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Subject: [Novel] Helljumpers
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


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This is after Halo Wars, the date is currently 2542

[Edited on 10.26.2010 5:07 PM PDT]

  • 10.26.2010 5:07 PM PDT

hmmmm not bad choice of date as the war for harvest ended at 2552
so this is just 10 years before the planet harvest was left for good.
Where the hell are the cyclopes


  • 10.26.2010 5:24 PM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


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I was actually going to put them in the next chapter, odd as it may be, they were going to have Gauss Cannons as rifles.

  • 10.26.2010 5:43 PM PDT

why not instead just hand them some machine guns so they dont seem over powered and it makes them seem more like bad asses

  • 10.26.2010 5:49 PM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


Official fan of Assassin's Creed, Call of Duty, (Problem with that?) Halo, and Bungie, also a total gaming junkie.

Then I'd get sued by James Cameron. LOL but would you send them out to fight Scarabs, Banshees, Wraiths, AA-Wraiths, Spectres, and Revenants with MGs instead of cannons that shoot armor piercing rounds at light-speed? And I'm writing the next chapter as I post this.

  • 10.26.2010 5:55 PM PDT

O_O -_- O_O

no

I would just give them cigars
replace there Jackhammer with a machine gun
and give them a sword bigger then a tank

that to me would be epic

  • 10.26.2010 6:01 PM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


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Now why would I replace their jackhammer with a 50. cal. Imagine this, theres a grunt who won't shut up, would you use

A: A 50. Cal to just kill him.

B: Smash him with a jackhammer.

I find B to be more satisfying.

  • 10.26.2010 6:05 PM PDT
Subject: Helljumpers
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


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Posted by: Martriden
I'm surprised no-one else mentioned the name "Lt. Colonel Sainders", sounds like the guy might have a secret recipe for Fried Chicken


Your user name will be in the next chapter. You deserve it, and I'm surprised you're the ONLY person who discovered that reference. All I did was add an i.

  • 10.26.2010 6:08 PM PDT

ya but with a machine gun you can at least keep attacking

with the jack hammer you gata attack 1 by one

it makes more sense for a machine gun to be there

and the big sword and cigar is just a bonus

  • 10.26.2010 6:11 PM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


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Only if they're Sweet Williams.

  • 10.27.2010 7:22 AM PDT
Subject: [Novel] Helljumpers
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


Official fan of Assassin's Creed, Call of Duty, (Problem with that?) Halo, and Bungie, also a total gaming junkie.

Sorry for the long wait.

Hellumpers Part 5: Assault Part 1 of 2

"You boys got those charges set?" asked Commander Sainders

"Yes sir."

"Then do it."

In the distance 7 Covenant AA-guns exploded violently, with at least killing 28 Covenant soldiers. Sainders smiled happily behind his visor.

"Thanks, we owe you for that, clear out so we can land." Said Commander Leach of the Martriden Assault-Class Frigate.

"You're welcome." said Gunny.

"You sure you want to land? There are 3 Scarabs waiting for you!"

"Don't worry Sainders, we got a little surprise for them."

The Frigate was so close Sainders could see it.

"I hope he knows what he's doing." thought Lt. Colonel Sainders. But he then heard a boom coming from the Frigate.

"What the hell was that?!"

He got his anwser when 14 90mm rounds hit one of the Scarabs, which then exploded.

"Thats one!"

The frigate's Mass Driver then fired at another Scarab and destroyed it.

"Thats two!"

The frigate's MAC Cannon then fired and hit the last Scarab dead-on, instantly destroying it.

"Here we come, when we land we'll drop off our Gauss Warthogs and our Cyclopses."

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"Y'tal, status report!" demanded G'las Rudenk'ee.

"Sire, we have cleansed the orbit of their orbital defense platforms and have destroyed most of their fleet, but a few humans have destroyed 7 of our AA-batteries and a two human Assault Frigates has broke through our defenses and entered the atmosphere, they are currently dropping off vehicles and armored suits."

"Get me a secure communications link with Ultra H'kad Mantean'ee! I need to speak with him."

"Yes noble Fleetmaster!"

"There, he is now ready to speak with you Fleetmaster."

"H'kad?"

"Yes Fleetmaster?"

"Get you and your men over to the Scarabs! The humans are mobillizing for an attack!"

"We will meet them and destroy them or die trying!"

"Good brother, we are sending in three of our Corvettes to support you."

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"Lets get moving!"

"Sir, we got Covies mobillizing to attack!"

"How many?"

"We got at least 14 Scarabs, and 7 V.2s, and three Corvettes are moving into postition!"

"Call command, we need back-up!"




The next part will be today or tommorow if I can get around to it.

[Edited on 11.04.2010 6:27 AM PDT]

  • 10.27.2010 8:40 AM PDT

-ThreePointOneFour

I like it

  • 10.27.2010 10:40 AM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


Official fan of Assassin's Creed, Call of Duty, (Problem with that?) Halo, and Bungie, also a total gaming junkie.


