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Subject: Halo 4: Fall of mankind

By the power of truth, I, while living, have conquered the universe.

Posted by: The x Rebellion
Posted by: ajw34307
Posted by: The x Rebellion
Posted by: ajw34307
Posted by: RedAceX
wooow man really cool & nice story!! but it's kinda short but still cool though[/quote]


well think about it there'd be multiple missions in EACH city which would spread out to about 20-25 missions


EDIT: and by the way I LOVE IT it would be epic as hell cool idea man


That would be long, boring and dull... So it would suit this story 100%.


Hey -blam!- since when did you become a professional author? I think he did a good job and he is one of my friends so step off and find something better to do with your time than to try to feel better about yourself by criticizing others when really youre jealous that YOU didnt think of it first.

Good story Raptor, Ill talk to you later on xbox. =)


I'm an avid reader and writer myself, actually. Sorry, but I'm allowed to express my opinion and just because you don't like it, doesn't mean I'm going to chnage it.

Sorry but it was completely far-fetched. Maybe you should read the edited version half way down page 1 and read my annotations.


Once again, why even bother posting here if you just want to cut someone else down? Did we say your shi/t sucked? No. So get outta here.

Personally the story is great Raptor (BarthVader), and Im looking forward to reading your revised version =)


What made it necessary for you to get involved? I'm not 'cutting people down', I was merely giving an opinion (though I admit to getting rather over-the-top). Simply, I pointed out the flaws only be have an angry person tell me my ideas wouldn't be as good, it was too easy to prove him wrong.

  • 10.29.2009 5:02 AM PDT

Lol uhm you didnt have to say you dont work for bungie. Cause 343 is making Halo 4. Not Bungie.

  • 10.29.2009 5:05 AM PDT

Look out.... -boom- (headshot)
I told you to look out, but know, you got in my way, was going to shoot that splaser....

In, my opinion, it's the worst rendition of a Halo 4. What are you thinking? This isn't the 'fall of mankind' if they end up winning, is it?

There's no indication as to how the Spartans escaped the Dyson Sphere, no mention of Halsey or Mendez who are probably the most significant characters in Onyx.

I know this is how you'd like to see it but you clearly know next to nothing of the Halo universe.


[Edited on 10.29.2009 6:41 AM PDT]

  • 10.29.2009 6:41 AM PDT

ICE ICE BABY

Okay first off, I would like to apologize for not making a revised edition last night. My cpu is only allowing me to stay on for about 5 minutes then it shuts down. I will retype it soon but not yet. Seond, I need to AGAIN stress thatI have never read any of this solely on my knowledge. Also I will stress AGAIN that I was not getting into specifics but apparently that is what everyone wants but I havent read any of the books so thats impossible but when I edit it I will get into more specdifics but if u see some essential specificsw that i need to be in there tell me in detail via PM and i mean IN DETAIL because i have never read the books as i have said. I am also aware that this is uncannon and wont probably happen but if You have never read the books then this could happen and would make a hell of a game. I love all the comments but the other stories arent neccesary. I have read a few of them and dont get me wrong they are sweet but this thread is not the place for them. Also dont just say my story sucked and why it sucked. Tell me how I can make it better and dont just say dont make it again cuz thats just dumb. Thank you for all the comments and keep them coming. I dont know when my cpu will b fixed or when i will have access to another one. I will continuecheck the comments as much as possible but idk when the new edition will b typed up. I will explain my desicions when i retype it. I will make a section at the bottom named notes to explain it.

  • 10.29.2009 8:04 AM PDT

I like to derp and stuff. I have a YouTube channel~

Derp

Good idea. Repost this in Bungie Universe

  • 10.29.2009 8:08 AM PDT

By the power of truth, I, while living, have conquered the universe.

Posted by: Barthvader76
Okay first off, I would like to apologize for not making a revised edition last night. My cpu is only allowing me to stay on for about 5 minutes then it shuts down. I will retype it soon but not yet. Seond, I need to AGAIN stress thatI have never read any of this solely on my knowledge. Also I will stress AGAIN that I was not getting into specifics but apparently that is what everyone wants but I havent read any of the books so thats impossible but when I edit it I will get into more specdifics but if u see some essential specificsw that i need to be in there tell me in detail via PM and i mean IN DETAIL because i have never read the books as i have said. I am also aware that this is uncannon and wont probably happen but if You have never read the books then this could happen and would make a hell of a game. I love all the comments but the other stories arent neccesary. I have read a few of them and dont get me wrong they are sweet but this thread is not the place for them. Also dont just say my story sucked and why it sucked. Tell me how I can make it better and dont just say dont make it again cuz thats just dumb. Thank you for all the comments and keep them coming. I dont know when my cpu will b fixed or when i will have access to another one. I will continuecheck the comments as much as possible but idk when the new edition will b typed up. I will explain my desicions when i retype it. I will make a section at the bottom named notes to explain it.


You don't need to read the books to understand the story or the canon.

I suggest you use sources for research, like Halopedia.

