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Subject: Heretic or Hero?---An Elite's story (Remastered) Updtd: 6/26

Posted by: Dropship dude
No, acnboy. Spartain Ken 15 is a lesser being. Much like the bacteria that lives in your shi­t.
Posted by: mike120593
My shi­t bacteria takes offense to that comparison.

Don't make me lel. You won't like me when I lel.

Yay, far-fetched awesomeness - included.

I think he's talking about Kovalee and the whole machined-up thingy.

  • 10.14.2009 3:44 AM PDT
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Do not waste your tears, I was not born to watch the world grow dim. Life is not measured in years, but by the deeds of men.

Posted by: goldhawk
We should know better, because we are better.

Posted by: Sergeant Murph
Posted by: Xd00999
Posted by: Sergeant Murph
The storyline that I'm going by now DID NOT HAPPEN IN THE ORIGINAL!
~Murph~
So that means no giant plasma grenade and Frankstein references? :(


What? Arr you insane? Of COURSE said giant plasma grenade will be included, er. somehow.

What frankenstein reference is this? You mean the whole thing about Kovalee?
Good. Not including the giant 'nade would make me :(.

  • 10.14.2009 5:16 PM PDT
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I just read the thing for the first time. I think you have a great story going. Keep up the good work! I can't wait for the next installment.

  • 10.16.2009 5:55 PM PDT
Subject: Heretic or Hero?---An Elite's story (Remastered) Updtd: 10/26

Halo: Heretic or Hero---An Elite's Story
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Forged in the Flames of Passion, go forth and represent!

Chapter Eight

Hide & Seek

The two Marines led Anderson and Burns down through the narrow white hallways until they reached the immense automatic doorway and stepped into the warm afternoon air that reminded them too much of Earth.

"Our scouts saw them marching across the plateau," one of them explained. "Reported eight Wraiths and a good bunch of them on foot."

"Did you radio in to any neighboring bases? Anybody at all?" Burns queried.

"We tried, but there was no response. We think the Covenant are looking to break all local bases at once. They're either fighting, or...or..."

"Dead," Anderson said grimly. He looked up the great walls of the canyon that the Beehive was so cleverly laid out at. Burns drew up to stand beside him, his eyes also climbing the great wall.

"We're 'fighting this one out', aren't we?" Burns mocked, a bit miserably. Anderson nodded slowly, his formerly peaceful looking eyes transforming to a dark glare filled to the brim with intensity.

"You know me too well."

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Covenant Holy City, High Charity
Ninth Age of Reclamation




"He betrayed us. Betrayed us all. I could tell he was a coward from the moment I stared into his filthy worrying eyes."


"Have you charges to put to him?" said an unimpressed Prophet of Truth, fiddling with his fingernails, unhindered by the Elite soldier's hatred and vindication. It was not normal that the High Prophet would accept a soldier of such low religious stature into his chambers, but the fact that he had slaughtered the six Honor Guards on the threshold had gotten his attention, impressed him greatly.


"Heresy on the highest mark. He aided the humans in battle, then left me there to die." When Truth did not meet his furious gaze, he added, "But that is not all."


"Go on," demanded Truth, who could care less about the conversation. What did it matter if one Sangheili joined the Humans? One traitor, nay, a thousand traitors was nothing compared to the Covenant's ever-prospering armies.

"He was not of my squad, nor the other that aided the assault. He donned the red armor of a Major, but it is very possible that there was another piece of his armor that he was cleverly hiding."


"What are you trying to tell me?" said the San 'Shyuum Hierarch, losing patience.


"He was in the tower with the High Prophet of Regret. He was the one that fled. The last living Honor Guard serving him."


Truth's eyes widened for a moment, and he sat slowly up in his Gravity Throne. Blinking his overly large eyelids, he hovered closer to the kneeling, wounded Sangheili, looking thoughtful.


"If you're assumption is true, then what do you suggest? I shall have no part in quelling this heresy; I have more demanding errands to attend to."


Zens Kovalee slowly, painfully raised his head and looked Truth straight in the eyes. "I shall dispose of this heretic."

End Transmission



[Edited on 10.27.2009 4:00 PM PDT]

  • 10.27.2009 3:35 PM PDT
Subject: Heretic or Hero?---An Elite's story (Remastered) Updtd: 10/10)

The Hybrid a FanFic by Tehface

"Look for the signs, the keepers of the flame. They will lead you to war, and perhaps, to victory."

Revelation! I like this story alot. I've never read the original "Heretic or Hero" but this version seems to be well polished, awesome edition of it. More plox.

