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Subject: [Story] Halo : Seed of Orion (Chapter Two up!)

Ah, you're right. Ah well, that's only a messed up comment, not in the actual story. And no, Memoirs isn't done, it's still got about five or so chapters left.

  • 08.14.2009 6:28 AM PDT
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Not bad; I like the story. So far, I only read the prologue, and it could use some slight editing. Just one thing for example would be in this clause "He gave nothing away when spoke too, thought Doctor Catherine Halsey..." to take out the "too". I like the sort of battering listing off of this man's qualities, and this takes away from the effect. Also, if you want, you could italicize/quote the "He gave nothing away when he spoke", and personalize the thought a bit, which might add to your limited omniscient effect. However, on a different side, I really liked some of the words you used - e.g. "devoid".

  • 08.14.2009 6:38 AM PDT

I Love ODST. Nice game.

Pease make 3rd. Please. Please.

  • 08.27.2009 2:46 AM PDT

I admit I read the prolog before saving the thread, but it turns out I should have just pressed the save thread button in the first place.

I have got to go read all of memoirs now

  • 08.30.2009 4:11 PM PDT

Posted by: Gunman1208
I have got to go read all of memoirs now


I just re-read it all myself. I know it seems strange reading your own story, but after months, it gets a little hazy. I realise there are quite a lot of errors early on, I may have to sort that out.

Thanks for checking out my stories mate, I appreciate it. I guess I'll have to write part three of this soon, I just want to get Memoirs and Insurrection done first.

  • 08.30.2009 4:48 PM PDT

I Love ODST. Nice game.

Posted by: Wolverfrog
Posted by: Gunman1208
I have got to go read all of memoirs now


I just re-read it all myself. I know it seems strange reading your own story, but after months, it gets a little hazy. I realise there are quite a lot of errors early on, I may have to sort that out.

Thanks for checking out my stories mate, I appreciate it. I guess I'll have to write part three of this soon, I just want to get Memoirs and Insurrection done first.
Good idea. Finish the others first. But before you put Orion on hold you should write part three. Then hold it off.

  • 08.31.2009 7:25 AM PDT

nobody has said anything in this thread for awhile sooooooooo

hi people!

  • 09.21.2009 2:11 PM PDT
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Do not waste your tears, I was not born to watch the world grow dim. Life is not measured in years, but by the deeds of men.

Posted by: goldhawk
We should know better, because we are better.

Hurry up Wolvefrog! Its been a while since you realeased a new chapter.

  • 09.23.2009 4:37 AM PDT

It's about 3/4 of the way done. But now, I am playing ODST. So you'll have to be patient.

  • 09.23.2009 4:51 AM PDT
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Do not waste your tears, I was not born to watch the world grow dim. Life is not measured in years, but by the deeds of men.

Posted by: goldhawk
We should know better, because we are better.

Posted by: Wolverfrog
It's about 3/4 of the way done. But now, I am playing ODST. So you'll have to be patient.
*Stare's at the date on wolverfrog's post*

[Edited on 10.16.2009 3:59 PM PDT]

  • 10.16.2009 3:59 PM PDT

Posted by: Xd00999
Posted by: Wolverfrog
It's about 3/4 of the way done. But now, I am playing ODST. So you'll have to be patient.
*Stare's at the date on wolverfrog's post*


I just don't really feel like writing this right now. I'd rather finish of Insurrection.

  • 10.16.2009 4:04 PM PDT
Subject: [Story] Halo : Seed of Orion (Prologue)
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No matter how many seals are killed by sharks a year, it never seems to be enough :D

Just read prolague, niceeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee. u Brilliant writing! As always.

PS. Can u check out part three of Rise of Harvest.

  • 10.16.2009 4:10 PM PDT
Subject: [Story] Halo : Seed of Orion (Chapter Two up!)
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Do not waste your tears, I was not born to watch the world grow dim. Life is not measured in years, but by the deeds of men.

Posted by: goldhawk
We should know better, because we are better.

Posted by: Wolverfrog
Posted by: Xd00999
Posted by: Wolverfrog
It's about 3/4 of the way done. But now, I am playing ODST. So you'll have to be patient.
*Stare's at the date on wolverfrog's post*


I just don't really feel like writing this right now. I'd rather finish of Insurrection.
Fair enough.

  • 10.16.2009 4:16 PM PDT
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This last chapter was a surprise... It's the love of a loving dad I think. Nice story, this Umbra guy suprised me even more.

Its like the guy called 'L' from the Animae I see called DeathNote, Ha, Keep up the good work, its the most entertaining there is from being on the forums.

[Edited on 10.20.2009 1:03 PM PDT]

  • 10.20.2009 12:58 PM PDT
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Are you serious, It got cool till the end.
Posted by: Wolverfrog
I just don't really feel like writing this right now. I'd rather finish of Insurrection.


But I understand.

  • 10.20.2009 1:05 PM PDT

Posted by: Zanzipants
Wolverfrog you fool! Haha, now I'll take all of your readers!
lol, it's Chuckles btw.
Good work! Though, I already read it.



GTFO, YOU'RE RUINING THE MOOD!!

I have become what I set out to destroy...
:(



a wolver fan-fic boy

*breaks down in corner and cries*

I want to catch this story a piece at a time, and not start memoirs cos I know I won't be able to stop reading until I've read it all, like I did with insurrection

[Edited on 10.20.2009 2:20 PM PDT]

  • 10.20.2009 2:07 PM PDT
Subject: [Story] Halo : Seed of Orion (Prologue)

Posted by: steadman
I have become what I set out to destroy...
:(

a wolver fan-fic boy

*breaks down in corner and cries*


Here, have a tissue. It has the first chapter of Insurrection printed on it!

:P

  • 10.20.2009 2:16 PM PDT

Posted by: Wolverfrog
Posted by: steadman
I have become what I set out to destroy...
:(

a wolver fan-fic boy

*breaks down in corner and cries*


Here, have a tissue. It has the first chapter of Insurrection printed on it!

:P


*sniff*

I'm not upset cos I read that one - in one night
:)

  • 10.20.2009 2:21 PM PDT
Subject: [Story] Halo : Seed of Orion (Chapter Two up!)
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This discussion is avoidable but some people just like to make everything pop up.

When the next chapeter is comming?

PS: Hey Wolvie, check my first story called the 'Forerunner's 100,000 year war.

[Edited on 10.21.2009 1:01 PM PDT]

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