Part of the adventure of writing is finding out how to make your story better yourself. Feedback helps but I always find myself re-writing several chapters of my stories to improve them.

[Edited on 10.29.2009 9:30 AM PDT]

  • 10.29.2009 9:28 AM PDT
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wrong forum.

  • 10.29.2009 9:29 AM PDT

Posted by: ss1512
reach was not the last I thought it was the first but I dont know but reach was before earth beacuse in ODST they said "oh my god they're going to glass the plantet its like reach all over again"


Earth isn't a colony...look up the definition of the word.

  • 10.29.2009 9:34 AM PDT

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See you on the battlefield.

Umm, if humanity wins in the end, it isn't really a "Fall of Humanity" then is it?

  • 10.29.2009 9:37 AM PDT

Posted by: ME7ALMAR7IAN777
Umm, if humanity wins in the end, it isn't really a "Fall of Humanity" then is it?


It's the fall of man...being kind?

:/

  • 10.29.2009 9:39 AM PDT

ICE ICE BABY

ok granted the name aint that great. when i have acess to a good cpu i wil do my researchnd retype it. I will also explain what happens to the rest of the colonies.

  • 10.29.2009 10:04 AM PDT

-_-

I don't know......

I do know that I hate it that 343 studios is going to take the hard and holy work bungie over!
we probebly won't see a Halo 4.... :'(

agreed?

  • 10.29.2009 10:21 AM PDT
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Posted by: Dexomega
I prefer this one.


That one is infinitely better than the story this thread proposes.

One nice thing is it doesn't fly in the face of Halo canon.

  • 10.29.2009 10:41 AM PDT

He uses the entire force of covenantWhich means "nothing" as far as we know, but fine, that is based on he fact that nothing like this happened. After a while the covenant prevail and take out earths outer defenses.Earth has no defenses anymore.

And tbqh, that is a terrible story. I have no idea why people in this topic praise it. All it has is "Brutes attack Earth because they are evil, humans kill them, the end". It is completely unfit for a Halo game or any current-gen game that has at least some story. It might be appropriate for a NES game.

...actually, I do have an idea why people praise it. Very many have said that they wanted Halo 2 and 3 to be "Covenant attack Earth because they are religious, Chief kills them, the end". I bet they even wanted Halo 1 to be "Humans and Covenant land on Halo, the Chief kills the Covenant, the end". No Flood, no Forerunners, no reasons whatsoever for the Covenant to fight humanity, so that the whole story sums up to "Covenant start war because they are religious/evil, humans win, the end."

  • 10.29.2009 11:24 AM PDT

hahaha "fall of mankind" ....they end up winning. touche'

  • 10.29.2009 11:34 AM PDT
Subject: Halo 4

ICE ICE BABY

At the moment I am heavily researching on Halopedia to make all of you happy. I am going to do my research and ADJUST the story. I am not going to completely rewrite the entire thing. I will change a lot but the covenant will still attack Earth. If i cannot find a way to incorporate it into the Halo cannon then it will still be there. I am not saying I dont like the Halo cannon but i think it would be awesome for the covenant to full out attack ALL of Earth not just Africa. If you feel special spitting in my face go ahead but I am not spitting in anyone else's. I am still open to suggestions so if you don't like don't just say i dont like it. TELL ME HOW TO MAKE IT BETTER!!!!!!!

Edit: I have printed out what halopedia has on The ghosts of Onyx and on the fall of reach and I will try and incorporate that into the story. Please tell me if I need to read anything else

[Edited on 10.29.2009 1:28 PM PDT]

  • 10.29.2009 1:25 PM PDT

ICE ICE BABY

I quote from Halopedia:

The novels had many errors, including typos, most of which contradict to the games. This is likely because that there were different authors which are also not part of Bungie Studios.

There is no book written for Halo 4 and my story does not have to perfectly follow the cannon because I am no game designer.
(unless someones offering lol)

[Edited on 10.29.2009 1:35 PM PDT]

  • 10.29.2009 1:32 PM PDT

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i have a better idea, when the covenant invade earth the only hope of mankind is activate the halo to destroy the covenant.

  • 10.29.2009 1:33 PM PDT

By the power of truth, I, while living, have conquered the universe.

Posted by: Barthvader76
There is no book written for Halo 4 and my story does not have to perfectly follow the cannon because I am no game designer.
(unless someones offering lol)


The canon itself is set for a Halo 4. The Chief is heading towards a mysterious planet, the Elites are heading home, the Flood lie dormant in their prisons, Halsey, Mendez and the Spartans remain trapped in the Dyson Sphere and Earth is beginning to rebuild.
The Covenant is but a minority.

If you're presenting an idea to others, what's the point in not following canon? You'll only get those who follow the story angered, and I'm not 'spitting in your face', I'm merely stating my opinion.

