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90% of teens would be freaking out if Miley Cyrus was standing on the edge of a tall building. Make this your signature if you would be one of the 10% yelling "JUMP!"

Chapter 1- Rough landing.

I was on the ground hurt, breathless, and dazed i tried to get up but was forced back down by the hand of Elzrath the team medic. "Recon take it easy you had one heck a fall from the pelican. just lay down while i fix some of your wounds" "Gentlemen lower your voices were in enemy territory so zip it." Cypher said in a low but harsh tone. "Now recon are you still able to fight?" "Yes sir i'm a bit dazed but im good no broken bones just some minor flesh wounds." He sat up and Elzrath nodded letting him know he was finished."I'm going to go scout the area." He said walking to the edge of a clearing were there was open land for about 300 yards then there was a town. At the entrance to the town there were two shade turrets each one being operated by a small squad of grunts. He walked a bit further east and saw a drainage pipe that two people could get through. After a bit he saw a patrol of grunts walk by up ahead so he slowly made his way back to Cypher and Elzrath."About 300 yards from here is an entrance to the town but is being guarded by 2 shade turrets and a squad of grunts." "Is that all you saw Recon?" Cypher said looking up from his weapon. "Yes that was all sir but i did not look long but it seems 100 yards to the east is a drainage pipe that two of us can fit through but i left once a patrol of grunts walked by." he said sitting down and checked his battle rifle and satisfied with its condition he slapped in a fresh clip and chambered the first round."So how do you think we can get into the town? i think the drainage pipe is our best bet" Elzrath said putting away some of his med packs. Cypher stood up and looked at them. "Check everything in 1 hour we are going into the sewer we need to take this town."


Chapter 2- Wounded


"Ok men lets move out recon make a distraction to the west Elzrath you come with me were going to the drainage pipe. And recon regroup with us at the town square."Cypher said checking his guns. "Yes sir and i will send you 2 clicks when im in the town square."Recon said grabbing his battle rifle and some anti-personal mines. he stood up and looked at them and held two fingers up to his face mask "Good luck Spartans"He said and walked off into the trees. Cypher nodded at his smile and returned the favor before turning around to look at Elzrath."Elzrath come on." "Yes sir"Elzrath said picking up his M5 Assault rifle and he walked towards Cypher a bit up ahead. "in 10 seconds Elzrath were making a run for the pipe so recons distraction works 5...4....3....2...1"Cypher heard a series of battle rifle shots coming from the west and he and Elzrath ran for the sewage pipe before they heard another loud booming noise."That one must of been his anti personal mine"He said running and got to the drainage pipe and quickly helped Elzrath get into the pipe with him."Geez it sounds like hes having trouble over there."Elzrath said moving a bit further into the drainage pipe and then dropped down into the sewers followed by a thump of Cypher boots landing on the much in the water."Oh he is doing just fine don't worry about him"Cypher said but the last part of what he said was silenced by another anti personal mine."Ok Cypher i think i see a street drain we can see whats going on." Elzrath said pulling out a fiber optic cable and pushed it up through the street drain. "Elzrath what do you see?" cypher said walking up to him."I see a lot of ground movement headed towards the explosions i think we should get up there soon and help him out" Elzrath said pulling back his probe. "Yes theres a man hole not to far from here we can get too" Cypher said walking down further to the ladder and waited for Elzrath and he started to climb up under Cypher."Stop"Cypher said lifting up the man hole cover so he could check and see if its clear he tossed the man hole cover to the side and climbed out and help Elzrath out."Get into the building behind us."Cypher said as he say a grunt run out of cover to the left going towards the explosions ans he put a 3 round burst into the running grunt and heard him plop to the ground. He quickly turned and walked to the building and Elzrath had cleared the first room and he went to the second room."Clear"Cypher said and was glad it was only 1 story"Clear up stairs"Elzrath said walking down. over his com he could hear more burst from recons battle rifle"Hey Elzrath im having some trouble over at the west end of the village"He said over his coms mic"Ive killed most of them but i need medical help bad im at our drop zone from were i fell and you helped me im there.they enemy did not follow i have my last two mines out on defense i will live till morning come get me when it dies down tell Cypher i could not establish a com link with him." "Recon good luck we will be there soon"Elzrath said cutting the com link and went to Cypher."Recons hurt bad sir" "How bad?" Cypher said closing the door and the blinds."he wont live long hes at the drop zone were he fell he can hold out till morning. Thats in 6 hours."Elzrath said " The first sign of the commotion to die down is when you get him and bring him back here."cypher said walking to a window and peaked out seeing grunts and some jackles run around.