Posted by: BC 742617000027
I like it


Yes another fan! And I'm starting the next part

  • 10.28.2010 9:53 AM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


Official fan of Assassin's Creed, Call of Duty, (Problem with that?) Halo, and Bungie, also a total gaming junkie.

I'm not in a good mood, I was 2/3 done and my computer shut off on me. The part has been delayed, sorry.

[Edited on 10.28.2010 11:30 AM PDT]

  • 10.28.2010 11:30 AM PDT

What a waste....


Posted by: Ktan Dantaktee
This is after Halo Wars, the date is currently 2542
The campaign to retake Harvest was an ATTACK on the Covenant. The Army is almost never used in offensive engagements. It's also highly unlikely any Covenant would really care about a glass ball floating on the edge of UNSC space.

  • 10.28.2010 8:23 PM PDT
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Posted by: Ktan Dantaktee
Your user name will be in the next chapter. You deserve it, and I'm surprised you're the ONLY person who discovered that reference. All I did was add an i.

My user name was blatantly plagiarised from a Montana Blackened Death metal band.

edit:
I just read the newest part you added.


"Sire, we have cleansed the orbit of their orbital defense."

Seems redundant.

The wording would work better as "Sire, we have cleansed the skies of their pitiful defenses."

[Edited on 11.02.2010 12:21 AM PDT]

  • 11.02.2010 12:18 AM PDT

Posted by: Ktan Dantaktee
I'm not in a good mood, I was 2/3 done and my computer shut off on me. The part has been delayed, sorry.


You shouldn't be writing it all in one burst like that; it makes for a short, rushed chapter and poor quality. Take your time. I write my chapters gradually over the course of a week or more. Sure it means there's a gap between chapters, but it means the quality of said chapters is higher.

  • 11.02.2010 12:48 AM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


Official fan of Assassin's Creed, Call of Duty, (Problem with that?) Halo, and Bungie, also a total gaming junkie.


Posted by: Wolverfrog
Posted by: Ktan Dantaktee
I'm not in a good mood, I was 2/3 done and my computer shut off on me. The part has been delayed, sorry.


You shouldn't be writing it all in one burst like that; it makes for a short, rushed chapter and poor quality. Take your time. I write my chapters gradually over the course of a week or more. Sure it means there's a gap between chapters, but it means the quality of said chapters is higher.


Well the one I had writen was good in quality, it was also what I hoped Reach's TOTS would be like, a massive battle with Scarabs and ships blowing up everywhere.

  • 11.02.2010 2:35 PM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


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Almost done with it.

  • 11.03.2010 8:51 PM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


Official fan of Assassin's Creed, Call of Duty, (Problem with that?) Halo, and Bungie, also a total gaming junkie.

OK, sorry for the LONG delay, but here it is.

Helljumpers Part 5: Assault: Section 2 of 2


"I'm sorry, but we cannot send re-inforcements at this time.

"Crap!"

"What did they say Tech?"

"To put it simply, they said "Screw you guys"."

"Great, no back up. Tell the assault frigates to attack those Corvettes!"

"Yes sir!"

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"Sire, the human ships are about to attack our Corvettes!"

"Then tell them to fire their Focus Cannons!"

"Yes Ultra!"

"Pilot, drop off our Kig-Yar marksmen at that cliff, then take us to the command Scarab."

"Yes Ultra."

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"How you doin' Rook?"

"I have just discovered something Texas."

"What?"

"I hate gunning."

"Just shut up and shoot the damn Gauss!"

"Temper temper."

"Two words, shut and up."

"Uh, Scarab!"

"Oh great, shoot it's gun!"

"OK"

The scarab's main cannon was then shredded by the Gauss cannon's powerful rounds, rendering it useless.

"Take me around to the back!" said Rookie as he knocked out one of the Scarab's legs, bringing it down.

"Got it!"

"Aiming, aiming, fired!"

The Scarab's back armor then fell off, allowing Rookie to destroy the generator that it protected, destroying it.

"One down, who knows how many to go!" said Texas as he drove into the heart of the battle, snow flying up into the air from the tires of his Warthog, hitting him.

"I just discovered something too Rookie. I hate snow."

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"Tech, take us up to the top of this thing, me and Gunny need a good aim at that AA gun."

"Yes sir!"

"Gunny, get ready to shoot the supports for that gun, then get ready for one hell of an explosion!"

"Yes sir!"

The Falcon then increased in altitude, bringing them up to the AA gun, which was quickly dispatched by the Falcons Chain Gun and Grenade Launchers. It then fell backwards, hitting the Scarab's generator, destroying the Scarab and anything within 28 feet. They then did the same with 7 other Scarabs.

"Where are Rookie and Texas?"

"They're taking out the covie's ground forces and dropships, haven't heard anything from Stevenson yet."