Oh! And go back and fix the bolding on the Covenant Holy City thing. :P

  • 10.27.2009 3:58 PM PDT
Subject: Heretic or Hero?---An Elite's story (Remastered) Updtd: 10/26

Posted by: Dropship dude
No, acnboy. Spartain Ken 15 is a lesser being. Much like the bacteria that lives in your shi­t.
Posted by: mike120593
My shi­t bacteria takes offense to that comparison.

Don't make me lel. You won't like me when I lel.

Woah woah woah! Why is everything locked?? ajw and wolvie banned?

[Edited on 10.30.2009 2:54 PM PDT]

  • 10.30.2009 2:53 PM PDT
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Do not waste your tears, I was not born to watch the world grow dim. Life is not measured in years, but by the deeds of men.

Posted by: goldhawk
We should know better, because we are better.

Posted by: random no337
Woah woah woah! Why is everything locked?? ajw and wolvie banned?
Something about buddy bumping... Anyway Murph can steal the spotlight now. :)

  • 10.30.2009 4:13 PM PDT

Awesome this deserves to be published.

  • 10.30.2009 5:59 PM PDT
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Do not waste your tears, I was not born to watch the world grow dim. Life is not measured in years, but by the deeds of men.

Posted by: goldhawk
We should know better, because we are better.

Not publishing this would make me :(. Is it to late to include this in halo evolutions? Replacing the story about Soren maybe?

  • 10.31.2009 4:31 AM PDT

Halo: Heretic or Hero---An Elite's Story
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Posted by: Xd00999
Not publishing this would make me :(. Is it to late to include this in halo evolutions? Replacing the story about Soren maybe?


Too much legal trouble I think... There would be nonstop banter going on. Why wasn't MY fanfiction published over this guy?. Stuff like that.

Besides, I'm not looking to be published. I just do this because I want to give something to the community, and I have fun with it :)

  • 10.31.2009 5:55 AM PDT
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Do not waste your tears, I was not born to watch the world grow dim. Life is not measured in years, but by the deeds of men.

Posted by: goldhawk
We should know better, because we are better.

Posted by: Sergeant Murph
Posted by: Xd00999
Not publishing this would make me :(. Is it to late to include this in halo evolutions? Replacing the story about Soren maybe?


Too much legal trouble I think... There would be nonstop banter going on. Why wasn't MY fanfiction published over this guy?. Stuff like that.

Besides, I'm not looking to be published. I just do this because I want to give something to the community, and I have fun with it :)
Add it on at the end?
Or perhaps in stead of making this a trilogy make it a really long fanfic and the three books become part 1,2 and 3.

  • 11.01.2009 10:59 AM PDT

Halo: Heretic or Hero---An Elite's Story
Choose your own destiny

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Forged in the Flames of Passion, go forth and represent!

Ah, hello again. It's been a looooooong time since I've updated this thread, and I feel it is my obligation to continue this fanfiction that I started more than a year ago (on my first day on B.net, I might add). It deserves an ending. I am going to continue it.

~Murph~

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Chapter Nine

Fears and Fanatics

What a mess I'd gotten myself into.

The situation had been bad enough before, but now it seemed to have peaked in my level of misery. With every moment that I spent in this base, my enemy's base, another part of me seemed to break, and the same damned rhetorical question floated amidst my sour thoughts.

Who am I?

Such a small question that lead to no answers. I wasn't Solonee, the most cowardly Honor Guard in the history of the Covenant itself. I wasn't Solonee the fierce heretic. I was simplyalone. Devoid of all I had once had.

But I had never had much anyway.

"You are weak, Solonee. You are no Honor Guard. You are not fit to protect these Hierarchs. You are not fit to stand in their presence."

For a moment, the memories replayed themselves once more. I could see it all vividly. The Brute, Janerus, his impossibly broad shoulders and menacing red eyes making me feel small. And then I saw my father. The one thing I had clung on to when all seemed lost in my miserable life. I reached outward with my hand, wanting to touch his face, the only part of him that was not armored and battle torn, one final time.

My hand snagged naught but air.

I sighed and shut my eyes tightly, and let the memories take me away.

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There was only one route up the canyon walls and back onto flat ground: a long metallic lift that served as an elevator for infantry and vehicles alike. Not the most practical way to escort troops from their hideout in the abyss below, but it wasn't half bad for a job that had been done in less than two days.

Anderson glanced quickly around the lift at the other six squads of Marines, each with the same expression ridden with the same anticipation. Or was it fear? Anderson couldn't decipher. He glanced again at Burns, who looked more uneasy than a child getting a pair of socks for his birthday.

"What's the matter?" Anderson said quietly, trying not to smirk at Burns' horrified expression.

"Heights," he replied simply. He swallowed a lump in his throat and forced himself to gesture downward. "I don't like heights."

Despite himself, despite the battle that was about to take place, Anderson threw his head back and laughed. This was a kid that had trained since the womb to serve in the military, who wouldn't miss a sniper shot if he was blindfolded and down an arm. And he was afraid of heights.

