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Subject: **Invasion** [Fanfiction]


Posted by: Multijirachi
This... is... AWESOME! But as The critics would say, "It lacks structual intergirty". But serisouly if your trying to revive it well your doing a great job


Well, I wrote parts one and two a while ago but it sort of discontinued. I understand maybe it's a little disjointed but I try and connect it as much as possible.

  • 05.19.2011 6:11 AM PDT


Posted by: XDeltaxHunterX
Sorry, this looks good, but there is no way i have enough courage to read that much. It looks good though


Fair enough :)

  • 05.19.2011 6:12 AM PDT


Posted by: The Anti Troller
When I first started reading i thought they were brutes... "Irgu" That was the key word. "Muscular body." I was like... "-insert blinking typing thing here-"


Duly noted. Although Brutes normally have the "-us" suffix to their name. Elites are pretty muscular too? The key word there was "lithe". I'm not sure you could attribute that quality to a Brute, they're more bulky.

[Edited on 06.21.2011 3:38 AM PDT]

  • 05.19.2011 6:15 AM PDT


Posted by: SHOCKER1000
Awesome!!!

*clicks the save thread button*


Thanks!

  • 05.19.2011 6:18 AM PDT


Posted by: Scourched Ghost

Posted by: X4N03R
Sorry for the long winded description of the Ghost and Wraith, I'm doing a tremndous amount of scene setting for the upcoming battle.

Thanks to Halo Nation/ Halopedia for weapon/vehicle spec. and Philip Pullman's Subtle Knife for the description of the SpecOps Sangheili armor.

If you're reading out there, please comment and feedback. Nice to know.

I Love it, please continue


Thankyou, I will :)

  • 05.19.2011 6:26 AM PDT


Posted by: Templar94
more, please! i am now addicted!


You got it :)

  • 05.19.2011 6:27 AM PDT


Posted by: OfTheBloodguard
Damn, this story just picked up in a huge degree. Awesome stuff so far.


Thanks :)

  • 05.19.2011 6:28 AM PDT


Posted by: S p h 1 n X O 7
This has got to be THE best piece of writing I've ever read in the Bungie forums. Your use of language is brilliant, and how you lay it out is truly astonishing. You write so much better than hundreds of proper authors I've seen. No, I am not exaggerating, this is just great. Your work is phenomenal.

I've been trying to get off my bum and start drumming up a few short stories for this forum, and you just inspired me. And I would wish I could write only as half as well as you. You deserve far more than what little views you seem to be receiving right now. This should be noticed by Bungie. Simply awesome stuff.

And again, please keep going. I'll love to see you write other pieces. You're doing a fantastic job.



Thankyou so much, this means a lot. But the fact that you can phrase a reply so well probably means you can also write pretty well. I would avidly read any of your work should you post it, and thankyou for being so polite and omplimentary and taking the time to write such a well-crafted and flattering reply :)

If you want to write stories, go for it, because the quality of the story always shines through no matter the calibre of the author. I'm not any kind of English student and there's probably a host of gramatical errors in my writing, but if you like writing then just write :)

Or type, whatever :)

  • 05.19.2011 6:33 AM PDT

Aha, thanks for the encouragement. I am writing something right now, but it's still in it's adolescent stages. But yeah, your a really good writer. Can't wait for you to continue this. And you should definitely start up all sorts of different stories. Hopefully you'll have the time! No pressure though :P

  • 05.19.2011 7:34 PM PDT

With this sudden lull in the ebb and flow of battle it appeared the tide had turned in the Sangheili's favour.

Then the main hangar doors opened and all hell broke loose.

A human vehicle barreled out of the warehouse with a throaty roar, it's rear mounted weapon opened up and began spewing a firestorm of projectile slugs, shredding Sangheili shields and slicing through their armor, cutting them down like wheat before the scythe. Zealot after Zealot fell to the unstoppable onslaught from it's tri-barreled rotary gun. Needle rifle fire bounced harmlessly off it's armored flanks. Those who were unfortunate enough to be in it's direct path attempted to throw themselves to one side, but to no avail, and disappeared under it's treads or were catapulted unceremoniously over the bonnet, their lifeless bodies tossed aside like discarded toys.

'Ixhusee, with a growing sense of despair as the infernal machine mowed down countless Zealot warriors, dully noted the Assassin's fade back into camouflage, shimmers of heat haze upon the scorched air, and did not begrudge them their retreat. Grenades cooked off with a roar around him, blue plasma and red-orange fragmentation alike, and through the thump of explosions and the clods of earth and dirt thrown high in the air he saw the human vehicle make a sharp turn and come straight for him.