"Find him, we need to take out their main AA battery so the frigates can start their bombing run."

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A Phantom dropship had just dropped off several Jackal snipers at a cliff, and they were taking out UNSC soldiers quickly and efficiently. But a shadow came up abruptly, they then turned around to see what had caused it. It was the last thing they would ever see. Stevenson walked towards the top of the cliff in his Cyclops armor, then began using his Gauss cannon to take out anything he saw.

"Kig-Yar, I have returned with the power cores... What have you done you disgusting rat! You shall pay for the blood you just spilled!" said an Elite Field Marshall who had just arrived.

"OK, you miss 'em so much, go join em." Said Stevenson as he raised his Gauss at the Elite, but the Field Marshall pulled out two Plasma Rifles and melted the barrel of the Gauss, he then jumped over the Cyclops suit while shooting it with plasma bolts, he then charged at the ODST with an Energy Sword.

"Crap." thought John as the Elite ran towards him, but he then smashed the Elite in the face with the back of his now ruined Gauss, then hitting it again, smacking it away. He then charged at the Elite and punched it, taking it's shields down, but the Elite then stabbed at him with his sword, just missing John's head.

"Nice try split lip, but I ain't dying yet." said Stevenson as he punched the Field Marshall repeatedly until it died.

"Stevenson, head over to the Covenant's AA guns, me and the others will meet you there."
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The Martriden moved in on the Corvettes, taking one out by a few shots from it's Mass Driver, then took out another one with it's 90mm rounds and a quick MAC round to the center of it, while the Titanic attacked and destroyed the last Corvette, but was shot down by an AA Gun. The ground forces destroying the last few Scarabs with some assistance from Longsword fighters.

"Lets get moving, Texas and Rookie are on their way, and Stevenson is almost here."

Just then a Gauss Warthog came out of nowhere and destroyed a few AA guns.

"There you guys go, less for us to just blow up."

"Nice to see you guys are still in one piece."

"Likewise sir."

"Tech, get those explosives set on those AA guns, Gunny, Texas, John, and Rookie, cover him. But save one Tech, ONI wants us to use it to take out an Assault Cruiser that just arrived."

"OK sir, I'll man it when I'm done."

7 minutes later

"They're all set sir."

"Good, get on that AA gun."

"Already on it sir."

"Good, now shoot the crap out of that thing!"

"With pleasure sir!"

The AA gun fired at the glassing beam while it was charging, causing it to detonate, therefore destroying the whole Cruiser.

"Yes!"

But before they could celebrate, a Phantom dropship dropped off three Elites, two Spec Ops and one Ultra. And that Ultra happened to be a very angry H'kad Mantean'ee. The two Spec Ops Elites engaged the ODSTs, while H'kad went to the cockpit of the AA gun and pulled Tech out by the throat.

"You dare to destroy one of our Assault Cruisers... wait, you are one of the humans we shot out of the air yesterday. I will have to finish you off." said H'kad as he pulled out an Energy Sword, but Tech then attempted to stab the Elite, but H'kad grabbed the knife from him and stabbed him in the stomach.

"Now you die vermon!" said H'kad as he stabbed Tech in the face with his Energy Sword, he then threw the body like it was trash.

Stevenson killed the last Elite in time to see his friend die.

"TECH!" screamed John as he shot the Elite multiple times with his DMR, but the Elite then boarded a Phantom that had just arrived.

John then ran over to Tech's lifeless body, checking his pulse.

"Nothing. Damn those -Blam!- Elites to hell!"

"I'm calling in a Pelican, we need to get out of here. Take the body too."



See what I did there? Added an unexpected twist.

[Edited on 11.04.2010 6:28 AM PDT]

  • 11.03.2010 9:02 PM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


Official fan of Assassin's Creed, Call of Duty, (Problem with that?) Halo, and Bungie, also a total gaming junkie.

Please tell me people still read this

  • 11.04.2010 6:31 AM PDT
Subject: Helljumpers

How'd you find me?

This story shows promise. You need to tidy up your paragraphs a bit and maybe have them do less insane stuff like kill three zealots five minutes into the drop. Still, it's very good, and I hope to read more.

  • 11.04.2010 7:48 AM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


Official fan of Assassin's Creed, Call of Duty, (Problem with that?) Halo, and Bungie, also a total gaming junkie.

Ya, but I wanted an action packed beggining, and to get that fight out of my head. I did this chapter to show that they aren't invincible. By my standards, this is my best, most well written part yet. It almost reaches the quality of WFs and your stories.

  • 11.04.2010 7:57 AM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


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If you read this please comment

  • 11.04.2010 1:03 PM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


Official fan of Assassin's Creed, Call of Duty, (Problem with that?) Halo, and Bungie, also a total gaming junkie.

Did anyone other than kingwrench read this? I want more than one fan. And if you read this, PLEASE POST!

  • 11.04.2010 4:20 PM PDT

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