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Subject: [Story] Wildfire of the Covenant (Part.3 Fallen Angels released!)
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I was given a change of heart by someone very close to me. He told me to, " Keep on plugin." Something about that gave me the will to give it another shot.

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Zach lay on his bed. His wife was next to him, both on their sides. He moved his hand, and held hers tightly. She smiled at him, the smile that had warmed his heart for ten years. Light shined through the window, illuminating the two of them. Their skin glowed in the warm sun as flecks of dust floated to the floor like feathers. Zach felt like the happiest man in the world. As long as his wife was by his side, nothing could change that. He got out of bed, dressed, and looked at Lilly Thomson, the woman of his dreams "I'm going to make breakfast and drop Pen off at school."

"Okay, don't leave me here too long," She sent him an adoring smile, one he would never forget. He left his bedroom, and walked into the kitchen. The low humming of the refrigerator filled the room.

Zach heard light footsteps coming from the hallway. His five year old daughter was soon in the kitchen, jumping in excitement to see her father, "Daddy!"

"Penelope!" The girl laughed and jumped into his arms. He swung her around, and then held her tight. "Excited for the first day of school?"

"Mhm, but I liked summer better" She pressed her head against his chest.
Zach laughed. He enjoyed nothing more than being a father, "What do you want for breakfast?"

"Cereal please!"

The man put her down in a chair, and walked towards the fridge to get milk. When he opened it's door, he felt a hand lightly touch his shoulder. He jumped, and Lilly laughed. "I want to come with you to drop Pen off."

Zach turned around. Lilly's deep green eyes seemed to look right into him. He kissed his wife on the cheek, and took the milk out of the fridge. Penelope had already picked what she wanted and placed it in a bowl. Zach began to pour milk into the bowl when a sudden tremble in the earth caused it to spill.

Zach was shocked, An earthquake on harvest? Impossible! It grew stronger and stronger until what seemed like a deafening thunder storm could be heard in the sky. Penelope started to cry, "Lilly, take pen to the basement!" Zach shouted over the rattling of household appliances. Lilly picked up their daughter, and ran towards the stairs leading to a cellar.

Zach stumbled to the front door, using countertops as handholds, he barely made it out of the house. What Zach saw tumbling out of the sky was near unimaginable. It fell towards harvest, fire enveloping the mass of purple metal as it tore through the atmosphere. "Oh my god." His words were dragged out in awe. He must have stood there for at least a minute, watching the ship level itself out until it hovered above the surface.

Zach spotted smaller flecks of glistening metal spread off from their residence. They seemed to be heading towards his town. They were so high up it was hard to tell, but he didn't want to take any chances.

Balls of green fire fell from the sky. Buildings in the distance seemed to evaporate, gone like dust picked up by the wind. The wheat in between the towns caught fire. It was miles away, but the flames would spread fast. Zach was frozen, listening to a faint whine coming from afar. The cool afternoon wind whipped his black hair into his eyes, but he didn't even flinch. All he could think of was bodies, human bodies, burning in agony.

The wheat swayed back and forth in a moment of both beauty and chaos. The mother ship shined in the sky. It looked like a sliver of gold and silver floating above all. He was in a trance until the screech of the drop ships became too loud to ignore. The rumbling had stopped, and he could now think clearly. His neighbor was a Marine. No doubt he had an arsenal of weapons. If Zach could get a hold of them, he had a shot at saving his family.


[Edited on 09.13.2009 12:55 PM PDT]

  • 09.06.2009 3:09 PM PDT
Subject: [Story] Embers of the Covenant

Honor Light Your Way, Our Blood Shall Forge a Thousand Generations!

Very original, Pawn. Keep it up, and you should NEVER give up writing if you love to do so. Anywho, do you mind checking my story, The Forerunners? I'd appreciate it.

  • 09.06.2009 6:30 PM PDT
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Thanks man :) Yea, i have fresh hope. I am also toning up on the descriptive element of my stories.

  • 09.07.2009 4:12 PM PDT

Honor Light Your Way, Our Blood Shall Forge a Thousand Generations!

Very nice, much better.

  • 09.07.2009 5:50 PM PDT

The Hybrid a FanFic by Tehface

"Look for the signs, the keepers of the flame. They will lead you to war, and perhaps, to victory."

Very good! I like the description you used, and how you brought it strait into the action.
Eager to hear more, keep it up!

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Thanks guys :) This is the first story i have felt truly confident with :) I appreciate your support :)

  • 09.07.2009 6:57 PM PDT

You were able to embellish this with emotion, and description, while still getting straight to the point.

