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On Mars in an ONI facility, over 300 young children sit and wait.

" I heard that we are going to be an army!" a six year old Tyler says.

"No way! This is just a field trip to a giant playground!" Mirand responds

A man in a gray UNSC undiform walks up to a podium. His old face and grey hair show obvious signs of stress and old age. "Ahem, Attention, boys and girls." His voice booms through speakers." You have been chosen for your unique skills and genetic make-up. We are going to make you into the best that you can be, and you will change the future."

A little boy in the first row raises his hand.

"Yes, in the front row?" The man asks gently.

"What are we going to be the best of?" The boy squeaks.

"Soldiers, you will be an army of Spartan super-soldiers." The man answers.

"Hah! I told you!" Tyler says to Miranda.

Time passes and the young kids have grown. At the age of sixteen they are in their combat training.

"Above you!" Tyler yells.

Miranda looks up to see a cut-out of a drone. Her vest then beeps and glows red.

"Your partner is dead. You fail." A voice booms over the loud speaker." Run it again."

"We were so close that time! Tyler says.

The light glows green and the Spartans begin to run it again. Time fades on four more years and the Spartans have graduated and are now one of the most powerful armies to date.This army is invincible. Tyler,the leader of the Army and Miranda,one rank below him,lead the Spartans out of the hangar and onto their first mission.

  • 05.11.2010 7:19 PM PDT
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  • 05.11.2010 7:21 PM PDT
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Ghost of Onyx

Awesome book, I think it's the best of all Halo book. ( I haven't read Protocole Cole though... )

  • 05.12.2010 7:54 AM PDT

Posted by: Blood Eagle 67
Ghost of Onyx

Awesome book, I think it's the best of all Halo book. ( I haven't read Protocole Cole though... )

ummm okay?i haven't read that book if that's what you're implying...

  • 05.12.2010 12:27 PM PDT

An assassin will always carry on, even after death.

Very like it but it has HUGE differences. Your story is a bit like Onyx but it is different.

  • 05.12.2010 12:33 PM PDT

How'd you find me?

Posted by: Blood Eagle 67
Ghost of Onyx

Awesome book, I think it's the best of all Halo book. ( I haven't read Protocole Cole though... )


It's Cole Protocol. Please don't post random crap in someone else's thread, that's what the flood is for. Anyway, that was an interesting read. It moved very quickly though.

  • 05.12.2010 5:56 PM PDT

Here's the next part, hopefully it's better than the first. Sorry this one's short but its sorta late and i'm tired

A few monthes pass and it grows closer and closer to the First Battle of Earth. One of the Covenant CCS Cruisers has found Mars, the last defense before Earth. The fleet surrounding Mars was very weak and the cruiser ignored half of them and destroyed a large amount. Immediately they send down Jackel scouts armed with only plasma pistols and modified shields so that they nearly never fail.

At the nearest base, a couple of Marine snipers spot the Jackels on patrol. "Bet you i can kill more than you, Dave!" one marine says as he aims up a shot.

"Please, i could take you with my eyes closed." Dave says confidently.

Sniper shots ring through the air as one by one Jackels fall to the ground. Then, the Spartans walk out of the base. "Let's go move the bodies into the base. Collect the plasma shields, we can use them later." Tyler orders.

The ground begins to shake and dust flies through the air as the CCS Cruiser approaches the stronghold. "Aim all artillery at it an fire at will!" a marine orders.

"Spartans, grab your lasers and fire."Tyler commands.

The shields of the cruiser sparkle and shimmer, however, they are too strong. It seems as if nothing could break these shields. "Everyone, hold your fire!" Tyler says "Fire again on my command."

The cruiser begins to charge up its excavation beam. The marines stare at the glowing light of doom. They all look scared and are ready to fire but they don't quite yet. The beam charges fully and is unleashed upon the base. "Fire on the excavation beam!" Tyler yells.

All artillery and Spartan Lasers fire on the front of the ship and the beam flickers until it fails completely. Immediately the ship flies back to a safer distance and begins to release squads of Elites and grunts.

"Spartans, follow me." Tyler orders.

"Where are we going?" Miranda asks

"To war."

  • 05.12.2010 7:29 PM PDT

Talk about the passage of time.

Try and slow it down a little, give us some more details on the characters.

  • 05.14.2010 4:53 AM PDT

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Talk about the passage of time.

Try and slow it down a little, give us some more details on the characters.

thanks for the tips, i'll try to follow them

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Too fast. You cut through years that could be used for character development. You should at least spend a part or two on each interval of time. Other than that, it was pretty good.

  • 05.14.2010 7:45 PM PDT