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Subject: (Fan-Fic) Honourable Venegance: The Schism Strikes

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Honourable Venegance
Act I
Changes

Council had begun. The Prophet of Tolerance rose in his magnificent gravity throne. An opalescent sheen of azure blue flooded into the chambers, bathing the monarch in a haze of pure brilliance. Though grey, and frailing with age, he still retained unquestionable command of his subordinates, and ruled with an iron fist. He rose and rose, ever higher to ensure everyone could bear witness to his majesty.

"A new age is among us. The dawning of which is already in motion. With each new age, changes must be made to ensure maximum efficiency, and the survival of our beloved covenant. We have been lead in military operations since the beggining of our creation, by the Sangheili. Despite our vast appreciation for their persistent effort, the strain of command is starting to show. They are starting to falter. They have found nothing of usefulness. I ask. has the most potent poison of all, heresy, begun to manifest within the minds of our Sangheili military commanders." The Prophet finished, noting with innate satisfaction, the sheer volume of unwavering attention he was being suplied. Hostile, or not.

"Noble hierarch. What the hell brought you to this conclusion?" One of the Snagheili Councilors responded aggitatedly. The Prophet of Tolerance was about to respond, but spun to bear witness to Tera Agramme storming into the room. He held his Energy Sword out, activated. As he advanced rapidly with a murderous mask of anger on his face, his sword dragged across the floor, carving an angry, scorching line across the council chambers.

"Blasphemy!" The Arbiter roared mencaingly as he took his position at a dais. The Honour Guards tightened the grips of their collective weapons, whispering amongst themselves in rasping tones. The Prophet rolled his eyes, before addresing the hulking Sangheili. The room had fallen dreadfully quiet.

"Your presense was not summoned, Arbiter. Begone!" The Hierarch ordered spitefully.

"It appears to me, holy one. That the Sangheili have begun to outlive their usefullness." The Chieftan stated, with mock innocence. Tera shot a quick glare at the Chieftan. One filled with the very essense of hatred.

"How truly you speak" Tolerance responded. "Take him away" He made a vague, weary gesture towards Tera. The Honor Guards shuffled awkwardly, unsure.

"Did I stutter?!" Tolerance inquired maliciously. "GET RID OF HIM!!" He bellowed. His powerful voice carried across the vast chambers. The Honour Guards levelled their weapons at the Arbiter and advanced.

"There is no need for this idiocy. I will remove myself!" Tera exclaimed angrily. He spun on his heel, and left the council chambers with some of his fellow Sangheili. A tattered trail of their dignity left behind.

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Feedback?
I started this FF on another site. I actually have about 12 chapters, but I want to see what people think first before filtering them all in here.
And yes, I know it doesn't entirely make sense now. :)

  • 04.04.2010 3:21 PM PDT

no. nonono

That was awesome, your descriptions and word choice are brilliant.

  • 04.04.2010 4:05 PM PDT

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it was good but what was with the "what the hell has brought you to this conclusion" thing.

  • 04.04.2010 7:03 PM PDT

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The Councilor was questoning the Prophets descision.
I know saying cursewords as an Alien sounds wierd, but think of any dialogue as a direct translation from their own tongues. Had they been speaking in Sangheilian, the Councilor would have said hell, just in his own language. (Or a similar word/phrase)

  • 04.05.2010 1:37 AM PDT

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Honourable Venegance
Act I
Disturbing Revelations

As the Arbiter stalked away from the council chambers, anger took hold. Refusing to let go. He overheard an announcement from within.

"I now designated the Alpha Brute Chieftan, as Supreme Commander of the Fleet of Anscestral Reclamation" The Prophet declared. There was an uproar from the Sangheili present.

What? The Arbiter thought. That was his fleet to command. What exactly is going on here? He pondered sullenly for a moment, before spinning on his heel and marching towards the chambers once more. When he reached the entryway, he clasped his large hand around the handle to open the door. It would not open. He bashed the door, but it would not relent.

"How tiresome" He mused, before pulling an Energy Sword form his belt. The blade gave a menacing hiss as it fizzed into life. He dug the blade deep into the frame. The sword was plunged deep into the frame, whereby the Arbiter proceeded to carve a sizeable hole in the large door. He shuffled through awkwardly, before he came to dreadful realisation. He took in the carnage all at once. Bloodshed filled the hall, spattered across the bulkhead and decorated the chambers. The corpses of many Sangheili lay defeated. A large force of vicious Jirralhanae methodically moved from Elite to Elite, bludgeoning them each to death in turn. They fought valiantly, but fell before the larger force. Soon, only Brutes remained. Tera spotted Tolerance, watching in sick satisfaction. Anger flared within Tera's mind. He raced towards the Prophet. Unfortunately, before he could make decent progress towards the Monarch, Tolerance spotted him out of the corner of his eye. He summoned the Jirralhanae, and the rabid apes responded almost instantly. This was not a fair fight.

"Better to live and fight another day, then to die in a pointless skirmish" The Arbiter conceeded grudgingly. He slashed his sword across the floor, showering the Jirralhanae in sparks. Before dashing for the exit. Once he exited the room, he took a left at a T junction. Sounds of alarm, both machine and verbally uttered, achoed throughout the complex.

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Yes, this one was very short. My apologies.

  • 04.05.2010 3:20 AM PDT

There once was an ugly barnacle. He was so ugly that everyone died.

The end.

SCFH

"Brilliant!"

Love this story. Keep it up.

  • 04.05.2010 5:22 AM PDT