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Subject: [Halo Revolutions] Absconditus

By the power of truth, I, while living, have conquered the universe.

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Hello everyone,

This is one of the many stories from the recently released fan document Halo: Revolutions - the document was a project that lasted about 7 months and had some of the finest writers on Bungie.net contributing to it.

Follow the link to see my own story from Revolutions, named Absconditus (Latin for "hidden god"). Here's a little taster of what to expect:

A solitary tear ran down the face of the Forerunner, in full knowledge of what was about to happen. This was the end of their Empire; the end of the Forerunner; the end for all life in the galaxy as they knew it... But even as she wept for the fate that had engulfed her species, a single thought entered her mind.

This was far from the end for her.


Absconditus is the first in a series of post-Halo 3 short stories by ajw34307.

The year is 2559, humanity has finally found its peace, but dormant secrets from the dawn of time are stirring beneath the Earth. An ancient plan of the Forerunners has fallen into motion, the Cryptum has opened, and Earth will never be the same again.


Enjoy.

  • 02.12.2011 5:10 PM PDT

Games I like:,
Half-Minute Hero
MBU
Portal
Halo 3 is the best Halo ever
Maps I like: Turf, Avalanche, Pylon, Sandbox, Breakpoint and many more.

Wow... Just wow. I just read it and all I can say is... Wow.

  • 02.12.2011 7:43 PM PDT

The Razor.

For the honour of the Mirratord.

And for a moment I thought you ACTUALLY posted it here in full.. lazy -blam!- :P

  • 02.13.2011 2:34 AM PDT

By the power of truth, I, while living, have conquered the universe.

Posted by: Mr Evil 37
And for a moment I thought you ACTUALLY posted it here in full.. lazy -blam!- :P


I am not spending over an hour converting it into B.net format, it was 2am!

Posted by: Multijirachi
Wow... Just wow. I just read it and all I can say is... Wow.


Thanks man. :D

[Edited on 02.13.2011 4:56 AM PST]

  • 02.13.2011 4:55 AM PDT

The Razor.

For the honour of the Mirratord.

Over an hour my ass. It would take like 59 minutes.

:P

But yeah, cool story bro.

  • 02.13.2011 8:05 AM PDT

By the power of truth, I, while living, have conquered the universe.

Posted by: Mr Evil 37
Over an hour my ass. It would take like 59 minutes.

:P

But yeah, cool story bro.


59 minutes and 59.9 seconds exactly.

  • 02.13.2011 9:03 AM PDT
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Do not waste your tears, I was not born to watch the world grow dim. Life is not measured in years, but by the deeds of men.

Posted by: goldhawk
We should know better, because we are better.

I liked it, especially the Torchwood reference there. 456 are some of the greatest villains ever.

  • 02.13.2011 9:41 AM PDT

By the power of truth, I, while living, have conquered the universe.

Posted by: Xd00999
I liked it, especially the Torchwood reference there. 456 are some of the greatest villains ever.


Children of Earth was amazing, Torchwood is one of my favourite shows.

  • 02.13.2011 10:03 AM PDT

The Razor.

For the honour of the Mirratord.

Posted by: ajw34307
Posted by: Xd00999
I liked it, especially the Torchwood reference there. 456 are some of the greatest villains ever.


Children of Earth was amazing, Torchwood is one of my favourite shows.


I saw no Torchwood reference on my many read throughs/edits of this story. SPLAIN!

  • 02.13.2011 10:18 AM PDT

By the power of truth, I, while living, have conquered the universe.

Posted by: Mr Evil 37
Posted by: ajw34307
Posted by: Xd00999
I liked it, especially the Torchwood reference there. 456 are some of the greatest villains ever.


Children of Earth was amazing, Torchwood is one of my favourite shows.


I saw no Torchwood reference on my many read throughs/edits of this story. SPLAIN!


no u

  • 02.13.2011 10:36 AM PDT

The tide is turning, brothers! Let us take our kingdom back!


Posted by: ajw34307
Posted by: Mr Evil 37
Posted by: ajw34307
Posted by: Xd00999
I liked it, especially the Torchwood reference there. 456 are some of the greatest villains ever.


