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Subject: Helljumpers

Please, stop multi-posting. It's against the rules and really does make you look like a desperate idiot, in all sincerity.

I'll get around to reading this at some point. Be patient, and don't bump the thread. It'll get you banned.

Or at least it would if the moderators ever checked in on this place.

They don't.

  • 11.04.2010 4:50 PM PDT
Subject: [Novel] Helljumpers (Part 6 now complete!)
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


Official fan of Assassin's Creed, Call of Duty, (Problem with that?) Halo, and Bungie, also a total gaming junkie.

I know, but I just want some feedback to see if I'm doing something wrong or if these could be improved. Sorry but I really need to stop, the FNs already locked ONE of my threads, I don't need another one locked.

[Edited on 11.10.2010 4:58 AM PST]

  • 11.04.2010 4:57 PM PDT
Subject: Helljumpers
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


Official fan of Assassin's Creed, Call of Duty, (Problem with that?) Halo, and Bungie, also a total gaming junkie.

OK, sorry for this double post. I just read Halo Evolutions (Great read by the way), and I'll be using a few things from that to lengthen this story.

  • 11.05.2010 8:20 AM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


Official fan of Assassin's Creed, Call of Duty, (Problem with that?) Halo, and Bungie, also a total gaming junkie.

I have no clue where to go with this story. Any ideas guys? And I'm sorry for this triple post.

  • 11.06.2010 8:30 PM PDT
Subject: [Novel] Helljumpers

What a waste....


Posted by: Ktan Dantaktee
This is after Halo Wars, the date is currently 2542
After the retaking of Harvest, no one really cared. The surface was basically unusable, except for the northern regions and some areas. So...

  • 11.07.2010 8:20 PM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


Official fan of Assassin's Creed, Call of Duty, (Problem with that?) Halo, and Bungie, also a total gaming junkie.

Actually, you will see why this city isn't molten glass and is still valuable towards the end.

  • 11.08.2010 2:35 PM PDT
Subject: [Novel] Helljumpers (Part 6 now complete!)
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


Official fan of Assassin's Creed, Call of Duty, (Problem with that?) Halo, and Bungie, also a total gaming junkie.

OK, here it is, the first chapter after that shocker I put in the previous one

Helljumpers: Part 6: First floor: Giant aliens, shoes, and prototype fighter jets.

It had been 7 days after Tech's demise, and the team still hadn't come to terms with the loss of their teammate, but there was no time for mourning or a proper funeral. They had a city to reclaim.

"We're approaching the LZ now, you ready Warrant Officer sir?

"As ready as I'll ever be." said Stevenson as he got off the Pelican transport.

It had been yesterday the team split up to attack seperate targets, Gunny and Texas left to destroy a Corvette, Rookie was sent with 7 Spartan IIIs to attack and destroy Covenant outposts that were scattered all throughout the city, and Sainders left with a platoon of Army Troopers and a few Spartan IIIs to secure a highly important ONI base. That left him. He was going to have to secure a launch facility holding a new fighter called the Raven.

"Here we go."

He got off and made his way into the launch facility, everywhere he went there was blood left by the now dead Covenant and UNSC soldiers, he could hear the vicious fighting that was going on in the launch control. There was one more door till he reached the control room, at least thats what his helmet GPS Map said.

"Here we go." he said as he opened the door. Then he walked into what could pass as hell.

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As soon as he stepped in, he could see human limbs and gore everywhere, heads knocked off their bodies, blood dripping off the wall, it had the smell of death hanging over the whole launch area, he could still hear screams ending with a crack or tearing sound. Only one thing could be capable of doing this.

"BRUTES!" Screamed an Army Trooper as he ran from one, only to be caught and torn apart.

"OK you stinkin bastard, come get me!" Yelled John as he loaded his DMR.

The Brute screamed something in a different language and charged at him. But it was in vain, for moments later a bullet seared straight through his forehead.

"You may not be the bastards that killed my friend, but I'm going to kill you anyway for being so -Blam!-in ugly!"

And with that, he charged straight into the heart of the battle.

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As they gained distance, they could see small explosions on the ship they had just set a Shiva nuclear bomb on. It was actually beautiful to watch the blue, red, and purple explosions consume the small Corvette Class ship, even though hundreds of beings were being killed in extremely painful ways. And that actually made it even better and more enjoyable to watch since those beings were Covenant.

"Sainders says he wants us to go help Rookie, he encountered heavy resistance and 2 of his Spartans went MIA. Some Elite came and owned them."

"How the hell did some Elite kill 2 Spartan IIIs?!"

"Ask Rookie that when we get there, OK Texas?"

"Yes sir."

Even though they were still about a mile away, Texas could have sworn he heard the battle as the Pelican Transport neared the battle.

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Things were going bad for Rookie, no... they were just suckishly horrible. An Elite that had more than triple the strength of a Spartan II and had something that was similar to a Spartan II's MJOLNIR Armor, except much stronger shields, much lighter, and the armor itself is nearly bullet-proof.