"You know, I heard the Navy was talking about recruiting you for a new post," Anderson said wryly. Burns looked up. "What do they call them again? I think it was 'Orbital Drop Shock--"

"Not funny!" Burns' ears had turned red hot, but the entire squad was in stitches.

The elevator finally leveled with the top of the canyon, and Marines spilled off, taking to their posts all across the barren hillside. Turrets sprung from the ground, creating an inverted U around the perimeter of the canyon. A brigade of Warthogs were aligned some ways ahead, each equipped with driver and gunner.

They were ready.

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Less than a mile ahead, a single Phantom descended down amongst the battle line. The transport had brought with it only two Elites, a Field Master, proud and prepared, and a war-battered, abnormally large Ultra.

The Field Master, Rymn Zanakee, folded his arms as the ship's gravity lift slowly descended him downward until his hooves smacked against the dirt. The Ultra landed beside him, his eyes narrowed until they were but slits that bore no mercy. Zanakee glared at him.

"The Prophets have willed your presence in this operation," the Zealot said. "But I fight alongside my battalion. You are not one of them. You are not welcome, Zens Kovalee. I know of your past." Kovalee turned the flaming gaze aside. His hands balled themselves into fists, so tightly that he nearly crushed his fingers. He normally wouldn't have let himself absorb the anger that was constricting him. He normally would have run this Elite through with his blade, and wouldn't give a second thought to dumping the body into a bottomless chasm. But he wasn't here to do that. He had a job to do.

Only one Sangheili would die by his hand today.

End Transmission


[Edited on 12.15.2009 5:43 PM PST]

  • 12.15.2009 5:43 PM PDT

¡Hoka Hey!

You're Really Good, Excellent Work!

  • 12.15.2009 8:33 PM PDT
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finally an update!!!

this is turning out better than theoriginal. i can see the epic battle happening already. i also thoiught that zanakee was supposed to be a spec ops elite? ah it doesnt matter i just hope sol and kovalee fight next chapter :)

oh also i lol'd when anderson was making fun of burns because hes afraid of heights rofl

[Edited on 12.16.2009 2:36 PM PST]

  • 12.16.2009 2:36 PM PDT
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0.O this story is amazing, seriously brilliant, bungie should publish some of these

  • 12.17.2009 1:17 PM PDT

Posted by: Dropship dude
No, acnboy. Spartain Ken 15 is a lesser being. Much like the bacteria that lives in your shi­t.
Posted by: mike120593
My shi­t bacteria takes offense to that comparison.

Don't make me lel. You won't like me when I lel.

Ah, finally! The ODST remark was awesome :D

(oh, and sorry for booting you from that custom, we're all aussie and you pulled host)

  • 12.18.2009 4:03 AM PDT

Halo: Heretic or Hero---An Elite's Story
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Posted by: random no337
Ah, finally! The ODST remark was awesome :D

(oh, and sorry for booting you from that custom, we're all aussie and you pulled host)


Ha, 'tis okay. I thought it was because I was cheating :D

Posted by: AssaultCommand
When can we expect more awesomeness?
I might make a wallpaper for it if you keep up the good work and make a 3-4 book series of this. Good luck!


More awesomeness will be out around next week, probably. And yes, this is going to be a 3-story series. This is only the first, it really just acts as an introduction to the series (It is quite short, actually).

Believe me, the awesomeness hasn't even fully begun ;D

Also: A wallpaper would be sweet. The last time someone made me one was a looooooooong time ago, but I still hold it close to my heart :D


  • 12.18.2009 2:08 PM PDT
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I done some fan art for this, I'm an artist :P lol not really, but I think its pretty good, its the elite in his honour guard armor, holding his helmet, but looks cool =] but I don't know how to get it up on the internet =[ =[ AWESOME STORY!!

  • 12.18.2009 4:48 PM PDT

"Oh, death was never enemy of ours!
We laughed, knowing that better men would come,
And greater wars: when each proud fighter brags
He wars on death, for lives: not men, for flags"

"The Next War"
http://www.blackwaterops.net/forums/index.php?referrerid=795

another excellent chapter, keep up the good work murph

  • 01.05.2010 1:11 PM PDT
Subject: Heretic or Hero?---An Elite's story (Remastered) Updtd: 6/24

Hmmm, I don't know what to say...

cool.

  • 01.05.2010 3:06 PM PDT
Subject: Heretic or Hero?---An Elite's story (Remastered) Updtd: 6/26

where is it posted, i havnt gottn on Bungie in a few months so im so friggin lost, if u point me to it ill read it 4 sure, this is my 10th time reading "Hero or Heretic" thx

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You've got a good style and a lot of ideas. Keep writing. Keep writing. Keep writing.

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