As I read, I was able to picture everything happening as though it were a movie being projected onto my computer screen.

Please, keep it coming.

  • 09.07.2009 9:25 PM PDT

Much better, I'm glad you took my advice of building it up. Well done.

  • 09.08.2009 1:33 AM PDT
Subject: [Story] Wildfire of the Covenant (Part.1 Hail of Fire released!)
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Part 1. Hail of Fire
I apologize for the lengthiness

Zach sprinted to his neighbor's house and frantically knocked on the door. A chunk of the wood above his head blew off, sending splinters everywhere. "Tobias it's me! Zach!" A large man opened the door. His shoulders were broad, and he had the build of a boxer. The man held a shotgun in his hands.Tobias looked at Zach, "I was expecting something taller."

Zach had a puzzled look on his face, " Wh-wha." He leaned on his legs to catch his breath from the run, "Tobias, I need your help."

"Where's your wife and kid?"

"In the house! We need weapons and a car now!"

Tobias scowled, contorting a long scar that ran from his forehead down to his chin. He wasn't the kind of guy who liked to be told what to do, "Follow my lead." The Marine shoved a battle rifle into Zach's hands.

Tobias walked out of his doorway, lugging a SPNKR rocket launcher on his shoulder. Banshees flew through the air over their heads, Plasma splashing the houses nearby. The burning wheat's fire was getting closer.

A Phantom hovered over Zach's front lawn, slowly descending. Tobias leveled his launcher and fired. The missile spiraled through the air, leaving a trail of smoke behind it. Zach was way ahead of the Marine, running as fast as he could to his house, "Zach stop!" The drop ship was struck by a rocket. It was knocked sideways, and wobbled. A hole was punched in one of the carrier bays, and it was burning.

Tobias fired another rocket. Before it got halfway to its target a searing hot streak of purple sliced through the air. The missile was incinerated. "Ohdamn." More purple streaks became airborne, but these were meant for Tobias.

Tobias sprinted to the right, heading towards the back of his house. Dirt was kicked up behind him, and here could feel the heat of the purple flame. It felt like someone had pressed a clothing iron on his entire back. He let out a short grunt, but continued to run.

When Tobias jumped behind the corner of his home, he saw Zach zigzagging through the grass, narrowly avoiding hot bolts of death. Damn, these things got two turrets? Tobias moved back behind the corner, and took a deep breath. He didn't get much rest, because at that moment a whole was blown through his cover.

The Marine got up, and ran for Zach. If he didn't get that kid out of the open soon, he was meat. There was no hope of getting to his house. Zach's family was doomed.

Yet another screech pierced the air. A smaller craft flew overhead, dropping yet another ball of fire, it's target, the place where he slept, ate, loved his daughter, and held his wife in strong arms.

Zach's jaw dropped as his house burst into flames, "No, I won't let them die." His words came out as a whisper. He used every last bit of breath he could muster to say them. The man became dizzy, but kept moving. He heard two large explosions, and a massive crash. The purple drop ship lay on the ground, crumpled with two gashed and a large hole on its side.

Zach reached his front door. The house was in flames. His wife and child were most likely dead, but that didn't faze him. He broke through the door. The kitchen was burning, the heat tormenting his skin. The interior of the place was lit with flames, the walls glowing red with intense light. Zach ran towards his basement, the flames on the wooden floors licked at his heals.

When he reached the stairs to the cellar, he jumped down as far as he could, tumbling down the rest of the steps. His wife and daughter were huddled in the corner of the room. The man wasn't going to waste any time, "Give me pen and hold my hand!" His wife complied. The rising steps were beginning to crumble. They weren't going to hold much longer.

The family began to climb them. With a large crack, Lilly's hand slipped out of Zach's grasp. A hole in the stairs had opened, and she had fallen through. Zach and Penelope were half way up. Every step up to then was gone. "Lilly, grab my hand!"

"No Zach! Go!"

"I'm not leaving you!" their daughter was sobbing, squeezing herself against her father's neck.
This was a moment she would never forget.

"You have to Zach."

"I can get y-!"

"No...you can't! Please, go. For pen" Lilly's eyes began to tear, but she wouldn't cry, not now.

Zach breathed heavily through an open mouth, "I love you." Lilly smiled at him as she clutched her side. The fall had broken three of her ribs, but she wouldn't waste any of the time she had left wincing. With great reluctance, Zach turned and ran for the door. The house was collapsing behind him.

