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Subject: [Fanfic] Grunty quest

Games I like:,
Half-Minute Hero
MBU
Portal
Halo 3 is the best Halo ever
Maps I like: Turf, Avalanche, Pylon, Sandbox, Breakpoint and many more.

Okay this is my final topic for awhile, because right now I'm working on chapter one of forerunner, chapter 6 on ODST drop and now this one. Anyway here's the prolouge:

I watched as the phantom approached. Its purple hull glinting in the sunlight. The memories came back in a flood. I rembered the day I met him. It had started out an ordinary Thursday. I went to school. Came back, slightly bruised from the constant bullying that I recieved. My mum in the kitchen, preparing another dinner. Sighing, I pulled out my homework and got started.

Later that night, I sat at my desk, flipping through the pages of my favourite book Memoirs of and ODST by Charles "Wolverfrog" tomb. That was when I heard the boom. I sat rigid in my seat, listening for the slightest sound of danger. AFter a few minutes of hearing nothing, I turned back to my book. I made a huge mistake.

My mother yanked open the door, her face furrowed in frustration and fear. "Get out steve, go!" gasped my mother, out of breath. Confused, I grabbed my bag and hastily put some clothes and personal items inside. The window flashed blue, and the screams of thousands of people pierced the air. I ran outside with my mother. Even though it was night, I could clearly see my surroundings. The tall skyscrapers in the distance on fire. The old bakers shop crushed under a purple crusted box. Looking around, I realised the whole town wasin ruin. "Come on Steve!". I barely heard my mothers words. Snapping out of my trance, I stared at my mother. SHe was pointing towards police pelicans. They appeared to be evacuating civilians. Sprinting, I reach the pelican with my mother. We climbed aboard. Slowly we were lifted out of the chaos. Soon we were zooming towards the sky. That was when we got shot down.

Im standing here now, 20 years later, reflect9ing on my experience. Now, I thought I meet him again


Tell me what you think.

[Edited on 02.12.2011 7:54 PM PST]

  • 02.12.2011 5:42 PM PDT

By the power of truth, I, while living, have conquered the universe.

I dislike how a lot of people post something 3 sentences long and call it a prologue, it's not, it's more like a blurb.

A prologue is supposed to set the theme, tone and story for a novel before it begins. It is not supposed to be a 3 sentence summary of what's going to happen; if you're serious about writing then I'd suggest creating a MS Word document and writing your stories in there.

Remember, Unggoy and Folip are nouns so they should begin with capital letters.

  • 02.12.2011 5:50 PM PDT

Games I like:,
Half-Minute Hero
MBU
Portal
Halo 3 is the best Halo ever
Maps I like: Turf, Avalanche, Pylon, Sandbox, Breakpoint and many more.

Im going to improve it, thanks for the advice. I just wrote that on my iPod touch, now on my computer. Ill get to work on it now.
Also, I never did actually use microsoft word. Ill do that. Just one question. If I use italic in word, will it come up italic on bungie?

  • 02.12.2011 6:13 PM PDT

By the power of truth, I, while living, have conquered the universe.

Unfortunately, it won't. You'll have to manually put in bold/italics when you paste your stuff here, it's a pain in the arse.

  • 02.12.2011 6:18 PM PDT

Games I like:,
Half-Minute Hero
MBU
Portal
Halo 3 is the best Halo ever
Maps I like: Turf, Avalanche, Pylon, Sandbox, Breakpoint and many more.

Really? That sucks. Anyway, what do you think of my new prolouge? I know its short, but I used the same csoncept as wolver with memoir sof and odst, right sort of what ahppened and how you came to start the story.

  • 02.12.2011 6:31 PM PDT

Games I like:,
Half-Minute Hero
MBU
Portal
Halo 3 is the best Halo ever
Maps I like: Turf, Avalanche, Pylon, Sandbox, Breakpoint and many more.

Also dont judge me to hard, Im 12. Im not a pro at writing like you

[Edited on 02.12.2011 6:38 PM PST]

  • 02.12.2011 6:33 PM PDT

Very good for 12, I must say. You're a lot better than I was when I first started out and I was 13 then.

Good job. Although the bit about Memoirs being his favourite book is a little... weird.

o_O

  • 02.12.2011 6:41 PM PDT

Games I like:,
Half-Minute Hero
MBU
Portal
Halo 3 is the best Halo ever
Maps I like: Turf, Avalanche, Pylon, Sandbox, Breakpoint and many more.

Well, Memoirs was the first one I ever ead, I saw it on the Halo 3 forum one day and just started to read. Now I know what the gallery forum is :O

  • 02.12.2011 6:46 PM PDT

The tide is turning, brothers! Let us take our kingdom back!

I like your story so far... but, may I ask the following question:

How come you're writing 3 at once? That seems pretty challenging.

  • 02.12.2011 8:42 PM PDT

Games I like:,
Half-Minute Hero
MBU
Portal
Halo 3 is the best Halo ever
Maps I like: Turf, Avalanche, Pylon, Sandbox, Breakpoint and many more.

I want to make sure my idea isn't taken from someone else

  • 02.13.2011 12:00 AM PDT

Games I like:,
Half-Minute Hero
MBU
Portal
Halo 3 is the best Halo ever
Maps I like: Turf, Avalanche, Pylon, Sandbox, Breakpoint and many more.

Not sure when next part is, I feel sick so maybe in a few days.

  • 02.14.2011 12:21 AM PDT