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Subject: [story] The Epitome of Strength (Ch.1 finshed)

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This is my first story on Bungie.

Inspired by Wolverfrog.

This story is about an Elite named Keer Ganl, nephew of the Kaidon of Ganl. He was the fastest and strongest out of his bretheren, and that is why the prophets gave him the mission. Will the truth turn him away from accomplishing his mission? Or impower him with a new quest so extreme, that he may not live to see the effects?

[Edited on 04.21.2010 4:16 PM PDT]

  • 04.19.2010 5:29 PM PDT
Subject: [story] The Epitome of Strength

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~Prologue~


I stood tall above the enemy, whom was cowaring in dirt. The Heretic learned his place amongst the apostate; death.As my blade sliced him limb from limb, my joy grew stronger. I grow stronger yet. I, Keer Ganlee, was the fist, the word, the breath of the almighty Prophets. I was indestructible.


Then truth fell from the heavens, and it made me weak.

[Edited on 04.19.2010 5:36 PM PDT]

  • 04.19.2010 5:35 PM PDT

Interesting, I take it this is between Halo 2 and Halo 3 or after Halo 3 then? Good luck.

  • 04.20.2010 8:21 AM PDT

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Posted by: Wolverfrog
Interesting, I take it this is between Halo 2 and Halo 3 or after Halo 3 then? Good luck.

This Story takes place between H2 and H3. And thanks. ;)

  • 04.20.2010 12:53 PM PDT
Subject: [story] The Epitome of Strength (Ch.1 finshed)

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~Chapter One: The Ardor of Eminence~

"Keer Ganl" spoke his Uncle, and the Kaidon, of Ganl.
"Yes Uncle?" I replied without a hint of emotion. At this stage that would be self-immolation.
"The Prophets wish to speak to you. I am sure it has some importance for your path through the Great Journey." His Uncle stated. Confuzion spread through my body faster than pain. The Prophets wish to speak with me?
My Uncle had grown ill, and I believed Ganl to pronounce me Kaidon of Ganl, yet instead he was deliver a message from the almighty Prophets. This was odd because Ganl did not believe they were true to their word. He had serve a large fraction of his life in the Covenant Infantry, and has seen that the Forrunner Artifacts hadn't even been touched. "As you wish Ganl", I replied.

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"Zealot Field Master Keer Ganlee" spoke the Prophet of Truth, stressing his military ranking."We have a mission of high importance for you." I froze.
"High importance mighty Hiearch?"
The Prophet went on, ignoring my babbling, "You shall eliminate the apostate. They are a group of Unggoy, Kig-Yar, Huragok, Lekgolo, and a Shan 'Shyuum. Eleminate them before they desroy the covenant."
"A Prophet is among the traitors?" I spoke with disbelief.
"Yes," said Truth," One who has gone horribly mad. He claims the Humans have done nothing wrong, and with his heretic support, attacks the covenant directly."
"Yes Mighty Prophet." I said bowing.
"You are now ranked as my personnal Warrior, my epitome of strength, a higher rank than even a Sangheili Councilor. Now leave, and return when your mission has been completed. Let the Forrunners guide you." At the conclusion of that, I walked from the chamber to the orbital docks to await my Supercarrier.

[Edited on 04.21.2010 4:15 PM PDT]

  • 04.20.2010 1:41 PM PDT

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Do I have any readers? :(

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  • 04.20.2010 4:59 PM PDT
Subject: [story] The Epitome of Strength

In the Emperor's name, you shall not falter!

Posted by: RogueAssassin27
Do I have any readers? :(

I just read it. Nice job.

  • 04.20.2010 9:22 PM PDT

Good writing, but too short. Try and make it at least over 7500 characters long. Also, remember to start a new line when switching dialogue and work on your description a bit more.

:)

  • 04.20.2010 11:18 PM PDT
Subject: [story] The Epitome of Strength (Ch.1 finshed)

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Yeah, I'm sorry it's short. It is because I'm taking my Finals this week.

EDIT: the descrpition is longer and I corrected the mistakes you provided.

[Edited on 04.21.2010 4:01 AM PDT]

  • 04.21.2010 3:53 AM PDT

-eddy!
huh! What? It was the other guy, honest! ;)
'it was a sniper!' looks down at my sniper
uhh yeah? hes got one too. XD

the prhophets of truth, mercy and regret would not be called 'prophet' theyre called 'hierach', part from that i cant find anything else to say, apart from you still need a bit more discription

  • 04.21.2010 12:02 PM PDT

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Posted by: Matt Eddy
the Prophets of truth, mercy and regret would not be called 'prophet' theyre called 'hierach', part from that i cant find anything else to say, apart from you still need a bit more discription
Odd, in the books and games Thel refers to them as the Prophets.

  • 04.21.2010 4:17 PM PDT

-eddy!
huh! What? It was the other guy, honest! ;)
'it was a sniper!' looks down at my sniper
uhh yeah? hes got one too. XD

ahh, just ignore me then :(

  • 04.24.2010 8:04 AM PDT

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It's k

  • 04.24.2010 9:19 AM PDT