Chapter 3- Missing

Elzrath walked back away from the blinds and looked back at Cypher."Its been 3 hours and it has died down a lot most of the enemy forces from what i can see it located to the west towards the engagement earlier." "Hmmmm I think your right come on lets go we will take the sewers to get back out they dont know about it yet." Cypher said walking to the front door and slide out his fiber optic cable and looked around for a little bit. Satisfied that it was clear and safe for the time being he took back his cable and opened up a com link with Elzrath."Ok when i get into the sewer you follow right after me one you leave this room you don't go back you commit and get down here." Cypher said and then checked his battle rifle then bolted out of the door followed by Elzrath, Cypher jumped down into the man hole and stepped to the side as Elzrath followed him. Once Elzrath got down the man hole he pulled up Recons Vitals on is HUD. It felt like an iron weight just dropped in his stomach."Sir we have to hurry he is unconscious and his pulse is fading" Cypher looked at Elzrath and started to run down the sewers towards the drainage pipe."Hurry up Elzrath were wasting time"After a little bit they finally reached the drainage pipe and Cypher slide to a stop and crouched behind some thick bushes and his hand shot up signaling Elzrath to stop."Enemy patrol up ahead looks like 3 grunts and 2 jackles if they do not pass we take them out." Elzrath nodded at what Cypher had said and checked his assault rifle then his ammo counter and it read 30 a full clip. some time passed before on his HUD he saw a blue light appear and it stayed there for 3 seconds signaling him to open fire. Cypher fired one burst into the lead grunt then quickly moved his sites to the second grunt getting off a second burst before finally the first grunts body made contact with the ground another burst from his battle rifle was good enough to drop the 3rd and final grunt. Elzrath brought his assault rifle up to his shoulder and opened fire on the rear jackles as bluish purple eruptions sprayed out of there mid sections staining the leafs and the ground. His ammo counter read zero just as the last jackle fell to the ground when what looked like something was bending in front of the tree moved towards Elzrath at high speed until what felt like a wrecking ball had hit him he was on the ground and felt his shields bend and make a static noise as his shield made contact with the elites shield as its camo faded. Elzrath hooked his right arm firing it up towards the elites stomach and mad contact but with no effect the elite made a noise that resembled laughing and it pulled out a plasma pistol and held it up to Elzraths face. Elzrath pumped up with his legs and kicked the elite off of him and to the ground and he un holstered his standard issue M9 pistol and fired at the downed elite. He saw the elite stand up and it had fired an overcharged plasma shot towards his face. he dived to the side as the Plasma shot passed his shoulder and he felt his skin tingle from the intense heat as his shield dropped a bit. Elzrath quickly reloaded his M9 and fired again as the elites shield failed exposing his body. two bullets flew and made contact with the elites torso before he moved his aim up and fired 3 bullets into the elites head as it dropped to the ground he walked up and fired 2 more bullets into his head to make sure it was dead."You were lucky that was a lower class elite with little battle experience." Cypher said as he exchanged his old mag for a fresh one."Your right" Elzrath said standing up and started to run to Recons last known position. They reached where they had landed and looked around and saw a small blood trail that lead to a small pool of blood." Where is he?" Cypher said pulling up his teams location on his HUD he got down to Recons and next to his name was the word MALFUNCTIONED."Elzrath Recons gone his tracking system malfunctioned but he is still alive but barely...."

((P.S sorry i had to re-type this chapter so its not fully what it should of been and sorry if some parts seem a little bland i had them re worded in the first copy but something happened and i lost it so i tried my best to remember everything i had written but i hope you guys still enjoy it.))


[Edited on 01.01.2011 8:14 PM PST]

  • 12.30.2010 7:45 PM PDT
Subject: Novel)) Alpha squad (3rd chapter up ready to be read enjoy)

Alright everytime a person talks, you make a new paragraph ergo.

"You were lucky that was a lower class elite with little battle experience." Cypher said as he exchanged his old mag for a fresh one.

"Your right" Elzrath said standing up and started to run to Recons last known position.

  • 12.30.2010 9:53 PM PDT
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90% of teens would be freaking out if Miley Cyrus was standing on the edge of a tall building. Make this your signature if you would be one of the 10% yelling "JUMP!"

ya im new to writing and i found that out about an hour ago from my friend ive yet to go back and change that. otherwise did you like it?

