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Subject: [Novel] True Sangheili (Part 32 available!) ~ 21st July

"I believe that the sound of racking the pump of a shotgun is universally recognized as ‘kiss your ass goodbye’."
— Unknown Marine

Now that was an unexpected complication. Brilliant work.

  • 08.03.2011 12:44 PM PDT
Subject: [Story] True Sangheili (Part Nine is available!) ~ 30/09

"Enjoy that extra nose hole" Buck in Halo 3 ODST
"Head meet bullet, Bullet meet Head" Mickey in Halo 3 ODST "Spartans never die Jorge, they're just missing in action" Carter to Jorge in Halo Reach "Never make a girl a promise if you know you can't keep it" Professor Halsey to Master Chief in Halo Legends and Cortana to Master Chief in Halo 3
"Common' ya' dumb apes! If you want breakfast you gotta' catch it!" Sargent Johnson to Brutes and other Covenant in Halo 3

I don't know why, but because of the Spartan's facial injuries, his location being on Eriandus II and the fact that Emile has a face thing scratched onto his visor, I keep thinking the spartan is Emile, but hes most probably not :P

  • 08.03.2011 1:38 PM PDT
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I had to log on to post this. I have not been here all that long, and I do not post that often. But, I have been lurking for a long while.

YOU MADE ME POST THIS


What the hell is with this? Are you trying to bore me with two dimensional characters, a story which has obviously been made up as it went along and twists so obvious a bat could see them? Your vocabulary is limited and your intelligence is in question.

I read this story out of fascination that a story could actually gather a damned fanbase when other fan fics get no readers at all, its just unfair and retarded.

Also, I can't help but notice how overly human you make the elites, they're not tea-drinking, chocolate eating brits, they are aliens and they should be portrayed as such. You've somehow managed to make half of your fanbase -blam!-ly attracted to aliens, you are a furry machine and I seriously think you might be attracted to fricking elites too.

Anyway, had to get that off my chest.

  • 08.04.2011 12:38 PM PDT
Subject: [Novel] True Sangheili (Part 33 available!) ~ 29th July
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"but you already knew that, I mean, how couldn't you?

Only when no Human brick is left atop another, shall we be satisfied with your destruction.


Posted by: Illusive66
I had to log on to post this. I have not been here all that long, and I do not post that often. But, I have been lurking for a long while.

YOU MADE ME POST THIS


You should lurk more and post less.
It would be better for all involved.


What the hell is with this? Are you trying to bore me with two dimensional characters, a story which has obviously been made up as it went along and twists so obvious a bat could see them? Your vocabulary is limited and your intelligence is in question.

1: The characterisation is good, each character has a distinct personality, and different motivations.
2: Most stories are adjusted as they are written.
3: Bats actually have excellent night vision.
4: The story is well written (very well written as far as fanfiction is concerned) and the authour's use of vocabulary does not appear to be particularly limited....
5: I don't think you have the right to question anyone's intelligence.

I read this story out of fascination that a story could actually gather a damned fanbase when other fan fics get no readers at all, its just unfair and retarded.

Aaaaahhhh, I see!
You wrote a rubbish fanfic and everyone ignored it, and now you are bitter, got ya...

Also, I can't help but notice how overly human you make the elites, they're not tea-drinking, chocolate eating brits, they are aliens and they should be portrayed as such.

They are portrayed in the same way they are portrayed in canon.
Sangheili society is similar to Human society in many respects.
Plus everyone knows real men drink tea. Even if they are aliens.

You've somehow managed to make half of your fanbase -blam!-ly attracted to aliens, you are a furry machine and I seriously think you might be attracted to fricking elites too.

This would be the classic case of projection, hmm?
Well, I'm not going to judge you, others might.

Anyway, had to get that off my chest.


Your opinion has been noted, filed, and discarded, have a nice day.




On a different note: Really enjoying the story Wolver, looking forward to the next part, good job!

