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Subject: Rate my Story [to be continued]
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The Demon was reborned! He had two swords. He took over the world by overflooding the Earth with lava. All mankind burned. All of Earth's protectors [angels] went after the demon to destroy him permanetly but he made an army of demons. The war continued for 1,000 years. Only blood every where! Hell broke lose. So did heaven! God awake and stroke the demon with lightning! He was blown to millions of pieces. The demons went back to hell and everything was back to normal until....

Rate my story from 1-10. Also tell me what you thought of it too!

  • 08.03.2004 3:58 PM PDT
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dumb

  • 08.03.2004 4:00 PM PDT
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3.....your to focused on the bloody battles and that doesnt make a story....you need a plot, theme, setting, more character description

  • 08.03.2004 4:08 PM PDT