Children of Earth was amazing, Torchwood is one of my favourite shows.


I saw no Torchwood reference on my many read throughs/edits of this story. SPLAIN!


no u


Oh, you kids these days...

  • 02.13.2011 6:34 PM PDT

By the power of truth, I, while living, have conquered the universe.

Posted by: OfTheBloodguard
Posted by: ajw34307
Posted by: Mr Evil 37
Posted by: ajw34307
Posted by: Xd00999
I liked it, especially the Torchwood reference there. 456 are some of the greatest villains ever.


Children of Earth was amazing, Torchwood is one of my favourite shows.


I saw no Torchwood reference on my many read throughs/edits of this story. SPLAIN!


no u


Oh, you kids these days...


Because friendly banter on the forums between people who have known each other for about a years is totally out of the question...

  • 02.14.2011 8:15 AM PDT

If you can read this, that means I'm not a Shaolin monk...

yet.

Whoa...

It follows Reach's canon?

  • 02.14.2011 11:34 AM PDT

By the power of truth, I, while living, have conquered the universe.

Posted by: TheGreenAlloy
Whoa...

It follows Reach's canon?


o_O

I... did not think of it in that way. *shudders*

  • 02.14.2011 2:09 PM PDT

"Find where the liar hides, so that I may place my boot between his gums!" - Rtas 'Vadum

That was really good. I wish I could do things like this.

I finally get your Coup.

[Edited on 02.14.2011 7:16 PM PST]

  • 02.14.2011 7:16 PM PDT

The tide is turning, brothers! Let us take our kingdom back!


Posted by: ajw34307
Posted by: OfTheBloodguard
Oh, you kids these days...


Because friendly banter on the forums between people who have known each other for about a years is totally out of the question...


Tell that to the judge, sonny.

Lol, I'm kidding. Sorry, couldn't help myself. By the way, I read this in Revolutions. It was great, man. Good job. You should be proud of a work like that.

[Edited on 02.14.2011 9:31 PM PST]

  • 02.14.2011 9:18 PM PDT
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Do not waste your tears, I was not born to watch the world grow dim. Life is not measured in years, but by the deeds of men.

Posted by: goldhawk
We should know better, because we are better.


Posted by: Mr Evil 37
Posted by: ajw34307
Posted by: Xd00999
I liked it, especially the Torchwood reference there. 456 are some of the greatest villains ever.


Children of Earth was amazing, Torchwood is one of my favourite shows.


I saw no Torchwood reference on my many read throughs/edits of this story. SPLAIN!
In Children of Earth the 456 take control of the earths children to deliver messages to the government. On days 1-3 the children repeat "We are coming" several times before the 456 arrive.
To ajw: There is a new season of Torchwood airing this summer. Jack, Gwen and Rhys are returning.

  • 02.15.2011 4:30 AM PDT

The Razor.

For the honour of the Mirratord.

That reference was too obvious for me to spot. I love Torchwood.

  • 02.15.2011 8:00 AM PDT
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Do not waste your tears, I was not born to watch the world grow dim. Life is not measured in years, but by the deeds of men.

Posted by: goldhawk
We should know better, because we are better.


Posted by: Mr Evil 37
That reference was too obvious for me to spot. I love Torchwood.
'Fraid the sarcasm went over my head. Still pumped for Miracle Day though.

  • 02.15.2011 7:07 PM PDT
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"A hero need not speak. When he is gone, the world will speak for him"
"You are the last of your kind: bred for combat, built for war. You're the master of any weapon, pilot of any vehicle, and fear no enemy"

Very nice.

  • 02.15.2011 7:39 PM PDT

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Choose your own destiny

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Forged in the Flames of Passion, go forth and represent!

*This comment has NOT been formatted to fit your view screen, and, by the time I'm done, will probably have devolved into a sloppy mess of praise with a hint of nostalgia*

I'd been meaning to read this for a while, and I just sat down for a few minutest to give it a full read on FF.net...

Wow!

In addition to being written in a style that was truly beautiful, the entire piece just gave off a satisfying sense of mystery, intwined with underlying themes. (Greed being the most prominent--it was evident that the Overseer meant well, but his own lust for [Knowledge? Fortune? Power?] superseded his ability to make choices in, as Seth would put it, 'humanity's best interest'.)