  • 10.29.2009 1:47 PM PDT

ICE ICE BABY

Okay I have most of the ideas figured out and am ready for a rewrite but I need 3 questions answered. One, is it possible to retrieve Halsey, Mendez and the squad of six spartans? If so how? I also know of 5 spartans from Team Katana being trapped in some sort of slipspace pods or something on Onyz. Any truth to that? Last, is it true that the covenant is disbanded and are now just really Grunts Brutes etc. if you know what I mean. Is it also true that the covenant signed a treaty not to fight anymore? Once these questions are all answered by ajw the rewrite will start. I think you have the most knowledge of the cannon on this thread so you answer them and add anything else I may need to know before the rewrite

  • 10.29.2009 2:17 PM PDT

Posted by: Barthvader76
Okay I have most of the ideas figured out and am ready for a rewrite but I need 3 questions answered. One, is it possible to retrieve Halsey, Mendez and the squad of six spartans? If so how? I also know of 5 spartans from Team Katana being trapped in some sort of slipspace pods or something on Onyz. Any truth to that? Last, is it true that the covenant is disbanded and are now just really Grunts Brutes etc. if you know what I mean. Is it also true that the covenant signed a treaty not to fight anymore? Once these questions are all answered by ajw the rewrite will start. I think you have the most knowledge of the cannon on this thread so you answer them and add anything else I may need to know before the rewrite


I'm insulted, I know just as much about canon as AJ.

Everything is possible in the Haloverse. In my own fan fiction, I had it so a Forerunner AI teleported the Master Chief and his companions into the Micro Dyson Sphere, and they later escaped in a Forerunner Dreadnought. You can think up any crazy scenario you want.

Yes, five Spartan IIIs are trapped inside the Forerunner slipspace stasis pods; they are called team Katana. You can have those opened if you want, just have it so they find some technology or something. I personally hate the Spartan IIIs, and so in my fan fic just left them ;)

We don't know what happened to the Covenant. They could all have gone their separate ways, or they could have simply fled somewhere.

No, they signed no such treaty as far as we are aware.

  • 10.29.2009 2:32 PM PDT

ICE ICE BABY

didnt mean to insult you.

Before the rewrite i still need a logical way to bring the spartans back from the Dyson Sphere. If there is no way then the story is gonna suck

Once I have that answer I can begin to rewrite it

Also does anyone know if the six spartans on the Dyson Sphere or the five on Onyx have names? If so please tell me

  • 10.29.2009 3:02 PM PDT

I hunt for the Prophet of Contentment, the San 'Shyumm that murdered my son, and stole his birthright, his Energy Sword. They call our species Heretics. They claim to all that our tongues sting, our words a vile poison that feeds on the unworthy. I have seen the true face of Heresy. The head of a gallant warrior lay on the ground. His neck scorched and blistered, scarred by his own blade. I shall retrieve the weapon, and drive it through that bastard's heart! Punishment for his sins is nigh.

Actually, it is FAR more likely that a continuation of the War with the Covenant will actually NOT include the UNSC at all. It is going to boil down to the Elites leading the Covenant Separatists (Including a fairly large force of Grunts, and Hunters) against the Covenant Loyalists, mainly lead by the Brutes.

It will begin with the defense of Sangheilios, the Elite homeworld, and spread deeper into Loyalist territory, eventually leading to Doisac, the Brute homeworld.

In fact, the Jackals will likely backstab the Brutes, leading to another internal war as the Jackal Pirates attempt to take full control for themselves.

[Edited on 10.29.2009 3:07 PM PDT]

  • 10.29.2009 3:06 PM PDT

By the power of truth, I, while living, have conquered the universe.

Hunters wouldn't have any need to fight, they were forced into the Covenant when their homeworld of Te was discovered as it is covered in Forerunner artefacts.

Jackals would probably sever their ties to the Covenant as well, they're pirates and don't hold much of a particular loyalty to the Covenant, often trading in their services to the highest bidder.

That said, the Grunts pose a problem. It's possible they continue their service with the Brutes out of fear but it has been said that some Grunts remained loyal to the Elites.

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As far as we know, there was no treaty signed. I have no idea where you got that from, you said yourself that there's been no canon source of information of what happened after Halo 3's events. (Save for the opening of the Museum of Humanity.)

There are a total of 5 Spartan III's, from Team Katana, trapped in Forerunner Slipspace Field Pods.

Remember that all that is left of Onyx is the portal from the Core Room Antechamber, surrounded by trillions of Onyx Sentinels defending it. There is no visible planet form since they disengaged from each other.
So my suggestion would be some sort of assault on the Antechamber Portal as a rescue mission.

What becomes of the Covenant is up to you, remember to write this up in Microsoft Word for spell checking, then use this to copy & paste your story here.

  • 10.29.2009 3:22 PM PDT

ityler

for all of the people that came in here and posted stories of your own, or "gave revisions", or shot him down.. it is not your place to go and do that. he simply posted a story that he made, hoping that people would like it. he didnt ask you to make it better, he didnt ask you to argue over his post. ajw or whatever the hell your name is, you arent cool. nobody gives a -blam!- what you think. and just because you know eeeeeeeeeeeeeverythinggggg about halo, doesnt make you better. so -blam!- the haters. he can update what he feels makes sense.
GOOD OP

  • 10.29.2009 3:51 PM PDT