Otherwise it looks daunting to your potential readers and they wont read it, as well as it being used to create effects of tension etc


Thanks dude :)

  • 06.15.2009 4:43 PM PDT
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There we go!

  • 06.15.2009 4:58 PM PDT
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Ight so what do you guys think?

  • 06.15.2009 7:50 PM PDT

Maybe a backstory where you introduce each guy and what his particular trade is. You know give some info.

  • 06.15.2009 7:56 PM PDT
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should it be 3rd person for the back stories?

  • 06.15.2009 7:58 PM PDT

hi

Maybe you could go into their story and make it first person for them. It would flow well.

  • 06.15.2009 8:00 PM PDT
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il start one now. tell me what u think when im done.

  • 06.15.2009 8:03 PM PDT

Posted by: I Luv 2 Teamkill
should it be 3rd person for the back stories?


It doesn't have to be. Just have the protaganist give his personal opinion on each man.

  • 06.15.2009 8:04 PM PDT
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like, he is telling us about each of his squad members? Like their origins and stuff like that?

  • 06.15.2009 8:06 PM PDT
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Our squad name was Fire team Zulu.
Oh, hey.

  • 06.15.2009 8:07 PM PDT
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Hahahahha. thats golden. Maybe il make it like, millitary files. Descrption of personality and stuff.

  • 06.15.2009 8:11 PM PDT

Posted by: I Luv 2 Teamkill
like, he is telling us about each of his squad members? Like their origins and stuff like that?


Alright, I'm going to help you out right here.

When you have your lead character drop down to the planets' surface, have him go over his team roster. While he's doing this have him talk about each man.

Example: Corporal (insert name here) volunteered as soon as was able, right at the age of 17. He was headstrong, at least in (main character's name) opinion, but had had real trouble adapting with seeing various squad-members killed in action. Luckily (insert main characters name) was able to help him pull through, and the kid was now one of the best heavy weapons specialist (insert main characters name here) had had the fortune of commanding.

Something like that.

  • 06.15.2009 8:13 PM PDT
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Thanks :D im on it.

  • 06.15.2009 8:15 PM PDT
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Posted by: Da Real Caboose
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  • 06.15.2009 8:17 PM PDT
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Old story.

[Edited on 07.09.2009 1:02 PM PDT]

  • 06.15.2009 9:30 PM PDT

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