Zach shielded Penelope as much as he could as he ran through the flames. A solid wall of fire blocked the exit. There was only one thing he could do. With all the energy Zach had left, he charged the barrier, and pulled Penelope under his chest.

Zach broke through the deadly wall. When he stepped into the open, he was covered in ash. The hum of a warthog engine gave him a burst of energy. Then came the staccato of chain gun fire.

Tobias stood atop the turret of a warthog, sending walls of lead at anything that came his way. Two banshees lay in the dirt, peppered with 60-calibur rounds. He jumped off of the gun into the driver's seat, "Get in!" Zach dashed for the passenger seat, and jumped into the armored vehicle. He buckled himself and his daughter into the seat. She was curled up on his chest, her head tucked under Zach's arm. He held her close, not wanting to lose anyone else.

The warthog's engine revved and its wheels began to spin. It kicked up a wall of dirt before it started moving. The wheat field's fire had reached the town, and was setting any house that already wasn't on fire aflame.

Zach squeezed his eyes shut, and rested his head on Penelope's back. Tobias had his combat boots tightly pressed against the floor. One braced him, and the other shoving the gas pedal to the ground.

They sped down an empty highway, heading towards a close by forest. A banshee dove towards the ground, heading for the warthog. Tobias bared his teeth as he swerved left and right, avoiding a rain of plasma, "Zach! Get on the gun!" Zach stayed put. "God damn it Zach man the 60-CAL!" Still, no response came. Zach wasn't planning on letting go of his daughter any time soon.

There was an explosion of green fire directly ahead of them. Cement burst into the air. The Warthog's windshield caught a hail of debris, cracking the windshield, "Shi-!" The side of the car was skimmed, melting off a layer of grade-A titanium, "Zach! Get on the gun! Get on the g-!"



[Edited on 09.09.2009 6:23 PM PDT]

  • 09.09.2009 6:17 PM PDT

Honor Light Your Way, Our Blood Shall Forge a Thousand Generations!

Very captivating, the only flaw I saw was that you mentioned 'phantom.' When the Covenant attacked Harvest, nobody knew who they were. Anyways, nice read. Keep it coming. BTW, check out part 2 and 3 of The Forerunners, you'll like them.

  • 09.09.2009 6:24 PM PDT
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Thanks :) I am for that. Did one of my characters call them phantoms? I meant it to just be in the narraration. Anyone have suggestions?

  • 09.10.2009 5:39 PM PDT

Just keep doing what you are doing.

  • 09.10.2009 9:08 PM PDT
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-=PH=-

Good day. I'm an active and fairly enthusiastic member of the Bungie fan-base and pride myself on many qualities. If you want to send me a PM, go right ahead. No I won't spam your inbox with group invites, I will respond in the best way possible. Thank you, and as I had opened, I'll close - good day.


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Quick editing mistakes (Prologue): send -> sent, comma after forget -> period, exited -> excited, it's -> its, shocket -> shocked, earth quake -> earthquake.

Cool prologue! This would make a good movie, and if you dragged the opening out longer, a great book as well.

  • 09.12.2009 1:44 PM PDT
Subject: [Story] Wildfire of the Covenant (Part.2 The Clearing released!)
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Thanks bro :) I apreciate you writing to errors instead of just saying they exist :)


Part 2 The Clearing. This one may not be as good as the others, but it is needed as a bridge.


A plasma bolt struck the ground beneath the warthog, causing the vehicle to become airborne. Penelope clung even tighter on to Zach's neck, pressing herself against safety. The armored car landed on its side, and began to roll. After four rotations that felt like an eternity, it righted itself back up. The windshield war cracked, but the rest of the warthog was relatively unscathed by the impact. It was still in running condition. Tobias floored the petal and got back onto the highway.

The banshees circled back towards the three humans. They were sitting ducks. Tobias knew if he didn't do something soon, they were all dead. The marine used is battle rifle to jam the accelerator on to the floor. As the vehicle climbed to its top speed, Tobias unbuckled his seatbelt, and climbed to the back towards the 60-calibur chain gun. He had enough of this cat and mouse game.

The screech of the aircrafts became more and more audible. When they came in range, Tobias released a wall of lead at the nearest one. The bullets pinged off of its armor. Tobias felt like he was throwing peas at a tank, until the purple bastard starting smoking. The Marine grinned as it burst into flames. His smile quickly faded when he spotted a mass of blue light heading for the warthog.