[Edited on 08.04.2011 6:08 PM PDT]

  • 08.04.2011 6:04 PM PDT


Posted by: Illusive66
I had to log on to post this. I have not been here all that long, and I do not post that often. But, I have been lurking for a long while.

YOU MADE ME POST THIS


What the hell is with this? Are you trying to bore me with two dimensional characters, a story which has obviously been made up as it went along and twists so obvious a bat could see them? Your vocabulary is limited and your intelligence is in question.

I read this story out of fascination that a story could actually gather a damned fanbase when other fan fics get no readers at all, its just unfair and retarded.

Also, I can't help but notice how overly human you make the elites, they're not tea-drinking, chocolate eating brits, they are aliens and they should be portrayed as such. You've somehow managed to make half of your fanbase -blam!-ly attracted to aliens, you are a furry machine and I seriously think you might be attracted to fricking elites too.

Anyway, had to get that off my chest.


I think you need to realise that this has been written over a period of about two years. I wasn't a good writer two years ago, and I'm still learning even now.

Two dimensional characters? They were originally, yes. I have tried to flesh them out more recently and I do not think I have done a bad job. As for the twists I do not think they were so obvious; did you really think Restraint would reveal to Sorran that the Great Journey is a lie, or that Zharn would win his duel with Xatan'ee not by chance or skill but through cheating, or that Ahkrin would be the one tasked with killing Restraint?

I'm not saying this is the sixth sense of anything, but they're not horrible twists.

My vocabulary is stronger than that of most, and I have an A* English Language GCSE grade to back that up. I do not use the full extent of my writing skill with this story though; were I to do so I'd be writing it forever -- I just write on the fly and proof-read lightly maybe once. As for my intelligence, well, I hardly see how that is in question at all.

This story has sort of been made up as it went along. Certainly when I set out I had no idea what I was going to do with it and it does show; remember this was two years ago and the writing quality was awful. After the small twist in part fifteen though, I did etch out a rough plan; of course I deviate from it from time to time, but I do believe that book two has flowed rather well.

Do I attribute the Sangheili with human traits from time to time? Definitely. It's something I picked up from Babylon 5; I found it very interesting when the aliens would be introduced to some human cultural element. I would argue the only one attracted to the Sangheili in this thread is Nums and he's been that way a long time. Indeed, the only actual scenes between aliens involving sex I've written have been tiny little segments at most which do not elaborate. I myself am not a furry at all, I assure you, and I do not find the prospect of a fictional alien with mandibles attractive in the slightest. If others do, then that is their business. I'm just trying to tell a story here.

And that brings me to my final point. You seem to be insulted that people read this. They obviously do for a reason, a reason outside my control. I just write this because it's something to do.

As I said, I started this years ago. I look back and cringe at what I wrote. Most would simply abandon a story like this and start something new. I'm finishing it, which is more than can be said for most fan fiction writers.

At the end of the day, I've just turned sixteen years old and I'm writing a fan fiction as something do when I've got the time. I don't spend all my life writing this; I've got a job, studies, friends -- this is something to come back to and maybe spend an hour or two writing a chapter when it's a cold night or a rainy day.

If you've got issue with it, then by all means do not read it. I'm secure in the knowledge there are a bunch of people who read and enjoy this, and to me that's an indicator of me being at least somewhat decent at writing. As you said, few other fan fictions have a fanbase like this. There's probably a reason for that.



[Edited on 08.05.2011 9:00 AM PDT]

  • 08.05.2011 1:43 AM PDT

By the power of truth, I, while living, have conquered the universe.

Connor just got trololol'd. :P

  • 08.05.2011 6:44 AM PDT

The Razor.

For the honour of the Mirratord.

lol

  • 08.05.2011 6:59 AM PDT
Subject: [Story] True Sangheili (Part Nine is available!) ~ 30/09

Duly noted. Note discarded.

-Stamps forehead-

'ANTI-TROLLED'


At any rate. When is the next Chapter going to be out? My patience is gnawing at the back of my mind...