"Someone use a Splazer on that thing!"

"Sorry sir, but that thing snapped it in half!"

"Well then try to rush it!"

"Yes sir! OK Balta Team, rush that Elite, for George and Keegan!"

They then rushed the Elite, but it quickly fought back furiously. The S IIIs attacked with the lead Spartan punching the Elites face, which would have killed a regular Elite, but as he tried to punch again, the Elite grabbed his wrist, twisted it, punched the III in the gut, then threw him into a nearby building.

He then kicked another III in the face, depleting his shield and breaking his visor open, with the shards of it embedding into the Spartan's now bloodied face, which the Elite then sprayed with his Plasma Rifle, melting the III's face, killing him. The other III then renewed his attack, but his helmet was split in half by a punch, the Elite then stuck a Plasma Grenade to the Soldier's face. it wasn't pretty. The Elite then charged the rest, punching one so rapidly it should have been impossible, killing him, he then got out two Energy Daggers and repeated the attack on another III, ending with more violent results. The other IIIs opened fire with Assault Rifles, but the Elite got out a Particle Beam Rifle and picked one off, but his shield were taken down by the other one who then met a gory demise due to the Elites massive strength. It then went after Rookie, but its head suddenly fell off. Rookie then saw why, Texas and Gunny had arrived just in time to save his ass.

"What was that thing?!" asked Texas as Rookie climbed onto the Pelican.

"Hell if I know, but ONI will want to hear about this."

"Great, we have to talk with Spooks."

"Quiet, Both of you! Sainders says to rendevous with him at the ONI base."

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The launch pad was now empty of Brute life, and also smelled of gore, Human and Brute. John then went to board the Raven fighter jet. The controls were easy to handle, the seat was actually nice, and the fire-power on this thing was incredible, a 90mm cannon, 2 missle pods, and a Gauss cannon on both sides, along with extra ammunition for the 90mm cannon and Gauss cannons, and even equipped with some extra missiles, and a mini Shiva nuclear warhead in the bottom of it. He could have some fun with this.

"Your mission is to clear the skies of any Covenant, the Martriden will assist you, along with 7 Sabres and at least 49 Longswords. Got it?"

"Yes flight control, I hear you loud and clear."

"Good, we are now launching you."

"And here we go." Thought Stevenson as his Raven launched into the air.




So how did you guys like it? Tell me what you thought please, the next chapter will be a huge aerial battle. I've edited it due to spelling mistakes and to make it much more enjoyable.

[Edited on 12.18.2010 12:54 PM PST]

  • 11.09.2010 8:58 PM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


Official fan of Assassin's Creed, Call of Duty, (Problem with that?) Halo, and Bungie, also a total gaming junkie.

Does anyone read this anymore? If you read PLEASE post a comment, I like to know if people read this.

  • 11.11.2010 1:10 PM PDT
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Fleetmaster of Sangheili Army 7, total Halo Reach SWAT badass, owner of all Halo games, and fan of the Halo series, even though CoD is more of a preference.

This has got to be the greatest story ever. I got the idea for my username from this story! I got a profile after reading this and liked the name. Oh yeah, WTF you got blacklisted.

[Edited on 11.15.2010 12:04 PM PST]

  • 11.15.2010 12:01 PM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


Official fan of Assassin's Creed, Call of Duty, (Problem with that?) Halo, and Bungie, also a total gaming junkie.

OK lets see if my blacklist is over.

Yes!

Never mind Hkad, thats my secondary profile and it was a JOKE. Sorry if it offended anyone. I'll edit that post once I figure out why I can't sign out.

[Edited on 11.16.2010 5:26 AM PST]

  • 11.16.2010 5:23 AM PDT

-_- good
your storys going good but I have a bad feeling most will not read after the little event that happened
I will but not sure about the others


  • 11.17.2010 3:52 PM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


Official fan of Assassin's Creed, Call of Duty, (Problem with that?) Halo, and Bungie, also a total gaming junkie.

Well, I wouldn't expect them to, I don't deserve them to look at this. I also posted that nobody would after... It. Nice to see at least one person still reads this after my incident.

  • 11.17.2010 5:17 PM PDT
Subject: Helljumpers

"I will show you how a true Prussian officer fights!"

"And i will show you where the iron crosses grow..."

- "Cross of Iron"

I like it. Looking forward for more.

  • 11.17.2010 6:46 PM PDT
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Posted by: chotato
smart, interesting, seems out of place.


Official fan of Assassin's Creed, Call of Duty, (Problem with that?) Halo, and Bungie, also a total gaming junkie.

OK now I'm considering making new chapters since people still have some respect after what I did and still read this. I'm going to write the next chapter, and maybe even start a new story I've had in my head for a while.

  • 11.17.2010 7:10 PM PDT

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