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When life gives you lemons, ferment them and get drunk.
Your story is nice, and has a lot of ppottential. I suggest using microsoft word to type it up, then transfer it to this. You will need to use a format converting thing that bungie has linked onto the gallery forum. It is on one of the posts they made. It's the post about format that bungie requieres to be used. So yea. Also, avoid using repetative words and phrases. For instance, you shouldn't use one word at the beggining of a sentance consecutavly. Use a variety of vocabulary. This doesn't mean you can never use the same word twice, just space it out a little. Say three sentances or so. You can also use short phrases to refer to a character. In one of my stories, i had a sentance, " The mighty spartan, the unstopable hero, began to cry." I refered to him in ways other than just spartan. You could use stuff like, the armored giant, colossus, supersoldier, ect.