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Subject: Rebels a halo fan fic

the war is over if you want it to be-John Lennon & Yoko Ono

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introduction
I've been in this pit...this sad lonely pit. Who am I? I'm spartan211. My story begins like the Chief's, but I was made a super solider in a different time then him. I was made for different purposes. The purpose, my purpose, was to kill anyone or anything that rebels against the UNSC or Elites, but my world would be change by two of the most unlikely people i would ever meet.

chapter 1-the mission
As I question my purpose...they give me my first mission. as I walked to the ops center to see my mission, my mind starts to wander. who i really am? Why I am here? As I get in to the room, I see the satellite view of a deserted base. Then I get a call on a video phone, it's the Sergeant she said to me, "you go to this base, and you'll kill the general of the rebels. I walk silently to my hornet and think to myself, "who would be so foolish to rebel against the UNSC?" As I land the sergeant tells me were looking for an elite. I grab my sniper rifle, and jump out. I look though the scope, and I see a elite in gold. I shoot but, it looks like he is still alive. I walk down. He says "Are you sure you are fighting for the right side. "I say sure and shot him in the head. I try to hold myself together but I can't get him out of my mind. That line, are you sure you are fighting for the right side...I am not sure.

chapter 2 ~the dream
"Are you sure your fighting for the right side." echoed in my dream. Suddenly I wake up. The speaker yells "211, OPS center." I walk there to see another halo. I ask my sergeant, " what is this." " The rebels secret base. This is where you'll find the commander." She said. I walk silently to my hornet. I get to the air craft. They welcome me with open arms, but something was weird. Then I found out it was a suicide mission. I get off the pelican and find myself in this gulch. I find their commander getting water through my scope, but I was knocked out by an elite.

chapter~3 the misson

As I wake up, I see nothing but sentinels around me. I find myself on a construct. An Elite in red armor comes with a case. He says, "there is food in this, and a message for you." I open it up and I find some green paste and a bottle of water, but something is missing, so I just eat. I hallucinate and see the commander of the rebles. He says, "I know you are confused about the right side to fight for, but i have the answer...there is a hornet on the last level of this building. Go to it and fly to the desert part of the ring." well the massege isn't missing.

chapter~4 the land

As I walk outside the facility, the hallucinogen wore off. I saw the hornet...then I thought to myself, what if this is a trap, or what if this is a way to be free. I didn't know who to trust, but I still got in the hornet and flew in to the desert. I saw this tank. It was huge, and it even had a H on it. I land and there is the general waveing at me. I exit the horned and he says, "Hello spartan..."

"How are you alive." I ask.

"That Elite you killed was a spy." He says with a smile. he opens a case, "Here is your new armor it is top of the line with two over shields and a motion tracker that can senese up to 25 miles. It is enchanced.

I picked up the helmet, "What is it called?"

"Hayabusa" He says with a smirk.

I take off my mark six armor put on my Hayabusa, and ask, "What is my misson?"

  • 09.01.2009 5:15 PM PDT
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One day... I am gonna grow wings... A chemical reaction... Hysterical and useless... hystecial and let down and hanging around... crushed like a bug in the ground.

Okay put longer chapters, Dates and have you read the novels.

  • 09.02.2009 1:28 AM PDT

the war is over if you want it to be-John Lennon & Yoko Ono

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it is after the halo3 and plus no i haven't

  • 09.02.2009 5:55 PM PDT

-eddy!
huh! What? It was the other guy, honest! ;)
'it was a sniper!' looks down at my sniper
uhh yeah? hes got one too. XD

you need to add in description, and proof read it for spelling/grammar mistakes
and you seem to change from present tense to past tense alot you might want to keep an eye on it
apart from that the plot seems good

[Edited on 09.03.2009 2:21 AM PDT]

  • 09.03.2009 2:20 AM PDT