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Subject: Should i continue writing?

Im The Legendary Noble Six.
Service Tag: Dan 627
Read my Fan Story here: Story by "The Noble Six"

Poll: Should i continue writing?  [closed]
Yes :  86%
(6 Votes)
No:  14%
(1 Votes)
Total Votes: 7

Tell me what you think, i allready got the whole story line in my head and im still writing, i only just started and i just wanted to know what you think, should i go on or anything else?

[Edited on 01.21.2010 1:02 PM PST]

  • 01.21.2010 12:39 PM PDT

Im The Legendary Noble Six.
Service Tag: Dan 627
Read my Fan Story here: Story by "The Noble Six"

The beggining of my story

It started on Trividia, a small green planet with allot of nature, deep inside the beautiful forest of this planet stands a UNSC base, nobody really knows were exactly this base is settled and what it is used for, except for a few people in the UNSC, but those who know about it can't say anything because it's a strict secret.
Even covenant forces don't know about this planet, or do they?

Planet Earth, UNSC alarm center:

Incoming message from planet Trividia, "Open message now Shenia." a soft female voice sounded trough the room, her name is Dr. Safiva, she works at the alarm center and she takes care of all incoming alarms, she has brown long hair and her blue eyes shine in the light, she is about 1.74 meter in height and she is wearing a white comfortable UNSC suit.
"Opening message now Dr. Safiva." A female Ai voice spoke.
This was Dr. Safiva her personal Ai, her name is Shenia, she helps Dr. Safiva at her work in the alarm center.
The message appeared on the screen hanging above her desk, it is a voice message and it seemed a little bit short for a big warning, it was only five seconds long.
"Play message now Shenia."

///Play voice message///
The voice message started, it was not real good quality and here and there you could hear noise scratches, a panicked male voice spoke. "We need help, we are getting attacked by..."The voice message stopped and in the end you could hear a loud roar.
What could this mean, was it the covenant?
But how did the covenant discover the planet, and how many of them landed on Trividia?
Allot of question but no answers, she gave big alarm to the rest of the UNSC HQ.
Short after she rang the alarm a meeting found place with only those who know about Trividia and its secrets.
They were discussing and trying to figure out a plan to find out what is going on at Trividia.
About one and a half hour later they came out of the room and they made up a plan.
It is secret so not everybody could hear this, soon they were going to spread the plan to the people that are allowed to know it.

[Edited on 01.21.2010 1:36 PM PST]

  • 01.21.2010 12:41 PM PDT
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Spartans never die.. They're just missing in action.

I think this is bad ass, definitly continue writing. But you have a few typos (not spelled wrong, just missing a letter or two from rush typing I assume?)

PS: I looked over it again, I see a few mispelled items. But other than that, great job. Great great job.

[Edited on 01.21.2010 1:26 PM PST]

  • 01.21.2010 1:25 PM PDT

Im The Legendary Noble Six.
Service Tag: Dan 627
Read my Fan Story here: Story by "The Noble Six"

Thanks, i would like to hear some more of other people and keep voting in my poll.

  • 01.22.2010 6:49 AM PDT

By the power of truth, I, while living, have conquered the universe.

The language is a bit clunky and makes what's going to happen quite predictable, some grammar errors.

It's too soon to judge your writing properly, so keep writing and we can make a final opinion - make sure you capitalise the "C" in Covenant. Make use of complex sentences and use a range of clauses to make your writing more interesting to read.

[Edited on 01.22.2010 8:32 AM PST]

  • 01.22.2010 8:31 AM PDT

Im The Legendary Noble Six.
Service Tag: Dan 627
Read my Fan Story here: Story by "The Noble Six"

I just got started with writing and im not english so im really doing my best to get the words right but sometimes its just harder for me to do cus its not one of my main languages!

  • 01.22.2010 9:44 AM PDT

Posted by: The Noble Six
I just got started with writing and im not english so im really doing my best to get the words right but sometimes its just harder for me to do cus its not one of my main languages!


very good considering you are not English! Extra praise!

  • 01.22.2010 10:10 AM PDT

If you enjoy it, you shouldn't ever stop.

  • 01.22.2010 11:10 AM PDT