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Subject: Writing a short Halo story

Let the big man do his thing.

Hi guys, Im righting a short halo story based around a game of invasion on bone yard called bone marrow. Im tryin to fit it around halo lore as well as possible baring in mind this story is not actually canon :P couldn't think of a better place to post but on bungie.net. Iv posted my first paragraph on watt pad, called Bone Marrow. Because it's... in bone yar... never mind hope some of you give it a read let me know what you think to the first bit on WattPad.

Thanks

  • 06.04.2011 4:26 PM PDT

Sure, send it.

  • 06.04.2011 4:31 PM PDT
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"Time was your ally human. But now it has abandoned you. The Forerunners....have returned. And this tomb... is now yours". - The Didact

Me too ;)

  • 06.04.2011 4:32 PM PDT

"Where ere thou hast been, here or in yon world manifest? Canst thou tell what is, or what was, or what is to come? No thing shall last. Yet there are some things that will never change. History is written in blood, yet are battles really lost on the battlefield? Canst thou tell me where thou comest, and where thou goest, and what is, or what was, or what will be? For everything remains, AS IT NEVER WAS."

http://www.fanfiction.net/

  • 06.04.2011 5:17 PM PDT

Let the big man do his thing.

hope you like it :\

[Edited on 06.04.2011 8:15 PM PDT]

  • 06.04.2011 6:02 PM PDT

I think you can post stuff like this in the Gallery section as well.

  • 06.04.2011 6:11 PM PDT

Let the big man do his thing.

sorry guys thought i had linked it, there you go

[Edited on 06.05.2011 7:16 AM PDT]

  • 06.05.2011 7:15 AM PDT


Posted by: NightFalcon117
sorry guys thought i had linked it, there you go


Cool story bro.

  • 06.05.2011 7:39 AM PDT

Vengeance only leads to an ongoing cycle of hatred.

Don't have time to read it now, but I will sure enough.

  • 06.05.2011 8:21 AM PDT

Don't worry, you're still your mom's favorite Bnet member.

I'll give it a good read. Send it.

  • 06.05.2011 8:41 AM PDT

Let the big man do his thing.

http://www.wattpad.com/1508579-halo-bone-marrow

  • 06.05.2011 9:41 AM PDT

Not bad.

  • 06.05.2011 11:51 AM PDT

"Where ere thou hast been, here or in yon world manifest? Canst thou tell what is, or what was, or what is to come? No thing shall last. Yet there are some things that will never change. History is written in blood, yet are battles really lost on the battlefield? Canst thou tell me where thou comest, and where thou goest, and what is, or what was, or what will be? For everything remains, AS IT NEVER WAS."

A few constructive criticisms;

-Smaller paragraphs/more paragraph breaks.
-More dialogue needed.
-Spartan 007 I don't think should be named James. It just seems highly cliche.

  • 06.05.2011 3:47 PM PDT

Let the big man do his thing.


Posted by: jack0fhearts
A few constructive criticisms;

-Smaller paragraphs/more paragraph breaks.
-More dialogue needed.
-Spartan 007 I don't think should be named James. It just seems highly cliche.

I didnt pick up on this lol im changing his number :P

  • 06.06.2011 4:36 PM PDT