- mojeda101
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Posted by: Naked Crook
I will say this for the OP.
You have more brains than the entire story writing staff at Bungie did.
But...the last part...make my own Reach Alternate story?
I got a good one.
The game starts the same, going to the relay. However...instead of walking there...you just fly the Falcon there and save a good 30 minutes of pointless mission and DVD space. So you get to the relay, kill some Zealots, and things progress.
Now...in the following Cinematic, I would change the dialog. This is how it would go.
Carter: Kat...status report...
Kat: You are in my light Commander...
*Carter smacks Kat in the back of the head*
Carter: Did I ask for smart comments? No...I think asked for a status report! Jorge!? What did I ask for!?
Jorge: A Status report...
Carter: Noble Six? What did I ask for?
Noble Six:...
Carter: That's right! Say nothing...you know nothing anyway!
*Noble Six nods*
Carter: Now...Kat...I will stand where ever I see fit, so I can supervise your work! Now...I ask again...STATUS...REPORT!!!
and stuff goes on, Kat learning the chain of command in the process.
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They go to Sword base. Instead of sending...two Spartans...ALL of Noble team goes. They activate the AA gun and the comms array and they go back to sword base, and they kill the phantom, and then go to talk with Halsey.
Now...I would change more dialog.
Jorge: Hi Halsey...
Halsey: Jorge...you have modified military grade equipment without authorization.
Jorge: But...
Halsey: No buts...take it off. You are a Spartan II...not one of these dork Spartan IIIs that wear multicolored armor.
*Jorge leaves and puts on REAL Mjolnir Mark V*
Halsey: As for the rest of you...pick a single color and act like a squad. You look like clowns...with all this...multicolored armor...and mix-and-match parts. God...you people suck. Give me the latchkey research and get out of my face!
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Nightfall mission is the same, except ALL of Noble team goes.
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Tip of the Spear...that can be skipped because that was a pretty pointless mission.
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Long Night of Solace...the first half can be skipped. These are Spartans...not Starfox and friends. All of Noble Team gets on a Pelican, flies to the Savanna, and they board the Corvette, and carry out the same plan of the slipspace bomb.
The end cinematic would change.
Jorge: We have bad news. The remote activation thing is damaged. Someone needs to stay behind to activate it.
Jorge looks at a nameless army guy standing in the corner.
Jorge: Private Replaceable....come here for a moment!
Soldier: Private Douglas Replaceable...reporting for duty!
Jorge: Private...I am a Spartan...I am rare, and I cost as much as a small battleship. You, on the other hand, have no family, no loved ones, and your death means nothing. Stay behind and activate this bomb while all the Spartans escape to safety.
Soldier: But sir...
Jorge: Shhh...I am your superior office...and sometimes, when in a position of command, you need to order someone to their death.
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So far...all of our Spartans are alive and well...
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So all of Noble Team goes to New Alexandria and do stuff. No major changes through the missions of Exodus.
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No mission changes in New Alexandria. However...I would change the end cinematic.
*Kat get's shot in the head*
Carter: Leave her you fools! She can serve as food for the brutes to slow them down!
Emile: Good idea boss!
Jorge: Yeah...good idea
Jun: My cooking!
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The Package changes a bit. You go to the ice cave, find Halsey, but there is no Cortana. Cortana is on the PoA. Your mission is to escort Halsey to safety. Done and done.
At the end of the mission, Noble Team splits up. Jun goes with Halsey somewhere and Jorge, Carter, Emile, and Six decided to try and get to the PoA to help Keyes.
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The Pillar of Autumn mission starts and you fly the Pelican right to the PoA docking area, but you get shot down by a Phantom just short of your destination. A console explodes in Carters face killing him.
So Emile, Jorge, and Six all try to make a run for it, but they meet a Scarab. Emile gets disintegrated by the Scarab beam and Jorge and Six manage to defeat the Scarab by climbing on some rocks, boarding the Scarab by force, and overloading the core.
So Six and Jorge run to the boneyard, where a Pelican is waiting for them. As they near the Pelican, Several Zealots appear and ambush Six and Jorge.
Jorge is killed in the battle with the Zealots and Six gets wounded.
As Six crawls to the pelican...for dear life...a CCS class cruiser appears in the sky. It begins to charges its laser.
Keyes, being a Captain, understands the concept of "acceptable tactical losses given the circumstance" and he abandons Six and the rescue pelican and escapes Reach.
Six and the Rescue pelican are glassed and killed.
The end.
I couldn't stop laughing, although there are plenty of flaws in this. Carter is not that type of person who would react that way, and it wasn't a smart remake, she was being serious, although this breaks canon as Spartans have a natural night vision and her own built in Night Vision in her helmet, it was so pointless to even have that conflict both In game and in Canon. Oh and by the way, Noble 6 speaks, lol.
The Sword base thing is different, listen to the cutscene "Noble 6 and Kat your out here, Emile and Jorge your next."
Meaning that they all went as teams of 2 assuming Carter went with Jun.
Nightfall is different, do you understand the term "recon team"? It's very big and consists of a team going in loud, it's a small duo of Snipers that try to find out what the Covenant are up to.
Tip of the Spear was essential due to the fact that the Covenant set up a base on the UNSC's biggest military base, what do you expect?
Long night of Solace is something else, Jorge wanted to die, he though he was saving the planet, he was just getting old and wanted to save his home world, I'd do the same.
Lol, I just laughed again, Carter loved Kat, I understand that you probably changed the personalities of them but Spartans are Spartans, care for everyone and must retrieve the body of the dead.
The rest I love.
I agree with everything else you said, Although in the actual game, I don't see why the Pelican didn't go back to retrieve six after the Cruiser was taken down, they had nothing in their way at that time, wtf?