'Ixhusee's blood reached boiling point: not one more Sangheili would fall to the monstrosity's crude projectile weapon. With an angry bellow he primed and hurled a plasma grenade in one fluid motion, then threw himself to the side as he felt his shields take a glancing blow, whether from the chassis of the vehicle itself as it flipped end over end above his head, the vehicle's passenger, it's main weapon or his own hastily thrown grenade, he did not know.

Behind him, he heard the crunch and shatter of the human assault vehicle as it impacted against the debris littering the shipbreaking yard. He steadily raised himself to his feet, shaking his head to clear it of the ringing in his ears, dispelling the last shocks of the impact on his shields. They had bled dry and the audible alarm sounded as they began to recharge, suffusing his armor with a cool blue-white glow overlaying the crimson. He turned to survey what he presumed to be the wreckage of the human vehicle, and noticed too late one of the bedraggled survivors of it's crash limping towards him, weapon raised.

There was a roar as the human's weapon discharged and his shields were again blasted away; 'Ixhusee dropped to his knees from the force of the blast. How could an inferior race manufacture such powerful weaponry? The human ejected a round from the chamber and cocked the weapon again, this time aimed at the Sangheili's head.

Sparks of gold shot through and over the human's armor - armor that 'Ixhusee realised was unshielded and recharging much like his own. There was a tinkling chime and a blur of heat passed his head as a familiar pink shard cleaved through the air and lodged itslef in the human's faceplate. The Demon's weapon fell from it's lifeless hands; the alien dropped to it's knees and keeled forward into the dirt, one hand clutching fruitlessly at it's helmet, the other spasming, seeking it's lost weapon and in vain acting on that last impulse to pull the trigger.

As I'xhusee's shields recharged for the second time he cocked his head to see N'thro 'Riparee looking down at him, casually reloading his Needle Rifle. "Such a deed strengthens the blood." 'Ixhusee saw the Zealot's eyes, shrewd and searching, wonderng if the newly inducted Major domo was brave or merely foolish. Neither noticed the crippled human gunner, now the sole survivng occupant of the human vehicle after it's driver was blasted from his seat by 'Ixhusee's plasma grenade, struggling to yank the charging lever of his machine gun. The first chance they had to remark on this was the grunts of surprise they gave when 12.7x99mm armor-piercing rounds caused their shields to crackle and flare in the brief seconds before they were extinguished. Before the gunner could notch his barrel with a further two Sangheili kills, his vehicle and himself exploded and were reduced to a glassy, smouldering crater and a few charred scraps of titanium armor by a fiery blue meteor as the now fully operational T-26 "Wraith" Assault Gun Carriage boosted onto the battlefield and began walking plasma mortar bombs high into the air.

[Edited on 06.21.2011 3:38 AM PDT]

  • 06.21.2011 3:37 AM PDT

ZombieTM - Only zombie that doesn't like braaains... mhm huh? wait what?...

Nice!
*Clicking the save thread button*

  • 06.21.2011 7:17 AM PDT

That was brilliant. Amazing. I loved every single moment of it! Your writing is so professional! Keep going, can't wait for more!

  • 06.21.2011 11:16 PM PDT

The tide is turning, brothers! Let us take our kingdom back!

You sure have a way with words. Very well done.

  • 06.22.2011 4:32 AM PDT

Thankyou for the positive feedback, got a little writer's block at the moment but watch this space.

  • 06.23.2011 10:40 AM PDT

Just a question. Do you write it all at once, and post it straight away, or do you first type out a small draft, and then fix it and add more, etc?

  • 06.24.2011 5:26 AM PDT


Posted by: S p h 1 n X O 7
Just a question. Do you write it all at once, and post it straight away, or do you first type out a small draft, and then fix it and add more, etc?


Yeah, I'm not very professional in that if I get an idea, I write down the basis an important scenes and quotes on paper, or good lines, and then type it up when I get the chance.

  • 06.25.2011 4:09 PM PDT

The tide is turning, brothers! Let us take our kingdom back!


Posted by: X4N03R

Posted by: S p h 1 n X O 7
Just a question. Do you write it all at once, and post it straight away, or do you first type out a small draft, and then fix it and add more, etc?


Yeah, I'm not very professional in that if I get an idea, I write down the basis an important scenes and quotes on paper, or good lines, and then type it up when I get the chance.
No kidding? Same here. I got mine fully written down on paper as well as the computer.

