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Subject: cancelled, don't bother reading lol
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cancelled the story, as I wanted to use the characters in another one I'm writing, :) I, saved it on word though.

CAN SOMEONE HELP ME!!?? I wrote a new story on word and when I copy and paste it, I can't post it because it has 'extended characters' wtf?? any Idea what that means?? please help :(

[Edited on 12.20.2009 11:13 AM PST]

  • 12.17.2009 12:01 PM PDT
Subject: Private Rivers

I have one big problem, the speech should be on a new line, then it feels less like you have to read it in one breathe.
Also a little help to make it more interesting



Posted by: agent waffle
the marine pointed up towards a building, just then a thin beam of light flashed tearing two of his fingers clean off, splattering his hand with dark red.


To make that better i would do this:

the marine pointed towards the top floor of a building, suddenly a thin beam of light pulsed, two of his fingers were torn off, leaving bloody stumps and crimson red blood splatters over his arm and torso.

just a few minor alterations and additions. However when dealing with a sentence like that, try not to make it carry on for too long as it tends to bore the reader.
Other than that it was great.

Don't just edit that part of the text, use mine as an example and then reread your story and see what could be improved and improve it!
:D

  • 12.17.2009 12:07 PM PDT
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wow, nice!! guess your great writer, thanks for advice :)

  • 12.17.2009 12:11 PM PDT

Lol, thanks ^_^ hehe
If you need any help just ask me, i'll be happy to do it anytime i'm online.

Oh and when a recommendation is using synonyms, e.g. it glowed blue > it radiated a luminous cobalt-blue light
or
a pool of red blood surrounded him > crimson-red blood pooled around him, staining his clothes... (or you could use dried-blood red, or a glistening pool of liquid ruby's flooded the room...)
so on and so forth.



[Edited on 12.17.2009 12:18 PM PST]

  • 12.17.2009 12:13 PM PDT
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Posted by: Orange Blob
Lol, thanks ^_^ hehe
If you need any help just ask me, i'll be happy to do it anytime i'm online.


wish I could send it to you and then release it to everyone lol, have you got any stories up I could read? ^_^

  • 12.17.2009 12:16 PM PDT

Posted by: agent waffle
Posted by: Orange Blob
Lol, thanks ^_^ hehe
If you need any help just ask me, i'll be happy to do it anytime i'm online.


wish I could send it to you and then release it to everyone lol, have you got any stories up I could read? ^_^


Ooh, glad you asked, oh and i added a little extra helpful hints in my previous post

My current writing piece: http://www.bungie.net/Forums/posts.aspx?postID=39734099

I didn't put much detail into the first two parts as they both used up one comment box, however the third part is going to fill one whole comment box itself, i will be going into more depth so as to create better imagery.

EDIT: And a little bit more advice: You should always write it in 'word' first so you have a saved copy and so you can continue anytime. I find writing it on web browsers is time consuming and if you write in 'word' instead you can reply to comments that may have popped up whilst you were writing.

[Edited on 12.17.2009 12:24 PM PST]

  • 12.17.2009 12:20 PM PDT
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Posted by: Orange Blob
Posted by: agent waffle
Posted by: Orange Blob
Lol, thanks ^_^ hehe
If you need any help just ask me, i'll be happy to do it anytime i'm online.


wish I could send it to you and then release it to everyone lol, have you got any stories up I could read? ^_^


Ooh, glad you asked, oh and i added a little extra helpful hints in my previous post

My current writing piece: http://www.bungie.net/Forums/posts.aspx?postID=39734099

I didn't put much detail into the first two parts as they both used up one comment box, however the third part is going to fill one whole comment box itself, i will be going into more depth so as to create better imagery.

EDIT: And a little bit more advice: You should always write it in 'word' first so you have a saved copy and so you can continue anytime. I find writing it on web browsers is time consuming and if you write in 'word' instead you can reply to comments that may have popped up whilst you were writing.


good idea on the 'word' thing, and am clicking the link now..

  • 12.17.2009 12:48 PM PDT
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Posted by: agent waffle
Posted by: Orange Blob
Posted by: agent waffle
Posted by: Orange Blob
Lol, thanks ^_^ hehe
If you need any help just ask me, i'll be happy to do it anytime i'm online.


wish I could send it to you and then release it to everyone lol, have you got any stories up I could read? ^_^


Ooh, glad you asked, oh and i added a little extra helpful hints in my previous post

My current writing piece: http://www.bungie.net/Forums/posts.aspx?postID=39734099

I didn't put much detail into the first two parts as they both used up one comment box, however the third part is going to fill one whole comment box itself, i will be going into more depth so as to create better imagery.

EDIT: And a little bit more advice: You should always write it in 'word' first so you have a saved copy and so you can continue anytime. I find writing it on web browsers is time consuming and if you write in 'word' instead you can reply to comments that may have popped up whilst you were writing.


good idea on the 'word' thing, and am clicking the link now..

wow!! its really good!! = ]
how do you make links to things?

  • 12.17.2009 1:22 PM PDT
Subject: Mombasa heroes

You'll notice underneath the comment box (when you're writing a reply) that it has stuff like

Italic Text-
Bold Text-
Underlined Text-
Hyperlink-
Named Hyperlink-

You want to look at the line that says hyperlink (don't do named hyperlink as they might be confusing) and basically take it's advice.
It tells you to put [url] http://address.to.website [/url] (make sure there are no spaces)
put your website in between [url] and [/url]
and there you have a link!
:D
hope that helped.

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  • 12.17.2009 10:51 PM PDT
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Posted by: Orange Blob
You'll notice underneath the comment box (when you're writing a reply) that it has stuff like

Italic Text-
Bold Text-
Underlined Text-
Hyperlink-
Named Hyperlink-

You want to look at the line that says hyperlink (don't do named hyperlink as they might be confusing) and basically take it's advice.
It tells you to put [url] http://address.to.website [/url] (make sure there are no spaces)
put your website in between [url] and [/url]
and there you have a link!
:D
hope that helped.


thanks!! :)

  • 12.18.2009 12:16 AM PDT

If i were you i would continue with this story instead of creating a new story.
Keeping up two at a time can be daunting. Besides, you could always just have some covie parts in here.

  • 12.18.2009 11:21 AM PDT

Posted by: Orange Blob
If i were you i would continue with this story instead of creating a new story.
Keeping up two at a time can be daunting. Besides, you could always just have some covie parts in here.


Keeping up with more than one is indeed hard. I'm currently juggling three somehow!

  • 12.18.2009 11:32 AM PDT

yes but you have the word wolve and frog in your name ;)
Hehe, but he is a novice so if i were him i would just stick to one.
I think i could do two but on one ever reads my current one, so another story would be pointless.
And i'm actually planning something very big that'll tie back quite nicely into a Halo game.
I thought it quite fitting really, just alter my original storyline, add more backstory and viola. A complex and clever plot.

  • 12.18.2009 11:52 AM PDT
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Posted by: Wolverfrog
Posted by: Orange Blob
If i were you i would continue with this story instead of creating a new story.
Keeping up two at a time can be daunting. Besides, you could always just have some covie parts in here.


Keeping up with more than one is indeed hard. I'm currently juggling three somehow!


lol its kinda hard, I just wanted to focus on a gruntm, and I had always wondered what happened to those two grunts in that halo 2 ODST video

  • 12.18.2009 4:27 PM PDT