  • 12.30.2010 9:55 PM PDT

Err you use the word said way to much. Uhm im not treally the nit-picking type, but over all your story does has potential.

  • 12.30.2010 9:57 PM PDT
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90% of teens would be freaking out if Miley Cyrus was standing on the edge of a tall building. Make this your signature if you would be one of the 10% yelling "JUMP!"

Ok lol and ya i thought i said said to much but i found a way to get past that

  • 12.30.2010 9:58 PM PDT

Are you doing this is a first person narrative? Or third person?

  • 12.30.2010 10:00 PM PDT
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90% of teens would be freaking out if Miley Cyrus was standing on the edge of a tall building. Make this your signature if you would be one of the 10% yelling "JUMP!"

I dont know really i just write what comes to mind

  • 12.30.2010 10:04 PM PDT

About me: I am a vicious wolf of a man.

But really am sweet at heart. =)

You really need better paragraph spacing, usually 4-6 lines is the maximum you should go before hitting enter. The human brain doesn't like to read huge chunks of text.

  • 12.31.2010 9:16 AM PDT
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90% of teens would be freaking out if Miley Cyrus was standing on the edge of a tall building. Make this your signature if you would be one of the 10% yelling "JUMP!"

Chapter 4- Change



"Elzrath lets go we need to get him" Cypher turned around as it started to rain lightly then louder. He sighed a bit as he hear a thunder clap off in the distance."Lets hope the thunder comes closer so we can use it to help us out, now come on lets hurry before they notice there missing a patrol." He turned around and started walking towards the drainage pipe.

"Your right we better hurry." The rain started to fall harder making a little ping as each rain drop hit his armor. Elzrath pulled up Recons vitals on his HUD and moved it to the top right hand corner of his HUD."Sir I'm going to keep monitoring Recons vitals they are currently stable, looks like they do not want him to die."He followed His squad leader through the rain listening to the rain. It felt different in this world. He though of home before the war before the SPARTAN project he tried to think of what it would be like if he was not built for killing if he grew up with his parents and not Déjà and the core. he put those thoughts aside as another thunder clap boomed out over head.

"Keep an eye on his vitals then let me know if he improves or gets worse." he said getting into the drainage pipe he hated the look of it reminded him of a faint memory he still had before all of this. It was the night when his mother and father where killed from a Insurrectionist attack. his thoughts where disrupted when Elzrath gave him an update on Recons condition.

"Sir Recons pulse seems to be getting stronger. this does not seem like something the covenant would do. They never take prisoners."

"I know thats why we should be more careful when we search for him. Elzrath pull up your map of the place is there any high vantage point we can access like a church tower or something to look for a place where they might be holding him."

Elzrath pulled up a Three-dimensional map of the town and rotated it."Sir there is a bell tower 204m to the east of the house we held up in. From what i can see it has a clear view of the whole town."

"Good work."Cypher said looking up at the ladder this whole thing was way to repetitive but needed to be done. He climbed up the ladder but stopped short and slide out his fiber optic cable, it was clear so he pulled it back and got up and went into an ally way next to the house they stayed in.

Elzrath update the bell tower on our maps."
Elzrath nodded and updated the maps and followed close behind Cypher as they got into the ally way. it was good because they could follow the maze of ally ways to within 40m of the objective.

Cypher pulled up the Map on his HUD and plotted a course through the maze of back streets and alleyways satisfied with his choice he moved the map and moved it to the top left hand of his HUD."Elzrath remind you of the time when we had to hunt follow a leak of information in ONI through the back streets?"

Elzrath looked back remembering it. it was raining just like it was know and starting to get light out."Ya i remember Recon was really clumsy and accidentally loaded a blank into his sniper which just so happened to be the first round in his cartridge and had to take a second shot. We still give him crap for that."