From what Tobias had seen, if that impacted his vehicle, it would be dust. There was no hope of getting to the driver's seat in time. Thoughts began to race through his head as everything around him slowed down. The rattling of the warthog's gun became dull, and its shells seemed to float through the air. Tobias knew he could have bailed and lived, but it was too late now.

At the last minute, he was jerked to the right. The armored car flew into the Wheatfield as plasma splashed against the road behind him. Looks like the kid pulled it together. Zach was at the wheel of the warthog, swerving and dodging the enemy fire.

The woods were close now, but they would have to take the other banshee out before entering it. Tobias knew that whoever was driving that thing would just set the whole forest on fire. Everything sped up again. He could feel the air brushing passed him. It cooled the sweat drenching his body, and made him relax. He breathed steadily, moved his adjusted his chain gun, and fired.

A wing was torn straight off of the last aircraft, sending it tumbling through the air. They were safe, for now. Night settled in as they drove through forest, searching for a place to sleep. Zach spotted a small clearing, and parked at its rim.

Tobias set up a campfire, and left the clearing to search for food. Zach was laying against a tree, the fire illuminating his profile. Penelope lay across his lap, curled into a tight ball. He stroked her hair, trying to seem okay. He hid his tears as best as he could, stifle back the normal sobs of a shattered heart. He could stop that much, but nothing would hold back the water sliding down his cheek.

Penelope looked up at her devastated father, "Daddy is mom coming with us?"
"Yea...she'll be here real soon pen, real soon." A sharp intake of air forced its way through his barrier. He couldn't hold it in anymore. His body starting to convulse, he began to wheeze. He held Penelope close to his chest. This time, he was the one clinging to safety. His daughter was all he had left. She was everything to him. If he wasn't going to make it out, she sure as hell would.

Tobias returned with fruit cradled in his arms. He spread them across the grass, and leaned back onto a fallen tree, remembering what he had lost. Zach wasn't alone.

"Hey there beautiful."

Sarah smiled as she opened her eyes, "What would I do without you T?"

Tobias was leaned back in his chair, "Stay inside knitting all day?"

His love laughed, and pulled the comforter of her bead up to her face. Suddenly she pulled it back down, "Wait a minute, were you watching me sleep again?"

"...Possibly."

"I told you not to do that!" Sarah giggled, "It creeps me out."

"You look like an angel when you're...unconscious."

"Don't I always?"

Tobias stood up, and walked towards his wife. He knelt down by the side of the bed, and looked into her eyes, "Yes" Their lips touched, staying there for what felt like an eternity. When they slowly parted, he stroked her cheek. Her soft fair skin sent butterflies into his stomach. Even after all the years of his marriage, his love Sarah hadn't cooled down one bit.

"When are you going to leave the Corps?"

"Honey-"

"No, really, I can't sit in our house, begging god to let you come home alive anymore, I just can't."

"I'll be fine."

"That's what my brother always said, 'I'll be fine'. Well he's gone now, and I can't lose you, I won't."

Tobias exhaled, "The thing is, it's not that I want to be there. I have to."

"No you don't!" Sarah frowned, "You can resign today. You've done your years."

"That's not it."

"Than what is it?"

Tobias stared at the floor, "It's my menI feel like, if I resign, id be leaving them to die."

"Oh T." Sarah sat up on the edge of the bed,"I quit for youI left it all behind. I know it's hard, but pleasedo the same for me."

"For you, anything."

The two thought that nothing could bring them apart now, but they were wrong.


Tobias woke up. The sun had drawn him away from paradise. Zach was still leaning against his tree, asleep with his daughter. Fruit lay across the ground, untouched. Nobody wanted to eat that night. Tobias looked at Penelope. He would die before anything touched her. His family was taken from him, he know how it felt. Thinking about his misery, there was no way in hell he would let that happen to Zach.


[Edited on 09.12.2009 7:15 PM PDT]

  • 09.12.2009 3:01 PM PDT
Subject: [Story] Wildfire of the Covenant (Part.1 Hail of Fire released!)

I don't know what you are talking about, this part is just as epic as the others.

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Thanks man. You're a large source of moral :)

  • 09.12.2009 3:20 PM PDT

And so far, your story would make a great movie. No joke.

  • 09.12.2009 6:10 PM PDT
Subject: [Story] Wildfire of the Covenant (Part.2 The Clearing released!)

i caught something from part one to part two. In part on you mentioned the Warthog turret being a 60 cal but in part 2 you said 50 cal. But other than that great work

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Part 3. Fallen Angels.

