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Posted by: Mr Evil 37
Sorry to be a pain, Connor, but I think you should change the title of this story. "Pheonix's Penance", while appropriate, is rather clunky and does not flow very well. Perhaps something like "Halo: From The Ashes" might be a better fit; you are keeping the phoenix metaphor, while making it flow better.
Just a suggestion.
You are asking him to get rid of a potential Phoenix Wright reference, that is heresy.
:P
But I agree, I gave up trying to think of a new name for it, but I do not particularly like this one.