That brings me to characters--for a short story, I think you did a damn good job of bringing to life your cast of characters. I particularly took a liking to The Overseer and Sara (the former because he was mysterious, cunning and a total -blam!-; the latter because that was a great use of a very undeveloped secondary character from Reach)

The only thing that confused me was your use of internal thinking that sort of switched from character to character. At first it seems as if the internal thinking is only of The Overseer, but there were a few instances in which it switched to Seth, and I believe once the Librarian.

Not that it matters--in fact, it might have been intentional. Just stuck out at me :)

I truthfully enjoyed this story from beginning to end, and I think you chose a good stage to leave off on for now. Are you planning on doing a sequel as well?

And, while I'm here, may I just say that it's truly been a pleasure to read your stories for the last two (going on three!) years. You've improved 1000-fold in that span of time, since Shackles of Blasphemy so long ago, and achieved a level that I don't know if I'll ever reach. Nevertheless, I encourage you to KEEP WRITING--all of you, Ajw, Mr. Evil, Wolverfrog, Max, everyone else...you are all incredibly gifted, and if it's what you want, I have no doubt that any of you can become a published writer one day. Although I have long since realized I'm bad at keeping promises (The number of times I've told you I'd 'read up' and not committed is unacceptable), I truly love reading your work.

See you all around the forums, Mirratord, FFF (maybe)

~Murph

P.S The ending made me think of the end of this cutscene. Not sure why though...
:D


  • 02.18.2011 5:30 PM PDT

By the power of truth, I, while living, have conquered the universe.

Posted by: Sergeant Murph

This is one of the best comments I've ever had, thanks a lot Murph. :D

The switch between perspectives was intentional, I needed to show what others were thinking in the situation to integrate them into the story better. The main character is the Overseer, we are seeing this from his perspective but I wanted to show how the others feel too.

This is actually the first in a series of short stories of my Convergence Saga. This is the beginning of the end, so to say, the next few short stories will all be about events leading up to the return of the Forerunners and eventually I plan on writing a story that pulls this all together and resolves the story. Watch this space, coming up next is a Halo Wars sequel which leads directly into my story for Revolutions Volume II - named Archangel from the POV of Filial Devotion.

You've been here since the very beginning of my Halo work, Murph. I can still remember that cold October night in 2007 when I decided to write about an Elite Councillor by the name of Kazdan 'Verohmee, the Arby's best buddy. Methinks I've come a long way since then and I wouldn't be able to do this stuff without FFF and the 'Tord.

I really hope you write something again soon, Murph. I really miss the old days of waiting for the next chapter of HoH.

This is the music that inspired the end for me, this was playing whilst I wrote it.

  • 02.19.2011 9:39 AM PDT

The Razor.

For the honour of the Mirratord.

Murph, no one gives comments quite like you :P I feel really satisfied when I give a really long comment. And thanks for my mention in there!

Alex, you already know what I think of this story, I've told you enough times :)

  • 02.19.2011 10:59 AM PDT

By the power of truth, I, while living, have conquered the universe.

Posted by: Mr Evil 37
Murph, no one gives comments quite like you


Duh, he's just about the only person in the known universe that doesn't say "well done, can't wait for more". :P

  • 02.19.2011 4:06 PM PDT

Halo: Heretic or Hero---An Elite's Story
Choose your own destiny

FanFicFactor
Forged in the Flames of Passion, go forth and represent!


Posted by: Mr Evil 37
Murph, no one gives comments quite like you :P


Thanks dude. And yeah, I know what it's like to receive something meaningless like 'Awesome!' or 'Great job!'--it leaves a lot to be desired after spending so much time writing, editing, refining, etc.

And you most certainly earned your mention, along with everyone else involved in Revolutions. You guys are awesome :D

And ajw...I hope to write something soon, but we all know how consistent I am with ongoing stories. I don't believe I've gotten past Chapter 6 since HoH :(

I definitely want to try to write something for Revolutions Volume II, though, if the offer still remains...

[Edited on 02.19.2011 4:32 PM PST]

  • 02.19.2011 4:31 PM PDT

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