Cypher laughed a bit and stopped his jog at an entrance to a street right across from him was the bell tower. He looked around seeing two patrols walk near the tower."Wait for my signal once i move follow right behind me." He kept watching and got familiar with there movements, he waited for the first patrol to walk behind the tower and the second to walk behind the post office. He slung his battle rifle over his back and started out at an all out sprint to the bell tower within a matter of seconds he was at the door and quickly opened it and closed it behind Elzrath and started to run up the staircase. He stopped dead in his tracks seeing two jackles that he did not notice before looking out the two windows. He motioned to Elzrath and pointed to the jackle on the left. He saw him nod then slunk up the last view steps and stood up behind the jackle on the right and had his combat knife drawn and put a hand over the jackles mouth in unison with Elzrath sliding the blade across his neck then to make sure he twisted the jackles head and heard the faint snap and felt his body go limp. He slowly set down the body

Elzrath set the body down slowly and put his knife away and looked out the window towards a building that was not in his map. out side of it were Patrols and shade turrets. towards the rear he saw a pair of Mgalekgolo"Sir i think ive found out where there keeping him. And it wont be easy to get in either."

  • 12.31.2010 8:32 PM PDT

Good, now all you need to do is use some kind of spell and grammer check thing.

  • 01.01.2011 12:37 AM PDT
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90% of teens would be freaking out if Miley Cyrus was standing on the edge of a tall building. Make this your signature if you would be one of the 10% yelling "JUMP!"

ya i know i type it 1 handed so there might be a lot of that until i get my cast off.

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90% of teens would be freaking out if Miley Cyrus was standing on the edge of a tall building. Make this your signature if you would be one of the 10% yelling "JUMP!"

Chapter 5- The Rescue

The rain continued to pour down around the town. Cypher was sitting down and leaned up against the towers wall thinking of a way on how they could possibly get into the building. He weighed out his options on if they should try and find a way on how to get in with out being noticed or just go guns blazing. On his HUD he pulled up his teams plan on attacking the town. He was scrolling down notes and ideas when he came across a Longsword training exercise that would bring them within his coms range." Elzrath we have our plan."
Elzrath looked up from his post on observing the building."What is it sir?"
"There will be two longsword fighters coming in from orbit and i can contact them with my coms for a limited time. they will enter our range in about 10 minutes. This is what i need you to do. When the Longswords come they will fire there ASGM-10 missiles and make a pass firing 120mm Ventral Gun. Even tho there made more for space combat it will make quick use of the ground infantry so we can get in and out with little outside resistance. I will also have them call for a Pelican to meet up with us at the east entrance. While where inside they Longswords will focus on mopping up some of the ground forces to the east then come back for one more pass before they leave orbit."
"Ok Once we get in and locate Recon i will will carry him to the Extraction point." he turned away and looked back watching the enemy.

Cypher looked through the notes on his HUD a bit more then put it aside. He wanted to be ready for the Longswords when they came. It was finally time, he scanned the frequency's until he came across the Longswords channel."Longsword fighters this is SPARTAN- 161 Requesting fire mission at 4` 53`01"E'
"Roger we have your cordenents." The pilot up dated his GPS and veered off to the west towards the town."ETA in 5 minutes what do you need done exactly.?"
"East of the town square is a bell tower just north of that is a covenant made structure i need you to fire you ASGM-10 missiles at the entrance but do not repeat do not destroy building, then make a second pass with your 120mm Ventral Gun on ground forces around the building and then head east and take care of any enemy units, and be warned there will be friendly's running up the middle to the building so have a nice door made before we arrive. Do you understand?"

"Yes sir we do we will be there shortly."
"Oh one last thing call in for a pelican to pick us up at the east entrance."
"Pelican is in bound from orbit good luck down there fire bird out."
"Elzrath lets hustle there almost here."Cypher stood up and walked down the stairs followed by Elzrath close behind. He peered open the doors and looked up towards the sky hearing a faint rumble and two bird sized planes in the distance slowly growing larger. He waited a little bit to time it just right."5..4..3..2..1..GO!"e said and slung the door open and bounded out and turned around the building towards the structure.
The longswords came in low over the town and armed there Missiles. The pilot waited a little bit and spotted the SPARTANS and fired a volley of missiles up ahead of the SPARTANS and at the entrance.


Elzrath ran close behind Cypher as the engines of the longsswords screeched overhead. A series of explosions appeared ahead as the missiles impacted the dirt sending bodies into the air, as they drew closer to the building kicking up mud from there feet he head the faint roar of a hunter before it was silenced by an explosion. The smoke engulfed the battlefield as dirt and rocks fell from the sky around them bouncing off there armor.
Cypher brought his battle rifle up to his shoulder and bounded over the bits and pieces of the hunters. they came out into a lighted room where there were some dazed elites he opened fire on them as did Elzrath quickly finishing them off, he ran over there bodies and turned down a corridor to the left."Elzrath keep your eyes peeled for Recon."