  • 06.25.2011 11:24 PM PDT

'Ixhusee watched in awe as the Wraith's mortars erupted with a fiery blue savagery across the Human lines, blasting the concrete bulwarks shoring up their defenses into glassy oblivion. It's point defense turret, now crewed by a Zealot, hosed down any Demon stragglers with a withering hail of plasma bolts.

It's sheer capacity for destruction was unparalleled to anything yet deployed on the field of battle - surely now, the field was their's - within seconds the tank had routed the remaining Demon forces and they were now in full retreat back into the bowels of their warehouse structure.

'Ixhusee marvelled at how, despite the losses they had sustained and the sparse and stretched deployment of their forces, the green clad humans in their oddly powerful armor managed to conduct a structured and organised retreat, setting up a perimeter to fall back to with small fireteams laying down cover fire for their fellows.

Any other human force would by now be in full disarray, scattered, unstructured; easy prey for even the lowest tier of Covenant soldier. But these Demons were different. 'Ixhusee had heard tales of how they could single-handedly slaughter thousands of Unggoy and Kig-Yar, and even best his own race, the Sangheili, in one-on-one combat. That much, at least, he had seen to be true - these particular humans were deadly warriors, their prowess to be respected, perhaps even feared . . .

. . . No, that was for lesser beings than Sangheili.

  • 08.08.2011 12:55 PM PDT

'Riparee's gravelled tones startled 'Ixhusee from his reverie.

"Come, brother. This is our fight, and I would see it finished." Other Zealots were now gathering around the Shipmaster's lieutenant, some fresh from the Shipmaster's own bodyguard, others battle worn from the recent struggle.

Here and there, Sangheili knelt over their fallen Zealot brothers, gently closing their eyes and fixing their weapon's firmly in their grasps, muttering a quick prayer to speed them along the Journey in a brief moment of mourning.

"Brothers, you have fought valiantly," Shipmaster Obor 'Kajalee's powerful voice flowed mellifluously through each Sangheili's integrated communications suite.

"One final effort is all that remains. Do not question your resolve," he continued, quoting Covenant scripture, "for all who walk the blessed path - as we do - shall find salvation, even in death."

The Shipmaster's voice degenerated into an exultant roar as he ended with the Zealot mantra. "Take heart brothers, let none stand before you! We shall triumph! Fulfil your oaths, for with this sacrament of blood, we journey into the divine beyond! Actions, not words!"

As before, his stirring words had roused the Zealots, and they roared lustily back, hot blooded, combat ready.

'Riparee again divided his forces into squads, placing the most experienced Zealots in command. Each would breach the warehouse structure from a different access point, of which there were many. The lieutenant commander of the Sangheili forces once more took 'Ixhusee and his squadmates under his wing, entering the hulking warehouse at it's base. Armed now with Plasma Repeaters, the Sangheili entered the forbidding gloom of the human compound.

Passing through a small, darkened room, 'Ixhusee and his comrades entered into a hallway containing a wire mesh structure which looked to be some kind of storage area. From a dark doorway at the other end of the hall another group of Zealots was emerging. 'Riparee motioned to his counterpart in the other squad and each fireteam moved towards the two squares of light on either side of the wire mesh storage area which marked open doorways.

The Sangheili emerged into a brightly-lit, tiered room with multiple stairways, support columns and overhanging gantries. Other Zealot squads entered the room from doors whih led onto these higher walkways from their designated access points, the articulation lights of their armor shimmering as they cautiously entered the open space. Yet other doorways remained silent and dark, like hungry, expectant mouths.

All the Sangheili were on edge, constantly scanning the room with sweeping gazes and weapons, tilting their Repeaters upwards to check the highest gantries and metal fretwork for enemies lying in ambuscade. However, several eyes were drawn immediately to the centre of the room, where, mounted on it's fastenings, rested the UNSC Commonwealth's A.I. core.

  • 08.08.2011 5:58 PM PDT

The tide is turning, brothers! Let us take our kingdom back!

Hey, I haven't seen this in a while. I'm glad you're still doing it.

  • 08.09.2011 1:26 AM PDT

Dude are u a profesional writer because that was amazeing

  • 08.12.2011 2:20 PM PDT

Epic stuff. Any ETA on the next post?

  • 08.13.2011 4:45 PM PDT

What a waste....

Haven't read all of it yet, but DAYUM! This is awesome!

  • 08.14.2011 8:25 AM PDT

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nice wrighting

  • 08.14.2011 8:59 AM PDT

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to be truthful i didn't read it all

  • 08.14.2011 9:00 AM PDT

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