When Zach woke up, Penelope was sitting by the burnt out campfire with Tobias. The two of them seemed to be absorbed in something that Zach couldn't see. He got up with a groan and walked towards them, "What have you got there Pen?"

"Tobias is showing me how to carve an angel out of wood." The girl had cheered up since the previous night.

Zach smiled at Tobias, a smile that said thank you. "Tell me when you're done. I'll be by the warthog ." He walked towards the end of the clearing. Even he felt better. Something about seeing Penelope happy lifted his spirit. When he sat down in the vehicles passenger seat, he reached into his pocket for something he prayed was there, and it was. He lifted a picture of his wife into his eyesight. Zachcarried it on him at all times. He never wanted to part from her. It made him feel like she was always with him.

The photograph was small. It was her on their wedding day. She was smiling at the camera, wearing a beautiful white dress. Pure happiness could be seen in her eyes. A burning feeling entered Zach's chest. Why did this happen? He pressed the picture against his heart, embracing what was left of his love.

Zach must have stared at it for a good ten minutes until he snapped out of it. The heartbroken man put the photograph back into his pocket. He saw one of their battle rifles on the floor under his seat. Zach figured he had time to kill, so he lifted it up, placed it on top of the dashboard, and began to disassemble it with incredible speed.

Zach inspected every single part as he ran through the standard maintenance procedure. He used a knife to gather some grease from the steering wheels turning point. He used it to lubricate the various parts of his battle rifle. When he was done, he put it back together like he had done it a thousand times.

"Impressive."

Zach jumped. Tobias had been leaning against the side of the armored vehicle the whole time. " Yea. My father owned a weapons manufacturing factory."

"You're last name is Thomson correct?"

"Yes."

"Then you're lying to me."

"Hu?"

"There is no gun company owned by someone with the last name Thomson."

"He left it to a friend of his. You must know him."

"Do you have any idea how much those company's rake in? Nobody would just give it away like that. What are you hiding from me Zach?"

"Nothing!" Zach put on a fake smile and a short laugh. Tobias squinted into his eyes. In a flash he had Zach in a hold, pinning him against the warthog's passenger seat. As quickly as that had happened, Tobias' head was slammed against the dashboard. The marine broke loose and jumped out of the vehicle.

The marine touched his bleeding lip, "ONI hu?" He laughed, "I would have suspected you to be a better liar than that.

"ONI? I don't even know what that means!"

"Don't play stupid with me kid. I saw that scar on the back of your neck. They insert a tracking chip into every single ONI officer's neck. If we are going to make it out of here alivesecrets aren't allowed." Tobias spit a few drops of blood onto the ground."

"What tipped you off?"

"The way you drove the Warthog, that's an armored vehicle, totally different from the car in your garage. I can't even drive it like that. Neither can a gun manufacturers' son. That and the change of tone in your voice. Pokers my game."

"You're good...Where's Pen?"

"Playing with the carved angel."

Zach was silent, thinking. "You have a kid don't you."

"I had one." Tobias spaced, as if he was recounting his past life, "We're more alike than you know."


"How did you do it?"

"Get rid of the pain? I didn't" Tobias slouched down, leaning against the warthogs Titanium side.

Zach could see Tobias had plunged into misery, but he had something that would cheer the man up "I know a way off this planet Tobias."

"I'm listening."

"The Tiara has a propulsion system that launches cases of food into space for ships to pick up. There's another ONI officer on this planet. She told me there is a local militia working on an evacuation of Mombasa, and they are going to use the propulsion system to launch crates full of citizens, like escape pods."

"Do you have any idea how far away the Tiara is? That's like three days worth of travel with the warthog"

"I know, but that's really all we've got."

Tobias was silent, "I hope you know what we are up against."

"Yes...I do."

  • 09.13.2009 12:54 PM PDT

The plot thickens. I can't wait for more.

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Thanks :) It may be a while before a new one comes out, considering school has started, but I will try to get one out by sunday.

  • 09.16.2009 4:09 PM PDT

The Hybrid a FanFic by Tehface

"Look for the signs, the keepers of the flame. They will lead you to war, and perhaps, to victory."

Great Man! I'm loving it. *thread saved*

  • 09.17.2009 7:13 PM PDT

Honor Light Your Way, Our Blood Shall Forge A Thousand Generations!.

Incredible.

  • 09.17.2009 7:18 PM PDT
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Thanks guys :) I think this one will be cool :D

  • 09.20.2009 1:47 PM PDT

amazing better than what i can do for sure...

  • 09.21.2009 6:40 PM PDT

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