-reads other posts-

OOOO we're all telling our ages? I'm 15 and act as such.

Might as well continue working on one of my FFs that suck.

  • 08.05.2011 5:51 PM PDT

"We live in a special time; the only time where we can observationally verify that we live in a very special time" - Lawrence Krauss.

I was a finalist :P

My hat goes off to you Mr Maher. I have learnt so much off you and your skill has definitely assisted my story.

I hope to ascertain as good a novel as yours. You are a brilliant writer

  • 08.05.2011 11:32 PM PDT
Subject: [Story] Halo: True Sangheili (Prologue and Part one up)

You could be a writer you know that, yes?

  • 08.06.2011 2:55 AM PDT
Subject: [Novel] True Sangheili (Part 33 available!) ~ 29th July

"We live in a special time; the only time where we can observationally verify that we live in a very special time" - Lawrence Krauss.

I was a finalist :P


Posted by: AssaultCommand
I love the way that guy made the account just to troll you.

Which guy are you referring to? Illusive?

[Edited on 08.06.2011 7:27 AM PDT]

  • 08.06.2011 7:27 AM PDT

"There came a man who was sent from God; his name was John. He came as a witness to testify concerning that light, so that through him all men might believe."
Gospel of John, 1:1-7

Love it. I'm so impatient though!

  • 08.06.2011 8:54 AM PDT
Subject: [Story] Halo: True Sangheili (Prologue and Part one up)

The Razor.

For the honour of the Mirratord.

Posted by: ENDESHA 115117
You could be a writer you know that, yes?


He already his a writer.

  • 08.06.2011 10:26 AM PDT
Subject: [Novel] True Sangheili (Part 33 available!) ~ 29th July

Why hello there.

Microwave ovens are quite large.

WORT, WORT,WORT!

-NUMS!

My Birthday is on the 8th. I expect a new chapter.

And I love how Akrin is probably going to have a confrontation with Sorran.

[Edited on 08.06.2011 9:17 PM PDT]

  • 08.06.2011 9:16 PM PDT

No, I meant as in him writing books and making money off it.

  • 08.08.2011 6:26 AM PDT

I am the ONE AND ONLY Pyro.

I recommend This
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I have a feeling The prophets are trying to get Akhrin killed...

  • 08.08.2011 11:20 PM PDT
Subject: [Novel] True Sangheili (Part 33 available!) ~ 29th July

Why did you feel the need to tell him your petty problems with his wonderful story. Maybe you could not lurk and gtfa. If you have a problem with his story, there is an extremly simple salution: Spend your time else where. Unfortunatly, people as rude as you post things like this when they dont need to be involved. Unless of course you are super defencive of the halo universe canon and are a nerd who wants to look cool in front of the viewers of this story.
On a happer note, great strory wolverfrog. Please dont stop. By the way, shouldn't you tie things up with sorran and savhra and make them a couple again? ;)
I think that you shouldn't let people put you down for your writing and i also think that you shouldnt put yourself down in the same way. So I think i speak for kost of us when i say that even he beginning was awesome and showed great potential. Every thing is very well written with the exeptions of a minor few parts that i wouldn't care to go into detail over. Anyway that person who bad mouthed you can go to hell right?
Great work!! :D

One last thing I think you have great potential as a writer and should go down that career path. Unless, of course you were planning on doing something else. Anyway dont let people put you down and don't put yourself down either. That isn't going to get you anywhere in life. I think i speak for most of us when i say that even the beginning

[Edited on 08.09.2011 11:32 PM PDT]

  • 08.09.2011 11:16 PM PDT

I will be the last thing you will see because I destroy all my enemies. I am mostly a Long Wolf type of guy but Reach is all about teamwork so keep your hopes up that you never see me in one of your games and remember...
~NOTHING IS TRUE EVERYTHING PERMITTED~

Great job i like it man keep up the good work :)

  • 08.09.2011 11:45 PM PDT