"Got it sir." They turned down another corridor and found an elite. He fired at his torso dropping him to the ground as they came across a Reinforced door."sir he has to be behind this door."
"you take the left i get the right."
Elzrath nodded and got onto the left and waited for Cyphers signal then he moved and kicked the door at the hinges making a noticeable snap as the door crashed down. He raised his assault rifle and scanned the room., it was oddly empty besides the table in the middle with a green body laying there. He scanned the room one more time before they both walked into it"Why is there no one in here?"

"Your right don't let your guard down." as he looked over the body it was Recon. his armor was stained black from plasma burns. as he examined his body closer he noticed Recon was missing his left arm up to his elbow.
"Sir hes still alive." as he reached down to pick him up he heard a sizzling noise and felt something slam into his back. He slowly looked down and saw the front of an energy blade sticking out of him.


Cypher impulsively turned around and saw an elite that was not noticeable until it lowered its Camouflage. He raised his battle rifle and fired 3 burst into its skull until it dropped to the ground, and the energy sword de activated.
Elzrath coughed up some blood onto the inside of his helmet staining the face mask. He fumbled into his pack and pulled out some bio foam and inserted it into his wound and filled it up. He was breathing heavily and stood up and grabbed Recons arm and slung him over his shoulder."Cypher lets go."He coughed again he knew the Bio foam would not last long he just had to make it to the pelican and he would be fine.

Cypher nodded and looked up and ran out of the door."We have to find the reactor and rig it to blow come." He ran out of the door and turned to the right where he was picking up heavy radiation." Cypher to fire bird. fire bird come in."

"Fire bird to Cypher Pelican is at extraction point and we are making our final approach it looks like you have a clear exit."
"Thank you fire bird you can return to base."
"Roger that fire bird out."
Cypher came to another door and kicked it in and tossed a fragmentation grenade into the room and waited for the boom. He turned in and fired at a couple of dazed jackles and walked in. He looked for the coolant pipes and stuck some fragmentation grenades on them, he walked over to a jackle body and grabbed 2 plasma grenades. He activated both of them before tossing them into the reactor."Elzrath run get out of here."

Elzrath adjusted Recon on his shoulder and turned out of the room and began to run. He looked down to see check on his wound and saw a small stream of blood coming down. the booms of the grenades echoed through out the halls. An alarm went off inside his Helmet indicating that there was a spike in radiation." Cypher your plan worked this place is going down."
"Ya but we got to hurry." he said as the rocketed out of the entrance back over the dead hunter bodies. the rain had stopped as did the thunder. It was still dark and gloomy but an improvement."There to the east i can see the pelican."

There was some static over the Spartans coms."This is Crash i heard you guys needed a bird well here it is." On the top of the pelican in a darker shade of green was the word "Madox" and outlined in black. Know one really knew why Madox was on the pelican but know one really cared.

"Sure am glad to see you Spartan."Cypher smirked a bit under his helmet and looked over at Elzrath as they reached the pelican and ran up the landing ramp."Hurry up and take us to EXCALIBUR"

The Excalibur was a UNSC Destroyer that had been in orbit above the planet for sometime. The planet it was guarding was recently discovered and was just known as Planet Rees. It is only being harvested for its titanium mines and is very currently building UNSC battleships.

Elzrath set recon down on a makeshift bed and removed his helmet.Recons face looked very pale except for the streams of blood that came from his mouth. He reached into his pack and pulled out an IV and un screwed a small cap in recons right arm and inserted the needle.

He felt the rumbling of the pelicans engines as it took off and headed towards orbit. Where was he was he alive,he could not tell. his eyes slowly opened and he looked at Elzrath then he closed his eyes again.

Crash's voice came over the loud speaker."Looks like you guys had some trouble down there. but were almost home were just now leaving orbit. sit tight."
Cypher leaned back and sighed closing his eyes. and drifted off to sleep. After a little bit he awoke to the pelican landing inside of the UNSC Destroyer. He stood up and looked down and saw as the ramp lowered the familiar SPARTANS of his squad Sam A.K.A Raptor the engineer, An A.K.A Archer the Sharpshooter, And Christian A.K.A Archangel the brains.

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90% of teens would be freaking out if Miley Cyrus was standing on the edge of a tall building. Make this your signature if you would be one of the 10% yelling "JUMP!"

enjoy the new chapter

  • 01.02.2011 3:45 AM PDT